Its 6:00 in the morning....And you have a pissed off man. someone said before that "They should all leave and get back to the farm. What the fuck did you think i wanted to do? copy the all out war story arc? he got it spot on. they would get back to the farm after there home was destoryed and run into the conflict, meet kenny and pascucci see a few of them die because of the war and then go back to the farm....... There not the war type. they had few people and a small home. i wouldnt do that. il change it later if you want but if you really cant fucking wait till i get home from work then disragard my post. like the Fuck i care
That fact that your acting like a jerk to everyone because they are criticizing your work is making people just not want to deal with you at all. Being told something you made is bad sucks but you need to learn that you can't always shit gold.
Its 6:00 in the morning....And you have a pissed off man. someone said before that "They should all leave and get back to the farm. What the f… moreuck did you think i wanted to do? copy the all out war story arc? he got it spot on. they would get back to the farm after there home was destoryed and run into the conflict, meet kenny and pascucci see a few of them die because of the war and then go back to the farm....... There not the war type. they had few people and a small home. i wouldnt do that. il change it later if you want but if you really cant fucking wait till i get home from work then disragard my post. like the Fuck i care
Its 6:00 in the morning....And you have a pissed off man. someone said before that "They should all leave and get back to the farm. What the f… moreuck did you think i wanted to do? copy the all out war story arc? he got it spot on. they would get back to the farm after there home was destoryed and run into the conflict, meet kenny and pascucci see a few of them die because of the war and then go back to the farm....... There not the war type. they had few people and a small home. i wouldnt do that. il change it later if you want but if you really cant fucking wait till i get home from work then disragard my post. like the Fuck i care
I tried to read your post in an objective way, but there were a lot of plot holes and inconsistencies within it. I also don't think you should swear so much, it kind of makes me not take you serious.
Its 6:00 in the morning....And you have a pissed off man. someone said before that "They should all leave and get back to the farm. What the f… moreuck did you think i wanted to do? copy the all out war story arc? he got it spot on. they would get back to the farm after there home was destoryed and run into the conflict, meet kenny and pascucci see a few of them die because of the war and then go back to the farm....... There not the war type. they had few people and a small home. i wouldnt do that. il change it later if you want but if you really cant fucking wait till i get home from work then disragard my post. like the Fuck i care
I tried to read your post in an objective way, but there were a lot of plot holes and inconsistencies within it. I also don't think you should swear so much, it kind of makes me not take you serious.
Thats fine. say its shit and im okay with that. when i "attacked you" i attacked you about my plot holes not that my writing sucks. hell you should see a few of my freinds works (Though he takes an hour to write a paragrah....argh) there much better then mine. hell my shit is not gold i would know that after looking down. sure i did go "Real aggressive" but i pride my work. i had one liker and all of my freinds seemed to follow it and understand it....deal with this later Ta ta!
That fact that your acting like a jerk to everyone because they are criticizing your work is making people just not want to deal with you at all. Being told something you made is bad sucks but you need to learn that you can't always shit gold.
Thats fine. say its shit and im okay with that. when i "attacked you" i attacked you about my plot holes not that my writing sucks. hell you … moreshould see a few of my freinds works (Though he takes an hour to write a paragrah....argh) there much better then mine. hell my shit is not gold i would know that after looking down. sure i did go "Real aggressive" but i pride my work. i had one liker and all of my freinds seemed to follow it and understand it....deal with this later Ta ta!
I tried to read your post in an objective way, but there were a lot of plot holes and inconsistencies within it. I also don't think you should swear so much, it kind of makes me not take you serious.
He can post as long as some of my elements are included. you could have a war between 2 settlements and leave crawford out of it or have the cabin destoryed by kennys group and as a result kenny is killed for not siding with them. people have to die
He can post as long as some of my elements are included. you could have a war between 2 settlements and leave crawford out of it or have the cabin destoryed by kennys group and as a result kenny is killed for not siding with them. people have to die
Actually I posted half a novel continuing upon your opening post. It took me 2 hours to write it and your elements were all included. The people voted to disregard both yours and my post and I removed it without hesitating. See, I don't make a big deal over my post as I don't write for myself but for the group. People here didn't like it - deal with it.
