Continuing upon the end of S1(fan-fic)

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  • Kenny! ;_;

    It feels like Charlie all over again with the "Goodbye, Kenny".

    That_1_Guy posted: »

    Kenny points to the large chunk of flesh missing from his shoulder. A mix of sadness, anger and a slight hint of nausea fills Clementine's m

  • that just came out of nowhere.

    The little girl stands there smiling. That's kind of creepy... Clementine thinks. When all of a sudden Kenny comes rushing from behind a

  • edited February 2014

    Clementine closed her eyes immediately after pulling the trigger. Not wanting to see However Kenny's body fell. She shortly heard the Pug give a startled bark. She turned her head and opened her eyes, still refusing to look at Kenny's corpse as the Dog ran straight out of the cave.

    "Sandy! Come back!" Clementine yelled, as she started to chase after the dog. She stopped just as soon as she left the Cave, hearing walker's growling, She didn't even bother to wipe her tears, in fact, she was still pouring them out, Inside her head she was imagining everyone she every knew before and after the walkers started springing up. She then took a few seconds to remember her reaction to Thalia's death only a few minutes ago. She didn't even React. Not in the slightest. Clem started crying moreso when she realized she didn't care that a Child got killed right in front of her.

    "...I Didn't even know that girl." Clem said. "That's why I don't feel anything." She reasoned with herself "..I..I hope......"

    Clem sighed, as she finally wiped her tears, still hearing Sandy Bark as the Dog ran into the forest, going the exact path they took to get to the cave.

    Clementine Just sat near the entrance of the Cave and closed her eyes, Still refusing to look at Kenny's body as she cried, trying to get to sleep.

  • Good save, it makes more sense now while adding some personal drama for Clementine.

    Clementine closed her eyes immediately after pulling the trigger. Not wanting to see However Kenny's body fell. She shortly heard the Pug gi

  • I have to say this one thing:

    I feel kind of unhappy the only character I put in merely survived a whooping 1 post.

    That_1_Guy posted: »

    Good save, it makes more sense now while adding some personal drama for Clementine.

  • Yeah, I know, if it had been up to me she would have survived much longer. We didn't even get to know her...

    I have to say this one thing: I feel kind of unhappy the only character I put in merely survived a whooping 1 post.

  • well, I'm having my revenge by still making her a major plot point.

    That_1_Guy posted: »

    Yeah, I know, if it had been up to me she would have survived much longer. We didn't even get to know her...

  • edited February 2014

    A cold breeze hits Clems body. When she opens her eyes she can barely see anything. It's gotten dark and the air still smells a bit humid and mossy. After a while her eyes get used to the darkness and she can recognize the silhouettes of the trees. Where am I? With her legs trembling she raises slowly, realizing where she is. ....Kenny..... Standing in front of the small entrance to the cave she struggles with herself whether to go in or not, while crossing her arms and stroking them, being all cold. I won't go in there..., she finally decides, going down and leaning to the cold and mossy rocks again. Her clothes are all wet and her cheeks touch the dirty stone. Then she can see a spider crawling on her arm - Clementine couldn't care less. If I close my eyes right now... will it be over? Will I be home with mom and daddy, painting the treehouse and making barbecues? Or will I be in heaven, with Duck and Katjaa, Christa and Omid.... Charlie... Lee... She buries her hand in her pocket, clinging to the grip of the knife as she leans her head back with her eyes closed. I can just sit and wait for the death that will probably never come... or I can deal with it right now. A minute later she looks closer at the grind, imagining what it feels like getting the throat cut. An eerie shriek suddenly disturbs her scattered thoughts. As she looks into the distance she can see two lights, probably animal eyes and growls followed by another shriek. Clementine cringes and whispers... "Sandy... oh no." Still being shocked from the sudden incident she just stands there frightened not being able to do anything, when the two lights doubled, one pair of them coming nearer. Hesitating for a slight moment she eventually realizes there is no other choice. She enters the cave, sliding a heavy wooden board to the entrance. Down the hallway she sees the lights from the lanterns flickering, knowing what picture is waiting for her...

    SCENE SWAP
    Bryan and Danielle climb the hill, not knowing what to expect on the other side of it. Before they reach the pinnacle Bryan turns around, yelling after Frank: "Why does it take so long?". Frank, who's far behind them, scouting a freshly abandoned car for medical supplies, replies in an instant "Coming!". Half a minute later Danielle eventually asks Bryan"Why has he done it...?". He doesn't reply immediately, as he can't stop thinking of Clementine and Kenny. Then he finally responds: "There wasn't anything left to live for. His father, his girlfriend and his settlement... all gone... He has lost all his hope, just like Melody.". "I know, right...", answers Danielle, in a depressed state of mind, when she reaches the top of the hill even before Bryan. "Holy... what happened?". They both stand there looking down into the clearing, witnessing a horrible scene: a field under the red sundown with an army full of walker bodies, most of them dead, some of them still growling and moving their limbs. Danielle's heart starts to beat faster and Bryan's chest stitches in jar. Here and there blazing flames can be seen and the air is filled with dust and smoke. Then panting can be heard. It's Frank who comes running up the hill. On the top of it he can't trust his eyes neither. "Jesus, Crist... this is exactly my visual imagination of hell...". After they've taken in the environment Bryan finally speaks: "We need to go down there, to make sure none of them is Clem or Kenny.". "Alright." answers Danielle with a bitter face, as they climb down. They walk past a lot of walker bodies, some of them look freshly turned, others even can't be recognized as former human beings.


