Thanks for explaining. It all finally makes sense now:D
I gues we just have to find out about the dangerous group Kenny was talking about later in the story then. ( That would also be a good way to introduce the new Antagonist, you said you already had something in your mind)
Okay, my plot holes need to be filled. I do indeed have answers!! Tavia was chased downstream by walkers. I just forgot to say that. And they … moredrove away because they got swarmed by walkers, and they were afraid if they didn't, the walkers would get into the car and....y'know. Hope this helped.
Lola took a walk. She was angry and hurt. All she ever wanted was to feel like she belonged, ever since shit went down. She remembered Sean, her boyfriend and the conversation they had. "Are you sure this is a good idea?" Lola asked. "We can make it, we just got to run really fast." Sean replied. Sean was always reckless, but he was brave and saved her life on a number of occasions. The thing that killed her most was being unsure if he was alive or not. As they were running they were separated and the last she saw of him was climbing onto a van and ushering her to keep going. She had been alone ever since. She was happy that she found these people and she even killed for them. What else could she do to make them trust her. Wyatt was her friend and seemed to trust her the most. She appreciated that.
Vince reminded her of Sean. He was a natural leader and it seemed Vince was keeping everyone in check. For the first time on what seemed like forever, Lola felt safe. Her train of thought was interrupted when she heard voices. Looking around the corner she took at deep breath. A group of people were on their way to the hideout. It was only a matter of time before they would pass by. "They could be friendly" Lola thought. "Or they could be...unfriendly". Not wasting anymore time Lola ran back towards the hideout. She needed to warn the others.
Just thought I'd give Lola a bit more character development since shes the only original character alive right now. anyway hope you like it.
Yes i like it! We rly needed to find out more about her character, she kinda reminds me of Michonne from the coomics, or Molly from the game. A strong independent women, that was on her own for a long time, trying to fit in a new group of people. Atleast that's how i see her:D
Lola took a walk. She was angry and hurt. All she ever wanted was to feel like she belonged, ever since shit went down. She remembered Sean, h… moreer boyfriend and the conversation they had. "Are you sure this is a good idea?" Lola asked. "We can make it, we just got to run really fast." Sean replied. Sean was always reckless, but he was brave and saved her life on a number of occasions. The thing that killed her most was being unsure if he was alive or not. As they were running they were separated and the last she saw of him was climbing onto a van and ushering her to keep going. She had been alone ever since. She was happy that she found these people and she even killed for them. What else could she do to make them trust her. Wyatt was her friend and seemed to trust her the most. She appreciated that.
Vince reminded her of Sean. He was a natural leader and it seemed Vince was keeping everyone in check. For the first time on what seemed like forev… [view original content]
Lola took a walk. She was angry and hurt. All she ever wanted was to feel like she belonged, ever since shit went down. She remembered Sean, h… moreer boyfriend and the conversation they had. "Are you sure this is a good idea?" Lola asked. "We can make it, we just got to run really fast." Sean replied. Sean was always reckless, but he was brave and saved her life on a number of occasions. The thing that killed her most was being unsure if he was alive or not. As they were running they were separated and the last she saw of him was climbing onto a van and ushering her to keep going. She had been alone ever since. She was happy that she found these people and she even killed for them. What else could she do to make them trust her. Wyatt was her friend and seemed to trust her the most. She appreciated that.
Vince reminded her of Sean. He was a natural leader and it seemed Vince was keeping everyone in check. For the first time on what seemed like forev… [view original content]
Yes i know, i liked the ideas but maybe they won´t fit the story anymore if we we finally get this far...speaking of which, let's go on then s… morehall we?
