Continuing upon the end of S1(fan-fic)

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  • I loled

    That_1_Guy posted: »

    So, Zasca, when are you going to write again?

  • I agree with HSP regarding the hallucination - it's a cliche. Maybe you could change it into Clem asking herself what Lee would do, remembering his words and decisions? It's just a suggestion.

    Well... erm... Do you want me to... Do you want me to change it..?

  • I totally agree with TheMissus. It makes more sense because she hasn't shown any other signs of hallucinations in the past, making this feel out of place.

    TheMissus posted: »

    I agree with HSP regarding the hallucination - it's a cliche. Maybe you could change it into Clem asking herself what Lee would do, remembering his words and decisions? It's just a suggestion.

  • I actually like that Randomz wants to involve Lee into our story, but hallucinations... I don't know...

    That_1_Guy posted: »

    I totally agree with TheMissus. It makes more sense because she hasn't shown any other signs of hallucinations in the past, making this feel out of place.

  • I wonder where Snufkin is...
    Anyway, I assume everybody needs a little break due to the trailer as well as the upcoming episode.

  • Not a break...! It can't happen!

    TheMissus posted: »

    I wonder where Snufkin is... Anyway, I assume everybody needs a little break due to the trailer as well as the upcoming episode.

  • I... don't know what to write, actually. That thing with the men threatening Clem is somewhat out of place and seems forced. Never believed I would say that right at the end of the season, but: I'm out of ideas for both storylines. Maybe Moto or HSP can make something out of it?

  • edited February 2014

    Y'know, I think I do feel like contributing to this a little bit. I'll just writ a small part and then abandon this thread completely or something.

    EDIT: I've writ a bit for this. not much to do with what's happened so far though.

    TheMissus posted: »

    I... don't know what to write, actually. That thing with the men threatening Clem is somewhat out of place and seems forced. Never believed

  • edited February 2014

    Clem almost didn't register the identity of the walker despite knowing who he was as she just kicked him off and ran in the opposite direction.

    "Hey, Girl!!" A Male voice that likely belonged to whoever shot the walker called out as she continued to run, but she didn't stop, She just kept running

    After quite a while, Clem started to lose her breath and slowed down to a walk, She hadn't seen any walkers or Humans alike for ages now, She nervously looked around and she stepped over a bush and went on, It was overcast and nearly night.

    she heard a twig snap.

    "H-Hello? Is anyone there?" Clem asked, turning around, not seeing anything except a tree, She sighed, still somewhat panicked as she continued to walk through the forest. Clementine started to run again, Despite nearly being out of breath. She made her way to a small little clearing, She stepped in a puddle as she continued to walk.

    "Hi!" A Voice behind her called out, Clem jumped and turned around, being greeted by a dark skinned teenage girl, wearing just a white t-shirt and brown trousers. "Who are you?" She asked, smiling. "Haven't seen a kid around in a while."

    "Uh...I-I'm...." Clem started to say, but she stopped, not sure if she should introduce herself to the stranger.

    "...Yeeeees?" The girl asked, still smiling, Shortly after a bark was heard in the woods and a small Pug rushed out, the Girl knelt down and picked the pug up, before standing up again. "There you are..." She smiled to the pug. Before quickly snapping back to Clementine. The girl looked harmless, she didn't even seemed to be armed, but her backpack was filled to the brim with all kinds of stuff. Her ruffled Fair Hair was held back by a small dragonfly clip and she had a small beauty spot under her cheek.

    "Oh, maybe you know what those screams were." The girl commented,randomly.

  • I really like your post, but Randomz had just edited his post due to a conversation on Skype. So we have to work something out. PLEASE do not abandon the thread! I love your writing!

    Clem almost didn't register the identity of the walker despite knowing who he was as she just kicked him off and ran in the opposite directi

  • edited February 2014

    okay

    tries to think of something else

    Just added a bit at the beginning, that make it work?

    That_1_Guy posted: »

    I really like your post, but Randomz had just edited his post due to a conversation on Skype. So we have to work something out. PLEASE do not abandon the thread! I love your writing!

  • I agree with him, gotta love your writing! Welcome

    That_1_Guy posted: »

    I really like your post, but Randomz had just edited his post due to a conversation on Skype. So we have to work something out. PLEASE do not abandon the thread! I love your writing!

  • I think it will, good job!

    Will you please stay with us? I really like this post and genuinely hope to see more of you.

    okay tries to think of something else Just added a bit at the beginning, that make it work?

  • Uh... would anyone else like to go? I'm thinking of writing in a while.

  • thanks.

    The girl goes by Thalia btw, (although it's her middle name)

    TheMissus posted: »

    I agree with him, gotta love your writing! Welcome

  • Even though it's a little late for a new character this close to the end of the season, I still love your post and this is a good place to continue form, good job!

