Backstory: All that is know is that after the accidents at the pizzeria occurred he was hired to watch B0BC4T. For some odd reason he stays there after an attack on his life. He works from 12 to 6 and uses doors, lights, and a camera to survive.
Name: He is called "The Lone Wolf" by the locals
Age: Unknown
Race: Ain
Occupation: Mercenary
Homeworld: Serenity ( Assumed )
… more Personality: Monotone voice, aggressive when threatened, loyal to those who are friendly with him
Backstory: Who built him and where he came from is unknown, but he appears to be old and had been in a war at some point due to bullet holes on him and a large amount of wires hanging out of him.
Name: Mike Schmitt
Age: Probably in his 20's
Race:Human
Occupation: Replacement Night Guard
Homeworld: Serenity
Personality: … moreUnknown
Backstory: All that is know is that after the accidents at the pizzeria occurred he was hired to watch B0BC4T. For some odd reason he stays there after an attack on his life. He works from 12 to 6 and uses doors, lights, and a camera to survive.
A senate meeting is adjourned and the Areninan Senator Urinx for the Colony Federation of Hollay Nova 9 is packing his bags and talking to his Ain bodyguard Vetx.
Urinx- Damn shame about that vote.
Vetx- Yes it was Senator.
Urinx- Humans did win the vote though, hope they enjoy the shipping lanes.
Vetx- You're not sore are you?
Urinx- No, We can all colonize there but Humans get to first.
The two walk into the hallway of the Grand Senate building. The floors are covered by a blue velvet carpet. The two walk down the hallway.
Urinx- All I'm saying is that we need to be careful around that sector, the Humans should take care of any pirate threats and after that we can make a request for colonization.
Vetx- That is a smart move but shouldn't we try for the colonization of a different planet?
Urinx- Once you find one, tell me. Those shipping lanes were very nice.
The lights suddenly go out in the hallway, there are gunshots heard from down the hall and then 2 minutes after them the lights come on. Vetx had entered protection mode and had a pistol out. He sees no threat and puts it away. The two then run down the hallway to see the dead Human Senator of the colony sector Hollay Nova 12, the newest Human colonized sector. Along side the dead Human Senator was his dead wife and damaged Ain bodyguard.
You write amazingly. Only problem was run on sentences. That's rare, and good to have only one problem. Perfect aside from run on sentences (there are only two).
Prologue
Senate Building- 7:36 PM
A senate meeting is adjourned and the Areninan Senator Urinx for the Colony Federation of Hollay Nov… morea 9 is packing his bags and talking to his Ain bodyguard Vetx.
Urinx- Damn shame about that vote.
Vetx- Yes it was Senator.
Urinx- Humans did win the vote though, hope they enjoy the shipping lanes.
Vetx- You're not sore are you?
Urinx- No, We can all colonize there but Humans get to first.
The two walk into the hallway of the Grand Senate building. The floors are covered by a blue velvet carpet. The two walk down the hallway.
Urinx- All I'm saying is that we need to be careful around that sector, the Humans should take care of any pirate threats and after that we can make a request for colonization.
Vetx- That is a smart move but shouldn't we try for the colonization of a different planet?
Urinx- Once you find one, tell me. Those shipping lanes were very nice.
The lights sud… [view original content]
You write amazingly. Only problem was run on sentences. That's rare, and good to have only one problem. Perfect aside from run on sentences (there are only two).
I guess it's a good time to reveal Episode names, Here they are:
Episode 1- Murder in the Senate
Episode 2- The Slums
Episode 3- Aritu'x
Episode 4- Walk with me
Episode 5- Star Killer
Children's party place entertainer
he gathered dust for a few years until a children's party place bought him as a children's enterta… moreiner and as the pizzeria's night guard. His endoskeleton was deemed to scary for children so they put a bobcat outfit over him. Due to him being built for war he has caused some "accidents" at the pizzeria every now and then.
Not...Doing...That.