The first candidate on Vincent's list was Kenny. " The man must have been going though hell lately, geting abused by this sick man. I can't even immagine what kind of torture technics Carver did use on him. " Vincent said to himself as he was walking towards the noticable angry Kenny. " Hey Ken, how you holding up? I thought you could use something to eat. " Vincent said as he was handing out the fresh piece of steak to Kenny. " Oh Jackpot, today gotta be my birthday! I was afraid i would have to nourish on tuna for the rest of my life. " Kenny said as his condition was noticable getting better. " Haha, i'm afraid that's an offer i can only make you for today. Enjoy it Ken, you deserve it. " Vincent happily respondet. " Now to the next one. " Vincent said as he was heading towards Wyatt. " Here… [view original content]
Yes i like it! We rly needed to find out more about her character, she kinda reminds me of Michonne from the coomics, or Molly from the game. … moreA strong independent women, that was on her own for a long time, trying to fit in a new group of people. Atleast that's how i see her:D
Russel finally awoke pain aching in all his muscles. He rose from the cot and found a boiled egg in a bowl beside the bed on a table. He picked it up and popped it into his mouth happily. He walked out the bar door and was greeted by all his friends. "Glad your back!" Vince said. "We missed you." Wyatt said. "Welcome back" Kenny said. Tavia however just smiled at him. Then Russel saw someone running toward them a girl... the one that was working with Carver. "Guys can we trust her? Wasn't she helping Carver kill us?" Russel asked. "She didn't know like Tavia here and well, she joined us. Shes not that bad." Wyatt answered. The girl named Lola reached them "Guys theirs another group out there that I saw in the woods heading this way!" Lola said looking tired. "I say we hide and wait for them to pass by. We can hide on the bar roof and bring our supplies up too" Vince decided. They all went inside the bar. There were four guns, Vince, Kenny, Lola, and Wyatt took one. Everyone grabbed a knife and put it in their pocket. Vince, Tavia, and Russel took a flashlight. And they all went onto the bar roof and hid behind anything that could cover them. Kenny carried the food and medicine bags up. "Whatever happens stick together guys" Vince said. The other group walked along the road and everyone was holding their breath ready to shoot if need be.
It was a group of 8-9 people lead by a tall man dressed as a priest, about 40 with short, black hair, and a goatee, followed closely by a Short, young woman, about 20 with round glasses, dressed in a pink smock top, and black skirt. She whispered things into the priest's ear, as he nodded. "Friends. Thou cannot hide. Step forward, and speak, friends." The man said, softly. he was quiet, and had a slight french accent. Vince slowly stepped forward, gun still up. "It's ok, friends. I am father Dominique. This is my right hand woman, Patricia. And the others are the believers. We believe god will save us from this catastrophe, if we put our faith into it. We live in the church down yonder. We see you are staying in this......bar. We believe it is sin-ridden, vile place. We are here to invite you to stay with us." Father Dominique smiled. Vince huddled up with the group. "What about this. We eat some food, make some excuse, and leave. They're men of god, they won't hold it against us." Vince suggested. Everyone agreed, and they went. They all gathered in the massive church. They could barely see the roof, and it took 45 seconds to run from end to end of it! There was a massive table in the middle, where everyone sat down to eat. They ate tomatoes, and talked. Everyone had a good time, until Russel passed out. "Wait was he injured?!" Patricia asked. "Yeah why?" Wyatt answered. "Sleeping pills take effect faster on injured people." Father Dominique answered, as Wyatt passed out, then Vince, and Lola tried to run, as she fainted too. Tavia was out too. Everyone awoke, tied to beds. "Ok, you woke up. good. I guess you deserve an explaination. We make ritual sacrifices to our lord. We find dying survivors, and we kill them. We believe that walkers exist to kill the sinners, so we speed up the process, by sacrificing to show our devotion." Dominique said, as Patricia handed him an axe. "Alright guys, time to die. Hope you go to heaven." They said, as Wyatt wriggled a hand free, without anyone noticing.
