I just realized that I have way too many fears for you to incorporate into the story so why not just say them? I will list them in random or… moreder.
I'm afraid of...
1.) Deep, murky water
2.) Fish
3.) Worms/maggots
4.) Turtles
5.) Clusters of things (Clusterphobia)
6.) Any kind of frog/toad
7.) Small, darty lizards
8.) Birds, especially pelicans (I'm not afraid of penguins or owls though)
9.) Dead baby birds
10.) Being eaten alive.
And so I don't look like a total pussy...
Common Fears I'm Not Afraid Of:
1.) Heights
2.) Snakes
3.) Alligators
4.) Clowns
5.) Spiders
6.) Needles
7.) Being chained up
8.) Blood, guts, or anything gory
Anyone else wants to meet them in person just for once, and beat the holy fucking shit out of them?
DISLIKE THIS TROLL! I FEED OFF YOUR HATE! IT MAKES ME STRONGER!
Anyone else wants to meet them in person just for once, and beat the holy fucking shit out of them?
DISLIKE THIS TROLL! I FEED OFF YOUR HATE! IT MAKES ME STRONGER!
Anyone else wants to meet them in person just for once, and beat the holy fucking shit out of them?
DISLIKE THIS TROLL! I FEED OFF YOUR HATE! IT MAKES ME STRONGER!
Thanks for your advice. But now that you point those flaws out, I'm kind of embarrassed by it now... I didn't realize it had that much flaws until you just pointed it out.
Ok, first thing first, i got a bloody headache reading all that in one go, i suggest separating your paragraphs unless you want people to go… more " Too long didn't read LLOL".
Second, nicee story, but it's not really scary per se....not for me anyway, but then again it takes a lot to scare me. The fact that some "twisted dark shadow thing" haunts the game is extremely cliché and done to death.
Third, don't finish your creepypasta with something like " people are still trying to solve it to this day" as it's quite clear that all you said is a lie and in reality none of this happened. Slenderman was a creepy pasta but it was actually a reimagining of a real urban legend. "Ben Drowned" was creepy for the simple fact that the story was well told and actually creepy. Yours isn't enough to be called a creepypasta per se and would only be a "cool story bro" type of story.
Don't feel offended by what i'm saying, this is just constructive criticis… [view original content]
So like, yeah... Sometimes I don't see your replies on my profile. Let's see here... how are you afraid of fish, worms and turtles... but not snakes and alligators?! Heh, I don't get that. B]
I just realized that I have way too many fears for you to incorporate into the story so why not just say them? I will list them in random or… moreder.
I'm afraid of...
1.) Deep, murky water
2.) Fish
3.) Worms/maggots
4.) Turtles
5.) Clusters of things (Clusterphobia)
6.) Any kind of frog/toad
7.) Small, darty lizards
8.) Birds, especially pelicans (I'm not afraid of penguins or owls though)
9.) Dead baby birds
10.) Being eaten alive.
And so I don't look like a total pussy...
Common Fears I'm Not Afraid Of:
1.) Heights
2.) Snakes
3.) Alligators
4.) Clowns
5.) Spiders
6.) Needles
7.) Being chained up
8.) Blood, guts, or anything gory
Thanks for your advice. But now that you point those flaws out, I'm kind of embarrassed by it now... I didn't realize it had that much flaws until you just pointed it out.
So like, yeah... Sometimes I don't see your replies on my profile. Let's see here... how are you afraid of fish, worms and turtles... but not snakes and alligators?! Heh, I don't get that. B]
Ok, first thing first, i got a bloody headache reading all that in one go, i suggest separating your paragraphs unless you want people to go… more " Too long didn't read LLOL".
Second, nicee story, but it's not really scary per se....not for me anyway, but then again it takes a lot to scare me. The fact that some "twisted dark shadow thing" haunts the game is extremely cliché and done to death.
Third, don't finish your creepypasta with something like " people are still trying to solve it to this day" as it's quite clear that all you said is a lie and in reality none of this happened. Slenderman was a creepy pasta but it was actually a reimagining of a real urban legend. "Ben Drowned" was creepy for the simple fact that the story was well told and actually creepy. Yours isn't enough to be called a creepypasta per se and would only be a "cool story bro" type of story.
