The second film got positive reception like the first film, but it bombed at the box office. It only grossed half of it's budget...
I did… moren't see Fight Club, but I know the plot. I don't see how they could make a second film unless they use a different character
Case One: The Lost Child Part: Three
"Sir it seems that you look a bit lost" A voice said
Luke looked over and saw a gray and black st… moreripped cat who was grinning ear to ear literally.
"Uh yeah, do you know how to get out of here? I'm trying to look for a little kid who was kidnapped." Luke asked
"If it's a child you speek of then you'll need my help. I'm the Cheshire cat, I'm sure you're here on Alices accord?" He said
"Do you know where Alices kid is cat?" Luke asked
"I may guide you to him. But only if you ask." He tilted his head still smiling.
Luke sighed "Will you please take me to Alices kid?"
"Of course, head to the end of the Forest and meet me there." He purred fading into the darkness.
I really hate this place, Luke thought.
As Luke traversed through the forest, the trees changed shapes, forms and colors. Luke looked up and saw the sun going down and it was frowning. He put on his suit coat and started … [view original content]
Nice chapter dude!
all I wanted was firewood for my fire. I didn't know this wood happen!"
Haha, 'wood' happen, get it?.... -s… moreigh-
I need to ask a question about Luke though, are his elemental powers his by default?
And is this connected to when he removed Death from his heart at all?
Kingdom of the Underworld..."
"No one told me about the other girl..."
Hades sat in his chair, drank a rather large glass of Scotch an… mored picked at a Chicken sandwich. Valeo flapped beside him; neither knew the girls' powers were connected and what you did to one, the other followed.
"Red lied to me..."
"Sire, perhaps she had no idea that-"
"How could she have not known?!" Hades tosses the glass against the wall. "HOW, Valeo, could Vivian have been co clever enough to mask the child for so long and keep her here, without ME taking her back!?"
Valeo immediatly picks up the broken glass. It had been centuries he'd seen his master frustrated and prepared for any drastic measure, should it be needed. Hades knew of gains, losses and heartache. Ceberus was his true friend and companion. He was married at one time. Her name was Persephone and she was beautiful beyond any words or ability to comprehend. She did her best to stay by Had… [view original content]
The clock read eleven thirty in the morning but to Robert, the world around him seemed to have paused and he was the only one animated in th… moree world. Hands creating a fist, Robert stood before the mirror. The ticking of the clock was driving him silently insane. Peering deep into the glass, it appeared to be taunting him. Mocking the very man that stood before it.
Robert's nostrils flared and before another tick of the clock could pass him by, Robert picks up his massive arms and slams his rock hard fists into the glass. The sound of dropping shards clunked against the tile, drowning out the noise of the clock. Blood dripped from the several knicks and cuts Robert received from the glass. He didn't seem to mind the fresh smell of his own blood or notice the severe pain along his arms.
His emotions became a dark and twisted feeling. Between the thoughts of his long lost love and now the sudden thoughts of murdering his own brother, Robert… [view original content]
No Carla was beating the shit out of her son, Junior. Oopps! Sorry for theconfusion. XD XD I'll explain more as to WHY she is still around and what part her sons are playing in this....Oh man....if that WAS BloodyPorgie, Carla would be Swiss Cheese. XD
No Carla was beating the shit out of her son, Junior. Oopps! Sorry for theconfusion. XD XD I'll explain more as to WHY she is still around a… morend what part her sons are playing in this....Oh man....if that WAS BloodyPorgie, Carla would be Swiss Cheese. XD
You are cordially invited to celebrate the wedding of:
Grendel
&
Emily Caitlynn Porgie
On March Twenty-first, Two Thousand &… moreamp; Fifteen
At 2 o'clock PM
Thirty-Five Shiprock just past the Farm
R.S.V.P Mrs. Lyla Porgie
Reception to follow
It's happening, folks.The one Porgie who SWORE would never marry....:')
Will post another chapter later or tomorrow See how I'm feeling XD
Well, Belinda's a lucky gal to find the 2 guys in the house, I think she deserves it after the sudden fiasco she dealt with after her family's demise. Yeah, she'll be fine - despite her being on the edge of nearly losing it, it seems.
