Dead City (Finale)

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  • I meant on a seperate website and I cant do that with the device im using.

    Colton posted: »

    maybe you could just edit the OP and put the story there? and the strawpolls

  • I meant on a seperate website and I cant do that with the device im using.

  • edited September 2014

    well, if you want it seems you can create a document on google, then share the url. then we can read when you update it. its up to you though, you can keep doing what your doing too

    Colton posted: »

    ah i see, tell me if you can see this https://docs.google.com/document/d/147jjnb2aepdXFEgF_IK03sibthHs3asXuAloAPbTt9s/edit?usp=sharing

  • That is one idea, I also found a website I could use.

    Colton posted: »

    ah i see, tell me if you can see this https://docs.google.com/document/d/147jjnb2aepdXFEgF_IK03sibthHs3asXuAloAPbTt9s/edit?usp=sharing

  • Hunter Arc Prologue

    noise of leaves rustling as a bow and arrow come out from a bush

    an arrow goes flying right through a deer's neck

    Randy-Thats the best catch in weeks, these walkers aint got everything yet!

    R-better cut it up here to not draw the dead...I talk to myself too much.

    Randy cuts up the deer and loads it onto his car

    After driving for a while Randy pulls onto a side road till he gets to a clearing

    A womans scream startled Randy

    R- OH SHIT!

    Randy runs till he sees a cabin where 3 walkers are banging to get in

    Randy uses his bow to take them all out

    Randy runs inside the cabin where he sees a dead walker and his 17 year old daughter

    Madison-Dad...I killed it.

    Randy runs and hugs her

    R-ARE You hurt!

    M-No...I dont think...

    R-Dont worry we will leave...Keep moving.

    M- When are we leaving?

    ( Choice)

    http://strawpoll.me/2534206

  • Seeing as there is still a spot open for a soldier, I've decided to give you a hand so you can begin.

    Name: Roland Ruyo

    Gender: Male

    Age: 35

    Ethnicity: Caucasian American

    Description: 6'2, 210 lbs, short blond hair, blue eyes

    Background: Roland has a strong sense of duty and loyalty to his group/unit. He seems wise and stable but not much is known. (I leave most of the backstory to you). Good luck

  • Thank you, he will be the captain.

    UnknownX posted: »

    Seeing as there is still a spot open for a soldier, I've decided to give you a hand so you can begin. Name: Roland Ruyo Gender: Male

  • I will post Chapter 2 of S&B in a few hours.

    I will post Chapter 1 of Hunters and the Prologue of The Mission later today.

  • Awesome, can't wait :)

    I will post Chapter 2 of S&B in a few hours. I will post Chapter 1 of Hunters and the Prologue of The Mission later today.

  • Survivors and Bandits Chapter 2

    (Choice-break up fight/no side)

    A-God will you two shut up!

    C-I will once this ass stops picking on kids!

    J-He almost got me killed!

    A rifle shot goes off

    Lev-Thats it! If you all keep arguing the next bullets going in a head.

    everyone just stares at Lev, having it be the first word since he was saved a week ago

    J-Fine! Im going to sleep!

    Everybody is silent from the recent fallout,Josh goes and lays down on one of the many mattresses sprawled out on the roof,Colton silently goes back to Megan,Simon walks over to Lev and starts silently talking,Brandon and Anthony walk over near Sammy and the fire

    B-Damn...

    A-I know.

    Sammy-First time Lev talks and its a threat.

    A-I shouldnt have gotten involved.

    S-You stood up for Simon, it was right to break it up.

    B-Yeah, everything is too tense lately with our mysterious sniper who shot megan and Josh's sister dying.

    A-I wonder what they are talking about.

    B- I dont know. Just stay out of that.

    Suddenly Colton walks over

    C-Hey I have some bad news...

    A-What?

    C-A supply run is needed tomorrow.

    S-Why they just got tons of medicine.

    C-Yes but I need a special kind,the hospital ran out before this thing and didnt get the next shipment.