" Okay guys lets go, we catch them by suprise. " Vincent whispered as the group was coming out of their hideouts. " We don't wanna hurt you people, just tell us what you want and you can walk off in peace. Nobody needs to get hurt here. " Vincent said to the foreign group while they were holding their guns and rifles up, rdy to shot if it was needed. Vincent was taking a closer look at the other group. The one of them who seemed to be the leader, was a tall muscular man wearing a black leather jacket. There was a old women and she didn't look healthy in Vincent's eyes. There also was a slighty older man, who also seemed to have a disease. " Well well...would you look at this. Come out behind their Kenny, show yourself. We where searching for you for weeks now. " The younger man said. " What? Kenny man you know this people? Who are they? " Wyatt confuselly asked. " Yes i know them, it's the group i was talking about when we first met Wyatt. " Kenny sighted. " I want you to answer my question...what the hell do you want from us? " Vincent loudly asked the other group. " What we want is what you got...send Kenny outa here and we won't hurt anyone. " The mysterious man respondet. " We can't do that, he is part of our group. Look i don't know what happened between the two of you, but i think now might be a good time for an explanation. " Vincent answered. " Alright, let's talk this though then first. This motherfucker up there stole our boat, he's the reason one of our friend's got biten and died. And after he did that he couldn't just leave us in piece, no he returned to steal our food and supplies. " The man said in a tone of anger. " What is he talking about? Is that true Ken? " a astonished Russel asked. " Look guys, it's not what you are thinking. Yes i stole that goddamn boat, but they stole it from us first! I just toke back what belonged to me. And yes i did steal their food and supplies, but i didn't have any other choice. It was freezing cold and i was starving, i tryed to convince them to forgive me and help me out, but they said they would be happyer to see my corpse rote and getting eaten by Walkers. " Kenny respondet with a ducked head. " Bullshit, this fucker screwed us up one time and that wasn't enough for him. He had to come back to screw us up another time. " The man screamed with a tone of hate in his words. " Are you telling the truth Kenny? Look me in the eyes and say that you are telling the truth. " Lola said as she was looking at Kenny. " Yes Lola, ofcourse i am. " Kenny said and Vincent was sure he could see tears coming down from his eyes. " That's enough proof for me. Don't worry Kenny, we won't just get rid of you and ditch you out of the group. " Vincent respondet with a smile on his face. " Damn right we aren't. " Wyat said and he was very convinced. " Hell yea. " Russel said and the 3 were sharing looks with each other. " So that's how it's gonna be haa? I tryed my best to be friendly with you people and i wish it wouldn't have to be going down this way. But in that case we will just have to force you to hand out Kenny to us. " The man said and grabbed his weapon.
Ooops, it lookes like we both Posted our parts of the story at the same time...sorry i didn't see you were already writting. I suggest we do a vote now and decide with what Post we wanna cointinue the story.
My villain can become.......real.
It was a group of 8-9 people lead by a tall man dressed as a priest, about 40 with short, black hair, and… more a goatee, followed closely by a Short, young woman, about 20 with round glasses, dressed in a pink smock top, and black skirt. She whispered things into the priest's ear, as he nodded. "Friends. Thou cannot hide. Step forward, and speak, friends." The man said, softly. he was quiet, and had a slight french accent. Vince slowly stepped forward, gun still up. "It's ok, friends. I am father Dominique. This is my right hand woman, Patricia. And the others are the believers. We believe god will save us from this catastrophe, if we put our faith into it. We live in the church down yonder. We see you are staying in this......bar. We believe it is sin-ridden, vile place. We are here to invite you to stay with us." Father Dominique smiled. Vince huddled up with the group. "What about this. We eat some food, make s… [view original content]
Ooops, it lookes like we both Posted our parts of the story at the same time...sorry i didn't see you were already writting. I suggest we do a vote now and decide with what Post we wanna cointinue the story.
No man i like your part! This religious culture is even more fucked up then the ST Jons:D...but i put alot work into my part aswell so i would be dissapointed if it just dissapears.
But i think i found a sollution that will make both of us satisfied...
Edit to my Post: As the dangerous man grabbed his gun, arrows and spears flew though the air and The man and his group were falling dead to the ground. Suddenly another group approuched, slowly coming out of the woods.
This also explains why the group just trusted them and went with them. After what Carver did to them i think they wouldn't just react like this... i hope you are happy now because i am!
No man i like your part! This religious culture is even more fucked up then the ST Jons:D...but i put alot work into my part aswell so i would… more be dissapointed if it just dissapears.
But i think i found a sollution that will make both of us satisfied...