    Clem almost didn't register the identity of the walker despite knowing who he was as she just kicked him off and ran in the opposite directi

  • edited February 2014

    I am just curious: Have you read the entire story so far or just the latest posts? We got very good summaries, btw. see on page 1, 2nd comment

    thanks. The girl goes by Thalia btw, (although it's her middle name)

  • I looked at the last few pages.

    TheMissus posted: »

    I am just curious: Have you read the entire story so far or just the latest posts? We got very good summaries, btw. see on page 1, 2nd comment

  • Please do, I decided to take a break so other people have the chance to write as well.

    Uh... would anyone else like to go? I'm thinking of writing in a while.

  • Alrighty. I highly recommend to read through the summaries, as we use a lot of references to what happened earlier.

    I looked at the last few pages.

  • Actually, i'm not sure how to continue from there... so i'm going to leave it for some other people first.

    That_1_Guy posted: »

    Please do, I decided to take a break so other people have the chance to write as well.

  • just went through. It's cool.

    TheMissus posted: »

    Alrighty. I highly recommend to read through the summaries, as we use a lot of references to what happened earlier.

  • edited February 2014

    I feel like not making Clem alone is sort of a mistake, but i don't know, that's just me :3.

    "What should I do...?" The thoughts go through Clementine's head, spinning around, and around. If I go back, I could die... But if I stay here

  • edited February 2014

    I honestly don't know about introducing new characters now, maybe she quickly gets away from the story though or something like that, in which case is somewhat fine.

    Also, i do feel like it was dumb of you not to read through at least the summaries before writing, though here it wasn't completely necessary.

    Clem almost didn't register the identity of the walker despite knowing who he was as she just kicked him off and ran in the opposite directi

  • edited February 2014

    You are all aware that we are basically all leaving it for others that are also leaving it to others in which then also leave it to others, right?

    leaveittoothers CEPTION!!!

    Actually, i'm not sure how to continue from there... so i'm going to leave it for some other people first.

  • edited February 2014

    The little girl stands there smiling. That's kind of creepy... Clementine thinks.

    When all of a sudden Kenny comes rushing from behind a tree, breathing heavily. "I'm Huff I saved you back there Clem..." He says before huffing one more time. "And who the heck is this...?" Clementine gives him a look, as if she doesn't know. "I don't know.. who are you?" Clementine asks, turning back to her.

    "My name is Thalia. Well it's actually my middle name." Clementine nods and begins to speak. "We have to get out of here! There's way to many walkers out here.. We have to go now!" Right as Clementine's words come out, a walker buries it's teeth into Thalia. She screams, as it pulls her arm off. Clementine, wasn't quick enough, and stabs it with her knife.

    The girls now lifeless body lies on the ground, the Pug lays alive on the ground know, un-bitten. Clementine picks it up, and reads it's nametag. "Sandy... That's her name.. Sandy" Clementine says. "That's what we're going to call it.." Kenny laughs, trying to brighten the mood. "It reminds me of Miranda."

    Right as the two begin to walk away, Clementine notices something on Kenny's shoulder. It's a large walker bite. "Kenny...?"

  • edited February 2014

    Kenny takes a deep breath. "Yep, I've had such good luck it was bound to happen eventually. I'm sorry Clem."

    "Kenny, no..." Was all Clem could say, and for a long moment there was a silence. It was Lee all over again, she had killed another one of her friends. If she hadn't run away...

    Kenny could tell what the girl was thinking, they had been through so much together after all. "Look Clem, this isn't your fault."

    "I don't know how you can say that." Clem said shaking with a combination of fear, anger, and sadness. "I killed Lee, and now I've killed you as well." Clem couldn't hold it in anymore and right there is the dark forest she fell to her knees between the girl and the walker and cried. For awhile that's all she did, and even on borrowed time Kenny waited for her to get everything out, thinking all the while on what he would say to her.

    After Clementine has cried all her tears Kenny took a deep breath, and spoke again. "Clem, you didn't kill Lee, and you didn't kill me. What happened to us was our own god damn faults. We came to get you because we wanted to, and we'd do it again. You didn't force us to do anything sweet pee, we came after you because we wanted to, because we love you, and lastly because you became like a daughter to both of us." Kenny's eyes where watering by the time he was finished.

    Clementine still didn't feel much better, but she knew Kenny was telling the truth. Still she felt like it was her fault. "What do we do now ?" It was funny how many times she had asked that question.

    "I may not like the guy but, Bryan knows what he's doing, and he really cares for you. I got to get you to him before... you know."

    (I hope you like this guy's it's been awhile since I've written anything.)

  • Sweet Pea is what Lee says!!

    MegaMoto posted: »

    Kenny takes a deep breath. "Yep, I've had such good luck it was bound to happen eventually. I'm sorry Clem." "Kenny, no..." Was all Clem

  • Applauding you for this

    HSPLazerz posted: »

    You are all aware that we are basically all leaving it for others that are also leaving it to others in which then also leave it to others, right? leaveittoothers CEPTION!!!