Belinda had arrived in England in 1872. The air was crisp and cold, still tinged with the winter air and dusted with a light layer of white … moresnow. She was shivering at the mouth of the portal, her eyes squinting from the brightness of the day. She'd finally made it. After all those years, she had made it. But it was not with out loss. She'd watched her brother Matthew die before here eyes; that event alone nearly ended her. But somehow, she lifted herself up from the crumbling foundations, moved on despite the pain. She tried not to think about her entire family that was swept away from her because of the Adversary. Whoever that guy is, whatever he is, she vowed to live to see the day that his reign ended. And that might have been one of the few driving factors that helped her stay afloat.
She was in rags for a dress at this point, her corset ripped at the seams. She must have looked as homeless as she was, with dirt stains and strips of le… [view original content]
You are cordially invited to celebrate the wedding of:
Grendel
&
Emily Caitlynn Porgie
On March Twenty-first, Two Thousand &… moreamp; Fifteen
At 2 o'clock PM
Thirty-Five Shiprock just past the Farm
R.S.V.P Mrs. Lyla Porgie
Reception to follow
It's happening, folks.The one Porgie who SWORE would never marry....:')
Will post another chapter later or tomorrow See how I'm feeling XD
You know how that goes: one gets married, they all follow. XD XD
LOL I was actually going to sneak all our OC's into the reception, so look out for those two. The minute Rose found out Emily Porgie was getting married, she told T man: 'I don't care. We're going to that wedding!' T man is fine. Means there will be food. XD XD
You know how that goes: one gets married, they all follow. XD XD
LOL I was actually going to sneak all our OC's into the reception, so lo… moreok out for those two. The minute Rose found out Emily Porgie was getting married, she told T man: 'I don't care. We're going to that wedding!' T man is fine. Means there will be food. XD XD
You are cordially invited to celebrate the wedding of:
Grendel
&
Emily Caitlynn Porgie
On March Twenty-first, Two Thousand &… moreamp; Fifteen
At 2 o'clock PM
Thirty-Five Shiprock just past the Farm
R.S.V.P Mrs. Lyla Porgie
Reception to follow
It's happening, folks.The one Porgie who SWORE would never marry....:')
Will post another chapter later or tomorrow See how I'm feeling XD
I noticed you're adding all our OC's and I was like 'OH, will Robert be there' and I just noticed something...of course he'll be there.....his brother IS the one getting married and he'll be the best man. LOL XP XP
I love the little detail you added on the invitation and I'm digging Gren in that plaid shirt. YAY! Can't wait for Emily to become Mrs. Grendel.
You are cordially invited to celebrate the wedding of:
Grendel
&
Emily Caitlynn Porgie
On March Twenty-first, Two Thousand &… moreamp; Fifteen
At 2 o'clock PM
Thirty-Five Shiprock just past the Farm
R.S.V.P Mrs. Lyla Porgie
Reception to follow
It's happening, folks.The one Porgie who SWORE would never marry....:')
Will post another chapter later or tomorrow See how I'm feeling XD
You are cordially invited to celebrate the wedding of:
Grendel
&
Emily Caitlynn Porgie
On March Twenty-first, Two Thousand &… moreamp; Fifteen
At 2 o'clock PM
Thirty-Five Shiprock just past the Farm
R.S.V.P Mrs. Lyla Porgie
Reception to follow
It's happening, folks.The one Porgie who SWORE would never marry....:')
Will post another chapter later or tomorrow See how I'm feeling XD
You know how that goes: one gets married, they all follow. XD XD
LOL I was actually going to sneak all our OC's into the reception, so lo… moreok out for those two. The minute Rose found out Emily Porgie was getting married, she told T man: 'I don't care. We're going to that wedding!' T man is fine. Means there will be food. XD XD
Everyone already gone home.. everyone except the breakfast club. The seven students who have to spend 45 minutes in the dread detention in the massive library room. Ella, Dan, Ashyln, Robert, Lyla Rasputin, and Marcelo. All there for reason in this room with the evil teacher, that the students call, The Warden. That being said The Warden was in charge of detention and took pride in doing it and with wizardry, he was a force to be reckoned.
As the students enter the library, they immediately take their individual seats. Being that this is Dan's first detention, he has no idea what he's getting himself into. He leans over towards Ella and asked “Soo, do we just sit her and...?”. Ella put in her head phones and blast her music while telling that “Forty four minutes to go..” and puts her head down. The Warden noticed Ella, and began to tap his cold grisly fingers on her desk until he got an response.
Tap-tap
Still no response, so The Warden use his magic to completely make Ella's phone and headset disappear from sight. Ella wakes up and looks The Warden dead in the face as she's about to challenge him. “What give Warden, I NEED those to focus.” Then as The Warden slowly walks back to his desk, with his deep and wicked voice he tells Ella to read a book, like a good student. Then he starts the timer on desk.
