I do avoid writing the Actual Characters even for Fan of Imagination and Vision.
I preferred Creating My Own Characters, But for Aiden War… moreren, He does Run a good Community in a University and It's Campus.
He told the group He was in, Let's clean this place, People wasn't up for that, He Convinced them, He said Let's kill some of them, there will be too many, but we do it little by little, kill some, come back later, find more people, talk them into it, We can make this place a community.
As promised to Tobi TWD and TWAU crossover
Chapter 1 The Walking Bigby
Bigby arrived in Cranes office he was in clear distress shaking… more "Bigby I need you to investigate urgently" Crane said. "Why" Bigby responded. Crane looked at Bigby with fear in his eyes " There's been outbreak of a mundy virus affecting fables you see because of our immune system we become a zombie only for a limited time when infected till we recover to normal again. But if a fable when in zombie state during that short period bites a human it creates a supervirus making the human a fable zombie and because the virus is more powerful more brain is kept in use making the zombies able to use their fable powers. But most horrifying of all humans don't have the same immune system as us so it creates a permanent fable zombie. It's spreading quickly Bigby if you don't go out and stop the spread by time the fable zombies reach Fabletown we will have no chance and most cert… [view original content]
Preview #1 "Mourning 1/2"
Luke: "This just isn't real, how is this happening, are we all sick and will eat eachother????.... how much time
we all have, before I get sick.....Macie....Cindy.....
David you came here... Said you're not feeling well.. So We let you rest in our guest room and.... what the heck happened to you......"
Also My Story is Based on the AMC Version, where Zombies never existed through Movies and Horror Stories.
Ending Scene:
Luke and his Daughter is in his Room Mourning for the Death Of His Wife, His Brother David Killed Her, Luke Killed David.
Some time After, He hears Female groaning, His Wife Macie is Reanimated into one, She was killed in the next room, room is on the east ide, and Luke's room is south, As "Sick Macie" turns to Luke's room and sees Him, she walks slowly to Him.
Distant Moaning, Groaning, Feminine.
Luke: "Cindy you hear that? Sounds like David.. no.. more Feminine... Macie?"
Macie Now "A Sick" is walking slowly and Luke sees Her, Macie turns to Luke and looks at Him, and walks slowly to Him.
Luke: "What is causing this... Macie....No....no..."
Luke: Grabs Gun from Bed.
Luke: "Macie.... Cancer... there was never a Cure, only Death for a better life.. In GOD...."
Luke Points Gun at Macie
Luke: "I'm Sorry Macie"
Cindy: Mommie?.....Dad.. is she Sick too? Like David"
Luke: "Yeah.. It's Over.. Aids, Cancer.. Doesn't Matter..no..no no no no..Stay there Cindy.. don't get close to Her."
Luke: "I'm sorry Macie, you could have still been here..."
Luke: Tears drop..
Luke: "If it has to be this way.. so be it... Cindy I'm Sorry, don't be afraid.. Can happen to Us anytime.. I love you Macie"
Luke Shoots Macie"
-End.
I'm not good at Grammar, so wording and sentencing will be off.
It is a short one, that would be about Mins if was a Webisode.
Preview #1 "Mourning 1/2"
Luke: "This just isn't real, how is this happening, are we all sick and will eat eachother????.... how much time… more
we all have, before I get sick.....Macie....Cindy.....
David you came here... Said you're not feeling well.. So We let you rest in our guest room and.... what the heck happened to you......"
Also My Story is Based on the AMC Version, where Zombies never existed through Movies and Horror Stories.
Ending Scene:
Luke and his Daughter is in his Room Mourning for the Death Of His Wife, His Brother David Killed Her, Luke Killed David.
Some time After, He hears Female groaning, His Wife Macie is Reanimated into one, She was killed in the next room, room is on the east ide, and Luke's room is south, As "Sick Macie" turns to Luke's room and sees Him, she walks slowly to Him.
Distant Moaning, Groaning, Feminine.
Luke: "Cindy you hear that? Sounds like David.. no.. more Feminine...… [view original content]
Does anyone know any artists (or is an artist)? I'm creating a comic, and if anyone is willing to help out, that'd be awesome. (I'm trying to recruit 4+ artists).
Does anyone know any artists (or is an artist)? I'm creating a comic, and if anyone is willing to help out, that'd be awesome. (I'm trying to recruit 4+ artists).
