I put things into a short chapter one if anyone want's the check it out. I'm working on editing the much longer chapter 2. https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10073109/1/The-Walking-Dead-Season-2-Episode-One-Adrenaline
Kenny was struggling. he knew he was alive and the thanked god for that, but moving around with one leg was harder than he thought. after going for a bit of a walk around the settlement kenny climbed back into his bed. he was amazed at the amount of supplies they had and the fact that they had excess beds. as he climbed into bed someone knocked on the door
"Come in" kenny yelled. Jack walked in the door. he walked in and sat down not saying a word
"What is it?" Kenny asked Jack looked a way before coming back to kenny
"There is things be we did not tell you" he says glumly "We have...eniemes.... we have been a full scale 3 way war for a year know..... they outnumber us and out gun us.... we are preparing a full scale surprise attack 3 days.. we don't except to win
"You tell me this now?" kenny roares "Just being here is suicide"
'I know...we should have told you earlier...But we thought the war was over" jack began "for 2 months we have had peace. no fighting, no war. however, a few days ago the attacked one of our smaller bases in the forest. they had attacked a smaller one before and killed one of ours but that was a toilet cubical. this was a big one. they had Assult rifles, Grenades, even the odd rocket launcher and SMG....We stood no chance"
"How did this start?" kenny asked
"a year ago a group found us" jack started "They where well equipped but so were we. they where called the worshippers. they attacked us head on when we first met and even since then its been a strategy game for us. how many men in this place? when do we attack? how many cars do we use? recently a new group moved in nearby. its name was Crawford (the name sent chills up kenny spine) They where unprepared and they didn't attack us and they wanted peace. we organised a treaty and it worked....Until the death. The worshippers wife was killed. we dont know who attacked her, but he shifted the blame on us and it started up again."
"Shit" said kenny "What do you want me to do?"
"Get your group" Jack said "Before they do"
Scene swap: Pascucci
The campfire was glowing brightly as he add kindler. he grabbed the last of his food cans and chowed down on the tomatoes. he recalled that day when he escaped the settlement
Your going to fight for us" said the woman as she chucked a AKF7 in his lap. "If you dont we will kill you" he reluctantly agreed and was rushed in the bus with the other prisoners. after a short journey he was ushered out of the bus and was alerted to a 3 giant portables with people on the front. he remembered rushing in the portable and shooting anyone he saw. he was a good shot, but he didnt act that way. they had cleared out the room when he saw the corpse of the woman that had given her the gun. she had a pistol and a bag full of food and supplies. pascucci saw his chance and ran to the forest. no one saw him witch he thanked god for he decided to go toward the farm where Jacob And Tyler where. he missed them
Pascucci finished of the tin of tomatoes and he chucked the empty can in his bag. BANG Pascucci turned and saw a dead walker with a clear bullet wound in the side of his head. he collapsed to the ground as he saw a familiar figure approach
"Miss me?"
Scene swap: Clementine
Clementine sat outside. this was the only place where she felt okay. Danielle was inside. clementine had saved her life but it didn't seem that way. she was still notably upset after the whole deal. Jeremy and Melody where at the river 'Talking' though clementine knew what was happening. Bryan was out the front working on his garden. he had become very attached to it. Clementine sat out there for hours thinking about the past with Kenny, Lee, Duck, Christa, Omid, Molly,Carley,Tyler,Jacob,Jessica and Miranda the pug. she wished they where here. they would know what to do. Broom Clementine heared a car and ran approached the front slowly just as the cabins roof exploded. clementine ran into the forest looking back at the cabin as she ran. Boom the front of the cabin exploded clementine saw Danielle Run out of the cabin crying as it exploded more. she saw clementine and ran over quickly as clementine ushered her over
"What happened!!" clementine yelled
"People came" said Danielle "They where in a big bus and they had big guns and grenades. Where is bryan and the others?
"Dead" said clementine glumly "Come on we have to go" and they ran deep into the forest.