Well he said this:
But 8 years later they were freed by outside forces including Eseos, Trine, and Arenians
In the Great Freed… moreom War, the Humans were the good guys and the Trine were the bad guys. This is a big problem, in no reason would Humans capture the Eseos unless they were pirates or mercs. The Trine would NOT help get them back.
He then was taken prisoner by them as revenge for their species being enslaved by the Trine
There would be no reason for Humans to capture him because of the Trine since Eseos were on the Humans side.
his parents were killed in the Great Freedom War by humans when he was 8 years old.
Again, no reason for Humans to kill them.
...Therefore I will need to change it so Trine captured him and did all these things and that only Areninans and Eseos rescued him. He would then have a grudge against both Humans (Since he was captured fighting for them and his parents were ki… [view original content]
A man lays on a bed in a beat up apartment. The blinds are closed with just the faintest purple neon light slipping through into the dark room. A green flashing light is emitting from the night stand next to the man. The room is in the worst shape, clothes lying all about, bottles on Niterin, the caffeinated beverage of the future, thrown all about. The man rolls over on the bed letting out a loud breath. He turns over to see a picture sitting on the night stand across from his side of the bed. The picture has a beautiful woman in it, rose tinted glasses with long flowing brown hair, and green eyes. He throws himself so he lays up at the ceiling and then he notices the green light. He puts his hands on his face to rub it. He then reaches over to see the message.
Commissioner- Meet at the station soon, there's been a murder.- 8:45 PM
James- Ugh...Another day...Another way to die.
James (The man) rolls on out of his bed. He slowly walks over to his closet where he throws on a black jacket and then throws on some black pants. He puts on the Serenity badge of Federal Investigation and walks out of his room, keys and gun in check.
MitS 1-1
Apartment Building- 9:01 PM
A man lays on a bed in a beat up apartment. The blinds are closed with just the faintest purple n… moreeon light slipping through into the dark room. A green flashing light is emitting from the night stand next to the man. The room is in the worst shape, clothes lying all about, bottles on Niterin, the caffeinated beverage of the future, thrown all about. The man rolls over on the bed letting out a loud breath. He turns over to see a picture sitting on the night stand across from his side of the bed. The picture has a beautiful woman in it, rose tinted glasses with long flowing brown hair, and green eyes. He throws himself so he lays up at the ceiling and then he notices the green light. He puts his hands on his face to rub it. He then reaches over to see the message.
Commissioner- Meet at the station soon, there's been a murder.- 8:45 PM
James- Ugh...Another day...Another way to die.
James (The m… [view original content]
Name: Yirko Morcor (real lastname) Manson (human lastname)
Age: 12
Race: Trine
Occupation: Student
Homeworld: A Ship
Personality: Nervous , Smart , Shy , Competitive , Sad
Backstory: His mother , who was kinda crazy , locked him a ship because she thought that was the only way to have him forever with her. But one day the plane crushed in Serenity and her mother died. He lived 3 months in the streets when a human family adopted him.
Sorry about this but I found that I couldn't connect to this story that good like I couldn't with Life. However this story will be replaced with a different story which you will get more details on soon.
...This story is cancelled.
Sorry about this but I found that I couldn't connect to this story that good like I couldn't with Life. Howev… moreer this story will be replaced with a different story which you will get more details on soon.
Until then enjoy VLFR and DW.
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Name: Mike Schmitt
Age: Probably in his 20's
Race:Human
Occupation: Replacement Night Guard
Homeworld: Serenity
Personality: Unknown
Backstory: All that is know is that after the accidents at the pizzeria occurred he was hired to watch B0BC4T. For some odd reason he stays there after an attack on his life. He works from 12 to 6 and uses doors, lights, and a camera to survive.
No.
Do the Ain look like Terminators or the androids from Aliens?
Prologue
Senate Building- 7:36 PM
A senate meeting is adjourned and the Areninan Senator Urinx for the Colony Federation of Hollay Nova 9 is packing his bags and talking to his Ain bodyguard Vetx.
Urinx- Damn shame about that vote.
Vetx- Yes it was Senator.
Urinx- Humans did win the vote though, hope they enjoy the shipping lanes.