He can post as long as some of my elements are included. you could have a war between 2 settlements and leave crawford out of it or have the cabin destoryed by kennys group and as a result kenny is killed for not siding with them. people have to die
''Yeah, I can keep an eye on them.'', Bryan points at the sun, which is just above the tree-line, ''Just make sure to get back before it gets too dark.'' Melody and Jeremy walk out of the cabin hand-in-hand, with their weapons hanging from their sides and a big bag to put the supplies in strapped to his back. Bryan lets out a sigh of relief. He's finally alone, and decides to take a quick nap. ''The kids can take care of themselves.'', he mutters before closing his eyes.
-One and a half hours later-
''Bryan! Bryan wake up!'', Clementine is shaking Bryan's body in a desperate attempt at waking him up. His eyes snap open and within a second he jumps up from his chair while readying his bow. He looks around in a confused manner. ''What's the matter?'', he says while sheathing his bow. Clementine points to her and Danielle's bedroom. ''A candle fell over! The whole cabin is going to burn!'' Bryan doesn't hesitate and quickly runs over to their room. He pushes the door open and flinches when an overwhelming cloud of smoke enters the room and moves into his lungs with every breath. He puts a rag over his mouth and crouches.
As he carefully sneaks into the flaming room he looks around for Danielle. The smoke blocks his vision and his rag barely stands its ground against the suffocating gasses. Bryan focuses all of his attention and hears a faint cry of help coming from the other side of the room. He moves over and nearly catches fire before he finally hears the loud scream of a terrified teenage girl. ''Help-- CoughCough Help me!'' Bryan looks around for Danielle, but she is nowhere to be seen. As the room fills with even more smoke Bryan has trouble breathing, and the fire is slowly spreading around the room, trapping Bryan within the confounds of this corner.
As he looks around him, he finally notices a tall, wooden closet right next to him. Seeing no other option Bryan opens the door and is greeted by Danielle's frightened face. ''Bryan!'', she exclaims while her mouth curves into a smile. He pulls her out of the closet and smashes the window blocking their way. The two climb out, cutting themselves on the sharp edges of the broken glass. ''Where's Clementine?'', Danielle worriedly asks her savior. ''She's probably safe, she woke me up when the fire started.'' Danielle suddenly starts to cry even harder than she did before. ''It's going to be okay, I promise.'', Bryan looked up at the clear night sky, the moon's bright light was nothing compared to the flames coming from inside.
''Come on, let's find Clem.'', Bryan pulls Danielle with him. As they reach the front of the cabin, they notice a jeep standing there along with Clementine and Jeremy, who appears to be comforting Melody. ''There they are.'', Bryan smiles, ''At least we still have each other.''
-The next morning-
(Play this music: )
''Fuck.'', Jeremy slams the hood of the jeep shut. ''The car's run out of gas. I guess we're going to have to walk now.'' Clementine straps her backpack tightly around her back. She stuffed it as much as she could when Bryan was saving Danielle. Her water bottle is nearly empty and her gun has just three bullets left. Danielle has been avoiding and ignoring her ever since they stepped into the car. Jeremy picks up the big bag of supplies and put it around his neck. ''Do you think it's going to be far?'', Melody asks Bryan in a distant tone. ''Nah, last time I went there it took me just a day. And seeing as we have been driving, it should be just a short walk away.''
''Can't we just go back to the farm?'', Clementine complains, ''We don't even know these people, for all we know they could be bandits, cannibals or worse.'' Jeremy shakes his head. ''We can't just go back there, what about Kenny and Pascucci? Don't you want to find them?'' Clementine shrugs. ''They're probably dead.'' He looks at her with a disapproving look on his face. The mere thought of such a dark sentence coming from a little girl's mouth is sickening to him.
Actually I posted half a novel continuing upon your opening post. It took me 2 hours to write it and your elements were all included. The peop… morele voted to disregard both yours and my post and I removed it without hesitating. See, I don't make a big deal over my post as I don't write for myself but for the group. People here didn't like it - deal with it.