    A-Then what are we suppose to do?

    C-There is a military convoy of helicopters going through here a week ago,two crashed, one must have the medicine.

    S- Okay but it sounds too dangerous.

    C-It is extremely but I need you three,Josh,and Lev to go.

    B- that sounds risky, why Josh?

    C-Because with what happened today, me and Simon feels safe alone with him.

    B-Fair enough.

    C-Ill tell Lev and Josh, get some rest and be ready tomorrow.

    *Everyone lays down and falls asleep *

    The next morning everyone suits up with gear, including Anthony

    (Choice)

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  • Wow, what a choice! Good work. I have a suggestion. You might want to make a seperate thread which you dedicate to updating the story, or use a website and just link it to this thread. Its easy for the story to get lost in the comment section. Other than that you are definately starting off strong. Can't wait for the other arcs.

    Survivors and Bandits Chapter 2 (Choice-break up fight/no side) A-God will you two shut up! C-I will once this ass stops picking on

  • This is fun to read. Can`t wait to read more of this story!

    Survivors and Bandits Chapter 2 (Choice-break up fight/no side) A-God will you two shut up! C-I will once this ass stops picking on

  • Yeah, that would be good.

    And then link it here.

    UnknownX posted: »

    Wow, what a choice! Good work. I have a suggestion. You might want to make a seperate thread which you dedicate to updating the story, or us

  • Thanks, I dont have a lot of time for the story since of school so I write what comes to mind, but the other openings may not be as great (I forgot some homework at school I wanted to do tonight, due friday but I need to get it tomorrow but my memory is like a potatos).

    I dont want to spam the thread but I dont have time to transfer the story to another website because of what I mentioned above.

    UnknownX posted: »

    Wow, what a choice! Good work. I have a suggestion. You might want to make a seperate thread which you dedicate to updating the story, or us

  • The Hunters Chapter 1

    (Choice-leave tomorrow morning)

    R-Dont worry baby girl we wont leave till tomorrow morning.

    M-Dad? Are those men still after us?

    R-Dont worry about them,they wont hurt you ill make sure of that,just get some sleep.

    Madison falls asleep while Randy stays up all night

    The next morning Randy wakes Madison up to start walking

    They get to a long forested stretch of road

    M-Dad, why did we get up so early?

    R-Sunlights burning, we want to see those things coming.

    M-What if THEY find us

    R- Ill die before they get to you...Again.

    M-Thats what im worried about.

    two hours have passed, the sun is high in the sky,when they come across a strange sight

    M-Dad? Is that a dead body?

    R- Dont worry,not one of the ones that bite.

    M- Who is it?

    R-Hell if I know, but its got magots in it and a hole in its head.

    R-Shame, people must of cared about this person...Best move it to the bushes.

    M-What!?

    R-Lets not defile their memory, lets not allow their body lay where the dead can eat it.

    Randy moves the body to the bushes and they continue ahead

    they stumble upon train tracks,no vehicle in sight, they keep walking until they hear something

    R-Shit! Follow me!

    Madison follows her father into the woods while they hear gunfire coming at them

    They reach a clearing until Randy is shot in the leg

    The sight of a cowboy hat and scraggly voice reminds them of whats been following them

    Jack-Well, looky at what we have here. A crippled old fuck and his ripe daughter.

    R-Ill fucking kill you!

    J-good luck, you know this wouldnt be happening if you allowed us to finish your daughter.

    R-You Rapist monsters...

    J-You know I think we will finish her in front of you...Then finish your life.

    Randy raises his handgun at the three men

    J-Fire...I dare you.

    (Choice)

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    Bonus

    Felix-We can just go!

    Pete-He will kill us boy.

    Felix-I dont want to be a rapist!

    Pete- We cant just drive off!

    Felix-Yes we can...Just drive...To Savannah...Yeah Savannah!

    Pete-I dont know...

    Felix- Jack, Troy, and Tim are out there, just drive.

    A gunshot

    Felix-Shit! They will be back any second hurry!