3 hours later
"What are we doing?" asked danielle "We should be killing those fuckers! they destroyed our home
"Its suicide"clem moaned as she examined the leg that was damaged in the explosion
"Your just afraid" Danielle said and she pulled out a gun and aimed it "Admit it. your scared. you did this to me" she said looking at her stump "You DID THIS" She yelled
"Just calm down" clementine said who was in no mood for trouble
"NO" Danielle roared "YOU CAN'T DO ANYTHING. YOU MADE ME LOOSE AN ARM. YOU RAN IN THE FACE OF DANGER!! I HATE YOU
"You call me scared huh" clementine began 'Who is the girl that breaks down into tears at every sign of struggle. you act all tough but your NOT! Your just a scared little girl that doesn't deserve to live..."
"Fuck off" Danielle yelled "You know what you just did? By RUNING AWAY WE LOST MELODY,BRIAN AND JERMEY. WE COULD HAVE ALERTED THEM! WE COULD HAVE SAVED THEM! BUT NOW THERE DEAD AND ITS ALL YOUR FAUT!!" She yelled putting her finger on the triger
3 Weeks later
Kenny was struggling. he knew he was alive and the thanked god for that, but moving around with one leg was harder than he th… moreought. after going for a bit of a walk around the settlement kenny climbed back into his bed. he was amazed at the amount of supplies they had and the fact that they had excess beds. as he climbed into bed someone knocked on the door
"Come in" kenny yelled. Jack walked in the door. he walked in and sat down not saying a word
"What is it?" Kenny asked Jack looked a way before coming back to kenny
"There is things be we did not tell you" he says glumly "We have...eniemes.... we have been a full scale 3 way war for a year know..... they outnumber us and out gun us.... we are preparing a full scale surprise attack 3 days.. we don't except to win
"You tell me this now?" kenny roares "Just being here is suicide"
'I know...we should have told you earlier...But we thought the war was over" jack began… [view original content]
Okay you know what for the most part this is fine, but killing off Melody, Jeremy, and Brian. That's to much dude, that's way to much. Also why does this new two group things want to kill Clems group ? How do they know they where they are ?
3 Weeks later
Kenny was struggling. he knew he was alive and the thanked god for that, but moving around with one leg was harder than he th… moreought. after going for a bit of a walk around the settlement kenny climbed back into his bed. he was amazed at the amount of supplies they had and the fact that they had excess beds. as he climbed into bed someone knocked on the door
"Come in" kenny yelled. Jack walked in the door. he walked in and sat down not saying a word
"What is it?" Kenny asked Jack looked a way before coming back to kenny
"There is things be we did not tell you" he says glumly "We have...eniemes.... we have been a full scale 3 way war for a year know..... they outnumber us and out gun us.... we are preparing a full scale surprise attack 3 days.. we don't except to win
"You tell me this now?" kenny roares "Just being here is suicide"
'I know...we should have told you earlier...But we thought the war was over" jack began… [view original content]
3 Weeks later
Kenny was struggling. he knew he was alive and the thanked god for that, but moving around with one leg was harder than he th… moreought. after going for a bit of a walk around the settlement kenny climbed back into his bed. he was amazed at the amount of supplies they had and the fact that they had excess beds. as he climbed into bed someone knocked on the door
"Come in" kenny yelled. Jack walked in the door. he walked in and sat down not saying a word
"What is it?" Kenny asked Jack looked a way before coming back to kenny
"There is things be we did not tell you" he says glumly "We have...eniemes.... we have been a full scale 3 way war for a year know..... they outnumber us and out gun us.... we are preparing a full scale surprise attack 3 days.. we don't except to win
"You tell me this now?" kenny roares "Just being here is suicide"
'I know...we should have told you earlier...But we thought the war was over" jack began… [view original content]
Yes it was forced. WE KNOW IT WAS FORCED ! It feels awkward, and it's way to sudden. (Stole from HSP but anyway). It doesn't make any sense either, with major plot holes I posted above.
Its what had to happen lets look back on our episodes and compare deaths (Of big characters) to the ones in TWD season 1
Episode 1
TWD: 3
Us: 0
Episode 2:
TWD: 5 (if the st johns where not big characters then 2)
Us: 3
Episode 3.