    When they're almost done scouting for them Danielle suddenly notices something: "Bryan! That's Kenny's trucker cap, isn't it?!" Bryan steps nearer, smashing a walkers brain in with his boot, when he eventually answers: "Yes, Danielle... that is definately Kenny's hat...". Danielle's eyes widen and her throat tightens from his message when he goes on "... that don't mean nothing... not until we find him as a ghost...". Danielle swallows when Frank yells back tothem: "There's only five bodies left!!" Bryan shushes him as they continue examining the rest of the bodies. "I don't know where Kenny or Clem are, but they definately aren't here, which is good. Let's go down this way... We aren't safe in the open field...". Speaks Bryan. Right when he finished his sentence gunshots fly past them and Bryan reacts immediately: "RUN!!!" He grabs Danielle's hand and pulls her with all his strength back into the wood as the shots are still being fired on them. "Damn Frank!!" screams Bryan, blaming him for attracting the soldiers. While running he shoots a glance over his shoulder, seeing Frank kneeling behind a broken vehicle, waving at Bryan to keep running. As they reach the forest Bryan sees there is no place they can hide, except from very few trees. They run even faster when Bryan makes a decision: "Danielle!" He lifts her up a tree und puts a gun into her back pocket. "Grab the branch - now!!". She is now on the tree as Bryan speaks to her: "Danielle, listen to me: You need to climb up the tree and stay there as long as you can!! They won't find you, I promise! Honey, I know it's not easy, but please: never lose hope!!! We'll meet again - I promise - now GO!". She hesitates when a shot hits the tree, then she begins to climb as fast as she can with only one arm. "Bryan?" As he runs he turns around, one last time. "Find Clementine!"

    Scene Swap
    3 days later:
    Clementine awakes to the sound of a fly. As she fights with opening her heavy lids she knows very well what she's going to see. When she looks at his body the truth is even worse than her memory: He is still lying in the very same position, with his brain spread on the ground near the fireplace. The difference is that there are now white maggots feeding on what used to be his head. The smell has become unbearable. Clementine hasn't neared him more than a yard in the last 2 days and she thinks about what to do. Thinking has become hard, as she's starving and her brain doesn't function well. She then rises as she has finally made a decision, saying out loud: "It's time."

  • edited February 2014

    Don't get me wrong, we really love newcomers. In fact whenever we get a new member he introduces a new character in his very first post, mostly out of nowhere. Some even haven't read the story, so they don't know that it doesn't fit the situation at all. There's nothing wrong about new characters, however, we've developed certain rules in this thread. One of it is to have a limited number of character (5-7 max.), as it's way too difficult to keep an overview of the actions. The other reason for that is that character development is our main goal, and it is impossible to develop every character properly if there's too many of them. I hope you understand (I liked your post yet wasn't I sure the way how she was inroduced fit the current storyline). Unfortunately, many of our newcomers didn't and left. I really don't want you to leave. I absolutely disagree with killing of your character so randomly and without a meaning and I am sorry for that. However, I am glad that you integrated that into your post so it makes more sense. Looking forward to read more of you and once again I recommend to read our whole story, as we use to refer to things in the past.

    I have to say this one thing: I feel kind of unhappy the only character I put in merely survived a whooping 1 post.

  • edited February 2014

    I'm okay with that.

    Not going to lie I Didn't want Thalia to be that important,And was hoping she could possibly sruvive. But I actually find her sudden death does in fact work. Despite my disagreeing with it.

    From the little we got from the character she seems really innocent, and then she was killed off right out of the blue.Randomz randomly killing her for no reason was fairly un-necessary.But now that I think about it in hindsight: Clem meets a really innocent person who dies almost immediately. Clem sees Innocence being killed for no reason.

    I did only expect her to be minor and leave as quickly as she came in but not in that precise way, But at least We managed to make it work.

    TheMissus posted: »

    Don't get me wrong, we really love newcomers. In fact whenever we get a new member he introduces a new character in his very first post, mos

  • I'm really sorry for killing Thalia off like that, and the more I think about it, I disagree with what I did too.

    I really enjoy your writing, and hope you continue to do so. (And once again sorry.)