Edit to my Post: As the dangerous man grabbed his gun, arrows and spears flew though the air and The man and his group were falling dead to the ground. Suddenly another group approuched, slowly coming out of the woods.
This also explains why the group just trusted them and went with them. After what Carver did to them i think they wouldn't just react like this... i hope you are happy now because i am!
Yes I didn't say who the group was so you could show us this new "antagonist". No offense but we copied episode 2 WAY too much. So your group is starving and you have to choose who to feed (the feeding sequence). One group comes along and threatens them then they get owned real quick and some priests who pretend that they saved you invite you to come to church to eat (St Johns offering food). In five sentences they're already strapped into beds waiting to be sacrificed(hello new meatlocker). I'm not saying its bad but that went by a little fast .
It sure did...but atleast now that we combined our 2 Posts (the way i Edited my Post), makes it more believable that the group would have went with them. After everything they have been thoug lately (Carver), they wouldn't go with a group of strangers just like that.
Yes I didn't say who the group was so you could show us this new "antagonist". No offense but we copied episode 2 WAY too much. So your group… more is starving and you have to choose who to feed (the feeding sequence). One group comes along and threatens them then they get owned real quick and some priests who pretend that they saved you invite you to come to church to eat (St Johns offering food). In five sentences they're already strapped into beds waiting to be sacrificed(hello new meatlocker). I'm not saying its bad but that went by a little fast .
Still. The priests were strangers... Wouldn't you think they would avoid strangers? Who cares if their hungry? After Carver they shouldn't be trusting much people. But then again that's just my opinion. "When it comes to leaving I bet your in the stay put camp" Kenny said. Yes I am there and I guess that makes me a Lilly .
It sure did...but atleast now that we combined our 2 Posts (the way i Edited my Post), makes it more believable that the group would have went… more with them. After everything they have been thoug lately (Carver), they wouldn't go with a group of strangers just like that.
Yes i agree, they would definitely try to avoid strangers. It was different in Season1 when we met the St Jons, we haven't been though the experiences this group had yet. I honestly doubt Kenny would go with a couple of strangers just to get some food after what happened at the dairy. (excspecially with a bunch of crazy priests:)
Still. The priests were strangers... Wouldn't you think they would avoid strangers? Who cares if their hungry? After Carver they shouldn't be … moretrusting much people. But then again that's just my opinion. "When it comes to leaving I bet your in the stay put camp" Kenny said. Yes I am there and I guess that makes me a Lilly .
Yes i agree, they would definitely try to avoid strangers. It was different in Season1 when we met the St Jons, we haven't been though the exp… moreeriences this group had yet. I honestly doubt Kenny would go with a couple of strangers just to get some food after what happened at the dairy. (excspecially with a bunch of crazy priests:)
You are not beeing mean. I wasn't the one who wrote it:D
Well how about a flashback or something? Wyatt remembed when the group packed their stuff and got ready to go with the other group. They couldn't have known that something like this was gonna happen.
And go on like this, that's the only way i can think of to get rid of the Plotholes:D
I wanted to get to know the old people and we didn't even know the name of the leather jacket dude (It's Roman isn't it? XD) Anyway lets just go with yours and then after is maxbear's.
You are not beeing mean. I wasn't the one who wrote it:D
Well how about a flashback or something? Wyatt remembed when the group packed thei… morer stuff and got ready to go with the other group. They couldn't have known that something like this was gonna happen.
And go on like this, that's the only way i can think of to get rid of the Plotholes:D
I wanted to get to know the old people and we didn't even know the name of the leather jacket dude (It's Roman isn't it? XD) Anyway lets just go with yours and then after is maxbear's.
