Wow, all sorts of emotions with this one. The bonding moment of Lyra and Nick were very good. The argument with Nick and Mary was good, it felt like an argument that really could happen between two parents that were killers that want their kids to not be them (kind of reminds me of Dexter) Very good character development with Lyra when she realized she didn't have to become a killer but showed that acknowledgement that it was easy to do. It's good to see Mary having a nicer non psychopathic mindset too XD the final scene was especially interesting to me because how deaths scythe worked, I do not like Galen though he took the girl! one thing that I really like is the detail of everything you put in the story (which I should do more of) all in all this was really good, I've never played bioshock infinite because I wasn't a huge fan of the series but I heard that one was really good.
I finally wrote more for this story; I'm not entirely satisfied with this chapter but I can't figure out why...
Also I've decided to name… more this story Devils and Demons Plz Enjoy!! XD
Chapter 2 - The Cruelty of Siblings
The walk back to the house was pleasant enough; the woods were nice at this time of day and the breeze was calm and inviting. Nick wasn’t showing any signs of faltering as he carried the heavy deer carcass on his shoulder, an advantage of being a Harbinger was how limitless their stamina was. They could run or fight for days on end without rest and never falter once in their performance.
Lyra knew a lot about her parents, but there were some questions plaguing her thoughts that she had refrained from asking in case she offended them. Lyra looked up to Nick and spoke cautiously “What’s it like to kill someone?”
Nick looked down at his daughter in surprise, she had never expressed an interest in the concept of deat… [view original content]
Wow, all sorts of emotions with this one. The bonding moment of Lyra and Nick were very good. The argument with Nick and Mary was good, it f… moreelt like an argument that really could happen between two parents that were killers that want their kids to not be them (kind of reminds me of Dexter) Very good character development with Lyra when she realized she didn't have to become a killer but showed that acknowledgement that it was easy to do. It's good to see Mary having a nicer non psychopathic mindset too XD the final scene was especially interesting to me because how deaths scythe worked, I do not like Galen though he took the girl! one thing that I really like is the detail of everything you put in the story (which I should do more of) all in all this was really good, I've never played bioshock infinite because I wasn't a huge fan of the series but I heard that one was really good.
I need to finish Dexter you just reminded me!!! I'm halfway through Season 2 atm
I based Death's scythe's appearance on the one from Dan… morete's Inferno (ok game, but the scythe was badass!)
I am a very descriptive writer cuz I want to paint a picture for the reader and leave as little as possible to the imagination.
I imagine Galen as looking like Mr Dark from the comics, except he's bigger and has reversed colours :P
Dante's Inferno was kinda like God of War with it's combat and stuff; it threw you into the 7 Circles of Hell quite quickly and without explanation though and overall the game was just 'meh' :P
Yeah, I don't think they're at all global. Appreciate the recommendation, but we don't have AT&T over here. Give it long enough and ther… moree'll probably be some company that decides it wants to control the world's internet connections and capabilities (if there isn't one already). :P
(for reasons that I could go into but won't in case you won't have seen what I'd be referencing, that comment totally reminds me of Doctor Who Cybermen xD)
"Jian-min?" Ava's voice came out to a soft whisper. She nearly buckled at the knees when she realized that she could have just possibly kill… moreed him.
Bellatrix huffed impatiently. "Seriously? You made us hide in here and it ended up being someone you knew?"
Ava shrugged, ignoring Bella's annoyed demeanor. She pulled Jian's body into the room - it was heavier than she expected - and propped him against a sac of rice grains.
"This puts a damper on the escape," Bella said, though it was a more humorous response than an annoyed on this time. She crouched on the opposite side that Ava sat by him and together they stared at his face.
"I hit him really hard..." Ava trailed off, feeling bad.
"Well, he's still breathing. The worst you seem to have done is maybe a minor concussion. I doubt-" Before Bellatrix could finish her sentence, Jian puked his last meal onto his lap. The girls jumps out of the way of the splatter, and were lucky not … [view original content]
I imagined Bella as a bubbly yet responsible (And interestingly beautiful, in her own unworldly way) character who seemed 'dumb' at first, but in reality was behind something much bigger and more important than originally thought. She's not the typical 'I only serve the one who summoned me' type of demon, and is particularly strong with leadership and battle tactics. She might even be able to do more than she even knows. The purple hair adds a tone of liveliness
Charles is powerful, but with out the necklace he will be easier to capture. He's not at full strength like in the past, and seeing that his eldest daughter Mary failed to take his spot, he decided he would fix it once and for all. He will certainly regret his decision to crawl back up from the depths of Hell.