Tck-tck-tck-tck
Ten minutes have gone by and everyone and far from the meaning bored. Robert is doing silly things like making ridiculous faces and animal noises, having Ashlyn and Lyla laugh at him in the act. Ella is asleep, Dan is day dreaming, Rasputin is carving things into the wooden desk with his claws and Marcelo... hears a strange sound in the back. Scratching sounds, the same ones Ashyln heard at her locker.. He gets up from his seat and walks carefully towards the sounds.
The Warden tells Marcelo to sit down, but he ignores him. And as Marcelo draws near he begins to hear a voice in that area that he is walking. Closer.... closer.... you can't fight the hunger.... you cannot resist... Can you feel yourself slipping.... Ashlyn.... As the scratching get louder and louder, the Warden appears in front of Marcelo, infuriated by his misbehavior he uses his magic to hover him back to his seat where Robert begins to laugh at him.
“Marcelo, try anything like that again and there will be consequences. Understand.” The Warden returning to his seat while picking up a book on, European dishes. Then Rasputin begins to snicker and murmur, “Puny dragon” while continue to carve into the desk. Marcelo scratches his head and flips Rasputin off in which the Russian Dragon proceeds to gets and is caught by The Warden. The two make eye contact and Rasputin carefully returns back to his seat.
While that was going on, Dan thought his eyes was playing tricks on him. From the book cases, Dan see's the strange girl Mindy slowly walking across the walkway. “You guy's do you see that?” then everyone looks in the direction where Dan is pointing. They see nothing, and The Warden tells Dan to settle down, but Marcelo adds on about hearing a strange voice while he back there, it said something hunger about Ashyln.
Everyone turns to Ashyln, who has the face of fear on her beautiful face. “It's her, Mindy” she softly let's out and begins to hold on the arms of the chair. Lyla tries to comfort her but Robert insisted that the two take things to the next level and feel on each other, then he is smacked by Lyla with her purse...
The Warden addresses everyone to settle down or he'll begin to issue out consequences, however Dan wants to know more about this. Mindy. He ask Ashyln about Mindy and what she meant about hunger, but all she can tell her is that Mindy need her for something...
The lights begin to flicker. More scratching can be heard and everyone begins to become semi frightened. As everyone begins complain and while Ella is still asleep. The Warden again tells everyone to settle down then a bookcase in the back tumbles over and everyone directs their attention back there.
The lights go off and again and Lyla begins to scream while holding on Robert since see's afraid of the dark. Ella gets and tells everyone to shut the F up and when the light come back on, a human sized creature with several teeth and fangs appears behind Ella.
“ELLA BEHIND YOU!” Everyone screaming in unison, and as Ella turns around to witness this monster Marcelo throws a fireball at it's face. The creature, whatever ever it is retreats begins the hundreds of bookcases in the back. The Warden commands everyone to gather around and stay close, as he prepares to go after the creature. Marcelo insist that The Warden to not go alone, and but the Warden ignores him and proceeds to hunt down the creature anyway.
The Warden enters the area where the creature was last seen. Everything is quiet for a moment.. too quiet.. Then there are sounds of something being slammed, then the sound of lighting, and more slamming, then.....
NO, PLEASE !AHGHHHHHHHH!
The screams of The Warden echoed all the way back towards the seven students. The students knew that something went horrible wrong, and if The Warden is dead... they need to quickly figure out a way to survive this encounter...
If it's one thing I hate is when someone forcefully takes out my headphones, Although I guess in a way he saved her along with Marcelo. I'm surprised she handled it very well since her father gave her those headphones XD.
Hahaha Robert on comic relief duty is doing awesome XD
Uh oh well it was nice knowing ya Warden lol....wait he took her phone and headphones how's she going to get them back!? XD Ella I believe it's time to investigate, and if need be loot a corpse classic RPG style
Detention... 1
Everyone already gone home.. everyone except the breakfast club. The seven students who have to spend 45 minutes in the dr… moreead detention in the massive library room. Ella, Dan, Ashyln, Robert, Lyla Rasputin, and Marcelo. All there for reason in this room with the evil teacher, that the students call, The Warden. That being said The Warden was in charge of detention and took pride in doing it and with wizardry, he was a force to be reckoned.