''Yeah, I can keep an eye on them.'', Bryan points at the sun, which is just above the tree-line, ''Just make sure to get back before it gets … moretoo dark.'' Melody and Jeremy walk out of the cabin hand-in-hand, with their weapons hanging from their sides and a big bag to put the supplies in strapped to his back. Bryan lets out a sigh of relief. He's finally alone, and decides to take a quick nap. ''The kids can take care of themselves.'', he mutters before closing his eyes.
-One and a half hours later-
''Bryan! Bryan wake up!'', Clementine is shaking Bryan's body in a desperate attempt at waking him up. His eyes snap open and within a second he jumps up from his chair while readying his bow. He looks around in a confused manner. ''What's the matter?'', he says while sheathing his bow. Clementine points to her and Danielle's bedroom. ''A candle fell over! The whole cabin is going to burn!'' Bryan doesn't hesitate and quickly runs over to their … [view original content]
''Yeah, I can keep an eye on them.'', Bryan points at the sun, which is just above the tree-line, ''Just make sure to get back before it gets … moretoo dark.'' Melody and Jeremy walk out of the cabin hand-in-hand, with their weapons hanging from their sides and a big bag to put the supplies in strapped to his back. Bryan lets out a sigh of relief. He's finally alone, and decides to take a quick nap. ''The kids can take care of themselves.'', he mutters before closing his eyes.
-One and a half hours later-
''Bryan! Bryan wake up!'', Clementine is shaking Bryan's body in a desperate attempt at waking him up. His eyes snap open and within a second he jumps up from his chair while readying his bow. He looks around in a confused manner. ''What's the matter?'', he says while sheathing his bow. Clementine points to her and Danielle's bedroom. ''A candle fell over! The whole cabin is going to burn!'' Bryan doesn't hesitate and quickly runs over to their … [view original content]
Well, rules are made to be broken. I think we barely have a choice here, because the rule says: "Don't disregard a post just because you don't… more like it - go for it as long as it is plausible'' And to be fair, that post wasn't extremely plausible. The entire post doesn't make sense because:
A.) We are very, very far away from where New Crawford is supposed to be. Someone looked up all the locations we had been to so far and according to that the group had traveled a long way since their conflict with New Crawford.
B.) Why would they just blow up that cabin, rather than to search it first. They could have easily overpowered anyone in it, even Bryan with his fighting skills.
C.) Clem couldn't have saved the presumably dead group-members because an army was attacking them. So why would Danielle suddenly shoot Clem over something Clem couldn't have done, even if she wanted to.
D.) It's impossible for Kenny not to notice a big war going on … [view original content]
May i continue with the cabin group? I still feel like that's my specialty. I just don't really understand the whole deal with Kenny/Pascucci, i like to have small details, and if i don't know em' i won't write em'.
If somebody else will write before me instead about Kenny/Pascucci, i would like to make a wish so to speak :P. It would be nice if you would not include the cabin group (yes, i still call them that x3) right now in your post.
Oh, and i really love the things with the music and the drawings etc. Can't wait for the Episode Slides! If possible, i might make some Episode Slides that are actual 3D etc. though that'd be currently only with Clem, considering i don't have any 3D models of our own characters (obviously).
I'll write in around 20 minutes from now if no one objects and wants to write about Ken/Pas before hand.
You guys know the other fan fic right? You know how we said we were going to have cameos in both? Well i was wondering if I could put Melody in there and have her eventually lose her other group. Since she never really explained her early days in the Apocalypse. Just wondering.
You guys know the other fan fic right? You know how we said we were going to have cameos in both? Well i was wondering if I could put Melody i… moren there and have her eventually lose her other group. Since she never really explained her early days in the Apocalypse. Just wondering.
Exactly what i thought, the origins of our characters, like Glenn in Season 1.
Also wondering, does anyone know how many days we are in to the apocalypse?
Exactly what i thought, the origins of our characters, like Glenn in Season 1.
Also wondering, does anyone know how many days we are in to the apocalypse?