Don't feel offended by what i'm saying, this is just constructive criticis… [view original content]
But seriously I really enjoyed this creepypasta with the spiritual elements great pacing and love reading about video games maybe not that scary but I have twisted mind so probably was overall thanks for the share I really enjoyed it just quality. Thumb
Alright everyone, here is my creepypasta. I just finished writing it today, and I started it yesterday. I hope you enjoy it and it's not goi… moreng to be perfect. It's about GTA V. This is very long!
Hello everyone! This is my first creepypasta that I have ever written, so it's not going to be a masterpiece. Any constructive criticism is welcome. This story takes place in November of 2013.
Game glitches happen to all of us. They can be funny, annoying, scary, they can be anything. But the thing ALL of us can agree on, is that glitches can be unpredictable. You never know when they will occur and what will happen when they do occur. The story I am about to tell happened to me only about a week ago. It was really bizarre and eerie in my opinion. I’ve never seen anything like this. As a matter of fact, I actually don’t even know if I would really call it a “glitch.” It was a lot more than a glitch…
Anyways, my birthday finally arrived last w… [view original content]
Don't be embarrassed just learn from this experience and follow my advice :P
The key to success is to always strive to do better next time, learn from your mistakes and always improve yourself
That's how you win at life my dear friend
Comments
-HIGH FIVES YOU-
(WHICH I WOULD HAVE DONE IF YOU HAD ASKED!)
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hahahahaha !!!
Poor Joseph xD
Why aren't you scared of being chained up?
That's okay! You didn't know! ;v; In the future, maybe just putting SARDINES DON'T LOOK!!! at the top before you post a sloth would work, lol.
Nah, don't fell like wasting my time with something useless.
*aren't
Don't ask....xD
We're already wasting a lot of time XD
Sigh
Now I did. And....it's....AWESOME!!!
SHHHHHHHHHHHH >_> DONT TELL JOSEPH
Actually IDK if I would have done it, but STILL. HE COULD HAVE ASKED.
Your new nickname!
:O
You didn't just do that.
I loved Drake and Josh so freaking much, that moment got me crying from laughter when I first saw it.
I'm so satisfied that it became a meme now.
Shoots Woodbruy's knees
lol, we're so terrible xP
Thanks for your advice. But now that you point those flaws out, I'm kind of embarrassed by it now... I didn't realize it had that much flaws until you just pointed it out.
I know right?? The only instruments are the violin and the dude's voice.
Lindsey Stirling is freaking perfect.
:O
You didn't just do that.
So like, yeah... Sometimes I don't see your replies on my profile. Let's see here... how are you afraid of fish, worms and turtles... but not snakes and alligators?! Heh, I don't get that. B]
Elian ? Ask ?! HA!! Not likely....he'd probably "accidentaly" kill you first then ask right after xD
WtW is a sensitive basket head.
Don't be embarrassed just learn from this experience and follow my advice :P
The key to success is to always strive to do better next time, learn from your mistakes and always improve yourself
That's how you win at life my dear friend
I don't know, snakes I'm just totally fine with. I even had one wrapped around my neck once!
And I have loved alligators since I was little.
I cant' have my sharpshooter losing her sanity! Well unless... B]
I'm sorry ;-; I wasn't thinking right
I'M CRIPPLED NOW YOU JERK
How are you afraid of turtles though...they're the slowest moving creatures after snails...in that order i think anyway...
Password, can you do me a favor?
“Fuck that shit!”- Papai46
They have an Xbox NOOOOOOOOOOOOO AAAAH
But seriously I really enjoyed this creepypasta with the spiritual elements great pacing and love reading about video games maybe not that scary but I have twisted mind so probably was overall thanks for the share I really enjoyed it just quality. Thumb
Thanks man. I might delete it from here though because I don't really want anyone else to see it and make fun of me or some shit >_>
Maybelle:
The Slender-Man, Jeff, Creepers, the dark and my mother when shes angry...
I don't think anyone is going to read it if you don't separate your text in coherent manner..
Good thing i'm a fast reader xD
They won't make fun of you, see it as a learning experience my friend :P It's nothing negative, believe me
What can i do for ya, Elian ? :P
I am the hero this forum deserves... A silent guardian, an angel of sorts, I am...
The Troll Hunter.