the dead's redemption: forum story

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  • edited November 2014

    [Stay]

    Edit: Changed my vote

    mr.quality posted: »

    Chapter 1 ???- come on Ann, just tell me where you hid it and well leave. Ann- I didnt hide anything! Just leave me alone! ???- you

  • Thanks

    supersagig posted: »

    [Stay] Edit: Changed my vote

  • name Zachary Monroe

    age 50

    appearance white short hair , blue eyes , 5,1 feet tall

    personality moral , thoughtful , smart , kind , helpful

    weapons chainsaw , AK-47

    other qualitys think

    background He grown up in the poor part of Detroit. Even when he had nothing , he wanted to help other people. Some people said to him that sometimes his kindness can turn in stupidity , but he doesnt belive it. He is gay

    occupation teacher

  • [Stay]

    Don't trust anyone! :p

    mr.quality posted: »

    Chapter 1 ???- come on Ann, just tell me where you hid it and well leave. Ann- I didnt hide anything! Just leave me alone! ???- you

  • Ok, thanks.

    supersagig posted: »

    name Zachary Monroe age 50 appearance white short hair , blue eyes , 5,1 feet tall personality moral , thoughtful , smart , kind ,

  • Choice out come

    STAY

    mr.quality posted: »

    Chapter 1 ???- come on Ann, just tell me where you hid it and well leave. Ann- I didnt hide anything! Just leave me alone! ???- you

  • Part 2

    Choice: STAY

    Ann- uh, I'm fine on my own. But thanks for the help.

    Eva- fine, suit yourself. One less mouth to feed.

    Eva turns and begins to walk away

    ???-Miller, what's going on? I heard a gunshot.

    Eva- shit, more scavengers. Got to go. You picked to wrong day to be left in the woods alone my friend.

    Suddenly a man comes from out of the woods and sees the dead body

    ???- you fucking... I'm gonna kill you!

    The man pulls out a gun

    ???- c'mon boys! I found em!

    Eva- there is no debate here, we are leaving

    Ann and Eva run off into the woods as bandits open fire.

    ???- git back here! I'm not finished!

    Eva- just fucking run!

    A bullet grazes Ann's shoulder

    Ann- fuck!

    Eva- don't worry once we get to the camp we can fix it

    Ann and Eva keep running until they can't here gunshots

    Ann- do you think were safe?

    Eva- I don't know, just keep your guard up. Were not far from camp.

    Ann- I hope so, this is starting to hurt

    Ann looks at her shoulder

    Eva- could a been worse, your lucky bandits aren't much of 'master theifs'

    Ann- yeah, could have been worse.

    Ann and Eva walk in silence until Ann speaks up

    Ann- sooo, what did you do before all of this?

    Eva- nothing that's important to you now... The camps right up here.

    Eva and Ann walk into a small camp

    Eva- this is the camp, so far there me, two others and you.

    ???- oh, Eva I'm so glad to see you made it back safe.

    The man gives Ann a distasteful look.

    ???- who the hell is this Eva? We can't just take in every starving person we see! I'm sorry but you have to go.

    Eva- stuff It Roy, her name is Ann and she's staying with us.

    Roy- the fuck she is.

    Ann- look I don't want to stay, just fix my shoulder and I'll leave.

    Eva- you don't have to leave

    Roy- yes she dose! I'm going to talk to Zack about this.

    Eva- yeah, you do that. See if I care.

    Roy walks off towards a tent

    Eva- ignore him, he doesn't mean it. Just give him time and he'll come around. Oh and your wound, let's do something about that.

    Eva and Ann walk over to a log and Ann sits down. Eva grabs a first aid kit

    Eva- this should do it.

    Ann- thanks

    Eva- yeah no problem, and I was serious, you should think about staying, look around you might like what you see.

    Eva walks off leaving Ann alone.

    choice

    [ talk to Eva]

    [Talk to Roy]

    [Talk to Zack]

  • How do I take the spoiler warning off? I accidentally hit it and can't get it off.

  • edited November 2014

    [Talk to Zack]

    mr.quality posted: »

    Part 2 Choice: STAY Ann- uh, I'm fine on my own. But thanks for the help. Eva- fine, suit yourself. One less mouth to feed. Eva

  • Not for me.

