“What the hell are we doing? We’re walking to this unknown place that may just shoot us on sight, eat us and what not. I’ve had ENOUGH of this bullshit, i don’t wanna deal with anything more, i just want our group and that is it. We can’t trust ANYONE anymore. ” Clem says, angry.
Everyone continues walking. It is silent for a while.
“Just walk away then. Leave us.” Danielle says whilst eating half an apple.
“Nah, i feel like it’d be to dangerous to leave you alone. I mean, come on, without me, you would most likely be eating human flesh, not a non deserved apple.” Clementine says.
Danielle points the finger at Clem, though a little slowly.
“Sorry you only have your right arm to point it, i know you’re a lefty after all.”
Danielle throws her apple at Clem in anger. Though Clem catches it.
“Thank you.”
Clementine eats it.
The apple makes Clem think of the Motor Inn, and everyone there, especially Lee.
Clementine immediately losses her neutral smile, and turns sad.
“Oh, and NOW you’re going soft now aren’t yo-“ Danielle says before getting cut off.
“STOP IT! I’VE HAD ENOUGH OF THIS, ALL I WANT IS SAFETY, JUST LIKE YOU ALL DO, BUT WE’RE NEVER GONNA GET IT, FACE IT! NEVER!” Melody screams before starting to cry.
Everyone, once again, stops.
“WE HAVE MORE TO WORRY ABOUT, THEN YOUR FUCKING ARM, AND YOUR FUCKING MOOD.” Melody says whilst crying, and pointing at Clem and Danielle.
Melody walks to a big rock by the side of a road, and lays down there.
“Please, lets just, take one problem at a time.” Melody has now calmed down.
“Now please, don’t ask me any questions, because i don’t know anymore. I don’t know what to do, what to think, why we’re doing this, why this is happening to us. I just need some, rest.”
Jeremy walks to Melody, and lays down next to her.
“I’m sorry.” Jeremy says.
One problem at a time.
“Okay, well, Kenny and Pascucci is our main concern right now, right?” Clem says.
Everyone nods, except Melody, who’s just looking at the gray sky.
“We must find them. End of story.” Jeremy says, whilst Danielle nods.
“We have no idea where they are or what their current state is, we might just be searching for corpses.” Clementine says.
Clementine looks at Bryan who is guarding them. He doesn’t say anything.
“Well, searching for em’ is the majority here, so...” Danielle says.
“But we might just risk our lives for nothing.” Clem says.
“Well, there are so many buts s-“ Jeremy says before getting cut off by a laughing Danielle.
“Come on, really? Now?”
“Jesus, just trying to lighten the fucking mood” Danielle says.
Clementine lays down by a rock opposite to the side of the road of Melody and Jeremy.
“It’s just so many problems, and i don’t know what to think of any of them, and i have really no motivation to think about them neither. Why are we doing this, seriously?” Clem says.
Bryan looks a little bit at Clem, but returns his focus to the guarding.
Melody is still looking at the gray sky.
“I’m a fucking failure.” Clem says.
Bryan looks a bit longer at Clem, with surprised eyes.
“All I’ve done is cause more and more pain. I’m just afraid, stressed, depressed and so much more that i can’t even keep track of BECAUSE I’M TIRED, TIRED OF LIFE.”
“I don’t know what to feel, what to say, what to do, nothing.”
“It’s my fault for everything, such as Lee.” Clem now sheds a tear.
“I can neither keep track of how many days I’ve though about ending it.”
Bryan now completely turns, looking almost like he’s about to cry.
Clementine now looks at the grey sky as well, but it turns all of a sudden into a clear blue color, with the sun on the other side.
“Charlie?” Clem says, getting teary in her eye with joy.
Charlie runs into Clem and hugs her for the longest of times.
“I’ve missed you.” Charlie says.
“Me too.” Clementine says.
Charlie gives Clementine a kiss on the cheek.
They hug eachother once more.
“Oh, how can i forget? You have to come and see the others!” Charlie says.
“The others?” Clem says.
Clementine sees her house.
“Follow me.” Charlie says.
They enter the house, and, well, everyone is there, yes, everyone.
