Did she? I remember her driving off with the car after beating Kenny up. That's what I remember? I think she might have got shot but she shot Kenny and stole the car.
But wasn't Lilly killed/shot earlier in the season? Man, I think we're kind of losing track of the story here, I might consider creating a new thread, or some kind of blog to post the entire story, or at least a summary.
You're right. Honestly, the only reason I made that crash happen was because I felt the story was kind of stuck in that horde.
I would also like to hear some peoples' thoughts on an idea I've had for a little while now. I would like to make a new thread in which the story gets carried on, but under a better name and with a brief summary in the first post, seeing as the OP doesn't seem to be active in this thread anymore.
If you think this is a good idea, please reply to my comment.
Hi guys. As you can imagine I've been busy with exams, then holidays and of course the S2 hype. I used to be a busy story contributor with the… more first 15 pages of this thread. I am happy to see that this thread is still alive and people are bursting with ideas. But please - I gotta repeat at this point what was written before:
1. don't make too many twists. Big twists should be made seldom and if there is a twist it has to be a logically written and meaningful one
2. stay true to the storyline so far - make sure you don't mix up characters, bring up people who are dead and so on
3. the emphasis has to be on character developement and good dialogues rather than lots of puzzling action scenes which cause frustration and confusion so people leave this game
4. don't bring up to many new characters, if it is not necessary because of the reasons listed in the next point
5. we love our characters, but sometimes even a beloved character has … [view original content]
Did she? I remember her driving off with the car after beating Kenny up. That's what I remember? I think she might have got shot but she shot Kenny and stole the car.
I think it's best if Clementine's group stays on the farm for a while so we can cross the gap for 400 days, so basically this episode takes place around the time the real season 2 does, giving us a lot of room to work with.
Hi guys. As you can imagine I've been busy with exams, then holidays and of course the S2 hype. I used to be a busy story contributor with the… more first 15 pages of this thread. I am happy to see that this thread is still alive and people are bursting with ideas. But please - I gotta repeat at this point what was written before:
1. don't make too many twists. Big twists should be made seldom and if there is a twist it has to be a logically written and meaningful one
2. stay true to the storyline so far - make sure you don't mix up characters, bring up people who are dead and so on
3. the emphasis has to be on character developement and good dialogues rather than lots of puzzling action scenes which cause frustration and confusion so people leave this game
4. don't bring up to many new characters, if it is not necessary because of the reasons listed in the next point
5. we love our characters, but sometimes even a beloved character has … [view original content]
... Everyone starts running to the barn as Omid tries to pull Christa and Clementine each on in an arm. Chrita yells "Leave me. I'll just slow… more you down", but Clementine quickly lets go off Omid's hand and says "I can go alone, bring Christa". Omid picks Christa up and Clem kills two walkers before the three get to the jeep...
I personally don't think it is a good idea to skip 24 months so our story takes place in the same time zone as S2 (approx. 6-8 months of christa's pregnancy + 18 months after O***'s death). This story isn't canon to S2 anyway and skipping two years isn't useful to the story, just my thoughts.
I think it's best if Clementine's group stays on the farm for a while so we can cross the gap for 400 days, so basically this episode takes place around the time the real season 2 does, giving us a lot of room to work with.
True, I think the timeline we currently have is a little messed up, so looking at the official timeline this episode takes place around... 5-6 months into the apocalypse.
This is probably a good thing because we can take a look at what happened to Tavia before she was with the ''growing settlement up north.''. We could even incorporate Jeremy, Dave and Tavia as founders of that very settlement, which could have been created some time before 400 days.
I just hope we can get the story back on track again.
I personally don't think it is a good idea to skip 24 months so our story takes place in the same time zone as S2 (approx. 6-8 months of chris… moreta's pregnancy + 18 months after O***'s death). This story isn't canon to S2 anyway and skipping two years isn't useful to the story, just my thoughts.
Well, it's all up to you I suppose. Tavia could be good, Tavia could be bad. I honestly don't really like the farm clementine's group is going to, that post was a bit unclear to me :S.
Have I made it too hard on everyone to move on with the story? I could just write this story on my own and post it when it's done, but I really like the collaboration with all of you people.
I just have no idea where to go next with the story. Is Tavia bad? I don't know where it's going. I feel comfortable writing about the original group as I have some ideas, but I have no idea what to do for this new group of Tavia Dave and Jeremy.
I just have no idea where to go next with the story. Is Tavia bad? I don't know where it's going. I feel comfortable writing about the original group as I have some ideas, but I have no idea what to do for this new group of Tavia Dave and Jeremy.
True, I think the timeline we currently have is a little messed up, so looking at the official timeline this episode takes place around... 5-6… more months into the apocalypse.
This is probably a good thing because we can take a look at what happened to Tavia before she was with the ''growing settlement up north.''. We could even incorporate Jeremy, Dave and Tavia as founders of that very settlement, which could have been created some time before 400 days.
I just hope we can get the story back on track again.
I think this episode will be about 3-4 weeks long, starting about two weeks before Clementine's full recovery, leaving plenty of time for Kenny, Clementine and a few other people from the group to go up north.
Im going to try and figure out where we are using google maps. il send locations of places when i have them
Okay i cant find a barn like place for clem to hide so we have to assume that its somewhere near
Savannah National Wildlife Refuge
694 Beech Hill Lane
Hardeeville, SC 29927, United States
The group then met nate and when upwards towards Yamasse but found kenny and zombie doug just outside the town of
Ridgeland, SC, United States
The only retirement home that i could fine was in ridegland.