TWD: 4
Us: 1
Episode 4
TWD: 3 (if you saved ben 2)
Us: 1
Episode 5
TWD: 3 (If kenny is dead. if you saved ben 4)
We need to kill people. our current standings (Not inluding episode 5) are
TWD: 18
Us: 5.
Its embarissing
PS: i made it pretty clear that they want land and want to be domanant. il change it if you want but write now i have to watch morgan freeman be a magican
Okay you know what for the most part this is fine, but killing off Melody, Jeremy, and Brian. That's to much dude, that's way to much. Also why does this new two group things want to kill Clems group ? How do they know they where they are ?
We do not need to be like the game okay ? Just because the game has lot's of death, doesn't mean we do.
Having deaths in the story is fine but THEY NEED TO MAKE SENSE. For the most part (save a few) TWD games deaths meant something, you just killed three characters (that barely had time to develop so we couldn't get attached to them) but you also used a villein you introduced in the same post whom has unclear motives and it's unclear how he found the group.
Its what had to happen lets look back on our episodes and compare deaths (Of big characters) to the ones in TWD season 1
Episode 1
TWD: … more3
Us: 0
Episode 2:
TWD: 5 (if the st johns where not big characters then 2)
Us: 3
Episode 3.
TWD: 4
Us: 1
Episode 4
TWD: 3 (if you saved ben 2)
Us: 1
Episode 5
TWD: 3 (If kenny is dead. if you saved ben 4)
We need to kill people. our current standings (Not inluding episode 5) are
TWD: 18
Us: 5.
Its embarissing
PS: i made it pretty clear that they want land and want to be domanant. il change it if you want but write now i have to watch morgan freeman be a magican
Sigh...Look im not in the mood so il clear things up
Twd is not TWD without deaths. its plain and simple. Melody, jermey and bryan are not dead. i left it in a place where someone else can decide though i highly recomenned that they are dead. Would you like a happy fucking wonderland where everyone lives and its all happy well let me fucking.. Oh morgan freeman bye
* We do not need to be like the game okay ? Just because the game has lot's of death, doesn't mean we do.
* Having deaths in the story is fin… moree but THEY NEED TO MAKE SENSE. For the most part (save a few) TWD games deaths meant something, you just killed three characters (that barely had time to develop so we couldn't get attached to them) but you also used a villein you introduced in the same post whom has unclear motives and it's unclear how he found the group.
I'd be fucking happy if your post wasn't filled with plot holes and inconstancy and didn't feel forced. Death doesn't bother me for the last time. I just want it to make sense.
Sigh...Look im not in the mood so il clear things up
Twd is not TWD without deaths. its plain and simple. Melody, jermey and bryan are not … moredead. i left it in a place where someone else can decide though i highly recomenned that they are dead. Would you like a happy fucking wonderland where everyone lives and its all happy well let me fucking.. Oh morgan freeman bye
S1: 26 Ours: 18 and some of the characters in ours had little to no character development.
And I don't think killing Melody Jeremy and Bryan was a good idea. We just gained Bryan and have no development with his character, and things an important fire between Melody and Jeremy is just taking off. If we killed them off, we just wasted the whole development and dialogue in episode 4, I highly recommend you make them live, or at least note that they could have lived.
Its what had to happen lets look back on our episodes and compare deaths (Of big characters) to the ones in TWD season 1
Episode 1
TWD: … more3
Us: 0
Episode 2:
TWD: 5 (if the st johns where not big characters then 2)
Us: 3
Episode 3.
TWD: 4
Us: 1
Episode 4
TWD: 3 (if you saved ben 2)
Us: 1
Episode 5
TWD: 3 (If kenny is dead. if you saved ben 4)
We need to kill people. our current standings (Not inluding episode 5) are
TWD: 18
Us: 5.
Its embarissing
PS: i made it pretty clear that they want land and want to be domanant. il change it if you want but write now i have to watch morgan freeman be a magican
I'd be fucking happy if your post wasn't filled with plot holes and inconstancy and didn't feel forced. Death doesn't bother me for the last time. I just want it to make sense.