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I'' write, but i'll try to keep it short and simple, still leaving opportunities for everyone.
Yeah, why not. Maybe That1Guy can write right after you. So curious what's going to happen
Once you finish I can use it for a cover for the FF.net version and save the missus's drawing for episode 4.
That's a good idea
Clementine farted . Everybody died from the smell and clem is alone , AGAIN...
Very good idea actually. I'll do my best to finish it soon!
ERMERGERD!
Clever...
I know ,i am very talented for writing
Its 6:00 in the morning....And you have a pissed off man. someone said before that "They should all leave and get back to the farm. What the fuck did you think i wanted to do? copy the all out war story arc? he got it spot on. they would get back to the farm after there home was destoryed and run into the conflict, meet kenny and pascucci see a few of them die because of the war and then go back to the farm....... There not the war type. they had few people and a small home. i wouldnt do that. il change it later if you want but if you really cant fucking wait till i get home from work then disragard my post. like the Fuck i care
That fact that your acting like a jerk to everyone because they are criticizing your work is making people just not want to deal with you at all. Being told something you made is bad sucks but you need to learn that you can't always shit gold.
You said it was your last post and we took you up on that.
I tried to read your post in an objective way, but there were a lot of plot holes and inconsistencies within it. I also don't think you should swear so much, it kind of makes me not take you serious.
Actually, I feel like an idiot now for sort of siding with him by defending his post
Thats fine. say its shit and im okay with that. when i "attacked you" i attacked you about my plot holes not that my writing sucks. hell you should see a few of my freinds works (Though he takes an hour to write a paragrah....argh) there much better then mine. hell my shit is not gold i would know that after looking down. sure i did go "Real aggressive" but i pride my work. i had one liker and all of my freinds seemed to follow it and understand it....deal with this later Ta ta!
It's not that I didn't understand your post. It's just that it didn't make a lot of sense to kill all of those people off.
fuckidy fuck fuck shit shit shit
im a negan when im pissed of. he is like my role model you know?
We're still ignoring Lord_zasca post yes ? We're still going with Randomz89101's post ?
I say yes. He said it was his last post and we voted and IMO it's a bit late to say "Fuckidy fuck, let me edit it!"...
He can post as long as some of my elements are included. you could have a war between 2 settlements and leave crawford out of it or have the cabin destoryed by kennys group and as a result kenny is killed for not siding with them. people have to die
I had to motherfucking sleep
Or alternatively... He could include none of those elements. It's his choice. (looks at his post) ooopp looks like he didn't.
Actually I posted half a novel continuing upon your opening post. It took me 2 hours to write it and your elements were all included. The people voted to disregard both yours and my post and I removed it without hesitating. See, I don't make a big deal over my post as I don't write for myself but for the group. People here didn't like it - deal with it.
''Yeah, I can keep an eye on them.'', Bryan points at the sun, which is just above the tree-line, ''Just make sure to get back before it gets too dark.'' Melody and Jeremy walk out of the cabin hand-in-hand, with their weapons hanging from their sides and a big bag to put the supplies in strapped to his back. Bryan lets out a sigh of relief. He's finally alone, and decides to take a quick nap. ''The kids can take care of themselves.'', he mutters before closing his eyes.
-One and a half hours later-
''Bryan! Bryan wake up!'', Clementine is shaking Bryan's body in a desperate attempt at waking him up. His eyes snap open and within a second he jumps up from his chair while readying his bow. He looks around in a confused manner. ''What's the matter?'', he says while sheathing his bow. Clementine points to her and Danielle's bedroom. ''A candle fell over! The whole cabin is going to burn!'' Bryan doesn't hesitate and quickly runs over to their room. He pushes the door open and flinches when an overwhelming cloud of smoke enters the room and moves into his lungs with every breath. He puts a rag over his mouth and crouches.
As he carefully sneaks into the flaming room he looks around for Danielle. The smoke blocks his vision and his rag barely stands its ground against the suffocating gasses. Bryan focuses all of his attention and hears a faint cry of help coming from the other side of the room. He moves over and nearly catches fire before he finally hears the loud scream of a terrified teenage girl. ''Help-- Cough Cough Help me!'' Bryan looks around for Danielle, but she is nowhere to be seen. As the room fills with even more smoke Bryan has trouble breathing, and the fire is slowly spreading around the room, trapping Bryan within the confounds of this corner.