Wyatt found the knife in his pocket and started cutting quietly at his bonds. Dominique raised the axe getting ready to strike Vince with an evil smirk on his face. Wyatt threw his knife to Lola first and he slowly picked up his pistol off a nearby table and shot Dominique straight through the head. His body crumpled to the floor and Patricia screamed and the next bullet hit her straight into the heart. In that time Lola had freed all the others and they walked downstairs finding at least 100 of the priests in the grand hall. All the tables were pushed to the side and their was no light except some candles and all the priests were praying all faced towards the opposite direction of the door except two guards watching the door... the only way out. "One of us has to distract them.... So the rest of us can escape" Vince said a frown on his face. In that moment everyone looked at each other wondering who it was going to be. "I'll do it. I don't deserve to live after betraying you guys" said Tavia. Russel said something similar but everyone else was quiet. "Russel you saved my life and if Tavia wants to do it then nobody's stopping her." Wyatt said hoping one of his best friends wouldn't die. They all had to agree because they wanted to survive. "When you get back to the bar get everything that you can for the journey. When you walk outside turn left and keep following the road. There will be a guard and tell him Tavia sent you and he'll ask you what the password is. The password is SAFE. Trust me you NEED to get to Wellington" Tavia said. "How will we find it?" Vince asked. "You'll know it when you see it." Tavia said and she traded pistols with Wyatt and walked to the front of the room. The group watched sadly as she fired a bullet into the ceiling. All the priests stood and used the tables for cover. The two guards with the guns made way to a table and started firing. Tavia fired off the last 2 bullets into 2 priests and hid behind a pillar. The group slipped past the door Vince going last. He had a tear running down his face as he exited but he never looked back.
The group got into one of the cars that the priests had and drove away. "We need to get to Wellington" Kenny said. "For once I agree with you" Lola replied. "Guys which way is the bar?" Vince said.
I did mine so that it included yours. So the edited one that attached yours to maxbears. So the story so far is the group is hiding on the bar roof and roman's group approaches threatening them. A bunch of priests come out of the forest and kill them. The group agree to take dinner and leave but end up being imprisoned.
I did mine so that it included yours. So the edited one that attached yours to maxbears. So the story so far is the group is hiding on the bar… more roof and roman's group approaches threatening them. A bunch of priests come out of the forest and kill them. The group agree to take dinner and leave but end up being imprisoned.
Yeah I made Tavia kinda dull so I decided she needed to go and that was the way to do it .
Kenny's too hot for the girls the stache is WAY too intimidating.
On a more serious note I think that Kenny has some anger issues(here comes the down votes!) and that girls just can't put up with his attitude and how he looks at life in the apocalypse.
And then they escape and Tavia finally gets her Redemption. I liked that part, i also planed on doing that, but looks like you were faster.
… more I see Lola is already dissagreeing with Kenny? Seems like a new Kenny/Lilly situation to me:D
Okay lets go on with the story at where your last Post ended.
Yeah I made Tavia kinda dull so I decided she needed to go and that was the way to do it .
Kenny's too hot for the girls the stache is WA… moreY too intimidating.
On a more serious note I think that Kenny has some anger issues(here comes the down votes!) and that girls just can't put up with his attitude and how he looks at life in the apocalypse.
Wyatt found the knife in his pocket and started cutting quietly at his bonds. Dominique raised the axe getting ready to strike Vince with an e… morevil smirk on his face. Wyatt threw his knife to Lola first and he slowly picked up his pistol off a nearby table and shot Dominique straight through the head. His body crumpled to the floor and Patricia screamed and the next bullet hit her straight into the heart. In that time Lola had freed all the others and they walked downstairs finding at least 100 of the priests in the grand hall. All the tables were pushed to the side and their was no light except some candles and all the priests were praying all faced towards the opposite direction of the door except two guards watching the door... the only way out. "One of us has to distract them.... So the rest of us can escape" Vince said a frown on his face. In that moment everyone looked at each other wondering who it was going to be. "I'll do it. I don't deser… [view original content]
Why don't we make a order? Like Mustache, then maxbear, then me. New people who join could inform us and we add them into the order? IDK just a suggestion since this may become a problem.