    (Choice)

    http://strawpoll.me/2540076

  • edited September 2014

    Can you put the full names? Like instead of R-J- jhust write thefull names please

    But awesome story! Just imagine Jack Jelq, pink cowboy hat, tall, lean, unzipped denim jacket showing off his birdchest , holding you at gunpoint threatening to kill you. How scary would that be.

  • Its easier for me to write the initials so if you dont mind ill keep doing it.

    Its hard to write these on the device im using so it saves time. I will always put their name when they first say something.

    And yeah to imagine situations like these are terrorifying especially with such a intersting character you gave me. XD

    Can you put the full names? Like instead of R-J- jhust write thefull names please But awesome story! Just imagine Jack Jelq, pink cowboy

  • "The Mission" prologue

    old rock music is playing in a moving helicopter

    Captain Roland-Okay you all know the mission?

    Private Austin-Yeah can you repeat it again?

    Cpt R-We land, we create a safe zone, we find our objective, we extract!

    Julia Thorne-Hey what about helping people?

    Adam Bialy-Yeah I signed up to do that!

    Cpt R-Thats secondary!

    S.S. Skylar-Whats the objective?

    Cpt R-Crashed helicopter...Will you turn that shit off!

    Pilot-Hey man I just found this, let me enjoy it.

    Pilot-Wait, John, you okay man?

    Pilot-OH SHIT!

    The second pilot jumps up and rips the first pilots throat out

    Cpt R-Fuck!

    The helicopter starts flying down

    Cpt R-Everyone JUMP!

    The Captain forces everyones parachutes on and jumps out

    Cpt R-Land near that highway!

    AB-No, theres infected everywhere there! Land near that rooftop with the watertower!

    (Choice)

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  • edited September 2014

    Survivors and Bandits Chapter 3

    Anthony throws on a thick fur jacket and grabs the handgun,rope,lighter,ice pick, and crossbow

    Brandon grabs a shotgun and a machete,Sammy grabs a survival knife and Assualt rifle,Josh grabs an axe and handgun,Lev grabs his hunting rifle and hatchet

    C-Okay so you all got everything?

    A-Yeah, the most we can carry.

    C-Good, so the crashed helicopter is near the highway, grab the meds and get back here.

    J-Dont you two fuck anything up.

    A small movement is seen by Lev

    S-We should go,we will be back,stay safe.

    They walk until they run into something

    They hear gunfire

    B-Is that gunfire?

    J-Yeah!

    They run to the edge of a building to see a man on top of a car fighting of walkers

    A-Shit we got to help him!

    Before they can do anything the man is grabbed and his chest is ripped open

    Suddenly they hear a scream as a young woman is escorted by another woman away from the incident

    S-Shit...

    J-We couldnt of saved him...

    L-We should...Keep walking.

    The group quickly walks away from the spot and walks for hours to get to the highway

    When they arrive walkers are all over the spot

    J-Shit better do this quietly...

    The group takes out many walkers until its cleared

    J-Okay me and Lev will search the area, you three check the helicopter.

    A-Okay

    Brandon goes inside the helicopter while Anthony and Sammy check a strange moan

    Behind the helicopter is one of the zombified pilots on a large rebar pole

    S-Damn,poor guy,hope he died before this...

    B-Holy shit!

    Sammy and Anthony run into the helicopter to find Brandon crying over a dead pilot

    S-You know him?

    B-Hes...My brother, Tom...

    A-Were sorry...

    B-At least he died listening to this shit song Brandon cracks a smile through the tears

    B-Looks like this stop sign pole went right through his head...I never thought Id see him after he joined military...Still not the way I wanted to see him.

    S-Did you find anything else?

    B-Nope the place is cleaned out.

    Suddenly they hear yelling

    J-Well im tired too! My sister died four days ago!

    L-That does give you an excuse ASSHOLE, we all lost people!

    S-God not this shit again!