Bella's determination and resourcefulness - and her clear skills at shanking people - are rather brilliant, and I particularly like her deep royal purple coloured hair.
Charles certainly has a rude awakening coming for him!
Hello everyone, just like with Tetra - I'll be going to one of my first college classes in about half an hour. So, I hope ya'll wish me luck, as I'll be driving during rush-hour again. I'm kind of excited to go back there, to see what my new teachers are like and whatnot. :P
Hello everyone, just like with Tetra - I'll be going to one of my first college classes in about half an hour. So, I hope ya'll wish me luck… more, as I'll be driving during rush-hour again. I'm kind of excited to go back there, to see what my new teachers are like and whatnot. :P
(starting my second semester as well XD)
Hello everyone, just like with Tetra - I'll be going to one of my first college classes in about half an hour. So, I hope ya'll wish me luck… more, as I'll be driving during rush-hour again. I'm kind of excited to go back there, to see what my new teachers are like and whatnot. :P
(starting my second semester as well XD)
Hello everyone, just like with Tetra - I'll be going to one of my first college classes in about half an hour. So, I hope ya'll wish me luck… more, as I'll be driving during rush-hour again. I'm kind of excited to go back there, to see what my new teachers are like and whatnot. :P
(starting my second semester as well XD)
Hey everyone just wanted to let you know that I will not be posting any new parts this week due to me starting classes to make sure I am on … moretop everything so I don't take another spill again haha! I will be checking here though to read while on my way to classes though so make sure you guys are still posting all your awesome stories!
Hello everyone, just like with Tetra - I'll be going to one of my first college classes in about half an hour. So, I hope ya'll wish me luck… more, as I'll be driving during rush-hour again. I'm kind of excited to go back there, to see what my new teachers are like and whatnot. :P
(starting my second semester as well XD)
Hello everyone, just like with Tetra - I'll be going to one of my first college classes in about half an hour. So, I hope ya'll wish me luck… more, as I'll be driving during rush-hour again. I'm kind of excited to go back there, to see what my new teachers are like and whatnot. :P
(starting my second semester as well XD)
Have fun, Dragon! Seeing as almost everyone else has emphasised safety, I'm tempted to just say let loose, throw caution to the wind and drive like a madman. Then, when you arrive at college, greet your new teachers with a boisterous 'hello!' and proceed to give them a decent pat on the back while extolling the virtues of wearing trousers instead of shorts in the winter. Trust me, it's a real ice breaker.
That, however, would no doubt be highly irresponsible of me to recommend, so instead I'll just say go get 'em, tiger.
Hello everyone, just like with Tetra - I'll be going to one of my first college classes in about half an hour. So, I hope ya'll wish me luck… more, as I'll be driving during rush-hour again. I'm kind of excited to go back there, to see what my new teachers are like and whatnot. :P
(starting my second semester as well XD)
I'm sure there is one, since there are tons of government conspiracies being plotted as we speak right now. XD
I know about the Cybermen from DW, but I thought the Daleks were the ones who said that particular quote?
Haha, how I wish I could just run through traffic lights and speed past cars without having to deal with major consequences like in Grand Theft Auto.
I don't think I'll be that friendly, but thanks for the suggestion and the positivity! XD I think I'll just be the good student who actually shows up nearly every day to class and does whatever work that gets thrown my way instead.
Have fun, Dragon! Seeing as almost everyone else has emphasised safety, I'm tempted to just say let loose, throw caution to the wind and dri… moreve like a madman. Then, when you arrive at college, greet your new teachers with a boisterous 'hello!' and proceed to give them a decent pat on the back while extolling the virtues of wearing trousers instead of shorts in the winter. Trust me, it's a real ice breaker.
That, however, would no doubt be highly irresponsible of me to recommend, so instead I'll just say go get 'em, tiger.
Overall, there's quite a good balance in this chapter between quiet domesticity at the beginning, and much disturbance at the end. Lyra weighing up both her parents' arguments is a real sign of how independent she is; while the prospect of future killing would be far better avoided, with family like Nick's she needs to be capable of defending herself to the death, if necessary. How Nick will get on without his true form should prove a test - and I imagine he'll be a bit grumpy about it. :P Interesting mix of accents going on - which I like - and you're clearly a Bioshock Infinite fan - which I also like.
I finally wrote more for this story; I'm not entirely satisfied with this chapter but I can't figure out why...