Ridgeland Nursing Center
1516 Grays Highway
Ridgeland, SC 29936, United States
The nearest cabin i could find is a bit far off. 20 minutes on foot
Lakeview Terrace
SC
United States
Here i have encounted a problem. there are no coffee shops near the cabin. i vote that the 2 jeeps appear the one has eddie in it is the ine clem gets into and the other one picks up kenny and charlie. the first jeep (Eddies) almost gets to the coffee shop but stops here
Yemassee, SC, United States Zahler St
The location of the shooter (When tyler was shot) is near here
Cherokee Plantation
5109 Combahee Road
Yemassee, SC 29945, United States
The location of "New Crawford" is a school. thats the only way i could explain the portables
Newville School
SC
United States
the Coffee shop is located here
Yemassee, SC, United States Town Clerk
101 Castle Hall Road
The church is located here
Victory Baptist Church
161 Maple Ridge Road
Walterboro, SC 29488, United States
The "Plane crash" scene occurs on this road
Sunrise Rd, Smoaks, SC, United States
The farm was hard to find. and i couldn't find any farms near the church. so i had to put it here: a far away place with a big patch of greenery
Old Santee Canal State Park
Moncks Corner, SC 29461
United States
Im going to try and figure out where we are using google maps. il send locations of places when i have them
Okay i cant find a barn like pl… moreace for clem to hide so we have to assume that its somewhere near
Savannah National Wildlife Refuge
694 Beech Hill Lane
Hardeeville, SC 29927, United States
The group then met nate and when upwards towards Yamasse but found kenny and zombie doug just outside the town of
Ridgeland, SC, United States
The only retirement home that i could fine was in ridegland.
Ridgeland Nursing Center
1516 Grays Highway
Ridgeland, SC 29936, United States
The nearest cabin i could find is a bit far off. 20 minutes on foot
Lakeview Terrace
SC
United States
Here i have encounted a problem. there are no coffee shops near the cabin. i vote that the 2 jeeps appear the one has eddie in it is the ine clem gets into and the other one picks up kenny and charlie. the first jeep (Eddies) almost gets to the … [view original content]
Jeremy slowly regained consciousness, although he could hardly tell the difference it was pitch black and he couldn't move. He felt that his lags and feet were bound with rope and there was a bag over his head. He never imagined when he was watching those hostage movies it would ever happen to him, then again he never expected zombie either. He felt like he was moving which meant he was in a car. For a long time nothing happened, he could here muffled taking coming from some direction but he couldn't tell which. After awhile the car came to a stop and he heard doors slam followed shortly by being manhandled out of what he guessed was the trunk. I've been doing a lot of guessing lately thanks to this fucking bag, or whatever covering my eyes. He thought. He was pushed down to the ground, then his bag was torn off. Jeremy looked up to see Dave and his large friend with bug shit eating grins on their face's. CONTINUE
Well, it's all up to you I suppose. Tavia could be good, Tavia could be bad. I honestly don't really like the farm clementine's group is going… more to, that post was a bit unclear to me :S.
Have I made it too hard on everyone to move on with the story? I could just write this story on my own and post it when it's done, but I really like the collaboration with all of you people.
Jeremy slowly regained consciousness, although he could hardly tell the difference it was pitch black and he couldn't move. He felt that his l… moreags and feet were bound with rope and there was a bag over his head. He never imagined when he was watching those hostage movies it would ever happen to him, then again he never expected zombie either. He felt like he was moving which meant he was in a car. For a long time nothing happened, he could here muffled taking coming from some direction but he couldn't tell which. After awhile the car came to a stop and he heard doors slam followed shortly by being manhandled out of what he guessed was the trunk. I've been doing a lot of guessing lately thanks to this fucking bag, or whatever covering my eyes. He thought. He was pushed down to the ground, then his bag was torn off. Jeremy looked up to see Dave and his large friend with bug shit eating grins on their face's. CONTINUE
Let's just say 12 weeks passed. It was late fall when Lee died and now, 3 months later it is winter and Clem's leg healed while we go on with Jeremy's and Dave's story
its good. nothing i want to improve on. so just to be clear we have skipped 16 months into the future? or are we 7 weeks after the accident (the estimated amount of time for a bone to heal)
"Dave!" Jeremy yelled, when all of the sudden he felt a sharp thing being sunk in his back. He screams as a syringe falls down and rolls to his feet. "That will do it." says Tavia, the well fed looking woman. Jeremy feels how he looses his strength - whatever it is they shot him: it is not good. As two muscled men lift him up and carry him towards a brickstone building Jeremy notices that Dave looks dizzy and unconscious - he sure has got the same toxin. Another woman and an older guy prop Dave up and bring him into the same building. Jeremy sneeks a last peak at the environment: it looks like a small village with large trucks and other stuff converted into a barrier around the small town.
Inside the building they pass a few people doing everyday life stuff: reading, chatting, laughing... there are even two men playing table tennis. Following Tavia they get to a heavy door in the basement. As she opens it using several keys the older guy suddenly says: "We are so lucky we found them. I am starving..." Then Tavia immediately turns around, making an evil face, and shoots him right into his leg - he screams in pain! "I've made myself very clear: we don't ever talk about it. We pretend we are eating wild animals. Even more we don't ever mention this infront of our prisoners. This was the last time you couldn't keep your mouth shut." While the girl as well as one of the muscled men grab the old man who is now panicking Tavia fetches out another syringe and pricks him into the neck - the man immediately faints. "Jesus.. We need to be mean with those" Tavia says pocketing the drug away. Jeremy cannot trust his eyes and tries to scream but it doesn't work because of the drug. As they enter the room he sees two guys and a woman tethered in chains crouching on the floor - they obviously got the same drug. As both jeremy and Dave get tethered to the wall by short chains Tavia speaks: "We gotta take care of Alfredo first - he is wounded anyway. This I call a blessing in disguise...".
The door slams and Jeremy can hear the steps disappearing. He slowly turns around to Dave, trying to communicate with him, but Dave seems to be completely unconscious. "Hey." A voice speaks. An afro-american man, skinny and bold, looks at him, continuing: "I know that you can't talk because of that hideous stuff they gave you but if you're able to hear me, I mean.. If you understand what I am saying just nod!" Jeremy slowly nods, feeling relieved that he is not alone. "I can imagine your'e wondering why you're here. Well, let's just say: we are fucked. They want to eat us! I mean seriously, not kiddin', these fuckers are hunting strange survivors and keep them alive so they can eat them! You can't eat rotten meat ya know. But for now I guess it's Alfredo's turn first..." The man smiles "I am Gus, btw. You'll tell me your name as soon as we get out of here..." Jeremy looks very puzzled - why can Gus talk?! "That fat lady gave me the wrong dosage this time - I am still weak but at least I can talk: this is our lucky day! Hey: This is our chance! our other fellas here are obviously out but we both can find a way outa heret! Let's do it! Let me think..." Jeremy looks very sad into Dave's direction. Even if there is any way out: he can't just leave his old fellow behind in this hell...