As the students enter the library, they immediately take their individual seats. Being that this is Dan's first detention, he has no idea what he's getting himself into. He leans over towards Ella and asked “Soo, do we just sit her and...?”. Ella put in her head phones and blast her music while telling that “Forty four minutes to go..” and puts her head down. The Warden noticed Ella, and began to tap his cold grisly fingers on her desk until he got an response.
Tap-tap
Still no… [view original content]
If it's one thing I hate is when someone forcefully takes out my headphones, Although I guess in a way he saved her along with Marcelo. I'm … moresurprised she handled it very well since her father gave her those headphones XD.
Hahaha Robert on comic relief duty is doing awesome XD
Uh oh well it was nice knowing ya Warden lol....wait he took her phone and headphones how's she going to get them back!? XD Ella I believe it's time to investigate, and if need be loot a corpse classic RPG style
Rather underhanded of War and Galen to use the orb on Nick like that; though, we do get to see our OC's this way! Still, it isn't going to help Lyra get away from Bigby any sooner, if they can't find her father because he's no longer in the same universe as them.
it was a picture to be forever drawn and washed away
I finally got some more written; I have to cover 3 things now because of this chapter, but that's ok :P You'll discover what 3 things when y… moreou read it...
Plz enjoy!
Devil and Demons Chapter 8 – Where Do We Go Now?
Nick stood in place for a long time. He kept going over what Pestilence had said to him; was he really trying so hard to change what was in his blood? The changes were evident in some ways but not in others.
Nick had become a much calmer and more open person since Lyra was born; but was that his own choice? Was it paternal instinct to be a good Father? Or was it to be a good husband to Mary? He had forgotten entirely, it was like a dream to him...
He had gotten so caught up in his old ways upon regaining his half-form. All that power, it filled him with a rage to rival that of any bloodthirsty army; in that moment Nick felt like he could do anything, like he could challenge the Horsemen themselves and emerge the victo… [view original content]
Would not like to get on the conniving side of those two, but Emily and Gren can pull through. I believe in them. XD Intrigued about how things will change for Hades once Viviana is older and able to talk!
WAIT A SECOND -- is it Carla?
Since you and JJ have identified the mysterious redhaired woman, I will say yes. It is Carla. She &… more; Mary have a wicked plan for Emily and Gren. WHAT she is up to, will be revealed in later chapters. Hades will not be a villian. His motives will change once Viviana is older and is able to talk...:) I love that song. I made that officially their song. Glad to hear you were moved by it.
And Rosie IS a cheerful little thing, despite who her mother is. I am; taking a break to check on my messages, then its back to the party. So much cake....lol
I love this story and that ending has be wanting to know more about the time travel inccident that Weasel has found himself in! I love the picture, too! He does look good with the stache.
Thank you - it won't all be first-person, and it sort of does and doesn't break the 4th wall, but I'll explain that in chapter two. And that the wording is splendid is very pleasing, as it's something I give thought to!
Well well! Already I'm interested!
I admire your usage of first-person narrative, but also how Weasel seems to know that there is a 4th w… moreall... Your wording is splendid as well, half the words I know what they mean but I never use them :P
I look forward to more from you!! XD
That's pretty good after only the first chapter; and yeah, this seemed fitting for a Victorian Weasel. XD Really, say it as often as you like: those are three of the things I often focus on trying to push when I write, so it's good to know it shows! Yeah, can't write comedy like JJ, or Stone, but can't resist slipping something in. :P Thanks!
I'm liking where the story is heading, not to mention Percy looks rather dashing and quite the gentlemen with that mustache. I always enjoy… more reading your stories and I say this all the time but will do so once more: the detail, words you've picked and the descriptions. Not to mention the humor you like to sneak in there every so often. Great work, Noir! Can't wait for more!
Comments
The second film got positive reception like the first film, but it bombed at the box office. It only grossed half of it's budget...
I didn't see Fight Club, but I know the plot. I don't see how they could make a second film unless they use a different character
It's supposed to be a sequel, according to the new comics..
OHHHHH I SEE!!!
I didn't know Fight Club was a comic!!!! XP
I didn't know either until Fight Club two was announced.
That kinda explains the film in a way :P
I just checked and Fight Club is actually a novel. Fight Club 2 is a comic.
Nice chapter dude!
Haha, 'wood' happen, get it?.... -sigh-
I need to ask a question about Luke though, are his elemental powers his by default?
And is this connected to when he removed Death from his heart at all?
Thanks!
Wow I didn't even see that o.o good catch! XD
Yup he was born with them. And no this is way before that.
Ok, fire when he's angry, ice when he's calm and electricity when he is taken by surprise?