“I told you we had to continue having hope, look where we are now!” Katjaa says.
“Did you handle those batteries better than i did?” Carley says.
“Oh, uh, hi Clem!” Doug says.
“I’ve missed you little darlin’” Kenny says.
“No more bugs in my pillows, okay Clem?” Duck says.
Everyone was there, it was too much for Clem to even comprehend. Except the final one.
Clementine started to cry.
“Lee?” Clem said, bursting with tears of joy and relief.
“I’ve missed you, sweet pea.
Clementine is more happy then ever before.
She goes outside and lays down in the grass to take everything in, and looks at the sky, it still has the beautiful clear blue color and the very strong sun.
(Stop Music Here).
BOOM
It instantly turned gray.
“OH GOD, ARE YOU THERE SWEETIE? PLEASE, TALK TO ME!” Jeremy is screaming.
“Jesus...” Bryan says to himself.
Danielle is just standing there, shocked.
Clementine finally looks down.
Clementine sees Melody, she has dropped her gun, her hand is completely lifeless, Clem then looks up to her face, she's...
Dead.
Yep, this one was depressing.
If you were wondering, what i was going for here was basically a focus on how humans actually feel.
I enjoyed that last part, hope, then instantly to, well, yeah.
If some people can't really relate to how e.g Clem feels, i hope this post is not complete shit. I think though that those precise parts are fine with me as i can relate.
Again, comment below what you think just as always, and i hope you "enjoyed" it.
Sorry that i didn't write about Ken/Pas, but i feel way more confident with the cabin group.
If anyone wants me to explain what happened, comment down below as well.
So, seems like @MegaMoto didn't really understand so he wanted me to edit the post, though i felt like some of the things would end up making the writing bad, i'll just clarify. Clem was dreaming. And what happened to Mel i'll just reveal in another post in which someone explains what happened. Though this post also says what happens pretty obviously. Seriously, it says "dropped her gun", "completely lifeless", "she's... dead".
“Stop.” Clementine says.
“Wha-“ Jeremy says before getting cut off.
“Now.” Clem says, very seriously.
Everyone stops.
“What the he… morell are we doing? We’re walking to this unknown place that may just shoot us on sight, eat us and what not. I’ve had ENOUGH of this bullshit, i don’t wanna deal with anything more, i just want our group and that is it. We can’t trust ANYONE anymore. ” Clem says, angry.
Everyone continues walking. It is silent for a while.
“Just walk away then. Leave us.” Danielle says whilst eating half an apple.
“Nah, i feel like it’d be to dangerous to leave you alone. I mean, come on, without me, you would most likely be eating human flesh, not a non deserved apple.” Clementine says.
Danielle points the finger at Clem, though a little slowly.
“Sorry you only have your right arm to point it, i know you’re a lefty after all.”
Danielle throws her apple at Clem in anger. Though Clem catches it.
“Thank you… [view original content]
“Stop.” Clementine says.
“Wha-“ Jeremy says before getting cut off.
“Now.” Clem says, very seriously.
Everyone stops.
“What the he… morell are we doing? We’re walking to this unknown place that may just shoot us on sight, eat us and what not. I’ve had ENOUGH of this bullshit, i don’t wanna deal with anything more, i just want our group and that is it. We can’t trust ANYONE anymore. ” Clem says, angry.
Everyone continues walking. It is silent for a while.
“Just walk away then. Leave us.” Danielle says whilst eating half an apple.
“Nah, i feel like it’d be to dangerous to leave you alone. I mean, come on, without me, you would most likely be eating human flesh, not a non deserved apple.” Clementine says.
Danielle points the finger at Clem, though a little slowly.
“Sorry you only have your right arm to point it, i know you’re a lefty after all.”
Danielle throws her apple at Clem in anger. Though Clem catches it.
“Thank you… [view original content]
Could you explain, er everything. Did Clem say "I can't count how many days I've tried to end it." We've been with her the whole time I think we would have noticed. Also did she just die for a minute there and see all the dead people (except Kenny who isn't dead so that makes it stranger). Lastly WHAT THE FUCK happened to Melody. I'm all for deaths (this is the walking dead) but again they have to make sense. Please clarify before we continue.