I have already pointed them out. For fuck sake. Also why in the fuck would Bryan leave Clem alone in the emotional state she's in. That's not in his character.
A) As if they wouldnt find them. while these groups had giant settlements and tons of people clementines group did not and that not only made them vaunrable and weak. Also after a few weeks they where bound to force pascucci to tell them where he came from
I gave you 1 and (2 for jeremy) episode to get attached. insted we had a chapter about dissapearing kenny and assasins creed bryan. the only bit of development we had was the 3 way love triangle. im not saying it was bad but if you wanted to get attached to characters...you wrote the wrong episode
C) So your telling me Bryan is a pedofile? come on man. She was in the back yard he was in the front. even lee would have allowed something like this (Not knowing what was coming) In 3 weeks clementine has also been scolded and consoled.
I have already pointed them out. For fuck sake. Also why in the fuck would Bryan leave Clem alone in the emotional state she's in. That's not in his character.
Come on man! Don't leave, you have been here since the very first page! You don't need to leave because some people don't agree with you, I liked the whole thing except, the killing part. I feel it was, just a bit random killing them off so quickly and so quietly, i feel they at least should have a shown death.
A) As if they wouldnt find them. while these groups had giant settlements and tons of people clementines group did not and that not only made … morethem vaunrable and weak. Also after a few weeks they where bound to force pascucci to tell them where he came from
I gave you 1 and (2 for jeremy) episode to get attached. insted we had a chapter about dissapearing kenny and assasins creed bryan. the only bit of development we had was the 3 way love triangle. im not saying it was bad but if you wanted to get attached to characters...you wrote the wrong episode
C) So your telling me Bryan is a pedofile? come on man. She was in the back yard he was in the front. even lee would have allowed something like this (Not knowing what was coming) In 3 weeks clementine has also been scolded and consoled.
Deal with my post because it will be my last one.
Come on man! Don't leave, you have been here since the very first page! You don't need to leave because some people don't agree with you, I li… moreked the whole thing except, the killing part. I feel it was, just a bit random killing them off so quickly and so quietly, i feel they at least should have a shown death.
There's nearly noone in this thread who hasn't dealt with negative opinions on their post. I wonder why you're the only person being so insulted and throwing with swears whenever a hint of critique comes up, there's really no need for it.
A) As if they wouldnt find them. while these groups had giant settlements and tons of people clementines group did not and that not only made … morethem vaunrable and weak. Also after a few weeks they where bound to force pascucci to tell them where he came from
I gave you 1 and (2 for jeremy) episode to get attached. insted we had a chapter about dissapearing kenny and assasins creed bryan. the only bit of development we had was the 3 way love triangle. im not saying it was bad but if you wanted to get attached to characters...you wrote the wrong episode
C) So your telling me Bryan is a pedofile? come on man. She was in the back yard he was in the front. even lee would have allowed something like this (Not knowing what was coming) In 3 weeks clementine has also been scolded and consoled.
Deal with my post because it will be my last one.
I agree with everything. I also thought the argument between Danielle and Clem was a good part.
Personally I felt like the war between settlements part was kinda pushed to legitimate some deaths. But maybe it's just me... not a fan of it. On the other hand there has to come some sort of danger as this is the last episode. Maybe I'm just tired of the menace between groups? We've had that several times, in the game, in the TV show and in our fiction. IMO our fanfiction doesn't have to be an exact copy of the franchise, regarding the number of deaths as well as the plot. I want our finale episode to be something special, and I highly doubt that another war between the groups is the key for an excellent finale.
Though I have to agree with @Lord_zasca in one point: It is not clear for 100% that they are dead - no body, no proof. He wrote somewhere that he doesn't like emotional or meaningful deaths - he prefers a bullet in the head and that's it. Maybe that explains the sudden attack with the attempt to kill them. IMO we should keep the deaths for the climax or the finale part of the episode.
Way to sudden.
Poorly written.
To forced.
Though i did sort of like the last argument between Clem and Danielle, though somethings didn't really make sense even there.