Edit: changed the name of the old guy so he cannot be mistaken anymore
Jeremy gradually started to be able to move again. Starting with his toes and eventually he could move his entire body again. His wrists were bound in chains, Tavia's thugs had stripped him and the others naked, Jeremy looked around the big empty room, it was dusty, dirty and Jeremy felt a cold chill all over his exposed body. During Jeremy's slow recovery, Gus was explaining everything he knew about the settlement they were in. He talked about the rough location, about Tavia and lastly he explained their cannibalistic nature.
''Like I said, I used to live in this small and cozy town. But after just two weeks the government started bombing the place in a desperate attempt to thin out the ''lurker''-population.'', Gus looked away for a few seconds, before continuing his story, ''Barely a month later Tavia came into this town with her group of misfits. One of them was a real' weirdo. After a week or two, the food-supply started slimming down and he kept talking about eating other people, and some of the more desperate actually--.''
Gus was interrupted by the loud noise of the heavy metal doors opening...
... when he turned his speech into an indefinable mumble, drooling. Jeremy downs his head and closes his eyes intuitionally, acting as if he was paralyzed by the drug. He hears the door being opened and a few steps coming closer. After a minute of silence Tavia begins to speak: "This is what I was talking about: we don't have enough of 'it' to keep them completely quiet. Wish I could knock him out, his gibberish pisses me off but at this point we can't waste more injections. Anyway, as I said: Me and 'him' are going to leave in an hour, scouting for drugs. We desperately need them to stay in this state - otherwise there'll be trouble - you know how it ended last time. I don't know when we'll return. It can take very long since we are not going to come back empty handed. You're in charge now, Ruth - don't dissapoint me. You know what happened to Alfredo..." "Of course: I'll not let you down." "Okay, sweety, Here's the rules: they get a dosage of 20mg twice a day - 8am and 8pm. 20mg, not more. You have to wash them every morning just like I showed you after they got their injection. That's the disgusting part but it's unavoidable - we gotta work hard for a warm meal. Make sure to move them and clean up the excrement. After their bath they get the drip so they stay fit, you did this several times, didn't you. Come to check for them at least every two hours. If one of them speaks properly, screams, moves fast or looks conscious: inject 5mg first and check the pulse. If necessary give another 5mg, not more. If one of them turns into a lurker you know what to do. Don't forget to close the doors. Gotta go now. Check the pulse of the sleeping persons - always make sure there are no dead people inside. And lastly: don't ever allow anyone to enter this room, you hear me? Also: tell everybody you need to get by on the fresh meat we got for the next 7 days. In case I won't be back in a week: the next one would be the bold black in the back." In this moment the woman in the corner wakes up in pain, screaming "Oh goood!!! No, no, no - don't do this! Please, Tavia.. Oh god, why meeee....!". Jeremy is scared but still keeps his eyes closed "You know what to do Ruth... Goodbye, sweety - Gotta go." Jeremy hears the sound of a kiss, then the door bangs. After a while the screaming stopped and the door banged another time.
A minute later Jeremy opens his eyes as Gus starts to speak: "Oh my god, mate... this truly is our lucky day. Look what our sweatheart Ruth has left behind for us. Hope she won't get fired by her mistress after this fauxpas... " Jeremy scans the room, finally noticing a syringe and an phial lying on the floor near the knocked out woman. "Can you see it? Let's see if I can reach it.." Gus stretches his body trying to reach the objects with his feet. As he can grab the syringe with his right foot he unintentionally kicks the phial which is rolling into Jeremy's direction.
Background info: At this point 12 weeks passed after the arrival of the original group at the farm - it's winter. The group contains: Clem, Charlie, Kenny, Jacob, Tyler, Pascucci, Eddie, Jessica, Miranda the pug and the two farmer girls, Emma and Eva. Clem's leg healed and Pascucci recovered from a circulatory collapse.
I suggest that in this episode the task is to switch between both sceneries: the farm group and the prisoners group, bringing both stories together in a logical way at the end of this episode. Lord Zascas idea for your inspiration: "...There has been at least one full scale walker attack on the farm. the farms are doing well but its taking its toll on the people. one night clem overhears kenny talking to the group about leaving and says no matter what that he is taking clem. Charlie and Pascucci come with him while the others (Jessica in perticular) disagrees with kenny. No matter what clem goes and that could segway into new people. and at the end of the season (or earlier) we could come back." Just an idea. Go on as you like
I'm still at Page 10, but i feel like Clementine is a little less mature than she actually should be (in my opinion). There's a little to many flashbacks and cries, and she should be fine with swears by now. Maybe this improves in the later Pages (once again, i'm still on Page 10), but i just wanted to note this :P. Yes, i know this is a game where we all write almost anything as long as it is possible, but i still just wanted to share my opinion .
I also think Clementine should play a more major role. Charlie is good for her as he encourages her in being selfconfident and I feel like Kenny is in her way as he has a decisive nature
I'm still at Page 10, but i feel like Clementine is a little less mature than she actually should be (in my opinion). There's a little to many… more flashbacks and cries, and she should be fine with swears by now. Maybe this improves in the later Pages (once again, i'm still on Page 10), but i just wanted to note this :P. Yes, i know this is a game where we all write almost anything as long as it is possible, but i still just wanted to share my opinion .
Well anyone can do whatever they want with Kenny, kill him, have him fuck off, who cares. I think we've built up enough emotional build up for some sort of bad thing to happen anyway. Maybe someone in the old group could have gotten bitten ? No the time jump is in the way of that.
I also think Clementine should play a more major role. Charlie is good for her as he encourages her in being selfconfident and I feel like Kenny is in her way as he has a decisive nature
Eva was crying uncontrollably, tears rolled down from her eyes and the sound of heavy breathing echoed through the barn.