I know JonGon is awesome, he drew my profile pic. But do the others make serious cartoons (alike to my profile picture), instead of anime or common cartoons?
www.telltalegames.com/community/discussion/comment/1185613#Comment_1185613
Tobi, Jongon and gengar that I know of are the best
www… more.telltalegames.com/community/discussion/67925/the-borderlands-fan-art-thread
Jen good
Azlyn quality
th02.deviantart.net/fs71/PRE/i/2014/132/7/a/img_20140512_151537_by_phyrecaptor-d7i33d2.jpg
I know JonGon is awesome, he drew my profile pic. But do the others make serious cartoons (alike to my profile picture), instead of anime or common cartoons?
As long as it's story related don't mind this thread is all about encouraging people to write and I recommend users on this thread visit and contribute as it's quality really great concept and story thread
Previous chapters are located on page 9 and 10 of this thread, in case you forgot what happened!
Chapter 3: Pop Tarts and Water
It eventually became a bright, crisp morning after Rayne's humble reunion with her best friend, Molly. Max, unfortunately, had to sleep on the rickety chair that was next to the bunk beds, since Molly asked so 'politely'. Rayne didn't want to have a say in it, and Max, he didn't want to piss off this Molly girl, he was already grateful enough to be given the hospitality and having his life spared twice by these girls.
Max had awakened, stretched his arms, and yawned. He looked around the bunkroom, only to see that the two girls are still sleeping, he figured it would be best to stay quiet. Leaving his cleaver behind, he walked out the door, carefully descending down the stairs.
Max walked over to the kitchen, trying to find some snacks that Rayne probably didn't show him yet.
"They have goddamn Pop Tarts here?!" He excitingly held the box in his grasp. "Wow, I wonder where Rayne found this at? I haven't seen these since, since..." He paused, took one out and sadly opened the wrapper. Still somewhat eager to finally eat this tasty treat, he sat down at the kitchen table.
"Heh, I see you found my super-secret stash of Pop Tarts, Max."
Max was caught by surprise, seeing Rayne walk down the stairs ever-so-beautifully.
"What, cat got your tongue, kid?"
Max snapped out of his trance. "Oh, sorry, yeah, I just searched your cupboards a bit. I hope you don't mind, Rayne."
"Not at all, friend." She pulled up a chair and sat next to him. "We got food that would last us for over a year, Max. Like, I showed you the crop that we have in the backyard of this place."
"Oh yeah, that's right. Sorry, my mind must've wandered somewhere else." Max took a bite out of the stale Pop Tart.
"Daydreamer, huh? Don't worry, I was one myself, back before the outbreak started. Heh, even now." She noticed him taking the first bite. "Hey, you want any water to go with that?" Max nodded politely.
Rayne got up, opened the fridge and took out 2 ice-cold waters, one for herself and him.
"Here ya go." She had placed the bottle by him while she took a swig from hers.
Letting out a sigh of relief, she sat back in her chair relaxingly. "So, Max, you okay from what happened last night? Molly didn't hurt you, did she?"
"Well, she kind of did. She fucking placed me in some sort of chokehold for Christ's sake!"
"Yeah... well, you could say the same for me, I was also the one who put a sword behind your back."
Max rubbed the back of his head. "True, but, I shouldn't be mad at you two, I mean, both of you showed me mercy when you two could have easily killed me in the first place. So, I guess 'thank you' would be the most appropriate choice of words."
Rayne grinned her beautiful smile and hugged Max. "That was sweet of you, Max, I'm glad I didn't kill you too."
"Um, thank you again?" He hugged her as well.
Letting go of him, she took another sip of water. "Listen, when my friend comes down, just be polite to her, alright? I imagine she's been through so much shit the day she went to Savannah, probably during her scavenging run there too." Rayne sighed. "I wish she didn't go there, but of course, she insisted."
"Anyways, speak of the Devil, it sounds like she's coming down now. Just be good to her. Please." Max acknowledged her warning and looked as Rayne's friend walked down the stairs in a troubled-state.
I loved this chapter so sweet and superbly written anyway
Things I liked
Realistic within TWD universe
Unique style to storytelling such a sweet and beautiful story very rare among all the gruesome and violent stories I review so refreshing
Original using fresh character you made up
Great character depth always take the time to flesh out each character even the little jokes or interactions help me as reader connect more with the characters love it
Build tension slowly yet so entertaining with the mystery element never sure what was going to happen next so I was hooked to each line
The Grammar and spacing perfect spotted no mistakes
The descriptions also really set the scene always could picture everything happening and never got lost especially this line "Rayne walk down the stairs ever-so-beautifully" made me lmao so cool
All your chapters are connecting brilliantly with no plotholes that confuse me so far
Rating
Not fair to leave rating yet as just a chapter when finished full story I rate it out of 10
Overall
Superb Dragon read your stories before and your very talented and always improving can't wait for the rest thanks for the share
Previous chapters are located on page 9 and 10 of this thread, in case you forgot what happened!