Let's just keep going on. In the end the game is about continuing upon the recent post. @Lord_zasca has made his post and we have to deal with it. Though he has forgotten to post the Episode's title at the beginning of it. The title suggestion with most likes and least dislikes is:
I really love that title actually. I kind of just picture Clem saying this in her new, more mature voice. I have a good idea for a drawing now actually...
Let's just keep going on. In the end the game is about continuing upon the recent post. @Lord_zasca has made his post and we have to deal with… more it. Though he has forgotten to post the Episode's title at the beginning of it. The title suggestion with most likes and least dislikes is:
Season 1.5, Episode 5: "One Last Breath"
I really love that title actually. I kind of just picture Clem saying this in her new, more mature voice. I have a good idea for a drawing now actually...
Comments
Thanks !
I put things into a short chapter one if anyone want's the check it out. I'm working on editing the much longer chapter 2. https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10073109/1/The-Walking-Dead-Season-2-Episode-One-Adrenaline
Look what i found http://www.telltalegames.com/community/discussion/57902/tales-from-twd-interactive-fanfic
Interesting, I wonder how the 2 threads would coexist ( Counting on that one having any success at all)
Well, as the thread-starter, if you want to bring your talents to the thread or vote for a story, go right ahead!
Thanks
Im sure both threads will Shine, The content isn't the same so there is room for everybody
Good way to spread the word
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And also, note that it does get better along the way, i mean, come on, compare Before The Storm to Adrenaline.
What if we could, maybe sometime, have a little bit a of a cameo on both stories
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I didn't want to insult our earlier work but... yea your right.
No problem with me, It could always make for fun stories
I'm with SaltLick here. Once I get the story going, cameos are perfectly fine with me!
Yeah, That also helps both threads too, Once both stories get going we can talk about it and make it happen !
Sounds like a plan!
Its a plan then, lets just wait till we sort out things then, Btw just ignore the clown downvoting every comment
Downvoters incoming.
Clap clap clap.
Like if hurts somebody Lol, Anyone bleeding?
Dat grammar dough.
3 Weeks later
Kenny was struggling. he knew he was alive and the thanked god for that, but moving around with one leg was harder than he thought. after going for a bit of a walk around the settlement kenny climbed back into his bed. he was amazed at the amount of supplies they had and the fact that they had excess beds. as he climbed into bed someone knocked on the door
"Come in" kenny yelled. Jack walked in the door. he walked in and sat down not saying a word
"What is it?" Kenny asked Jack looked a way before coming back to kenny
"There is things be we did not tell you" he says glumly "We have...eniemes.... we have been a full scale 3 way war for a year know..... they outnumber us and out gun us.... we are preparing a full scale surprise attack 3 days.. we don't except to win
"You tell me this now?" kenny roares "Just being here is suicide"
'I know...we should have told you earlier...But we thought the war was over" jack began "for 2 months we have had peace. no fighting, no war. however, a few days ago the attacked one of our smaller bases in the forest. they had attacked a smaller one before and killed one of ours but that was a toilet cubical. this was a big one. they had Assult rifles, Grenades, even the odd rocket launcher and SMG....We stood no chance"
"How did this start?" kenny asked
"a year ago a group found us" jack started "They where well equipped but so were we. they where called the worshippers. they attacked us head on when we first met and even since then its been a strategy game for us. how many men in this place? when do we attack? how many cars do we use? recently a new group moved in nearby. its name was Crawford (the name sent chills up kenny spine) They where unprepared and they didn't attack us and they wanted peace. we organised a treaty and it worked....Until the death. The worshippers wife was killed. we dont know who attacked her, but he shifted the blame on us and it started up again."
"Shit" said kenny "What do you want me to do?"