    J-Hey im sorry but motherfuc-

    A rifle shot goes straight through Josh's chest and he falls over

    J-Huuuhhh...Help...Me...

    L-Fuck!

    Everyone stares with their ears still ringing

    B-What the fu...

    S-Shit...

    L-We got to go that shot will attract those things, leave him!

    Lev runs to a nearby fire escape,Sammy still shocked runs after him, Brandon following

    J-Shittt...He...He...Shot me...Please...Dont leave me...Help...

    (Choice)

    http://strawpoll.me/2545432

  • Im accepting new characters who will appear in the arcs soon.

  • Good work GoldenPaladin, very suspensful given the length. I honestly thought Josh would have made it far, given his strong introduction. Also, it looks like Lev is turning out to be kind of like Nick. I read his bio along with all the other characters, I think he is just dealing with stuff like Nick was. Hopefully you decide to go deeper into Lev's state of mind, along with Brandon and his brother Tom. They seem like interesting charcaters.

    So far good work. Take my likes

    Survivors and Bandits Chapter 3 Anthony throws on a thick fur jacket and grabs the handgun,rope,lighter,ice pick, and crossbow Brandon

  • edited September 2014

    The Hunters Chapter 2

    (Choice-Take the shot)

    Randy shoots Jack in the shoulder

    J-Ahh fucker took the shot!

    Jack shoots Randy in the other leg

    J-You know I was going to give you a quick death but now im going to kill you slowly!

    A bullet flys out of the woods and hits Troy straight in the neck

    ???-You know I dont like assholes,theres your warning...A dead friend.

    J-Come out so I can kill you!

    ???-I dont understand why you wont leave.

    Another bullet flys out of the woods and hits Jack straight in the knee

    ???-Final warning...

    J-Shit! I will get you folks another time!

    Jack runs off with Tim, then two figures come out of the woods, one is a man with a mask in riot gear and the other is a young man in riot gear but with a hood

    ???-Shame about that,you dont look so good.We can get you patched up.

    R-who are you all?!

    Savior-You can call me savior, my real name doesnt matter.

    R-...I dont trust you all...

    S-Understandable,but you can leave after we patch up your legs, you wont last a day.

    R-Youre not giving a choice are you?

    S-Nope. We are going to help you and then you can leave.

    S- Ill give you two questions then we will go.

    (Choice)

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    Bonus

    (Choice-Escape)

    P-Youre right we can go.

    Multiple gunshots

    F-Shit hurry!

    P-Jump in!

    Felix jumps in and they drive away

  • Thank you, I dont have a lot of time so I try and make it suspenseful.

    Josh might live if you vote wisely.

    I will get into more character development soon with both Lev and Brandon, Sammy might even have some. :p

    UnknownX posted: »

    Good work GoldenPaladin, very suspensful given the length. I honestly thought Josh would have made it far, given his strong introduction. Al

  • Name: Blue

    Sex: Male

    Age: 19

    Group: The Fallen

    Personality: Sarcastic, funny, intelligent, patient, and selfless at times. Works better in a group, and prefers it that way. After all he went through, his sarcastic and funny self has worn out, but has not gone entirely.

    Looking forward to this :D

  • Yeah youre in.

    The Saviors will be in the Hunter arc

    The Community will be in the Hunter arc

    The Fallen will be in The Mission arc

    BlueShadiw posted: »

    Name: Blue Sex: Male Age: 19 Group: The Fallen Personality: Sarcastic, funny, intelligent, patient, and selfless at times. Works

  • the fallen: William, 19, 5'11, 67kg, brown hair, tanned

  • ComingSoonComingSoon Banned
    edited September 2014

    Group 9: The Fallen

    Name: Private Xavier Daniels

    Gender: Male

    Age: 26

    Details: Missing his left leg from a walker bite. It's cut from the knee down, he has a prosthetic in its place.

    Excited!!! Do I get in?