  • I agree

    HSPLazerz posted: »

    I feel like not making Clem alone is sort of a mistake, but i don't know, that's just me .

  • Love it. I hope this save our story. We've never had so much chaos but I am positive that this saves the ending.

    MegaMoto posted: »

    Kenny takes a deep breath. "Yep, I've had such good luck it was bound to happen eventually. I'm sorry Clem." "Kenny, no..." Was all Clem

  • edited February 2014

    The bite was damn sudden. How would they not notice the walker? Anyway, I just wish our walker fight scenes weren't so short and unmeaningful.

    The little girl stands there smiling. That's kind of creepy... Clementine thinks. When all of a sudden Kenny comes rushing from behind a

  • edited March 2014

    Kenny points to the large chunk of flesh missing from his shoulder. A mix of sadness, anger and a slight hint of nausea fills Clementine's mind. Pulling out her hunting knife, she stands up and tells Kenny to follow her closely. With her back straightened and her head held up high, the two begin to walk through the forest as silently as possible, making sure the dog follows. ''This is where I came from, the others should be around here somewhere.'' Kenny points to a small clearing. She shakes her head, ''Can't you see? It's full of walkers.'' Her confidence shrinks as she desperately tries to think of their next move. She looks around when something strikes her as familiar. Running away from him, Kenny loudly whispers to her to come back. A bolt of adrenaline rushes through her veins when she finds the small hatch leading to Bryan's cave. ''Kenny!'' she shouts with newly found hope. The middle-aged man struggles to catch his breath when he finally reaches her. He watches as she opens the heavy entrance. She tells him to go first, but he refuses when the growls of flesh-longing walkers approach them. Just in time, Clementine closes the hatch, leaving them alone in the dark. A sigh of relief escapes from her mouth when Kenny hands her a small lighter, turning it on instantly. ''Better than nothing.'' he mumbles, pointing her to the small room at the end of the corridor. Memories of the night they had spend in this shelter come rushing back like a freight-train, moistening her eyes once again. Quietly sobbing, she wipes her tears away.

    (Please listen to this, it adds atmosphere: )

    ''Come on, Kenny, just lay down right there. I'll make a fire to keep us warm.'' Struggling to hold back her tears Clementine lights the round campfire in the middle of the cave. The warmth of the flames comforts her, yet Kenny's miserable state leaves her feeling empty and alone. ''Kenny?'' she says with a cracking voice. ''It's just like with Lee, and even Duck, isn't it?'' As he slowly nods his head, a tear rolls down his pale face. Her heart broken once again, Clementine's thick shell breaks as she finally lets out the tears she's been holding back since the moment they had reunited. She rushes to her protector, holding his weak body tightly. ''I'll miss you...'' she says while standing back from Kenny. ''I'll miss you too...'' he points to the gun in his pocket. The flow of tears grows larger when the realization of what she's about to do strikes. Unwillingly, Clementine picks up the pistol with trembling hands. ''I don't want to do this again...'' Waiting for a response, she desperately stares at Kenny's lifeless eyes. His chest has stopped moving, his arms lay still. Straightening her back, holding her head up high, Clementine determinedly aims her gun at her former protector, pulling the trigger while saying her final goodbyes.

    ''Goodbye, Kenny.''

  • As much as id like to playstation are being dicks to me and are not answering my calls or fixing my ps3 this means until my account is back i can not write as i can not play (They suspended my account so they could fix it) TWD or TWAU. my computer has been cleared thank god!

    TheMissus posted: »

    I loled

  • There it is.

    Goodbye, Kenny.

    That_1_Guy posted: »

    Kenny points to the large chunk of flesh missing from his shoulder. A mix of sadness, anger and a slight hint of nausea fills Clementine's m

  • So, non of them cared that she just died? Seriously, they had no emotions, she died and they instantly went on about Sandy.

    The little girl stands there smiling. That's kind of creepy... Clementine thinks. When all of a sudden Kenny comes rushing from behind a

  • edited February 2014

    Sweet pee? Wait a minute...

    MegaMoto posted: »

    Kenny takes a deep breath. "Yep, I've had such good luck it was bound to happen eventually. I'm sorry Clem." "Kenny, no..." Was all Clem

  • That's what I thought to be honest.

    HSPLazerz posted: »

    So, non of them cared that she just died? Seriously, they had no emotions, she died and they instantly went on about Sandy.

  • I really didn't want to bring it up, but I noticed that too!

    HSPLazerz posted: »

    Sweet pee? Wait a minute...

  • edited February 2014

    That was very emotional...
    RIP Kenny. You'll be remembered as the tough man with a strong will, a very well-working immune system and the godlike moustache, formed like a joyous crescent.

    That_1_Guy posted: »

    There it is. Goodbye, Kenny.

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