    I'm okay with that. Not going to lie I Didn't want Thalia to be that important,And was hoping she could possibly sruvive. But I actually

  • it's okay,

    why did you decide to kill her anyway?

    I'm really sorry for killing Thalia off like that, and the more I think about it, I disagree with what I did too. I really enjoy your writing, and hope you continue to do so. (And once again sorry.)

  • But what is it time for! The question! I need an answer!

    TheMissus posted: »

    A cold breeze hits Clems body. When she opens her eyes she can barely see anything. It's gotten dark and the air still smells a bit humid an

  • I'm not sure where to go from here.

    TheMissus posted: »

    A cold breeze hits Clems body. When she opens her eyes she can barely see anything. It's gotten dark and the air still smells a bit humid an

  • It could very well be the end of the season.

    I'm not sure where to go from here.

  • To get rid of his body. I've left many things open. Might that be the end of the season?

    That_1_Guy posted: »

    But what is it time for! The question! I need an answer!

  • shame,

    That_1_Guy posted: »

    It could very well be the end of the season.

  • Surely Im not the only one who read this as "Applauding your tits"

    Then I actually read it and I facepalmed.

    TheMissus posted: »

    Applauding you for this

  • There's always season 3! : D

    shame,

  • yeah.

    Hopefully I could get into that a little earlier.

    That_1_Guy posted: »

    There's always season 3! : D

  • That was REALLY good. But one thing, didn't Frank go along with Bryan and Danielle?

  • We have been waiting for it, haven't we? If you think there is something we should add please share

    That_1_Guy posted: »

    There's always season 3! : D

  • Damn! Fixing it immediately!!!

    That was REALLY good. But one thing, didn't Frank go along with Bryan and Danielle?

  • well, it is a good ending. if it is a ending.

    TheMissus posted: »

    We have been waiting for it, haven't we? If you think there is something we should add please share

  • He did... Maybe Frank and Jack are in some kind of predicament or even a fight?

    That was REALLY good. But one thing, didn't Frank go along with Bryan and Danielle?

  • Sorry...

    TheMissus posted: »

    Damn! Fixing it immediately!!!

  • edited February 2014

    That's actually funny Missus. You know that tree thing? I had that planned but it was Jeremy pushing Danielle up there(of course I never got to do it cause Jeremy got shot in the face but lol) it would be a giving up moment with Jeremy pushing Danielle up a tree xD. The only difference is that Bryan's isn't a giving up moment.

  • I suppose it could be.

    TheMissus posted: »

    To get rid of his body. I've left many things open. Might that be the end of the season?

  • OK, fixed it. Hope it doesn't ruin the story that much. How could I forget about him?!

    That_1_Guy posted: »

    He did... Maybe Frank and Jack are in some kind of predicament or even a fight?

  • It's impossible to forget about himand Oreo. :P

    TheMissus posted: »

    OK, fixed it. Hope it doesn't ruin the story that much. How could I forget about him?!

  • I have never requested your feedback on one of my posts before, but now I do. Did you like it or not? Was it as depressing as I meant it to be?

  • the bits with Clem were certainly depressing.

    The Brian and Dannielle bit probably would if I was more acquainted with their characters.

    TheMissus posted: »

    I have never requested your feedback on one of my posts before, but now I do. Did you like it or not? Was it as depressing as I meant it to be?

  • One other thing, are you implying Jack has died? I wouldn't like that, just because he could be pretty cool later.

    TheMissus posted: »

    A cold breeze hits Clems body. When she opens her eyes she can barely see anything. It's gotten dark and the air still smells a bit humid an

  • I'd say Clem's part was good, but Bryan and Danielle's felt a little... Chaotic. It was still really good though.

    TheMissus posted: »

    I have never requested your feedback on one of my posts before, but now I do. Did you like it or not? Was it as depressing as I meant it to be?

  • OK. Any idea how I can fix the chaos?

    That_1_Guy posted: »

    I'd say Clem's part was good, but Bryan and Danielle's felt a little... Chaotic. It was still really good though.

  • I don't think you have to, the chaos actually makes perfect sense in the weirdest way...

    TheMissus posted: »

    OK. Any idea how I can fix the chaos?

  • Actually, yes. I was first thinking of making him run off, but I thought it doesn't fit Bryan letting him go just like that, and Bryan is also a very attentive person. Besides I thought his arc was over. You want me to fix that?

    That_1_Guy posted: »

    One other thing, are you implying Jack has died? I wouldn't like that, just because he could be pretty cool later.

  • edited February 2014

    No. You know what, it's okay. Jack's arc is over. For now... >:D

    TheMissus posted: »

    Actually, yes. I was first thinking of making him run off, but I thought it doesn't fit Bryan letting him go just like that, and Bryan is also a very attentive person. Besides I thought his arc was over. You want me to fix that?

  • so...

    Was that the end? or not?

  • It's a tough one. Should we call a vote?

    so... Was that the end? or not?

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