"Get your group" Jack said "Before they do"
Scene swap: Pascucci
The campfire was glowing brightly as he add kindler. he grabbed the last of his food cans and chowed down on the tomatoes. he recalled that day when he escaped the settlement
Your going to fight for us" said the woman as she chucked a AKF7 in his lap. "If you dont we will kill you" he reluctantly agreed and was rushed in the bus with the other prisoners. after a short journey he was ushered out of the bus and was alerted to a 3 giant portables with people on the front. he remembered rushing in the portable and shooting anyone he saw. he was a good shot, but he didnt act that way. they had cleared out the room when he saw the corpse of the woman that had given her the gun. she had a pistol and a bag full of food and supplies. pascucci saw his chance and ran to the forest. no one saw him witch he thanked god for he decided to go toward the farm where Jacob And Tyler where. he missed them
Pascucci finished of the tin of tomatoes and he chucked the empty can in his bag. BANG Pascucci turned and saw a dead walker with a clear bullet wound in the side of his head. he collapsed to the ground as he saw a familiar figure approach
"Miss me?"
Scene swap: Clementine
Clementine sat outside. this was the only place where she felt okay. Danielle was inside. clementine had saved her life but it didn't seem that way. she was still notably upset after the whole deal. Jeremy and Melody where at the river 'Talking' though clementine knew what was happening. Bryan was out the front working on his garden. he had become very attached to it. Clementine sat out there for hours thinking about the past with Kenny, Lee, Duck, Christa, Omid, Molly,Carley,Tyler,Jacob,Jessica and Miranda the pug. she wished they where here. they would know what to do. Broom Clementine heared a car and ran approached the front slowly just as the cabins roof exploded. clementine ran into the forest looking back at the cabin as she ran. Boom the front of the cabin exploded clementine saw Danielle Run out of the cabin crying as it exploded more. she saw clementine and ran over quickly as clementine ushered her over
"What happened!!" clementine yelled
"People came" said Danielle "They where in a big bus and they had big guns and grenades. Where is bryan and the others?
"Dead" said clementine glumly "Come on we have to go" and they ran deep into the forest.
3 hours later
"What are we doing?" asked danielle "We should be killing those fuckers! they destroyed our home
"Its suicide"clem moaned as she examined the leg that was damaged in the explosion
"Your just afraid" Danielle said and she pulled out a gun and aimed it "Admit it. your scared. you did this to me" she said looking at her stump "You DID THIS" She yelled
"Just calm down" clementine said who was in no mood for trouble
"NO" Danielle roared "YOU CAN'T DO ANYTHING. YOU MADE ME LOOSE AN ARM. YOU RAN IN THE FACE OF DANGER!! I HATE YOU
"You call me scared huh" clementine began 'Who is the girl that breaks down into tears at every sign of struggle. you act all tough but your NOT! Your just a scared little girl that doesn't deserve to live..."
"Fuck off" Danielle yelled "You know what you just did? By RUNING AWAY WE LOST MELODY,BRIAN AND JERMEY. WE COULD HAVE ALERTED THEM! WE COULD HAVE SAVED THEM! BUT NOW THERE DEAD AND ITS ALL YOUR FAUT!!" She yelled putting her finger on the triger
BANG
Continue
We normally take a break after an episode but whatever...
Okay you know what for the most part this is fine, but killing off Melody, Jeremy, and Brian. That's to much dude, that's way to much. Also why does this new two group things want to kill Clems group ? How do they know they where they are ?
Way to sudden.
Poorly written.
To forced.
Though i did sort of like the last argument between Clem and Danielle, though somethings didn't really make sense even there.
Guys,am I the only one who liked it? Also, its not confirmed that Jeremy Melody and Bryan died. Presumed
Yes it was forced. WE KNOW IT WAS FORCED ! It feels awkward, and it's way to sudden. (Stole from HSP but anyway). It doesn't make any sense either, with major plot holes I posted above.
Its what had to happen lets look back on our episodes and compare deaths (Of big characters) to the ones in TWD season 1
Episode 1
TWD: 3
Us: 0
Episode 2:
TWD: 5 (if the st johns where not big characters then 2)
Us: 3
Episode 3.
TWD: 4
Us: 1
Episode 4
TWD: 3 (if you saved ben 2)
Us: 1
Episode 5
TWD: 3 (If kenny is dead. if you saved ben 4)
We need to kill people. our current standings (Not inluding episode 5) are
TWD: 18
Us: 5.