Lemme just answer it. We haven't been with her the whole time, there have been numerous times in which we have followed others, and time has passed with Clem alone.
She didn't die, just dream, and yes, she thinks Kenny is dead, that's why she sees him.
Melody?
Dead, it was super obvious in my eyes (though i obviously wrote it, but i mean, come on, "lifeless hand", "she was... Dead").
Could you explain, er everything. Did Clem say "I can't count how many days I've tried to end it." We've been with her the whole time I think … morewe would have noticed. Also did she just die for a minute there and see all the dead people (except Kenny who isn't dead so that makes it stranger). Lastly WHAT THE FUCK happened to Melody. I'm all for deaths (this is the walking dead) but again they have to make sense. Please clarify before we continue.
How did Melody die? She just killed herself ? I still don't think Clem would try to kill herself let along multiple times, maybe she thought about, that's still pretty dark. Also so Clem just passed out ? I don't know... I think it's a bit much, but I also like the dark angle. I think it's the fact that things have been peaceful for so long that going right back into grim dark so fast is jarring. I just think it's a bit much. Also hard to understand. Sorry if I came off hostile. Just giving my thoughts.
Lemme just answer it. We haven't been with her the whole time, there have been numerous times in which we have followed others, and time has p… moreassed with Clem alone.
She didn't die, just dream, and yes, she thinks Kenny is dead, that's why she sees him.
Melody?
Dead, it was super obvious in my eyes (though i obviously wrote it, but i mean, come on, "lifeless hand", "she was... Dead").
No need to go all hostile dude, jesus.
Well, there is yet another reason in which i'll give out later on.
But yes, the amount of shit everyone there has gone through does end up in some rather depressive thoughts to say the least, so Melody has reasons. Yes, she killed herself.
But yes, the Clem suicide part was to much, i'll admit that.
But NO, she did NOT pass out, you obviously got the wrong definition of what dreaming is, lol. She was just simply dreaming, she didn't pass out or anything.
How did Melody die? She just killed herself ? I still don't think Clem would try to kill herself let along multiple times, maybe she thought a… morebout, that's still pretty dark. Also so Clem just passed out ? I don't know... I think it's a bit much, but I also like the dark angle. I think it's the fact that things have been peaceful for so long that going right back into grim dark so fast is jarring. I just think it's a bit much. Also hard to understand. Sorry if I came off hostile. Just giving my thoughts.
Here's my suggestion and it's just suggestion. Change it so Clem says I thought of killing my self, for a kid her age it's still pretty dark. Also maybe make things a bit more clear, you know what I mean. I was confused by the whole Melody thing and for awhile thought she had been killed by Clem or someone else not by her own hand. Also make it clear that thing that happened before was a dream. Just a suggestion.
Well, there is yet another reason in which i'll give out later on.
But yes, the amount of shit everyone there has gone through does end up … morein some rather depressive thoughts to say the least, so Melody has reasons. Yes, she killed herself.
But yes, the Clem suicide part was to much, i'll admit that.
But NO, she did NOT pass out, you obviously got the wrong definition of what dreaming is, lol. She was just simply dreaming, she didn't pass out or anything.
Here's my suggestion and it's just suggestion. Change it so Clem says I thought of killing my self, for a kid her age it's still pretty dark. … moreAlso maybe make things a bit more clear, you know what I mean. I was confused by the whole Melody thing and for awhile thought she had been killed by Clem or someone else not by her own hand. Also make it clear that thing that happened before was a dream. Just a suggestion.
I already changed it before so that Clem thought of it for like 10 minutes ago.
By her own hand? WHAT? She shot herself! A boom isn't what you hear when you move a hand.
I never stated that she pulled out a gun nor put it to her head, just that she had dropped her gun, seriously, why choke yourself then randomly drop your gun, besides, somebody would stop her from choking herself, though she can be fast enough with a gun (like in this case).
And it would be dumb to state that she literally pulled out her gun etc. seriously, who would wake up by that? Besides, all tension would be instantly gone and you would immediately know who died, boring, it is way more interesting when you gotta think or you're about to find out something shocking (cough TWAU EP 1 Ending cough).