''What... Why didn't you... Fuck...'', she looked up at Tyler, and then back down at Emma again, ''You're gonna be okay... You're gonna be alright...''
Eva examined the wounds inflicted by the horde of walkers they had just fought off. Emma was bleeding heavily and seemed to have lost consciousness. The wounds were fatal, and Eva knew Emma didn't have long to live.
''Eva, we have to make sure she doesn't turn.'', Clementine and the rest of the group had witnessed the sad scene for a while now, but Clementine finally decided to speak, ''If... you don't want to, I will.''.
Kenny remembered Larry, Duck, Ben and even the little boy in the attic, ''Believe me, it's better that way.''.
Eva seemed to have calmed down, in the tough and unforgiving world of the apocalypse she and Emma had learned far too soon about dealing with the loss of loved ones.
''It's just like with dad, isn't it?'', Eva asked to Emma's lifeless body, before turning to the group, ''I know we made a deal, Clem. But a little girl like you shouldn't have to do horrible stuff like this.''
Eva paused for ten long seconds, she grabbed the gun from Tyler's hands and said her final goodbyes. She put the barrel of the gun right between Emma's eyes.
''I'm so sorry.'', she closed her eyes, took a deep breath, put her shaking hand around the trigger and pulled it.
2 weeks after Emma's death
"Clem... shhh.. wake up and be quiet..." Clem opens her eyes. It's pitchblack dark. She turns her head to the right and sees soft lights shining through the door cracks. After a few seconds when her dizzyness disappeared she can sense voices. The grownups are argueing about something. "We have to be quiet.. come on" whispers Charlie. He slowly crawls to the door with Clem following him so they can eavesdrop:
"... and I always kept saying it's not safe here, but you wouldn't listen! Emma's death is enough proof that this place isn't Fort Knox. Anyway: I made myself clear - It's just a matter of time before it starts to snow. Until then I want to be somewhere cozier and safer." says Kenny. "You can't just go like this and leave us behind. We are a group and we can only survive if we work together." says Jacob. "I hear you, and this is why I kept helping you out with everything in the past two weeks: warehousing the food, building up fences, fixing holes in the roof... but now is the time to leave. Now or never." Kenny replies. "I'll go with you" decides Pascucci. The group looks shocked. "Good." says Jessica with a very angry glance in her eyes "Fine. You two can go. You've been behaving like outsiders anyway after that incident with the lady you were hiding in the church. I never made important decisions in this group and always let you men solve everything but this time you listen to me: The children stay! They are safe here: we got food, good company, no crazy people and something you can call a home. Kids need a home and a family, and I want my future baby to have kids around..." she says touching her small belly and then smiling at Eddie, who touches her cheek saying "Jess's right. We'll take good care of 'em". "What?! Hah - good one! Clementine and Charlie will both come with me and there is nothing you can ever do to change my mind... I know them waaay longer than you and both of them are like my own kids! I know how to be a good father! Get it into your thick head that they are not safe here. Your food rations maybe last a month or two. Besides, snow's coming and this house's like wooden shed... let there come 10 walkers - they run it over in a minute. End of discussion!" Eva shakes her head, then ties her red hair into a ponytail, then staring at Kenny saying "You are an idiot. This house has been a safe and warm place for 3 generations. Emma and I gave you shelter and food - and that's your way to say 'thank you'? Well, fuck you Kenny. You can go..." After half a minute of silence Tyler speaks: "You act as if the walkers are just lurking around this very farm. You know they're everywhere.. they are waiting for you behind every tree. Anyway: If you wanna leave, Kenny and Pas, you can go and we won't be in your way, but you gotta promise three things. First: The kids will decide. Of course I'll give you the benefit of trying to convince them... but they'll have the final word. Second: Miranda stays. Third: If you see any sign of trouble for us - you need to warn us. Here's a talkie." Kenny receives the talkie and Jacob becomes the main speaker: "No matter where you go: I wish we could stay in touch. If you ever return, we extend you a welcome, right?" The group looks down, nodding. Jacob goes on: "Good. We are going to talk to the kids in the morning. Just in case they really consent in accompanying you: we will give you one of the cars. You need to fix it, though, it has suffered from the plane crash and we never cared for this issue -" "..But.. it was so hard to find these badass jeeps and the batteries!" protests Eddie, immediately being steadied by Jacob's admonishing looks: "This is why I said in case the kids join them - they deserve a safe journey. Alright then: Good night, everybody."
"Have you heard this, Clem? What do you think about it?"
Edit: I am seriously thinking about archiving the story, I am going to be very busy eith other stuff in the next couple of days, though. Let's just hope the forum has a good backup system
I'm just taking a little break, I've posted a lot right here and in another Walking dead fanfic type of page a little too much for today.
I'll be sure to write tomorrow though!
Someone else could maybe write something this time? I would love to see some new writers appear.
Honestly, i feel quite so confused with some of the characters. Yes, i did go back and read twice but i'm still a little lost. I just wonder if someone could possibly just write a small bit about the current characters? Especially characters such as Jacob, Jessica, Eddie, etc.
I'd love to continue this awesome story, but i just don't wanna fuck it up and make one that's really out of character and just simply dumb.
Jacob: Jacob is a survival artist that is very good at hand to hand combat. he is sharp eyed and always stands by his word. he has medium brown hair and is tall
Jessica: Jessica has a shy but protective personality. She feels a strong bond between her and clementine and wont let anything happen to her. she has blond hair
Eddie: Eddie has a funny and witty personality. hes no omid though and when the time comes for it he can be serious. look up a photo of him and thats what he looks like but with longer hair (Due to time)
Honestly, i feel quite so confused with some of the characters. Yes, i did go back and read twice but i'm still a little lost. I just wonder i… moref someone could possibly just write a small bit about the current characters? Especially characters such as Jacob, Jessica, Eddie, etc.
I'd love to continue this awesome story, but i just don't wanna fuck it up and make one that's really out of character and just simply dumb.