" Shit, i don't know man. I thought you were keeping track of it. " Wyatt answered Vince and they both seemed a bit confused and frustraded. " Screw the bar, lets just head towards to Wellington. " Kenny said " And it looks like i dissagree with you again, that did take even less time then i tought it would. " Lola nagged around. " Yes i agree guys, Lola is right. " Russel said. " It's to dangerous to go back to this place, this goddamn psychos in there know where it is and that's the first place where they will look for us. " " And also....we don't even know the goddamn way. " Kenny added to his words. " But we can't just drive of either. Our food and supplies are still at that place. We are returning to it and then he headout to Wellington. " Vince determinedly said. " And why do you think you are the one who got to make this goddamn decision? " Kenny angily asked Vince. " Because that's just how it is Ken. Someone has to make the decisions here and everyone was agreeing back then that that's gonna be me. " Vincent answered. " This might have counted for your old group Buddy, but things are different now. We are making our decisions together. " Kenny respondet. " When i said we are driving back to the bar i fucking ment it. Now get out of the car and let Wyatt take over the wheel. " Vincent furiously said. " No Vince i won't. If i drive back to this place now our group will get attacked again and i will never let this happen another time for Christ sake. I told you going with this crazy people to get something to eat was a bad idea. But you just didn't listen. You are not telling me what to do anymore. " Kenny said as he was firmly pressing his hands on the wheel. " Just stop guys, this is getting out of control. I don't wanna be a part in this. " Russel droped in. " Yes guys Russel is right, don't you remember what happened last time? " Wyatt asked the two of them, each of them still holding onto their views of thing. " There is already enough shit going on at the moment, you need to settle this right now. " Lola said as she was wondering about the things Wyatt just said. " I told you already how this is gonna get done. We ain't driving back to that bar. " Kenny said furiously determined. " And what's gonna happen if i don't agree with you Kenny? Will you beat the shit out of me again? " Vince said and Kenny couldn't take it anymore. He stoped the car toke the keys and steped out of the car. " You wanna settle things? So lets do this, right here right now. Everybody get out! " Kenny screamed in a tone of rage.
Yes you are right. That's a better idea then just writting that you are currently writting:D
Okay i did write the last Post and since you are already online i gues its best when you just take over now. Maxbear after that and then me again and so on...
Why don't we make a order? Like Mustache, then maxbear, then me. New people who join could inform us and we add them into the order? IDK just a suggestion since this may become a problem.
Yeah but sometimes if one of us(you me max) may not come on in a while so then if only 2 people are online and one guy wants to continue then... its kinda messed up.
Yes you are right. That's a better idea then just writting that you are currently writting:D
Okay i did write the last Post and since you a… morere already online i gues its best when you just take over now. Maxbear after that and then me again and so on...
" Shit, i don't know man. I thought you were keeping track of it. " Wyatt answered Vince and they both seemed a bit confused and frustraded. "… more Screw the bar, lets just head towards to Wellington. " Kenny said " And it looks like i dissagree with you again, that did take even less time then i tought it would. " Lola nagged around. " Yes i agree guys, Lola is right. " Russel said. " It's to dangerous to go back to this place, this goddamn psychos in there know where it is and that's the first place where they will look for us. " " And also....we don't even know the goddamn way. " Kenny added to his words. " But we can't just drive of either. Our food and supplies are still at that place. We are returning to it and then he headout to Wellington. " Vince determinedly said. " And why do you think you are the one who got to make this goddamn decision? " Kenny angily asked Vince. " Because that's just how it is Ken. Someone has to make the decisions her… [view original content]
Yeah but sometimes if one of us(you me max) may not come on in a while so then if only 2 people are online and one guy wants to continue then... its kinda messed up.
Whats your old idea? Ah well if you and someone else post something at same time I vote that we vote on which one we like better . This is a democratie(democracy) after all. Haha see what I did there ? Speaking of democracy why is Vince suddenly the leader. I thought they voted but now Vince is making decisions.
I wanna point out though that Kenny has anger issues, but he always has understandable reasons for beeing that angry. ( even if he is overracting sometime)
The 400days group voted for Vince beeing the leader of their little group (atleast in our story). He isn't leading the group like a dictator does, he is just making the decisions for the group. Similar to Rick in the Walking Dead Comics/TV show.