Also I've decided to name… more this story Devils and Demons Plz Enjoy!! XD
Chapter 2 - The Cruelty of Siblings
The walk back to the house was pleasant enough; the woods were nice at this time of day and the breeze was calm and inviting. Nick wasn’t showing any signs of faltering as he carried the heavy deer carcass on his shoulder, an advantage of being a Harbinger was how limitless their stamina was. They could run or fight for days on end without rest and never falter once in their performance.
Lyra knew a lot about her parents, but there were some questions plaguing her thoughts that she had refrained from asking in case she offended them. Lyra looked up to Nick and spoke cautiously “What’s it like to kill someone?”
Nick looked down at his daughter in surprise, she had never expressed an interest in the concept of deat… [view original content]
It would certainly make inter-city driving much more exciting! At least for you - everyone else's insurance would probably sky-rocket. :P
I apologize for how random this comment is, but your comment somehow made me think that GTA would be even more interesting if you could have jet-packs. How having jet-packs in GTA is anything but a good idea I cannot see.
Your teachers will no doubt appreciate that attitude, and you'll certainly get the best out of it all that way.
Haha, how I wish I could just run through traffic lights and speed past cars without having to deal with major consequences like in Grand Th… moreeft Auto.
I don't think I'll be that friendly, but thanks for the suggestion and the positivity! XD I think I'll just be the good student who actually shows up nearly every day to class and does whatever work that gets thrown my way instead.
They got the girls back, which is good, but Yony getting away does not bode well at all! Daren seems even more grateful for his family now though, which is nice.
Darens Bad Juju, Finale
This Fable, this Witch Doctor Yony proved to be a challenge for the fierce werecat Daren. The reanimated corpses … morethat Yony was sending after Daren had some kind of aura surrounding them while their eyes glowed the same color and finger nails became sharper. The first one tried to leap on of him but Daren manage to deliver a strong punch to its face sending flying back towards Yony feet. Ghahhhh
That piece of jewelry you are wearing young man, what is that..?" Yony asked in an uneasy way.
"You sound nervous Yony. You know, I thought my uncle was crazy when told to me to wear this thing with our encounter, and now I learned my lesson. And now you're about to learn a very hard lesson." Daren gripping the charm in his palm.
"That charm is bad juju?" Yony asking while shaking.
"Not quite, it is definitely part of African Witchcraft, but its good magic, something to protect its wielder from good magic, someth… [view original content]
Bioshock Infinite was the first one I played and I loved it! The DLC episodes for Elizabeth were interesting too... Bioshock 1 was also great; but Bioshock 2 was a waste of time imo :P
Nick has a very deep and gravelly voice with a thick Scottish accent; I was going to make Aleesha either Welsh or French, but a smooth Scottish accent sounded good for her in my head.
Taking away Nick's powers is so that he isn't overpowered throughout the story; I did the same thing with Bigby in Act 2 of my other story The Devil Among Us XD
Overall, there's quite a good balance in this chapter between quiet domesticity at the beginning, and much disturbance at the end. Lyra weig… morehing up both her parents' arguments is a real sign of how independent she is; while the prospect of future killing would be far better avoided, with family like Nick's she needs to be capable of defending herself to the death, if necessary. How Nick will get on without his true form should prove a test - and I imagine he'll be a bit grumpy about it. :P Interesting mix of accents going on - which I like - and you're clearly a Bioshock Infinite fan - which I also like.
It would certainly make inter-city driving much more exciting! At least for you - everyone else's insurance would probably sky-rocket. :P
… more I apologize for how random this comment is, but your comment somehow made me think that GTA would be even more interesting if you could have jet-packs. How having jet-packs in GTA is anything but a good idea I cannot see.
Your teachers will no doubt appreciate that attitude, and you'll certainly get the best out of it all that way.
The scene, with Georgie and Gren sipping beers against the backdrop of the city, discussing things that years ago would have seemed unimaginable, has to go down as one of my favourites.
"It's nice seeing your hair down, Emily."
Emily and Lyla sat across from each other; she was finishing the last few bits from her hamburg… moreer and nibbling on three fries. Lyla was rather consumed with the recent changes in both apperance and behavior in her daughter. She glanced down at her petruding belly and had to swallow back the emotions.
Lyla never pictured Emily a mother. The wishful thinking was there, just like any other mother. Lyla desperatly wanted Emily's 'phase' to vanish and turn its ugly head back to the depths of hell. It worried her, however, when the Witch's prophecy for her daughter was unfolding before her very eyes.:
"You will give birth to a daughter much like her father. The darkness that once consumed his soul will be passed on to her. She will become the next Georgie Porgie of Fabletown."