    I think it's off.

  • I think it's off.

    mr.quality posted: »

    How do I take the spoiler warning off? I accidentally hit it and can't get it off.

  • [Talk to Zack]

    mr.quality posted: »

    Part 2 Choice: STAY Ann- uh, I'm fine on my own. But thanks for the help. Eva- fine, suit yourself. One less mouth to feed. Eva

  • name- Dan Hordan

    age- 39

    appearance- A pretty chubby man (Not fat), he wears a red hat and masks. He has a beard and long hair (Like a mullet).

    personality- He is really nice, always tries to make people laugh, likes to take stuff sometimes, carless driver.

    weapons- A handgun and pump action shotgun

    other qualitys- He is awesome

    background- Any thing you like

    occupation- Comedian

  • Awesome thanks.

    name- Dan Hordan age- 39 appearance- A pretty chubby man (Not fat), he wears a red hat and masks. He has a beard and long hair (Like a

  • edited November 2014

    Talk to Roy :> I want to see how he reacts :D

    mr.quality posted: »

    Part 2 Choice: STAY Ann- uh, I'm fine on my own. But thanks for the help. Eva- fine, suit yourself. One less mouth to feed. Eva

  • You should vote.

    name- Dan Hordan age- 39 appearance- A pretty chubby man (Not fat), he wears a red hat and masks. He has a beard and long hair (Like a

  • [Talk to Zack]

    mr.quality posted: »

    Part 2 Choice: STAY Ann- uh, I'm fine on my own. But thanks for the help. Eva- fine, suit yourself. One less mouth to feed. Eva

  • Voting closed

    Talk to Zack.

    mr.quality posted: »

    Part 2 Choice: STAY Ann- uh, I'm fine on my own. But thanks for the help. Eva- fine, suit yourself. One less mouth to feed. Eva

  • Part 3

    Choice- talk to zac

    Ann gets up and walks over to a tent that Roy went in

    Ann- he said he was going to talk to Zack.

    Ann opens the tent and walks in to find Roy and the man who must be Zack. Roy looks over at Ann and looks back at Zack.

    Roy- we'll finish this later.

    Roy gets up and walks out of the tent

    ???- so, you must be Ann, I'm Zachary, come sit.

    Zack motions to a chair and Ann sits down

    Zack- so, why do you come here? You got a question about the group?

    Ann- kinda, are you the leader?

    Zach-chuckles no,no, we work together. There is no leader, they just seem to trust me more.

    Ann- so how did you end up here?

    Zack- the same way everyone else did, I got lost and stumbled upon Eva. Then we found Roy

    Ann- yeah,Roy.

    Zack- don't hold it against him its nothing personal, he just wants to keep us safe.he was a Security guard nce if you can believe it.

    Ann- he has an attitude.

    Zack- that he dose but he means it in a good way. So are you planning on sticking around?

    Ann- I'm not sure yet.

    Zack- you should, we can use all the help we can get and you could use some help to.

    Ann and Zack hear yelling from outside

    Eva- don't move! I said don't come any closer! Put your gun down! Roy help me!

    ???- no, please! I don't want to hurt you! Just let me go!

    Roy- let you go so you can tell your buddies where we are?

    ???- I don't know what your talking about! I'm alone!

    Roy- shut up. Shut the fuck up. We should just shot him Eva.

    Eva- what? No. That's not who we are!

    Roy- and what? You just want to let him into the group?

    Eva- yes.

    Roy- what's the matter with you people! He could be one of them!

    Eva- damn it, Ann, Zack! What do you think.

    Zack- I'm staying out of this

    Zack walks off.

    Eva- Ann? You can't just be in the middle here. Are we going to let him in or kill him?

    ???- please! I just want a safe place for me and my brother!