Awww, Death inside him was so cool though :P
Yup!
Don't worry I plan to write some stuff when he did
I can't wait for Nick to meet Luke in my story now! Even if Luke is an alternate version of himself :P
I look forward to it XD
So basically at the end, Carla was beating the shit out of Junior: a.k.a. Bloody Porgie? And you wrote that he was her son too? I'm confused again. :P
Y'know, I was just about to ask about Rose Red's whereabouts, until the ending happened. XD Another well-written chapter like usual!
No Carla was beating the shit out of her son, Junior. Oopps! Sorry for theconfusion. XD XD I'll explain more as to WHY she is still around and what part her sons are playing in this....Oh man....if that WAS BloodyPorgie, Carla would be Swiss Cheese. XD
Shit, I have forgotten about him then. And okay, (typical approval response).
I think everyone would love to see Carla get punished like that, anyway. XD
You are cordially invited to celebrate the wedding of:
Grendel
&
Emily Caitlynn Porgie
On March Twenty-first, Two Thousand & Fifteen
At 2 o'clock PM
Thirty-Five Shiprock just past the Farm
R.S.V.P Mrs. Lyla Porgie
Reception to follow
It's happening, folks.The one Porgie who SWORE would never marry....:')
Will post another chapter later or tomorrow See how I'm feeling XD
Well, Belinda's a lucky gal to find the 2 guys in the house, I think she deserves it after the sudden fiasco she dealt with after her family's demise. Yeah, she'll be fine - despite her being on the edge of nearly losing it, it seems.
Another wedding?
Tez and Rose call dibs on cutting the first cake slice! XD
You know how that goes: one gets married, they all follow. XD XD
LOL I was actually going to sneak all our OC's into the reception, so look out for those two.
The minute Rose found out Emily Porgie was getting married, she told T man: 'I don't care. We're going to that wedding!' T man is fine. Means there will be food. XD XD
Even my Nick?
Of course, man!
I have an idea for him and Katie during the reception. XD XD
Buuuuuutt... My Nick hasn't been introduced yet...
Although Nick and Katie... That could get interesting :P
I'll bring my oldest bottle of champagne that Robby found in a castle. Or something a little sweet..
Huh. You're right....well, looks like he will at the wedding!
I think you'll like it.
Ok then!! XD
I noticed you're adding all our OC's and I was like 'OH, will Robert be there' and I just noticed something...of course he'll be there.....his brother IS the one getting married and he'll be the best man. LOL XP XP
I love the little detail you added on the invitation and I'm digging Gren in that plaid shirt.
YAY! Can't wait for Emily to become Mrs. Grendel. 
Wedding!!! Wahoo!
Oh yes, food is usually the reason in making people actually come to weddings. XD The two'll have fun over there either way, no doubt.
Detention... 1
Everyone already gone home.. everyone except the breakfast club. The seven students who have to spend 45 minutes in the dread detention in the massive library room. Ella, Dan, Ashyln, Robert, Lyla Rasputin, and Marcelo. All there for reason in this room with the evil teacher, that the students call, The Warden. That being said The Warden was in charge of detention and took pride in doing it and with wizardry, he was a force to be reckoned.
As the students enter the library, they immediately take their individual seats. Being that this is Dan's first detention, he has no idea what he's getting himself into. He leans over towards Ella and asked “Soo, do we just sit her and...?”. Ella put in her head phones and blast her music while telling that “Forty four minutes to go..” and puts her head down. The Warden noticed Ella, and began to tap his cold grisly fingers on her desk until he got an response.
Tap-tap
Still no response, so The Warden use his magic to completely make Ella's phone and headset disappear from sight. Ella wakes up and looks The Warden dead in the face as she's about to challenge him. “What give Warden, I NEED those to focus.” Then as The Warden slowly walks back to his desk, with his deep and wicked voice he tells Ella to read a book, like a good student. Then he starts the timer on desk.
Tck-tck-tck-tck
Ten minutes have gone by and everyone and far from the meaning bored. Robert is doing silly things like making ridiculous faces and animal noises, having Ashlyn and Lyla laugh at him in the act. Ella is asleep, Dan is day dreaming, Rasputin is carving things into the wooden desk with his claws and Marcelo... hears a strange sound in the back. Scratching sounds, the same ones Ashyln heard at her locker.. He gets up from his seat and walks carefully towards the sounds.