Chapter 3: Pop Tarts and Water
It… more eventually became a bright, crisp morning after Rayne's humble reunion with her best friend, Molly. Max, unfortunately, had to sleep on the rickety chair that was next to the bunk beds, since Molly asked so 'politely'. Rayne didn't want to have a say in it, and Max, he didn't want to piss off this Molly girl, he was already grateful enough to be given the hospitality and having his life spared twice by these girls.
Max had awakened, stretched his arms, and yawned. He looked around the bunkroom, only to see that the two girls are still sleeping, he figured it would be best to stay quiet. Leaving his cleaver behind, he walked out the door, carefully descending down the stairs.
Max walked over to the kitchen, trying to find some snacks that Rayne probably didn't show him yet.
"They have godda… [view original content]
I'm surprised you gave me a review this early! XD That's ok though, because I certainly applaud it and I know you'll be honest with the full review whenever I finish my story, I am still glad you are enjoying it so far! Like with the other chapters!
You think that's full review wait till your finished XD I consider that short I like telling writers exactly what I enjoyed lol thanks for the share btw and well done on your thread with all the recent storys over there I think if they posted them here my head would explode with all the reading then reviewing them like 10 per day lol so applaud you for reading and reviewing each one and still having the time to make quality stories of your own.
I'm surprised you gave me a review this early! XD That's ok though, because I certainly applaud it and I know you'll be honest with the full review whenever I finish my story, I am still glad you are enjoying it so far! Like with the other chapters!
You think that's full review wait till your finished XD I consider that short I like telling writers exactly what I enjoyed lol thanks for t… morehe share btw and well done on your thread with all the recent storys over there I think if they posted them here my head would explode with all the reading then reviewing them like 10 per day lol so applaud you for reading and reviewing each one and still having the time to make quality stories of your own.
Well imagination is dangerous in the wrong hands lol as I proved. The future looking bright anyway for the future of that thread with all the talented writers and I might add another over the top, violent and gruesome story that makes no sense in the future if I get good idea for a story XD
Thank you for the review but didn't write the story for you everyone has different tastes and styles there is no right way to write a story for this thread I made this thread for stories to have no rules or restrictions within TWD universe just for people to have fun and get creative writing stories about TWD in any form and judging from your second comment about fanfiction your either a troll or have something against this thread thanks for your time but if you don't like the way users write stories on this thread recommend you leave this thread and go to fanfiction as clearly not within your tastes so your on the wrong thread on this forum. All story's by users here in my opinion are perfect and better then whatever fanfiction has to offer btw ;)
Well imagination is dangerous in the wrong hands lol as I proved. The future looking bright anyway for the future of that thread with all th… moree talented writers and I might add another over the top, violent and gruesome story that makes no sense in the future if I get good idea for a story XD
First of all, FF is a place where everyday people can post their fics, so no the stories on the fics are not posted by the ones who run the website. Yes there are some pretty shitty fics on there, but there are also the best stories. New fics are put up everyday, giving everybody something new to read. The reason why I say go on FF is so that everyone's stories will get more recognition, and it you can actually track the traffic of how many people who read and the reviews can vary, depending on how many people like the characters and genres you use. Additionaly,it will be easier to respond to the reviews and when you do click respond, it automatically sends the response as a PM, so no one else can see your conversation. So no trolling and no hating, just saying that if you have a fic you wish to post, post it on FF. I'm not saying I don't like any of the stories and I am entertained by seeing other people write and that for me is good enough, even if a story is complete and utter shit (Trust me, yours is not even close to what I have seen as the worst. I'd say I could rate mine as 6/10 or 7/10... Maybe 6.5... on average and I'm basing this on response to my fics. Have I written worse than you have written? Yes I have, have I written an 8 before? I have one currently ongoing and I think I just posted the first chapter to a 9, but that is only 2 out of 11. I would never give anybody 10/10 unless if it is absolutely fantastic, which is really, really rare. As an FF author I really have to say no one is perfect at writing, not even me. Hell, there are plenty of people way better me and then there are those who think I'm the best at writing, then I have ran into shit heads who cuss me out just because it's two dudes hugging in one scene. Like you said everyone has different ideas on how a good story goes. I gave you my opinion and that's that.