Its embarissing
PS: i made it pretty clear that they want land and want to be domanant. il change it if you want but write now i have to watch morgan freeman be a magican
Sigh...Look im not in the mood so il clear things up
Twd is not TWD without deaths. its plain and simple. Melody, jermey and bryan are not dead. i left it in a place where someone else can decide though i highly recomenned that they are dead. Would you like a happy fucking wonderland where everyone lives and its all happy well let me fucking.. Oh morgan freeman bye
I'd be fucking happy if your post wasn't filled with plot holes and inconstancy and didn't feel forced. Death doesn't bother me for the last time. I just want it to make sense.
In the real game more characters were introduced. If we're going to look at it that way, then so be it.
S1: Lee, Clem, Kenny, duck, Katja, Shawn, Herschel, Varley , Doug, Larry, Lily, Glenn, 3 st John's, Mark, Chuck, # Cancer patients, Molly, Christa, Omid, and the stranger.
Ours: Clem, Christa, Omid, Kenny, Charlie, Pascucci, Eddie, Jacob, Farmgirls, Jeremy, Dave, Gus, Melody, and Bryan.
S1: 26 Ours: 18 and some of the characters in ours had little to no character development.
And I don't think killing Melody Jeremy and Bryan was a good idea. We just gained Bryan and have no development with his character, and things an important fire between Melody and Jeremy is just taking off. If we killed them off, we just wasted the whole development and dialogue in episode 4, I highly recommend you make them live, or at least note that they could have lived.
And sorry bout the grammar im on mobile.
An example of "Plot holes" and "In consistancy would be appreciated (Bathroom break)
I have already pointed them out. For fuck sake. Also why in the fuck would Bryan leave Clem alone in the emotional state she's in. That's not in his character.
A) As if they wouldnt find them. while these groups had giant settlements and tons of people clementines group did not and that not only made them vaunrable and weak. Also after a few weeks they where bound to force pascucci to tell them where he came from
C) So your telling me Bryan is a pedofile? come on man. She was in the back yard he was in the front. even lee would have allowed something like this (Not knowing what was coming) In 3 weeks clementine has also been scolded and consoled.
Deal with my post because it will be my last one.
Come on man! Don't leave, you have been here since the very first page! You don't need to leave because some people don't agree with you, I liked the whole thing except, the killing part. I feel it was, just a bit random killing them off so quickly and so quietly, i feel they at least should have a shown death.
Its not that. someone insulted my writing and acted like i was a moron. i also wasn't here since the first page so BOOM!!
... was that necessary?
There's nearly noone in this thread who hasn't dealt with negative opinions on their post. I wonder why you're the only person being so insulted and throwing with swears whenever a hint of critique comes up, there's really no need for it.
I agree with everything. I also thought the argument between Danielle and Clem was a good part.
Personally I felt like the war between settlements part was kinda pushed to legitimate some deaths. But maybe it's just me... not a fan of it. On the other hand there has to come some sort of danger as this is the last episode. Maybe I'm just tired of the menace between groups? We've had that several times, in the game, in the TV show and in our fiction. IMO our fanfiction doesn't have to be an exact copy of the franchise, regarding the number of deaths as well as the plot. I want our finale episode to be something special, and I highly doubt that another war between the groups is the key for an excellent finale.
Though I have to agree with @Lord_zasca in one point: It is not clear for 100% that they are dead - no body, no proof. He wrote somewhere that he doesn't like emotional or meaningful deaths - he prefers a bullet in the head and that's it. Maybe that explains the sudden attack with the attempt to kill them. IMO we should keep the deaths for the climax or the finale part of the episode.
Let's just keep going on. In the end the game is about continuing upon the recent post. @Lord_zasca has made his post and we have to deal with it. Though he has forgotten to post the Episode's title at the beginning of it. The title suggestion with most likes and least dislikes is:
Season 1.5, Episode 5: "One Last Breath"
EDIT: Story contribution removed due to dividedness upon @Lord_zasca's latest post
I really love that title actually. I kind of just picture Clem saying this in her new, more mature voice. I have a good idea for a drawing now actually...
Thank you
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I don't think we should continue from "Lord"_zasca's post.
Why?
He went aggressive. Like, real aggresive.