Looking forward to the rest of this "tale"! .
@Vainamoinen heeeeelp...
Edit: I am seriously thinking about archiving the story, I am going to be very busy eith other stuff in the next couple of days, though. Let's just hope the forum has a good backup system
Jacob: Jacob is a survival artist that is very good at hand to hand combat. he is sharp eyed and always stands by his word. he has medium brow… moren hair and is tall
Jessica: Jessica has a shy but protective personality. She feels a strong bond between her and clementine and wont let anything happen to her. she has blond hair
Eddie: Eddie has a funny and witty personality. hes no omid though and when the time comes for it he can be serious. look up a photo of him and thats what he looks like but with longer hair (Due to time)
Hope i helped
Clementine walked to bed with charlie close behind. as they got into the bedrooms charlie took a turn to the right and went into the bathroom. she got into her small single bed and sat up. she picked up the book she had been reading for the last couple of weeks. it was called All the Green Year Clem didint quite understand it, but nevertheless she read on. charlie walked out of the bathroom.
"Im going" said charlie clementine almost dropped the book so she put her bookmark in it and sett it down on her bedside table
"Why?" said a slightly angered clem "This place is safe. we have food, shelter and capable people. what if you are out there and you need a doctor. Tyler is not coming. what if you need some one to check some berries to see if there poisonus. Jacob wont be there.
"We are capable clem" said charlie "Look at what just happened. emma DIED because of us, because of us intruding on there home. what if it was you next or jacob or tyler or jessica or someone we have known for longer. we would be shattered with the loss. more walkers are going to come to this farm YOU might be next. consider your options clementine. there could be a BETTER place out there" and with that charlie turned the lights off and hopped into bed
Jessica and Eddie are a couple, she dresses emo/scenester like
Charlie: he is twisted, a mature young boy (7yo) who's very attached to his rifle, also a good sense for grownups and their actions/behaviour towards kids. He likes Clementine as a new sister, wants to protect her but also to teach her in being selfconfident and brave. He can be serious as well as behaving like a typical kid. Charlie lost his mother and brothers and sisters to New Crawford
Pascucci: he is a skinny italian looking man, wears clothes with not matching colours (green and orange) ans is a friendly normal guy, who can be very brutal when the situation asks for it. He has become a fellow of Kenny's
Tyler: He is very muscular and tall, but rather quiet and shy fella. He is friendly and calm but can be proactive when needed. Tyler is very attentive. He is very devoted to Miranda the pug puppy. Also Tyler used to be a vet, so he has doctor skills
Eva: lost her friend Emma to the walkers. She offered shelter and food to our group on a farm her family possesed. She has red hair.
Jacob: Jacob is a survival artist that is very good at hand to hand combat. he is sharp eyed and always stands by his word. he has medium brow… moren hair and is tall
Jessica: Jessica has a shy but protective personality. She feels a strong bond between her and clementine and wont let anything happen to her. she has blond hair
Eddie: Eddie has a funny and witty personality. hes no omid though and when the time comes for it he can be serious. look up a photo of him and thats what he looks like but with longer hair (Due to time)
Hope i helped
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Did she? I remember her driving off with the car after beating Kenny up. That's what I remember? I think she might have got shot but she shot Kenny and stole the car.
You're right. Honestly, the only reason I made that crash happen was because I felt the story was kind of stuck in that horde.
I would also like to hear some peoples' thoughts on an idea I've had for a little while now. I would like to make a new thread in which the story gets carried on, but under a better name and with a brief summary in the first post, seeing as the OP doesn't seem to be active in this thread anymore.
If you think this is a good idea, please reply to my comment.
Thanks in advance!
Ah yes, I think you are right.
I think it's best if Clementine's group stays on the farm for a while so we can cross the gap for 400 days, so basically this episode takes place around the time the real season 2 does, giving us a lot of room to work with.
How do ya guys know this?
We don't, it's a fanfic.
k thanks
I personally don't think it is a good idea to skip 24 months so our story takes place in the same time zone as S2 (approx. 6-8 months of christa's pregnancy + 18 months after O***'s death). This story isn't canon to S2 anyway and skipping two years isn't useful to the story, just my thoughts.
True, I think the timeline we currently have is a little messed up, so looking at the official timeline this episode takes place around... 5-6 months into the apocalypse.
This is probably a good thing because we can take a look at what happened to Tavia before she was with the ''growing settlement up north.''. We could even incorporate Jeremy, Dave and Tavia as founders of that very settlement, which could have been created some time before 400 days.
I just hope we can get the story back on track again.
Well, it's all up to you I suppose. Tavia could be good, Tavia could be bad. I honestly don't really like the farm clementine's group is going to, that post was a bit unclear to me :S.
Have I made it too hard on everyone to move on with the story? I could just write this story on my own and post it when it's done, but I really like the collaboration with all of you people.
I just have no idea where to go next with the story. Is Tavia bad? I don't know where it's going. I feel comfortable writing about the original group as I have some ideas, but I have no idea what to do for this new group of Tavia Dave and Jeremy.
We have to skip at the minimum 7 weeks for clems leg to heal. going as far as 2 years is insane and then there and i agree with you.
I think this episode will be about 3-4 weeks long, starting about two weeks before Clementine's full recovery, leaving plenty of time for Kenny, Clementine and a few other people from the group to go up north.
Im going to try and figure out where we are using google maps. il send locations of places when i have them
Okay i cant find a barn like place for clem to hide so we have to assume that its somewhere near
Savannah National Wildlife Refuge
694 Beech Hill Lane
Hardeeville, SC 29927, United States
The group then met nate and when upwards towards Yamasse but found kenny and zombie doug just outside the town of
Ridgeland, SC, United States
The only retirement home that i could fine was in ridegland.