I never stated that she pulled out a gun nor put it to her head, just that she had dropped her gun, seriously, why choke yourself then randoml… morey drop your gun, besides, somebody would stop her from choking herself, though she can be fast enough with a gun (like in this case).
And it would be dumb to state that she literally pulled out her gun etc. seriously, who would wake up by that? Besides, all tension would be instantly gone and you would immediately know who died, boring, it is way more interesting when you gotta think or you're about to find out something shocking (cough TWAU EP 1 Ending cough).
I'll just include that in the notes, don't feel like adding a "She realized it was just a dream" will improve anything, only make it worse.
The simplicity of "It went gray instantly" is good IMO.
Seriously, it says "dropped her gun", "completely lifeless", "she's... dead".
It wasn't the fact that she was dead that confused me but how and why. It wasn't written clearly, and the fact that it was so random (which I get was the point) didn't help with the celerity.
“Stop.” Clementine says.
“Wha-“ Jeremy says before getting cut off.
“Now.” Clem says, very seriously.
Everyone stops.
“What the he… morell are we doing? We’re walking to this unknown place that may just shoot us on sight, eat us and what not. I’ve had ENOUGH of this bullshit, i don’t wanna deal with anything more, i just want our group and that is it. We can’t trust ANYONE anymore. ” Clem says, angry.
Everyone continues walking. It is silent for a while.
“Just walk away then. Leave us.” Danielle says whilst eating half an apple.
“Nah, i feel like it’d be to dangerous to leave you alone. I mean, come on, without me, you would most likely be eating human flesh, not a non deserved apple.” Clementine says.
Danielle points the finger at Clem, though a little slowly.
“Sorry you only have your right arm to point it, i know you’re a lefty after all.”
Danielle throws her apple at Clem in anger. Though Clem catches it.
“Thank you… [view original content]
She was a nice woman, who was caught in a terrifying love triangle, always trying to do what's right, but did what's wrong Suicide.
Her Story began at the motor inn, and ended on a rock. Melody, you will always be loved, (By Jeremy) and you can finally live with your lover, (Gus) forever, you chose to take the easy way out, and you won't be forgiven for that... (To see where her long journey starts go here...http://www.telltalegames.com/community/discussion/57902/tales-from-twd-interactive-fanfic/p3)
Tribute to Melody,
She was a nice woman, who was caught in a terrifying love triangle, always trying to do what's right, but did what's wro… moreng Suicide.
Her Story began at the motor inn, and ended on a rock. Melody, you will always be loved, (By Jeremy) and you can finally live with your lover, (Gus) forever, you chose to take the easy way out, and you won't be forgiven for that... (To see where her long journey starts go here...http://www.telltalegames.com/community/discussion/57902/tales-from-twd-interactive-fanfic/p3)
Sorry, but thats complete bullshit. Zasca has worked hard on this thread, continuing to post, and you guys are being absolute dicks. You could have asked and waited for Zasca to fix some things but noooooo, lets all be impatient inbred fucks!
Maybe we would have waited but he was being a huge jerk to everyone and it seemed like he was set in stone and killing off three characters and having a gang war.
Sorry, but thats complete bullshit. Zasca has worked hard on this thread, continuing to post, and you guys are being absolute dicks. You could have asked and waited for Zasca to fix some things but noooooo, lets all be impatient inbred fucks!
Maybe we would have waited but he was being a huge jerk to everyone and it seemed like he was set in stone and killing off three characters and having a gang war.
"Oh god Melody, NO, NO, please god not, MELODY SPEAK TO ME !" Jeremy yelled in a futile effort to get the once energetic Melody to come back. Blood still trickled out of the hole in her head, leaving a pool that was soaking Jeremy pant's as he held her. "I... I'll join you." Jeremy slowly reaches for the gun...
THUMP and arrow lands between the gun and Jeremys hand. Everyone looks at Bryan, he had a hard face on but you could tell he was holding back tears.
"Absolutely not, I won't let anything like this happen again." Bryan said, a small crack was in his voice. "I know things seem bad right now but... we can't give up. I had a hard time finding a reason to live after this whole thing started, but no matter you have to... You keep going because things can always be better, you keep finding something that makes you want to live."
