Well, this is a story where the more you read into it, the more you will be able to piece together the bigger picture, everything will be revealed, what started the "outbreak", what is the "virus" that caused it, it will be explained.
This was awesome!
Very descriptive and a great read.
I would voice any criticism if I had it, I just want to know how it led to such a interesting beginning.
Like, what happened before?
Well, this is a story where the more you read into it, the more you will be able to piece together the bigger… more picture, everything will be revealed, what started the "outbreak", what is the "virus" that caused it, it will be explained.
It's good. I like your vocabulary and it's a first person story, but I sadly have to agree with Papai here. The beginning is WAY too similar to the ending of episode one of SnK.
If you want someone to be really direct with your story, go PM @PasswordSuck
It's good. I like your vocabulary and it's a first person story, but I sadly have to agree with Papai here. The beginning is WAY too similar… more to the ending of episode one of SnK.
If you want someone to be really direct with your story, go PM @PasswordSuck
You were pretty close haha. Tyreese doesn't seem quite stable at the moment, he point blank told Rick that getting to Terminus killed him. Killed his soul, sense of hope? He just seems a little disconnected right now.
I still say that he flips out at some point and goes on a BA spree of some kind. Maybe something happens to Sasha?
I did not expect the Terminus crew to go down so quickly, I thought for sure they would be around for a little longer. The intro to the episode creeped me out in the best kind of way, Bob's crazy laughter gave me the chills.
Yeah, the way they were setting Gareth up made it seem like he would be a more long term type of antagonist. His actor definitely did a very good job portraying him as well. That being said, I'm honestly kind of glad he is out of the way.
Looks like we're going to find out what happened to Beth next episode!(finally)I just want to find out who Daryl told to "come on out"...damn I hate cliffhangers.
A lot of people seem to think it was Carol or Beth for some reason. Doesn't really make sense to me. If I had to guess, I would say Daryl was talking to multiple people. I think he brought members of the group who had taken Beth... in exchange for something. Pretty sure I'm going to be correct this time
Also, this is really random, but you have read some of the comics, right? Are the events that happen in the comics bound to happen in the T.V. show at some point?
You were pretty close haha. Tyreese doesn't seem quite stable at the moment, he point blank told Rick that getting to Terminus killed him. K… moreilled his soul, sense of hope? He just seems a little disconnected right now.I did not expect the Terminus crew to go down so quickly, I thought for sure they would be around for a little longer. The intro to the episode creeped me out in the best kind of way, Bob's crazy laughter gave me the chills. Looks like we're going to find out what happened to Beth next episode!(finally)I just want to find out who Daryl told to "come on out"...damn I hate cliffhangers.
I'm a book publisher's daughter, so if I were to give you critique it would be pretty blunt and seem overly critical (at least that's what I have been told lol).
I'm a book publisher's daughter, so if I were to give you critique it would be pretty blunt and seem overly critical (at least that's what I have been told lol).
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Fucking ripoff of SNK YOU ARE SHIT! Lol no just kidding it's pretty good.
I already did et
tanks den ;_;
Eh, nothing special we have all that here.
Yeah, but I revised it like 5 times more since I showed you that.
I'll send you a toothbrush and some tooth paste.
Not at this quantity though:
It ws gr8 m8 so i r8 8/8 no h8.
thanks m8 holy sh8
Yeah, totally not overkill.
"Meh" -Yourself
wat
LOL
I DIDN'T SAY MEH LOL
IT'S NOT EVEN EDITED
He didn't say meh!
Lol, no one has any criticism..? Something?
This was awesome!
Very descriptive and a great read.
I would voice any criticism if I had it, I just want to know how it led to such a interesting beginning.
Like, what happened before?
Well, this is a story where the more you read into it, the more you will be able to piece together the bigger picture, everything will be revealed, what started the "outbreak", what is the "virus" that caused it, it will be explained.
Bah gawd! He's broken in half!
Awesome, at this point my only criticism is there isn't more of this.
There are 2 more chapters I already wrote, I'm writing the 4th.
Check ur PM boi
It's good. I like your vocabulary and it's a first person story, but I sadly have to agree with Papai here. The beginning is WAY too similar to the ending of episode one of SnK.
If you want someone to be really direct with your story, go PM @PasswordSuck
Did you read the note? It's an homage to Hajime Isayama, of course it would be that way.
I know. I said Meh.
This is Daniel right now:
Too many compliments
That MLG shirt though!
I still say that he flips out at some point and goes on a BA spree of some kind. Maybe something happens to Sasha?
Yeah, the way they were setting Gareth up made it seem like he would be a more long term type of antagonist. His actor definitely did a very good job portraying him as well. That being said, I'm honestly kind of glad he is out of the way.
A lot of people seem to think it was Carol or Beth for some reason. Doesn't really make sense to me. If I had to guess, I would say Daryl was talking to multiple people. I think he brought members of the group who had taken Beth... in exchange for something. Pretty sure I'm going to be correct this time
Also, this is really random, but you have read some of the comics, right? Are the events that happen in the comics bound to happen in the T.V. show at some point?
y meh
ONE OF US, ONE OF US
Dogeeeeee -
I'm a book publisher's daughter, so if I were to give you critique it would be pretty blunt and seem overly critical (at least that's what I have been told lol).
I can tell you're new, welcome bby
Ok, do it (if you want to lol).
hahaaha lol :P
wat xD
What's that
Holy shit
Interesting, Just watched the news and heard about this site called Omaze, Hmmm
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