Ridgeland Nursing Center
1516 Grays Highway
Ridgeland, SC 29936, United States
The nearest cabin i could find is a bit far off. 20 minutes on foot
Lakeview Terrace
SC
United States
Here i have encounted a problem. there are no coffee shops near the cabin. i vote that the 2 jeeps appear the one has eddie in it is the ine clem gets into and the other one picks up kenny and charlie. the first jeep (Eddies) almost gets to the coffee shop but stops here
Yemassee, SC, United States Zahler St
The location of the shooter (When tyler was shot) is near here
Cherokee Plantation
5109 Combahee Road
Yemassee, SC 29945, United States
The location of "New Crawford" is a school. thats the only way i could explain the portables
Newville School
SC
United States
the Coffee shop is located here
Yemassee, SC, United States Town Clerk
101 Castle Hall Road
The church is located here
Victory Baptist Church
161 Maple Ridge Road
Walterboro, SC 29488, United States
The "Plane crash" scene occurs on this road
Sunrise Rd, Smoaks, SC, United States
The farm was hard to find. and i couldn't find any farms near the church. so i had to put it here: a far away place with a big patch of greenery
Old Santee Canal State Park
Moncks Corner, SC 29461
United States
Phew
Done so people can continue the story
Jeremy slowly regained consciousness, although he could hardly tell the difference it was pitch black and he couldn't move. He felt that his lags and feet were bound with rope and there was a bag over his head. He never imagined when he was watching those hostage movies it would ever happen to him, then again he never expected zombie either. He felt like he was moving which meant he was in a car. For a long time nothing happened, he could here muffled taking coming from some direction but he couldn't tell which. After awhile the car came to a stop and he heard doors slam followed shortly by being manhandled out of what he guessed was the trunk. I've been doing a lot of guessing lately thanks to this fucking bag, or whatever covering my eyes. He thought. He was pushed down to the ground, then his bag was torn off. Jeremy looked up to see Dave and his large friend with bug shit eating grins on their face's. CONTINUE
You can't just take the story.
Nice job, I wonder what's up with Dave! ; )
Let's just say 12 weeks passed. It was late fall when Lee died and now, 3 months later it is winter and Clem's leg healed while we go on with Jeremy's and Dave's story
"Dave!" Jeremy yelled, when all of the sudden he felt a sharp thing being sunk in his back. He screams as a syringe falls down and rolls to his feet. "That will do it." says Tavia, the well fed looking woman. Jeremy feels how he looses his strength - whatever it is they shot him: it is not good. As two muscled men lift him up and carry him towards a brickstone building Jeremy notices that Dave looks dizzy and unconscious - he sure has got the same toxin. Another woman and an older guy prop Dave up and bring him into the same building. Jeremy sneeks a last peak at the environment: it looks like a small village with large trucks and other stuff converted into a barrier around the small town.
Inside the building they pass a few people doing everyday life stuff: reading, chatting, laughing... there are even two men playing table tennis. Following Tavia they get to a heavy door in the basement. As she opens it using several keys the older guy suddenly says: "We are so lucky we found them. I am starving..." Then Tavia immediately turns around, making an evil face, and shoots him right into his leg - he screams in pain! "I've made myself very clear: we don't ever talk about it. We pretend we are eating wild animals. Even more we don't ever mention this infront of our prisoners. This was the last time you couldn't keep your mouth shut." While the girl as well as one of the muscled men grab the old man who is now panicking Tavia fetches out another syringe and pricks him into the neck - the man immediately faints. "Jesus.. We need to be mean with those" Tavia says pocketing the drug away. Jeremy cannot trust his eyes and tries to scream but it doesn't work because of the drug. As they enter the room he sees two guys and a woman tethered in chains crouching on the floor - they obviously got the same drug. As both jeremy and Dave get tethered to the wall by short chains Tavia speaks: "We gotta take care of Alfredo first - he is wounded anyway. This I call a blessing in disguise...".
The door slams and Jeremy can hear the steps disappearing. He slowly turns around to Dave, trying to communicate with him, but Dave seems to be completely unconscious. "Hey." A voice speaks. An afro-american man, skinny and bold, looks at him, continuing: "I know that you can't talk because of that hideous stuff they gave you but if you're able to hear me, I mean.. If you understand what I am saying just nod!" Jeremy slowly nods, feeling relieved that he is not alone. "I can imagine your'e wondering why you're here. Well, let's just say: we are fucked. They want to eat us! I mean seriously, not kiddin', these fuckers are hunting strange survivors and keep them alive so they can eat them! You can't eat rotten meat ya know. But for now I guess it's Alfredo's turn first..." The man smiles "I am Gus, btw. You'll tell me your name as soon as we get out of here..." Jeremy looks very puzzled - why can Gus talk?! "That fat lady gave me the wrong dosage this time - I am still weak but at least I can talk: this is our lucky day! Hey: This is our chance! our other fellas here are obviously out but we both can find a way outa heret! Let's do it! Let me think..." Jeremy looks very sad into Dave's direction. Even if there is any way out: he can't just leave his old fellow behind in this hell...
Edit: changed the name of the old guy so he cannot be mistaken anymore
Jeremy gradually started to be able to move again. Starting with his toes and eventually he could move his entire body again. His wrists were bound in chains, Tavia's thugs had stripped him and the others naked, Jeremy looked around the big empty room, it was dusty, dirty and Jeremy felt a cold chill all over his exposed body. During Jeremy's slow recovery, Gus was explaining everything he knew about the settlement they were in. He talked about the rough location, about Tavia and lastly he explained their cannibalistic nature.
''Like I said, I used to live in this small and cozy town. But after just two weeks the government started bombing the place in a desperate attempt to thin out the ''lurker''-population.'', Gus looked away for a few seconds, before continuing his story, ''Barely a month later Tavia came into this town with her group of misfits. One of them was a real' weirdo. After a week or two, the food-supply started slimming down and he kept talking about eating other people, and some of the more desperate actually--.''
Gus was interrupted by the loud noise of the heavy metal doors opening...