Has words seemed to pierce the group all eyes were on him, even Jeremy's.
"I've been so stupid." Clem said, tears still falling down her cheeks. "I forgot the promise I mad to myself a long time ago, to keep the hope Lee had for things to get better alive in my heart. I won't forget again, thank you Bryan."
.
Jeremy looks at Bryan and then at Melody's body. He remembers her bright eyes that now seemed dull. He takes a deep breath. "I just don't know what to live for anymore, my best friend is dead , and now the girl I loved."
(End the song here)
Bryan walks over to him and puts a hand on his shoulder. "You don't have to find a reason now, but until you do live for yourself." Bryan then turns to the rest of the group. "Come on we need to get out of here, the sound probably attracted ghosts."
(Sorry if the music isn't %100 appropriate it's my first attempt at it, and I was looking for an excuse to use a song from that sound track. IF you feel something is wrong with this post please tell me.)
Approximately 10 months: it's spring and we've had a winter when we've met Tavia. When Lee died it was fall, and Clem and Lee met 5 konths before that, so I think it must've been late spring / early summer when the Apocalypse started
Exactly what i thought, the origins of our characters, like Glenn in Season 1.
Also wondering, does anyone know how many days we are in to the apocalypse?
“Stop.” Clementine says.
“Wha-“ Jeremy says before getting cut off.
“Now.” Clem says, very seriously.
Everyone stops.
“What the he… morell are we doing? We’re walking to this unknown place that may just shoot us on sight, eat us and what not. I’ve had ENOUGH of this bullshit, i don’t wanna deal with anything more, i just want our group and that is it. We can’t trust ANYONE anymore. ” Clem says, angry.
Everyone continues walking. It is silent for a while.
“Just walk away then. Leave us.” Danielle says whilst eating half an apple.
“Nah, i feel like it’d be to dangerous to leave you alone. I mean, come on, without me, you would most likely be eating human flesh, not a non deserved apple.” Clementine says.
Danielle points the finger at Clem, though a little slowly.
“Sorry you only have your right arm to point it, i know you’re a lefty after all.”
Danielle throws her apple at Clem in anger. Though Clem catches it.
“Thank you… [view original content]
Tribute to Melody,
She was a nice woman, who was caught in a terrifying love triangle, always trying to do what's right, but did what's wro… moreng Suicide.
Her Story began at the motor inn, and ended on a rock. Melody, you will always be loved, (By Jeremy) and you can finally live with your lover, (Gus) forever, you chose to take the easy way out, and you won't be forgiven for that... (To see where her long journey starts go here...http://www.telltalegames.com/community/discussion/57902/tales-from-twd-interactive-fanfic/p3)
You did it again, folks, killing off one of my fav charas sniif sniff HSB, you're getting a new nick: "The Killer"
Just kiddin'. Well done, can't wait for more, I'm out of ideas, though. The only thing that bothers me is leaving the house because of a fallen candle (a classic). I'm curious where the group is going to end up.
Asking him? Even before he has posted his opener he already said he'll "fight" if we decide to disregard his post, and he didn't accept any changes either. He also said it'll be his last post and "The FUCK I care"... How would we know he's actually going to return and even offering to edit his post? We've already voted. He was stubborn, skittish and overly unfriendly - maybe he should learn to think before he speaks.
Sorry, but thats complete bullshit. Zasca has worked hard on this thread, continuing to post, and you guys are being absolute dicks. You could have asked and waited for Zasca to fix some things but noooooo, lets all be impatient inbred fucks!
Comments
As long as you know the character, yes, though i'd say it'd be good if you post it here first before there just so we can review it.
Oh poop. I already posted it over there... sorry.... But i do know her character...
Will HSP be going soon ?
Postin' in a sec.
“Stop.” Clementine says.
“Wha-“ Jeremy says before getting cut off.
“Now.” Clem says, very seriously.
Everyone stops.
“What the hell are we doing? We’re walking to this unknown place that may just shoot us on sight, eat us and what not. I’ve had ENOUGH of this bullshit, i don’t wanna deal with anything more, i just want our group and that is it. We can’t trust ANYONE anymore. ” Clem says, angry.