  • I don't know if the Soldiers are open still

    Hope so though :D

    ComingSoon posted: »

    Group 9: The Fallen Name: Private Xavier Daniels Gender: Male Age: 26 Details: Missing his left leg from a walker bite. It's cut from the knee down, he has a prosthetic in its place. Excited!!! Do I get in?

  • Yes you can get in but you will be moved to the fallen.

    ComingSoon posted: »

    Group 9: The Fallen Name: Private Xavier Daniels Gender: Male Age: 26 Details: Missing his left leg from a walker bite. It's cut from the knee down, he has a prosthetic in its place. Excited!!! Do I get in?

  • That's fine, man. You can get rid of the 'Private' label then.

    Yes you can get in but you will be moved to the fallen.

  • We have been moved to Forum games and ill keep posting the story.

  • Naw ill keep it,I have an idea.

    I hope this isnt forgotten because weve moved.

    ComingSoon posted: »

    That's fine, man. You can get rid of the 'Private' label then.

  • Ok, cool. I don't think people will forget about this place at all, don't worry. They'll just follow the discussion.

    Naw ill keep it,I have an idea. I hope this isnt forgotten because weve moved.

  • We need new people though. :/

    ComingSoon posted: »

    Ok, cool. I don't think people will forget about this place at all, don't worry. They'll just follow the discussion.

  • Don't worry; have faith. Maybe you could post a comment in the Whatever's on your mind Megathreadcand tell people about it? They'd be glad to join.

    We need new people though.

  • Good idea, I might do that later.

    ComingSoon posted: »

    Don't worry; have faith. Maybe you could post a comment in the Whatever's on your mind Megathreadcand tell people about it? They'd be glad to join.

  • Awesome! :)

    Good idea, I might do that later.

  • Cool new characters. I'll provide some more.

    Group: The Community

    Name: Zane Marshall

    Gender: Male

    Age: 22

    Ethnicity: American Caucasian

    Description: 5'7, 148 lbs, Black Hair, Brown Eyes, Average Build

    Background: Zane is a quiet young man. He doesn't mess around or joke. He is very stoic but has been known to express himself with people who he feels comftrable with, or can relate to. He is a good stratagist, but his quiet demenor makes him an unsutiable leader. He never seems broken, but this world is different now.

  • edited September 2014

    Group: The Community

    Name: Violet Taylor

    Gender: Female

    Age: 20

    Ethnicity: Hispanic

    Description: 5'5, 120 lbs, Black Hair, Hazel Eyes

    Background: Veronica was a bit of a nerdy girl before all of this, prefering the company of books instead of people. Her studious nature has given her much knowledge in various feilds, including medical knowledge and engineering experience. However, she is very awkward in conversations, normally talking about things people know nothing about. Despite this, she is brave, viewing fear of the unknown as irrational.

    UnknownX posted: »

    Cool new characters. I'll provide some more. Group: The Community Name: Zane Marshall Gender: Male Age: 22 Ethnicity: America

  • The Mission Chapter 1

    (Choice-Land on rooftop)

    Cpt.R-Shit,land on the rooftop!

    Pvt.A-The parachute has a hole!

    Everybody lands on the rooftop safely except Pvt.Austin who breaks his leg when he hits the watertower

    A-Shit,hey are you alright!

    Pvt.A-MY LEG!

    J-Hey stay still we will help.

    In the background the helicopter crashes near the highway

    Cpt.R- Thats not good...Doesnt change the mission, get him up well start walking.

    A-Hey he cant move!

    Cpt.R-Sure you can right Private?

    Pvt.A-Yes...Sir... while in obvious pain

    Cpt.R-Good!

    J-This is bull! He needs help!

    Cpt.R-You two are the medics.

    S-Just carry him, when we stop for the night you guys can tend to him.

    A-Fine...

    The group marches on,soon the day turns to night and they seek shelter

    J-We need to rest.

    Cpt.R-Agreed,that apartment building looks good,lets get up the fire escape.

    The group climbs up and breaks into a window

    Once inside the squad realizes there are people in the apartment, Rolands first words might spark a fight,secure control, or something else

    (Choice)

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