The Warden tells Marcelo to sit down, but he ignores him. And as Marcelo draws near he begins to hear a voice in that area that he is walking. Closer.... closer.... you can't fight the hunger.... you cannot resist... Can you feel yourself slipping.... Ashlyn.... As the scratching get louder and louder, the Warden appears in front of Marcelo, infuriated by his misbehavior he uses his magic to hover him back to his seat where Robert begins to laugh at him.
“Marcelo, try anything like that again and there will be consequences. Understand.” The Warden returning to his seat while picking up a book on, European dishes. Then Rasputin begins to snicker and murmur, “Puny dragon” while continue to carve into the desk. Marcelo scratches his head and flips Rasputin off in which the Russian Dragon proceeds to gets and is caught by The Warden. The two make eye contact and Rasputin carefully returns back to his seat.
While that was going on, Dan thought his eyes was playing tricks on him. From the book cases, Dan see's the strange girl Mindy slowly walking across the walkway. “You guy's do you see that?” then everyone looks in the direction where Dan is pointing. They see nothing, and The Warden tells Dan to settle down, but Marcelo adds on about hearing a strange voice while he back there, it said something hunger about Ashyln.
Everyone turns to Ashyln, who has the face of fear on her beautiful face. “It's her, Mindy” she softly let's out and begins to hold on the arms of the chair. Lyla tries to comfort her but Robert insisted that the two take things to the next level and feel on each other, then he is smacked by Lyla with her purse...
The Warden addresses everyone to settle down or he'll begin to issue out consequences, however Dan wants to know more about this. Mindy. He ask Ashyln about Mindy and what she meant about hunger, but all she can tell her is that Mindy need her for something...
The lights begin to flicker. More scratching can be heard and everyone begins to become semi frightened. As everyone begins complain and while Ella is still asleep. The Warden again tells everyone to settle down then a bookcase in the back tumbles over and everyone directs their attention back there.
The lights go off and again and Lyla begins to scream while holding on Robert since see's afraid of the dark. Ella gets and tells everyone to shut the F up and when the light come back on, a human sized creature with several teeth and fangs appears behind Ella.
“ELLA BEHIND YOU!” Everyone screaming in unison, and as Ella turns around to witness this monster Marcelo throws a fireball at it's face. The creature, whatever ever it is retreats begins the hundreds of bookcases in the back. The Warden commands everyone to gather around and stay close, as he prepares to go after the creature. Marcelo insist that The Warden to not go alone, and but the Warden ignores him and proceeds to hunt down the creature anyway.
The Warden enters the area where the creature was last seen. Everything is quiet for a moment.. too quiet.. Then there are sounds of something being slammed, then the sound of lighting, and more slamming, then.....
NO, PLEASE !AHGHHHHHHHH!
The screams of The Warden echoed all the way back towards the seven students. The students knew that something went horrible wrong, and if The Warden is dead... they need to quickly figure out a way to survive this encounter...
If it's one thing I hate is when someone forcefully takes out my headphones, Although I guess in a way he saved her along with Marcelo. I'm surprised she handled it very well since her father gave her those headphones XD.
Hahaha Robert on comic relief duty is doing awesome XD
Uh oh well it was nice knowing ya Warden lol....wait he took her phone and headphones how's she going to get them back!? XD Ella I believe it's time to investigate, and if need be loot a corpse classic RPG style
Lol, you gave me an idea.
Lol glad I could help XD
Rather underhanded of War and Galen to use the orb on Nick like that; though, we do get to see our OC's this way! Still, it isn't going to help Lyra get away from Bigby any sooner, if they can't find her father because he's no longer in the same universe as them.
Good description!
Would not like to get on the conniving side of those two, but Emily and Gren can pull through. I believe in them. XD Intrigued about how things will change for Hades once Viviana is older and able to talk!
It's never a party without a cake!
Thanks, Tetra!
Why, thank you.
Glad you enjoyed it!
Time-travel will be one of the overall themes of this one; and thanks! I have to agree with you. 
Glad I've piqued you!
Thank you - it won't all be first-person, and it sort of does and doesn't break the 4th wall, but I'll explain that in chapter two. And that the wording is splendid is very pleasing, as it's something I give thought to!
No problem man! Gives thumbs up Persona 3 MC style
That's pretty good after only the first chapter; and yeah, this seemed fitting for a Victorian Weasel. XD Really, say it as often as you like: those are three of the things I often focus on trying to push when I write, so it's good to know it shows! Yeah, can't write comedy like JJ, or Stone, but can't resist slipping something in. :P Thanks!