-CONTINUE FROM HERE-
... when he turned his speech into an indefinable mumble, drooling. Jeremy downs his head and closes his eyes intuitionally, acting as if he was paralyzed by the drug. He hears the door being opened and a few steps coming closer. After a minute of silence Tavia begins to speak: "This is what I was talking about: we don't have enough of 'it' to keep them completely quiet. Wish I could knock him out, his gibberish pisses me off but at this point we can't waste more injections. Anyway, as I said: Me and 'him' are going to leave in an hour, scouting for drugs. We desperately need them to stay in this state - otherwise there'll be trouble - you know how it ended last time. I don't know when we'll return. It can take very long since we are not going to come back empty handed. You're in charge now, Ruth - don't dissapoint me. You know what happened to Alfredo..." "Of course: I'll not let you down." "Okay, sweety, Here's the rules: they get a dosage of 20mg twice a day - 8am and 8pm. 20mg, not more. You have to wash them every morning just like I showed you after they got their injection. That's the disgusting part but it's unavoidable - we gotta work hard for a warm meal. Make sure to move them and clean up the excrement. After their bath they get the drip so they stay fit, you did this several times, didn't you. Come to check for them at least every two hours. If one of them speaks properly, screams, moves fast or looks conscious: inject 5mg first and check the pulse. If necessary give another 5mg, not more. If one of them turns into a lurker you know what to do. Don't forget to close the doors. Gotta go now. Check the pulse of the sleeping persons - always make sure there are no dead people inside. And lastly: don't ever allow anyone to enter this room, you hear me? Also: tell everybody you need to get by on the fresh meat we got for the next 7 days. In case I won't be back in a week: the next one would be the bold black in the back." In this moment the woman in the corner wakes up in pain, screaming "Oh goood!!! No, no, no - don't do this! Please, Tavia.. Oh god, why meeee....!". Jeremy is scared but still keeps his eyes closed "You know what to do Ruth... Goodbye, sweety - Gotta go." Jeremy hears the sound of a kiss, then the door bangs. After a while the screaming stopped and the door banged another time.
A minute later Jeremy opens his eyes as Gus starts to speak: "Oh my god, mate... this truly is our lucky day. Look what our sweatheart Ruth has left behind for us. Hope she won't get fired by her mistress after this fauxpas... " Jeremy scans the room, finally noticing a syringe and an phial lying on the floor near the knocked out woman. "Can you see it? Let's see if I can reach it.." Gus stretches his body trying to reach the objects with his feet. As he can grab the syringe with his right foot he unintentionally kicks the phial which is rolling into Jeremy's direction.
Background info: At this point 12 weeks passed after the arrival of the original group at the farm - it's winter. The group contains: Clem, Charlie, Kenny, Jacob, Tyler, Pascucci, Eddie, Jessica, Miranda the pug and the two farmer girls, Emma and Eva. Clem's leg healed and Pascucci recovered from a circulatory collapse.
I suggest that in this episode the task is to switch between both sceneries: the farm group and the prisoners group, bringing both stories together in a logical way at the end of this episode. Lord Zascas idea for your inspiration: "...There has been at least one full scale walker attack on the farm. the farms are doing well but its taking its toll on the people. one night clem overhears kenny talking to the group about leaving and says no matter what that he is taking clem. Charlie and Pascucci come with him while the others (Jessica in perticular) disagrees with kenny. No matter what clem goes and that could segway into new people. and at the end of the season (or earlier) we could come back." Just an idea. Go on as you like
Someone please go on with the story, I can't wait to see what happens next
I'm still at Page 10, but i feel like Clementine is a little less mature than she actually should be (in my opinion). There's a little to many flashbacks and cries, and she should be fine with swears by now. Maybe this improves in the later Pages (once again, i'm still on Page 10), but i just wanted to note this :P. Yes, i know this is a game where we all write almost anything as long as it is possible, but i still just wanted to share my opinion
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I also think Clementine should play a more major role. Charlie is good for her as he encourages her in being selfconfident and I feel like Kenny is in her way as he has a decisive nature
Mine, too. I like Charlie, Jacob and Eddie
Well anyone can do whatever they want with Kenny, kill him, have him fuck off, who cares. I think we've built up enough emotional build up for some sort of bad thing to happen anyway. Maybe someone in the old group could have gotten bitten ? No the time jump is in the way of that.
-SCENE SWAP-
-2 weeks earlier...-
''Oh my god, oh my god, oh my god...''
Eva was crying uncontrollably, tears rolled down from her eyes and the sound of heavy breathing echoed through the barn.
''What... Why didn't you... Fuck...'', she looked up at Tyler, and then back down at Emma again, ''You're gonna be okay... You're gonna be alright...''
Eva examined the wounds inflicted by the horde of walkers they had just fought off. Emma was bleeding heavily and seemed to have lost consciousness. The wounds were fatal, and Eva knew Emma didn't have long to live.
''Eva, we have to make sure she doesn't turn.'', Clementine and the rest of the group had witnessed the sad scene for a while now, but Clementine finally decided to speak, ''If... you don't want to, I will.''.
Kenny remembered Larry, Duck, Ben and even the little boy in the attic, ''Believe me, it's better that way.''.
Eva seemed to have calmed down, in the tough and unforgiving world of the apocalypse she and Emma had learned far too soon about dealing with the loss of loved ones.
''It's just like with dad, isn't it?'', Eva asked to Emma's lifeless body, before turning to the group, ''I know we made a deal, Clem. But a little girl like you shouldn't have to do horrible stuff like this.''
Eva paused for ten long seconds, she grabbed the gun from Tyler's hands and said her final goodbyes. She put the barrel of the gun right between Emma's eyes.
''I'm so sorry.'', she closed her eyes, took a deep breath, put her shaking hand around the trigger and pulled it.