Everyone continues walking. It is silent for a while.
“Just walk away then. Leave us.” Danielle says whilst eating half an apple.
“Nah, i feel like it’d be to dangerous to leave you alone. I mean, come on, without me, you would most likely be eating human flesh, not a non deserved apple.” Clementine says.
Danielle points the finger at Clem, though a little slowly.
“Sorry you only have your right arm to point it, i know you’re a lefty after all.”
Danielle throws her apple at Clem in anger. Though Clem catches it.
“Thank you.”
Clementine eats it.
The apple makes Clem think of the Motor Inn, and everyone there, especially Lee.
Clementine immediately losses her neutral smile, and turns sad.
“Oh, and NOW you’re going soft now aren’t yo-“ Danielle says before getting cut off.
“STOP IT! I’VE HAD ENOUGH OF THIS, ALL I WANT IS SAFETY, JUST LIKE YOU ALL DO, BUT WE’RE NEVER GONNA GET IT, FACE IT! NEVER!” Melody screams before starting to cry.
Everyone, once again, stops.
“WE HAVE MORE TO WORRY ABOUT, THEN YOUR FUCKING ARM, AND YOUR FUCKING MOOD.” Melody says whilst crying, and pointing at Clem and Danielle.
Melody walks to a big rock by the side of a road, and lays down there.
“Please, lets just, take one problem at a time.” Melody has now calmed down.
“Now please, don’t ask me any questions, because i don’t know anymore. I don’t know what to do, what to think, why we’re doing this, why this is happening to us. I just need some, rest.”
Jeremy walks to Melody, and lays down next to her.
“I’m sorry.” Jeremy says.
One problem at a time.
“Okay, well, Kenny and Pascucci is our main concern right now, right?” Clem says.
Everyone nods, except Melody, who’s just looking at the gray sky.
“We must find them. End of story.” Jeremy says, whilst Danielle nods.
“We have no idea where they are or what their current state is, we might just be searching for corpses.” Clementine says.
Clementine looks at Bryan who is guarding them. He doesn’t say anything.
“Well, searching for em’ is the majority here, so...” Danielle says.
“But we might just risk our lives for nothing.” Clem says.
“Well, there are so many buts s-“ Jeremy says before getting cut off by a laughing Danielle.
“Come on, really? Now?”
“Jesus, just trying to lighten the fucking mood” Danielle says.
Clementine lays down by a rock opposite to the side of the road of Melody and Jeremy.
“It’s just so many problems, and i don’t know what to think of any of them, and i have really no motivation to think about them neither. Why are we doing this, seriously?” Clem says.
Bryan looks a little bit at Clem, but returns his focus to the guarding.
Melody is still looking at the gray sky.
“I’m a fucking failure.” Clem says.
Bryan looks a bit longer at Clem, with surprised eyes.
“All I’ve done is cause more and more pain. I’m just afraid, stressed, depressed and so much more that i can’t even keep track of BECAUSE I’M TIRED, TIRED OF LIFE.”
“I don’t know what to feel, what to say, what to do, nothing.”
“It’s my fault for everything, such as Lee.” Clem now sheds a tear.
“I can neither keep track of how many days I’ve though about ending it.”
Bryan now completely turns, looking almost like he’s about to cry.
Clementine now looks at the grey sky as well, but it turns all of a sudden into a clear blue color, with the sun on the other side.
“Clem?” A familiar voice says.
Amazing Song, Seriously.
“Clementine? Is that you?”
Clementine simply smiles.
“Charlie?” Clem says, getting teary in her eye with joy.
Charlie runs into Clem and hugs her for the longest of times.
“I’ve missed you.” Charlie says.
“Me too.” Clementine says.
Charlie gives Clementine a kiss on the cheek.
They hug eachother once more.
“Oh, how can i forget? You have to come and see the others!” Charlie says.
“The others?” Clem says.
Clementine sees her house.
“Follow me.” Charlie says.
They enter the house, and, well, everyone is there, yes, everyone.
“I told you we had to continue having hope, look where we are now!” Katjaa says.