    Choice

    [Let him in]

    [Kill him]

    [Let him go]

  • [Let him in]

    mr.quality posted: »

    Part 3 Choice- talk to zac Ann gets up and walks over to a tent that Roy went in Ann- he said he was going to talk to Zack. Ann

  • New part is up

    name- Dan Hordan age- 39 appearance- A pretty chubby man (Not fat), he wears a red hat and masks. He has a beard and long hair (Like a

  • Kill him

    mr.quality posted: »

    Part 3 Choice- talk to zac Ann gets up and walks over to a tent that Roy went in Ann- he said he was going to talk to Zack. Ann

  • Need more votes, got a tie right now.

    mr.quality posted: »

    Part 3 Choice- talk to zac Ann gets up and walks over to a tent that Roy went in Ann- he said he was going to talk to Zack. Ann

  • [Let him in]

    I don't want to kill him... Letting him go is to risky. So I'm going to go with the let him in the group. :P

    mr.quality posted: »

    Part 3 Choice- talk to zac Ann gets up and walks over to a tent that Roy went in Ann- he said he was going to talk to Zack. Ann

  • Let him in

    mr.quality posted: »

    Part 3 Choice- talk to zac Ann gets up and walks over to a tent that Roy went in Ann- he said he was going to talk to Zack. Ann

  • Choice outcome

    Let him in.

    Next chapter will be up tomorrow, I should do my homework.

    mr.quality posted: »

    Part 3 Choice- talk to zac Ann gets up and walks over to a tent that Roy went in Ann- he said he was going to talk to Zack. Ann

  • Is everyone liking the story? Any advice, comments or feedback would be appreciated, this is my first story and I want to know what you guys think.

  • It's pretty good. Can't wait for the next part!

    mr.quality posted: »

    Is everyone liking the story? Any advice, comments or feedback would be appreciated, this is my first story and I want to know what you guys think.

  • Thanks! I'll try to get the next part up tomorrow

    It's pretty good. Can't wait for the next part!

  • Is great!!!!

    mr.quality posted: »

    Is everyone liking the story? Any advice, comments or feedback would be appreciated, this is my first story and I want to know what you guys think.

  • Thanks!

    supersagig posted: »

    Is great!!!!

  • Thank you for making this story

    mr.quality posted: »

    Thanks!

  • I'm really enjoying it. Looking forward to see the story you make!

    mr.quality posted: »

    Is everyone liking the story? Any advice, comments or feedback would be appreciated, this is my first story and I want to know what you guys think.

  • edited November 2014

    You don't have to thanks me! I'm enjoying it. If anything I should be thanking you.

    supersagig posted: »

    Thank you for making this story

  • Thanks, gonna get The next part up after school tomorrow.

    NoHopeLeft posted: »

    I'm really enjoying it. Looking forward to see the story you make!

  • Awesome!

    mr.quality posted: »

    Thanks, gonna get The next part up after school tomorrow.

  • Part 4

    Let him in

    Eva- Ann! What is is?

    Ann- uh,uh, we can't let him go and we can't just kill him. We should let him in.

    Roy- are you fucking joking?

    Eva- calm down, its the right choice.

    Roy- right choice? I'm trying to keep us alive.

    Ann- killing innocent people isn't much of living Roy.

    Roy-... Fuck you...

    Roy walk away.

    Eva- so, who are you? And this brother of yours, I don't see him, where is he?

    ???-u-Uriel. Uriel Perez... My, my brother... He's in the woods, i- I need to go get him...

    Eva- dude calm down, were not going to hurt you.

    Uriel- I know we just met but can I ask a favor?

    Ann- yeah sure.

    Uriel- would you come with me to get my brother? I don't want to be alone anymore.

    Ann-uh...

    Eva- Ann, your going with him.

    Ann- why?

    Eva- because you voted to let him in and I have work to do.

    Ann- fine... I'll go.

    Uriel- thank you, we should hurry.

    Ann- OK let's go.

    Ann and Uriel walk off into the woods.

    end of chapter

    Sorry no choice this time

  • Its a little short today, I'm kinda in a rush, hope you guys don't mind. The next one will be longer. Sorry. just felling a little sick.

    mr.quality posted: »

    Part 4 Let him in Eva- Ann! What is is? Ann- uh,uh, we can't let him go and we can't just kill him. We should let him in. Roy- a

  • Great part! :D

    mr.quality posted: »

    Part 4 Let him in Eva- Ann! What is is? Ann- uh,uh, we can't let him go and we can't just kill him. We should let him in. Roy- a

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