Vetx- You're not sore are you?
Urinx- No, We can all colonize there but Humans get to first.
The two walk into the hallway of the Grand Senate building. The floors are covered by a blue velvet carpet. The two walk down the hallway.
Urinx- All I'm saying is that we need to be careful around that sector, the Humans should take care of any pirate threats and after that we can make a request for colonization.
Vetx- That is a smart move but shouldn't we try for the colonization of a different planet?
Urinx- Once you find one, tell me. Those shipping lanes were very nice.
The lights suddenly go out in the hallway, there are gunshots heard from down the hall and then 2 minutes after them the lights come on. Vetx had entered protection mode and had a pistol out. He sees no threat and puts it away. The two then run down the hallway to see the dead Human Senator of the colony sector Hollay Nova 12, the newest Human colonized sector. Along side the dead Human Senator was his dead wife and damaged Ain bodyguard.
Urinx- Hurry! Call someone!
End of Prologue
Kind of...Terminator Androids. They are metallic and don't try to hide it but they are completely covered in metal.
:P
It was a joke
You write amazingly. Only problem was run on sentences. That's rare, and good to have only one problem. Perfect aside from run on sentences (there are only two).
Well, I feel great.
Apologies, it might happen a few times.
I guess it's a good time to reveal Episode names, Here they are:
Episode 1- Murder in the Senate
Episode 2- The Slums
Episode 3- Aritu'x
Episode 4- Walk with me
Episode 5- Star Killer
Sounds Cool Dramatic Music starts Playing
Quick!
I want to predict what each episode will be about!
I've changed him.
Alright, I like this one.
Ok, I guess that works.
I hope it does. XD
Good character after the small changes.
Did you start writing the story yet?
The prologue is out right now, I already have Episode 1 planned out and there might be one or two parts out today.
MitS 1-1
Apartment Building- 9:01 PM
A man lays on a bed in a beat up apartment. The blinds are closed with just the faintest purple neon light slipping through into the dark room. A green flashing light is emitting from the night stand next to the man. The room is in the worst shape, clothes lying all about, bottles on Niterin, the caffeinated beverage of the future, thrown all about. The man rolls over on the bed letting out a loud breath. He turns over to see a picture sitting on the night stand across from his side of the bed. The picture has a beautiful woman in it, rose tinted glasses with long flowing brown hair, and green eyes. He throws himself so he lays up at the ceiling and then he notices the green light. He puts his hands on his face to rub it. He then reaches over to see the message.
Commissioner- Meet at the station soon, there's been a murder.- 8:45 PM
James- Ugh...Another day...Another way to die.
James (The man) rolls on out of his bed. He slowly walks over to his closet where he throws on a black jacket and then throws on some black pants. He puts on the Serenity badge of Federal Investigation and walks out of his room, keys and gun in check.
End of Chapter
Hell. Yes. Golden.
Thanks, I plan to have one more part out tonight with the first choice.
I'm doing a Q&A.
What race is the killer ?
Nice try, you're not getting that out of me.
What sexual preference does the killer have?
Bi-sexual.
That'll be impossible to guess.
Just kidding.
Interesting......
Name: Yirko Morcor (real lastname) Manson (human lastname)
Age: 12
Race: Trine
Occupation: Student
Homeworld: A Ship
Personality: Nervous , Smart , Shy , Competitive , Sad
Backstory: His mother , who was kinda crazy , locked him a ship because she thought that was the only way to have him forever with her. But one day the plane crushed in Serenity and her mother died. He lived 3 months in the streets when a human family adopted him.
Sorry, because GoT is coming out tomorrow, this will be postponed a while.
Sorry for the long wait but this will keep going soon.
My character was accepted or not?
Of course.
...This story is cancelled.
Sorry about this but I found that I couldn't connect to this story that good like I couldn't with Life. However this story will be replaced with a different story which you will get more details on soon.
Until then enjoy VLFR and DW.
DW (Dead World)
Yes... :P
Oops.
When it´s going to return?
Noos...
Noos Noos? or Noos ?
Noos