“Did you handle those batteries better than i did?” Carley says.
“Oh, uh, hi Clem!” Doug says.
“I’ve missed you little darlin’” Kenny says.
“No more bugs in my pillows, okay Clem?” Duck says.
Everyone was there, it was too much for Clem to even comprehend. Except the final one.
Clementine started to cry.
“Lee?” Clem said, bursting with tears of joy and relief.
“I’ve missed you, sweet pea.
Clementine is more happy then ever before.
She goes outside and lays down in the grass to take everything in, and looks at the sky, it still has the beautiful clear blue color and the very strong sun.
(Stop Music Here).
BOOM
It instantly turned gray.
“OH GOD, ARE YOU THERE SWEETIE? PLEASE, TALK TO ME!” Jeremy is screaming.
“Jesus...” Bryan says to himself.
Danielle is just standing there, shocked.
Clementine finally looks down.
Clementine sees Melody, she has dropped her gun, her hand is completely lifeless, Clem then looks up to her face, she's...
Dead.
Wait i'm confused, what happened to Melody?
Shall i explain?
Nice, oh, and also fuck you, that was real depressing x3.
Thank you! And you're welcome
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Actually, great work, that was awesome.
Yes
Could you explain, er everything. Did Clem say "I can't count how many days I've tried to end it." We've been with her the whole time I think we would have noticed. Also did she just die for a minute there and see all the dead people (except Kenny who isn't dead so that makes it stranger). Lastly WHAT THE FUCK happened to Melody. I'm all for deaths (this is the walking dead) but again they have to make sense. Please clarify before we continue.
Lemme just answer it. We haven't been with her the whole time, there have been numerous times in which we have followed others, and time has passed with Clem alone.
She didn't die, just dream, and yes, she thinks Kenny is dead, that's why she sees him.
Melody?
Dead, it was super obvious in my eyes (though i obviously wrote it, but i mean, come on, "lifeless hand", "she was... Dead").
No need to go all hostile dude, jesus.
How did Melody die? She just killed herself ? I still don't think Clem would try to kill herself let along multiple times, maybe she thought about, that's still pretty dark. Also so Clem just passed out ? I don't know... I think it's a bit much, but I also like the dark angle. I think it's the fact that things have been peaceful for so long that going right back into grim dark so fast is jarring. I just think it's a bit much. Also hard to understand. Sorry if I came off hostile. Just giving my thoughts.
Well, there is yet another reason in which i'll give out later on.
But yes, the amount of shit everyone there has gone through does end up in some rather depressive thoughts to say the least, so Melody has reasons. Yes, she killed herself.
But yes, the Clem suicide part was to much, i'll admit that.
But NO, she did NOT pass out, you obviously got the wrong definition of what dreaming is, lol. She was just simply dreaming, she didn't pass out or anything.
Here's my suggestion and it's just suggestion. Change it so Clem says I thought of killing my self, for a kid her age it's still pretty dark. Also maybe make things a bit more clear, you know what I mean. I was confused by the whole Melody thing and for awhile thought she had been killed by Clem or someone else not by her own hand. Also make it clear that thing that happened before was a dream. Just a suggestion.
I already changed it before so that Clem thought of it for like 10 minutes ago.
By her own hand? WHAT? She shot herself! A boom isn't what you hear when you move a hand.
You never actually state that Melody pulled out her gun and put it to her head, and the last sentence confused me to whom shot what.
I never stated that she pulled out a gun nor put it to her head, just that she had dropped her gun, seriously, why choke yourself then randomly drop your gun, besides, somebody would stop her from choking herself, though she can be fast enough with a gun (like in this case).
And it would be dumb to state that she literally pulled out her gun etc. seriously, who would wake up by that? Besides, all tension would be instantly gone and you would immediately know who died, boring, it is way more interesting when you gotta think or you're about to find out something shocking (cough TWAU EP 1 Ending cough).
Okay, Okay fine. Can you make it clear when Clem goes into a dream though ?
I'll just include that in the notes, don't feel like adding a "She realized it was just a dream" will improve anything, only make it worse.
The simplicity of "It went gray instantly" is good IMO.