At first glance, Lyla did not see the wicked ways Georgie once possesed; Emily was a kind soul, outspoken and engergetic… [view original content]
Yeah, Infinite is a great game! I started with the first a few years ago and was hooked quickly. Bioshock 2 adds to Rapture, but it wasn't done by Irrational Games which is why they probably didn't push the story that links the first game with Infinite anywhere, though I still liked it.
Nick's Scottish accent makes sense with him being inspired by the Nukelavee; I'm guessing he'll get his powers back at the end, but maybe it won't be Nick who does! I don't know!
Bioshock Infinite was the first one I played and I loved it! The DLC episodes for Elizabeth were interesting too... Bioshock 1 was also grea… moret; but Bioshock 2 was a waste of time imo :P
Nick has a very deep and gravelly voice with a thick Scottish accent; I was going to make Aleesha either Welsh or French, but a smooth Scottish accent sounded good for her in my head.
Taking away Nick's powers is so that he isn't overpowered throughout the story; I did the same thing with Bigby in Act 2 of my other story The Devil Among Us XD
I wonder how they'll do a Bioshock 4? Infinite brought the story full circle...
Nick getting his powers back will be like a hero in a video game :P
He has some additional powers thanks to being Death's creation, Death himself will be appearing next chapter as well, and he is pissed!!!
Also I haven't told pudding_pie yet, but Lyla Smith will be in the next chapter as well and... well she... let's just hope Nick doesn't do anything too extreme to her when they fight
Yeah, Infinite is a great game! I started with the first a few years ago and was hooked quickly. Bioshock 2 adds to Rapture, but it wasn't d… moreone by Irrational Games which is why they probably didn't push the story that links the first game with Infinite anywhere, though I still liked it.
Nick's Scottish accent makes sense with him being inspired by the Nukelavee; I'm guessing he'll get his powers back at the end, but maybe it won't be Nick who does! I don't know!
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I do get a little upset sometimes that most of my 6th Form friends have either moved away or have gone to University...
But they all come back eventually :P
Wow, all sorts of emotions with this one. The bonding moment of Lyra and Nick were very good. The argument with Nick and Mary was good, it felt like an argument that really could happen between two parents that were killers that want their kids to not be them (kind of reminds me of Dexter) Very good character development with Lyra when she realized she didn't have to become a killer but showed that acknowledgement that it was easy to do. It's good to see Mary having a nicer non psychopathic mindset too XD the final scene was especially interesting to me because how deaths scythe worked, I do not like Galen though he took the girl! one thing that I really like is the detail of everything you put in the story (which I should do more of) all in all this was really good, I've never played bioshock infinite because I wasn't a huge fan of the series but I heard that one was really good.
I need to finish Dexter you just reminded me!!! I'm halfway through Season 2 atm
I based Death's scythe's appearance on the one from Dante's Inferno (ok game, but the scythe was badass!)
I am a very descriptive writer cuz I want to paint a picture for the reader and leave as little as possible to the imagination.
I imagine Galen as looking like Mr Dark from the comics, except he's bigger and has reversed colours :P
It's very good! Haven't played that one either XD I wish I was that way. Ah okay.
Dante's Inferno was kinda like God of War with it's combat and stuff; it threw you into the 7 Circles of Hell quite quickly and without explanation though and overall the game was just 'meh' :P
I'm sure there is one, since there are tons of government conspiracies being plotted as we speak right now. XD
I know about the Cybermen from DW, but I thought the Daleks were the ones who said that particular quote?
Sweet! (although college has its way of tricking people into thinking it might be easy) XD
Yeah lol that happened to me XD
Bella confirmed to deliver a royal butt-whoopin' to Charles - along with the others, of course.
Same here, believe it or not. XP
Dang, it's getting everybody!
I imagined Bella as a bubbly yet responsible (And interestingly beautiful, in her own unworldly way) character who seemed 'dumb' at first, but in reality was behind something much bigger and more important than originally thought. She's not the typical 'I only serve the one who summoned me' type of demon, and is particularly strong with leadership and battle tactics. She might even be able to do more than she even knows. The purple hair adds a tone of liveliness
Charles is powerful, but with out the necklace he will be easier to capture. He's not at full strength like in the past, and seeing that his eldest daughter Mary failed to take his spot, he decided he would fix it once and for all. He will certainly regret his decision to crawl back up from the depths of Hell.
Oh certainly
She will at least do some epic sudden decapitations on surrounding demons to let the others get to Charles with out a problem.
Hello everyone, just like with Tetra - I'll be going to one of my first college classes in about half an hour. So, I hope ya'll wish me luck, as I'll be driving during rush-hour again. I'm kind of excited to go back there, to see what my new teachers are like and whatnot. :P
(starting my second semester as well XD)
Good luck Dragon! XD
Why, tanks a lot!