As he looks around him, he finally notices a tall, wooden closet right next to him. Seeing no other option Bryan opens the door and is greeted by Danielle's frightened face. ''Bryan!'', she exclaims while her mouth curves into a smile. He pulls her out of the closet and smashes the window blocking their way. The two climb out, cutting themselves on the sharp edges of the broken glass. ''Where's Clementine?'', Danielle worriedly asks her savior. ''She's probably safe, she woke me up when the fire started.'' Danielle suddenly starts to cry even harder than she did before. ''It's going to be okay, I promise.'', Bryan looked up at the clear night sky, the moon's bright light was nothing compared to the flames coming from inside.
''Come on, let's find Clem.'', Bryan pulls Danielle with him. As they reach the front of the cabin, they notice a jeep standing there along with Clementine and Jeremy, who appears to be comforting Melody. ''There they are.'', Bryan smiles, ''At least we still have each other.''
-The next morning-
(Play this music:
)
''Fuck.'', Jeremy slams the hood of the jeep shut. ''The car's run out of gas. I guess we're going to have to walk now.'' Clementine straps her backpack tightly around her back. She stuffed it as much as she could when Bryan was saving Danielle. Her water bottle is nearly empty and her gun has just three bullets left. Danielle has been avoiding and ignoring her ever since they stepped into the car. Jeremy picks up the big bag of supplies and put it around his neck. ''Do you think it's going to be far?'', Melody asks Bryan in a distant tone. ''Nah, last time I went there it took me just a day. And seeing as we have been driving, it should be just a short walk away.''
''Can't we just go back to the farm?'', Clementine complains, ''We don't even know these people, for all we know they could be bandits, cannibals or worse.'' Jeremy shakes his head. ''We can't just go back there, what about Kenny and Pascucci? Don't you want to find them?'' Clementine shrugs. ''They're probably dead.'' He looks at her with a disapproving look on his face. The mere thought of such a dark sentence coming from a little girl's mouth is sickening to him.
''They're alive. I promise.''
-Please continue with either Kenny or Pascucci-
I'm sorry about that @TheMissus, you put a lot of effort into trying to make things better.
I don't mind as long as it's not a too long gap - 3 months max.
I didn't mind to remove it and I apreciate you apreciating my effort
It seems music is becoming a large part of this group fic. Me have idea #KS !
Try to show Pascucci's story without a time-skip. I was looking forward to see how that turned out.
Hey guys, how do i post a picture on here. I have never done it before. I attempted to do it in my post, but it failed.
Click the image icon and put in the URL of the image.
Turns out I didn't use a time-skip, it just wasn't necessary.
Ah, there we go, thanks.
Fuck. Yes.
Giving me a visual novels vibe.
May i continue with the cabin group? I still feel like that's my specialty. I just don't really understand the whole deal with Kenny/Pascucci, i like to have small details, and if i don't know em' i won't write em'.
If somebody else will write before me instead about Kenny/Pascucci, i would like to make a wish so to speak :P. It would be nice if you would not include the cabin group (yes, i still call them that x3) right now in your post.
Oh, and i really love the things with the music and the drawings etc. Can't wait for the Episode Slides! If possible, i might make some Episode Slides that are actual 3D etc. though that'd be currently only with Clem, considering i don't have any 3D models of our own characters (obviously).
I'll write in around 20 minutes from now if no one objects and wants to write about Ken/Pas before hand.
Gonna write now.
You guys know the other fan fic right? You know how we said we were going to have cameos in both? Well i was wondering if I could put Melody in there and have her eventually lose her other group. Since she never really explained her early days in the Apocalypse. Just wondering.
Exactly what i thought, the origins of our characters, like Glenn in Season 1.
Also wondering, does anyone know how many days we are in to the apocalypse?
Off the top of my head... a yearish.
So i'm aloud to include her in it?