I was thinking of something more subtle like... "She closed her eyes and when she opened them the sky was grey."
That would work to, but still be the same sort of "message".
It wasn't the fact that she was dead that confused me but how and why. It wasn't written clearly, and the fact that it was so random (which I get was the point) didn't help with the celerity.
Tribute to Melody,
She was a nice woman, who was caught in a terrifying love triangle, always trying to do what's right, but did what's wrong Suicide.
Her Story began at the motor inn, and ended on a rock. Melody, you will always be loved, (By Jeremy) and you can finally live with your lover, (Gus) forever, you chose to take the easy way out, and you won't be forgiven for that... (To see where her long journey starts go here...http://www.telltalegames.com/community/discussion/57902/tales-from-twd-interactive-fanfic/p3)
Not a fan of suicide huh...
Nope
Sorry, but thats complete bullshit. Zasca has worked hard on this thread, continuing to post, and you guys are being absolute dicks. You could have asked and waited for Zasca to fix some things but noooooo, lets all be impatient inbred fucks!
Maybe we would have waited but he was being a huge jerk to everyone and it seemed like he was set in stone and killing off three characters and having a gang war.
We didnt know J, M and B were dead though did we? Clem presumed so.
The gang war could have been interesting if done right.
But the whole war thing has already happened, no point in telling the same story twice, right?
No it couldn't, we've seen it a million times. The group made a decision it's time to move on.
We saw it with Ken, Clem and Pas fought Tavias community once.
If it was a threeway done in diffrent circumstances it could have been done well
Yea because adding one other group that won't matter will make it so much better.
Play the song while you read !
Play this while your read
"Oh god Melody, NO, NO, please god not, MELODY SPEAK TO ME !" Jeremy yelled in a futile effort to get the once energetic Melody to come back. Blood still trickled out of the hole in her head, leaving a pool that was soaking Jeremy pant's as he held her. "I... I'll join you." Jeremy slowly reaches for the gun...
THUMP and arrow lands between the gun and Jeremys hand. Everyone looks at Bryan, he had a hard face on but you could tell he was holding back tears.
"Absolutely not, I won't let anything like this happen again." Bryan said, a small crack was in his voice. "I know things seem bad right now but... we can't give up. I had a hard time finding a reason to live after this whole thing started, but no matter you have to... You keep going because things can always be better, you keep finding something that makes you want to live."
Has words seemed to pierce the group all eyes were on him, even Jeremy's.
"I've been so stupid." Clem said, tears still falling down her cheeks. "I forgot the promise I mad to myself a long time ago, to keep the hope Lee had for things to get better alive in my heart. I won't forget again, thank you Bryan."
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Jeremy looks at Bryan and then at Melody's body. He remembers her bright eyes that now seemed dull. He takes a deep breath. "I just don't know what to live for anymore, my best friend is dead , and now the girl I loved."
(End the song here)
Bryan walks over to him and puts a hand on his shoulder. "You don't have to find a reason now, but until you do live for yourself." Bryan then turns to the rest of the group. "Come on we need to get out of here, the sound probably attracted ghosts."
(Sorry if the music isn't %100 appropriate it's my first attempt at it, and I was looking for an excuse to use a song from that sound track. IF you feel something is wrong with this post please tell me.)
Approximately 10 months: it's spring and we've had a winter when we've met Tavia. When Lee died it was fall, and Clem and Lee met 5 konths before that, so I think it must've been late spring / early summer when the Apocalypse started
Omfg, them feeeeeeels!
Sniff sniff I can't bear all them feels
You did it again, folks, killing off one of my fav charas sniif sniff HSB, you're getting a new nick: "The Killer"
Just kiddin'. Well done, can't wait for more, I'm out of ideas, though. The only thing that bothers me is leaving the house because of a fallen candle (a classic). I'm curious where the group is going to end up.
Asking him? Even before he has posted his opener he already said he'll "fight" if we decide to disregard his post, and he didn't accept any changes either. He also said it'll be his last post and "The FUCK I care"... How would we know he's actually going to return and even offering to edit his post? We've already voted. He was stubborn, skittish and overly unfriendly - maybe he should learn to think before he speaks.