LOL I just got back from mine like thirty minutes ago, too. XD Good ol' College. :P Have fun and watch out for that rush-hour traffic. Good luck.
Goodluck Dragon! I recently started my second year at my university.
Good luck! College can be fun and hard, but as long as you stick to it and stay confident, you can do great things!
Good luck man! It must be exciting, I'm sure. Just be careful, and make smart choices ^-^
Thanks EMMY!
I'll keep those words in mind!
That's pretty bizarre, seems that fate has intertwined our destinies somehow. XD
And thank you, moderately modest pie!
That's cool, Stone! Good luck to you as well!
Thanks Emz! And going off the end of your comment, you sounded like an inspirational speaker for a second!
Emmy P. for 2015's inspirational speaking sessions, obviously. :P
Good luck Dragon! Let's both do our best and make the most of it!
Hell yeah! Words of wisdom right there, my friend!
Haha! I have my moments.
Have fun, Dragon! Seeing as almost everyone else has emphasised safety, I'm tempted to just say let loose, throw caution to the wind and drive like a madman. Then, when you arrive at college, greet your new teachers with a boisterous 'hello!' and proceed to give them a decent pat on the back while extolling the virtues of wearing trousers instead of shorts in the winter. Trust me, it's a real ice breaker.
That, however, would no doubt be highly irresponsible of me to recommend, so instead I'll just say go get 'em, tiger.
It was more that it reminded me of an episode with the Cybermen in, but it does sound more of a Dalek thing!
I gotcha, I gotcha!
Haha, how I wish I could just run through traffic lights and speed past cars without having to deal with major consequences like in Grand Theft Auto.
I don't think I'll be that friendly, but thanks for the suggestion and the positivity! XD I think I'll just be the good student who actually shows up nearly every day to class and does whatever work that gets thrown my way instead.
Overall, there's quite a good balance in this chapter between quiet domesticity at the beginning, and much disturbance at the end. Lyra weighing up both her parents' arguments is a real sign of how independent she is; while the prospect of future killing would be far better avoided, with family like Nick's she needs to be capable of defending herself to the death, if necessary. How Nick will get on without his true form should prove a test - and I imagine he'll be a bit grumpy about it. :P Interesting mix of accents going on - which I like - and you're clearly a Bioshock Infinite fan - which I also like.
It would certainly make inter-city driving much more exciting! At least for you - everyone else's insurance would probably sky-rocket. :P
I apologize for how random this comment is, but your comment somehow made me think that GTA would be even more interesting if you could have jet-packs. How having jet-packs in GTA is anything but a good idea I cannot see.
Your teachers will no doubt appreciate that attitude, and you'll certainly get the best out of it all that way.
They got the girls back, which is good, but Yony getting away does not bode well at all! Daren seems even more grateful for his family now though, which is nice.
Bioshock Infinite was the first one I played and I loved it! The DLC episodes for Elizabeth were interesting too... Bioshock 1 was also great; but Bioshock 2 was a waste of time imo :P
Nick has a very deep and gravelly voice with a thick Scottish accent; I was going to make Aleesha either Welsh or French, but a smooth Scottish accent sounded good for her in my head.
Taking away Nick's powers is so that he isn't overpowered throughout the story; I did the same thing with Bigby in Act 2 of my other story The Devil Among Us XD
GTA San Andreas had a jetpack...
Fun times XD
The scene, with Georgie and Gren sipping beers against the backdrop of the city, discussing things that years ago would have seemed unimaginable, has to go down as one of my favourites.
Yeah, Infinite is a great game! I started with the first a few years ago and was hooked quickly. Bioshock 2 adds to Rapture, but it wasn't done by Irrational Games which is why they probably didn't push the story that links the first game with Infinite anywhere, though I still liked it.
Nick's Scottish accent makes sense with him being inspired by the Nukelavee; I'm guessing he'll get his powers back at the end, but maybe it won't be Nick who does! I don't know!
Ah, I've never played it. All the more reason that there should be one in GTA V, though! XD
I wonder how they'll do a Bioshock 4? Infinite brought the story full circle...
Nick getting his powers back will be like a hero in a video game :P
He has some additional powers thanks to being Death's creation, Death himself will be appearing next chapter as well, and he is pissed!!!
Also I haven't told pudding_pie yet, but Lyla Smith will be in the next chapter as well and... well she... let's just hope Nick doesn't do anything too extreme to her when they fight