Thank you for the review but didn't write the story for you everyone has different tastes and styles there is no right way to write a story … morefor this thread I made this thread for stories to have no rules or restrictions within TWD universe just for people to have fun and get creative writing stories about TWD in any form and judging from your second comment about fanfiction your either a troll or have something against this thread thanks for your time but if you don't like the way users write stories on this thread recommend you leave this thread and go to fanfiction as clearly not within your tastes so your on the wrong thread on this forum. All story's by users here in my opinion are perfect and better then whatever fanfiction has to offer btw ;)
Look think your missing the point of this thread. I'm just offering another outlet for people to post story's and get creative so spamming my thread telling people to go to fanfiction is disrespectful and just spam to me you can easily do both anyway. Then referring to some storie's as utter shit and mine as a nice 4/10 even your average is better then mine seriously trying to be nice but none of us are professional writers so take your criticism of mine or anyone's story with a grain of salt. Anyway people have different tastes and styles one persons 1/10 could be another 10/10 meaning taking any criticism onboard could potentially make you a worse writer. So unless you want to post story here recommend you go to fanfiction or do both
Thank you for your time just please spam someone else's thread with fanfiction instead
First of all, FF is a place where everyday people can post their fics, so no the stories on the fics are not posted by the ones who run the … morewebsite. Yes there are some pretty shitty fics on there, but there are also the best stories. New fics are put up everyday, giving everybody something new to read. The reason why I say go on FF is so that everyone's stories will get more recognition, and it you can actually track the traffic of how many people who read and the reviews can vary, depending on how many people like the characters and genres you use. Additionaly,it will be easier to respond to the reviews and when you do click respond, it automatically sends the response as a PM, so no one else can see your conversation. So no trolling and no hating, just saying that if you have a fic you wish to post, post it on FF. I'm not saying I don't like any of the stories and I am entertained by seeing other people write and that for me is good enough… [view original content]
I decided that this weekend I should post my story since It's gonna be a long time before the functions become available again.
I will post a link to the story when I get the chance. :3
Yeah, I got made problem is I haven't scanned it because of my workload on my hands, plus there's no functions to give it to you here privately. The prize still needs colouring. Like I said, I'm super busy now.
Yeah, I got made problem is I haven't scanned it because of my workload on my hands, plus there's no functions to give it to you here privately. The prize still needs colouring. Like I said, I'm super busy now.
ARE YOU KIDDING ME seriously Tobi the endless excuses give me my money NAW or else.
Only joking lol take as long as need or can't even get it done it's ok bro :)
Comments
Luke: "This just isn't real, how is this happening, are we all sick and will eat eachother????.... how much time
we all have, before I get sick.....Macie....Cindy.....
David you came here... Said you're not feeling well.. So We let you rest in our guest room and.... what the heck happened to you......"
Also My Story is Based on the AMC Version, where Zombies never existed through Movies and Horror Stories.
Ending Scene:
Luke and his Daughter is in his Room Mourning for the Death Of His Wife, His Brother David Killed Her, Luke Killed David.
Some time After, He hears Female groaning, His Wife Macie is Reanimated into one, She was killed in the next room, room is on the east ide, and Luke's room is south, As "Sick Macie" turns to Luke's room and sees Him, she walks slowly to Him.
Distant Moaning, Groaning, Feminine.
Luke: "Cindy you hear that? Sounds like David.. no.. more Feminine... Macie?"
Macie Now "A Sick" is walking slowly and Luke sees Her, Macie turns to Luke and looks at Him, and walks slowly to Him.
Luke: "What is causing this... Macie....No....no..."
Luke: Grabs Gun from Bed.
Luke: "Macie.... Cancer... there was never a Cure, only Death for a better life.. In GOD...."
Luke Points Gun at Macie
Luke: "I'm Sorry Macie"
Cindy: Mommie?.....Dad.. is she Sick too? Like David"
Luke: "Yeah.. It's Over.. Aids, Cancer.. Doesn't Matter..no..no no no no..Stay there Cindy.. don't get close to Her."
Luke: "I'm sorry Macie, you could have still been here..."
Luke: Tears drop..
Luke: "If it has to be this way.. so be it... Cindy I'm Sorry, don't be afraid.. Can happen to Us anytime.. I love you Macie"
Luke Shoots Macie"
-End.
I'm not good at Grammar, so wording and sentencing will be off.
It is a short one, that would be about Mins if was a Webisode.
Full Part will be tomorrow.
It's not ogre 'till it's ogre.