Screen fades to black
-2 weeks later...-
-CONTINUE FROM HERE-
2 weeks after Emma's death
"Clem... shhh.. wake up and be quiet..." Clem opens her eyes. It's pitchblack dark. She turns her head to the right and sees soft lights shining through the door cracks. After a few seconds when her dizzyness disappeared she can sense voices. The grownups are argueing about something. "We have to be quiet.. come on" whispers Charlie. He slowly crawls to the door with Clem following him so they can eavesdrop:
"... and I always kept saying it's not safe here, but you wouldn't listen! Emma's death is enough proof that this place isn't Fort Knox. Anyway: I made myself clear - It's just a matter of time before it starts to snow. Until then I want to be somewhere cozier and safer." says Kenny. "You can't just go like this and leave us behind. We are a group and we can only survive if we work together." says Jacob. "I hear you, and this is why I kept helping you out with everything in the past two weeks: warehousing the food, building up fences, fixing holes in the roof... but now is the time to leave. Now or never." Kenny replies. "I'll go with you" decides Pascucci. The group looks shocked. "Good." says Jessica with a very angry glance in her eyes "Fine. You two can go. You've been behaving like outsiders anyway after that incident with the lady you were hiding in the church. I never made important decisions in this group and always let you men solve everything but this time you listen to me: The children stay! They are safe here: we got food, good company, no crazy people and something you can call a home. Kids need a home and a family, and I want my future baby to have kids around..." she says touching her small belly and then smiling at Eddie, who touches her cheek saying "Jess's right. We'll take good care of 'em". "What?! Hah - good one! Clementine and Charlie will both come with me and there is nothing you can ever do to change my mind... I know them waaay longer than you and both of them are like my own kids! I know how to be a good father! Get it into your thick head that they are not safe here. Your food rations maybe last a month or two. Besides, snow's coming and this house's like wooden shed... let there come 10 walkers - they run it over in a minute. End of discussion!" Eva shakes her head, then ties her red hair into a ponytail, then staring at Kenny saying "You are an idiot. This house has been a safe and warm place for 3 generations. Emma and I gave you shelter and food - and that's your way to say 'thank you'? Well, fuck you Kenny. You can go..." After half a minute of silence Tyler speaks: "You act as if the walkers are just lurking around this very farm. You know they're everywhere.. they are waiting for you behind every tree. Anyway: If you wanna leave, Kenny and Pas, you can go and we won't be in your way, but you gotta promise three things. First: The kids will decide. Of course I'll give you the benefit of trying to convince them... but they'll have the final word. Second: Miranda stays. Third: If you see any sign of trouble for us - you need to warn us. Here's a talkie." Kenny receives the talkie and Jacob becomes the main speaker: "No matter where you go: I wish we could stay in touch. If you ever return, we extend you a welcome, right?" The group looks down, nodding. Jacob goes on: "Good. We are going to talk to the kids in the morning. Just in case they really consent in accompanying you: we will give you one of the cars. You need to fix it, though, it has suffered from the plane crash and we never cared for this issue -" "..But.. it was so hard to find these badass jeeps and the batteries!" protests Eddie, immediately being steadied by Jacob's admonishing looks: "This is why I said in case the kids join them - they deserve a safe journey. Alright then: Good night, everybody."
"Have you heard this, Clem? What do you think about it?"
NOTE: edited it a little
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JUST A THOUGHT:
What if this thread gets deleted? Is there a backup? Maybe a moderator can clarify it
Oh god, that would be horrible...
@Vainamoinen heeeeelp...
Edit: I am seriously thinking about archiving the story, I am going to be very busy eith other stuff in the next couple of days, though. Let's just hope the forum has a good backup system
Someone please continue
I'm just taking a little break, I've posted a lot right here and in another Walking dead fanfic type of page a little too much for today.
I'll be sure to write tomorrow though!
Someone else could maybe write something this time? I would love to see some new writers appear.
Honestly, i feel quite so confused with some of the characters. Yes, i did go back and read twice but i'm still a little lost. I just wonder if someone could possibly just write a small bit about the current characters? Especially characters such as Jacob, Jessica, Eddie, etc.
I'd love to continue this awesome story, but i just don't wanna fuck it up and make one that's really out of character and just simply dumb.
Looking forward to the rest of this "tale"!
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Jacob: Jacob is a survival artist that is very good at hand to hand combat. he is sharp eyed and always stands by his word. he has medium brown hair and is tall
Jessica: Jessica has a shy but protective personality. She feels a strong bond between her and clementine and wont let anything happen to her. she has blond hair
Eddie: Eddie has a funny and witty personality. hes no omid though and when the time comes for it he can be serious. look up a photo of him and thats what he looks like but with longer hair (Due to time)
Hope i helped
i will put everything down in a crappy word document if you want. i will also record who write what. give me time to wake up and il do it
Thanks
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Clementine walked to bed with charlie close behind. as they got into the bedrooms charlie took a turn to the right and went into the bathroom. she got into her small single bed and sat up. she picked up the book she had been reading for the last couple of weeks. it was called All the Green Year Clem didint quite understand it, but nevertheless she read on. charlie walked out of the bathroom.
"Im going" said charlie clementine almost dropped the book so she put her bookmark in it and sett it down on her bedside table
"Why?" said a slightly angered clem "This place is safe. we have food, shelter and capable people. what if you are out there and you need a doctor. Tyler is not coming. what if you need some one to check some berries to see if there poisonus. Jacob wont be there.
"We are capable clem" said charlie "Look at what just happened. emma DIED because of us, because of us intruding on there home. what if it was you next or jacob or tyler or jessica or someone we have known for longer. we would be shattered with the loss. more walkers are going to come to this farm YOU might be next. consider your options clementine. there could be a BETTER place out there" and with that charlie turned the lights off and hopped into bed
Continue
Jessica and Eddie are a couple, she dresses emo/scenester like
Charlie: he is twisted, a mature young boy (7yo) who's very attached to his rifle, also a good sense for grownups and their actions/behaviour towards kids. He likes Clementine as a new sister, wants to protect her but also to teach her in being selfconfident and brave. He can be serious as well as behaving like a typical kid. Charlie lost his mother and brothers and sisters to New Crawford
Pascucci: he is a skinny italian looking man, wears clothes with not matching colours (green and orange) ans is a friendly normal guy, who can be very brutal when the situation asks for it. He has become a fellow of Kenny's
Tyler: He is very muscular and tall, but rather quiet and shy fella. He is friendly and calm but can be proactive when needed. Tyler is very attentive. He is very devoted to Miranda the pug puppy. Also Tyler used to be a vet, so he has doctor skills
Eva: lost her friend Emma to the walkers. She offered shelter and food to our group on a farm her family possesed. She has red hair.