Hope you enjoyed your trip.
Tobi, Jongon and gengar that I know of are the best
www.telltalegames.com/community/discussion/67925/the-borderlands-fan-art-thread
Jen good
Azlyn quality
th02.deviantart.net/fs71/PRE/i/2014/132/7/a/img_20140512_151537_by_phyrecaptor-d7i33d2.jpg
Chapter 3: Pop Tarts and Water
It eventually became a bright, crisp morning after Rayne's humble reunion with her best friend, Molly. Max, unfortunately, had to sleep on the rickety chair that was next to the bunk beds, since Molly asked so 'politely'. Rayne didn't want to have a say in it, and Max, he didn't want to piss off this Molly girl, he was already grateful enough to be given the hospitality and having his life spared twice by these girls.
Max had awakened, stretched his arms, and yawned. He looked around the bunkroom, only to see that the two girls are still sleeping, he figured it would be best to stay quiet. Leaving his cleaver behind, he walked out the door, carefully descending down the stairs.
Max walked over to the kitchen, trying to find some snacks that Rayne probably didn't show him yet.
"They have goddamn Pop Tarts here?!" He excitingly held the box in his grasp. "Wow, I wonder where Rayne found this at? I haven't seen these since, since..." He paused, took one out and sadly opened the wrapper. Still somewhat eager to finally eat this tasty treat, he sat down at the kitchen table.
"Heh, I see you found my super-secret stash of Pop Tarts, Max."
Max was caught by surprise, seeing Rayne walk down the stairs ever-so-beautifully.
"What, cat got your tongue, kid?"
Max snapped out of his trance. "Oh, sorry, yeah, I just searched your cupboards a bit. I hope you don't mind, Rayne."
"Not at all, friend." She pulled up a chair and sat next to him. "We got food that would last us for over a year, Max. Like, I showed you the crop that we have in the backyard of this place."
"Oh yeah, that's right. Sorry, my mind must've wandered somewhere else." Max took a bite out of the stale Pop Tart.
"Daydreamer, huh? Don't worry, I was one myself, back before the outbreak started. Heh, even now." She noticed him taking the first bite. "Hey, you want any water to go with that?" Max nodded politely.
Rayne got up, opened the fridge and took out 2 ice-cold waters, one for herself and him.
"Here ya go." She had placed the bottle by him while she took a swig from hers.
Letting out a sigh of relief, she sat back in her chair relaxingly. "So, Max, you okay from what happened last night? Molly didn't hurt you, did she?"
"Well, she kind of did. She fucking placed me in some sort of chokehold for Christ's sake!"
"Yeah... well, you could say the same for me, I was also the one who put a sword behind your back."
Max rubbed the back of his head. "True, but, I shouldn't be mad at you two, I mean, both of you showed me mercy when you two could have easily killed me in the first place. So, I guess 'thank you' would be the most appropriate choice of words."
Rayne grinned her beautiful smile and hugged Max. "That was sweet of you, Max, I'm glad I didn't kill you too."
"Um, thank you again?" He hugged her as well.
Letting go of him, she took another sip of water. "Listen, when my friend comes down, just be polite to her, alright? I imagine she's been through so much shit the day she went to Savannah, probably during her scavenging run there too." Rayne sighed. "I wish she didn't go there, but of course, she insisted."
"Anyways, speak of the Devil, it sounds like she's coming down now. Just be good to her. Please." Max acknowledged her warning and looked as Rayne's friend walked down the stairs in a troubled-state.
END, of Chapter 3.
Things I liked
Realistic within TWD universe
Unique style to storytelling such a sweet and beautiful story very rare among all the gruesome and violent stories I review so refreshing
Original using fresh character you made up
Great character depth always take the time to flesh out each character even the little jokes or interactions help me as reader connect more with the characters love it
Build tension slowly yet so entertaining with the mystery element never sure what was going to happen next so I was hooked to each line
The Grammar and spacing perfect spotted no mistakes
The descriptions also really set the scene always could picture everything happening and never got lost especially this line "Rayne walk down the stairs ever-so-beautifully" made me lmao so cool
All your chapters are connecting brilliantly with no plotholes that confuse me so far
Rating
Not fair to leave rating yet as just a chapter when finished full story I rate it out of 10
Overall
Superb Dragon read your stories before and your very talented and always improving can't wait for the rest thanks for the share
Thank you for your time just please spam someone else's thread with fanfiction instead
I will post a link to the story when I get the chance. :3
Only joking lol take as long as need or can't even get it done it's ok bro :)