My old idea was writting that we are writting when we are currently writting, so the others can see that we are writting. Or to say it easyer, we let the other people know when we are working on a Post (by writting some commend about it), and Edit the Post later when we did finish it.
Whats your old idea? Ah well if you and someone else post something at same time I vote that we vote on which one we like better . This is a d… moreemocratie(democracy) after all. Haha see what I did there ? Speaking of democracy why is Vince suddenly the leader. I thought they voted but now Vince is making decisions.
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Thanks for explaining. It all finally makes sense now:D
I gues we just have to find out about the dangerous group Kenny was talking about later in the story then. ( That would also be a good way to introduce the new Antagonist, you said you already had something in your mind)
Lola took a walk. She was angry and hurt. All she ever wanted was to feel like she belonged, ever since shit went down. She remembered Sean, her boyfriend and the conversation they had. "Are you sure this is a good idea?" Lola asked. "We can make it, we just got to run really fast." Sean replied. Sean was always reckless, but he was brave and saved her life on a number of occasions. The thing that killed her most was being unsure if he was alive or not. As they were running they were separated and the last she saw of him was climbing onto a van and ushering her to keep going. She had been alone ever since. She was happy that she found these people and she even killed for them. What else could she do to make them trust her. Wyatt was her friend and seemed to trust her the most. She appreciated that.
Vince reminded her of Sean. He was a natural leader and it seemed Vince was keeping everyone in check. For the first time on what seemed like forever, Lola felt safe. Her train of thought was interrupted when she heard voices. Looking around the corner she took at deep breath. A group of people were on their way to the hideout. It was only a matter of time before they would pass by. "They could be friendly" Lola thought. "Or they could be...unfriendly". Not wasting anymore time Lola ran back towards the hideout. She needed to warn the others.
Just thought I'd give Lola a bit more character development since shes the only original character alive right now.
anyway hope you like it.
Oh haha okay
Yes i like it! We rly needed to find out more about her character, she kinda reminds me of Michonne from the coomics, or Molly from the game. A strong independent women, that was on her own for a long time, trying to fit in a new group of people. Atleast that's how i see her:D
Good writing! She definitely did need more character development and you made her unique!
(?) Lola will remember that.
Sorry i know that's not part of the topic, but i thought it would kinda fit in here:D
Michonne is a badass! Glad you see her that way
Thank you guys.
Russel finally awoke pain aching in all his muscles. He rose from the cot and found a boiled egg in a bowl beside the bed on a table. He picked it up and popped it into his mouth happily. He walked out the bar door and was greeted by all his friends. "Glad your back!" Vince said. "We missed you." Wyatt said. "Welcome back" Kenny said. Tavia however just smiled at him. Then Russel saw someone running toward them a girl... the one that was working with Carver. "Guys can we trust her? Wasn't she helping Carver kill us?" Russel asked. "She didn't know like Tavia here and well, she joined us. Shes not that bad." Wyatt answered. The girl named Lola reached them "Guys theirs another group out there that I saw in the woods heading this way!" Lola said looking tired. "I say we hide and wait for them to pass by. We can hide on the bar roof and bring our supplies up too" Vince decided. They all went inside the bar. There were four guns, Vince, Kenny, Lola, and Wyatt took one. Everyone grabbed a knife and put it in their pocket. Vince, Tavia, and Russel took a flashlight. And they all went onto the bar roof and hid behind anything that could cover them. Kenny carried the food and medicine bags up. "Whatever happens stick together guys" Vince said. The other group walked along the road and everyone was holding their breath ready to shoot if need be.
My villain can become.......real.
It was a group of 8-9 people lead by a tall man dressed as a priest, about 40 with short, black hair, and a goatee, followed closely by a Short, young woman, about 20 with round glasses, dressed in a pink smock top, and black skirt. She whispered things into the priest's ear, as he nodded. "Friends. Thou cannot hide. Step forward, and speak, friends." The man said, softly. he was quiet, and had a slight french accent. Vince slowly stepped forward, gun still up. "It's ok, friends. I am father Dominique. This is my right hand woman, Patricia. And the others are the believers. We believe god will save us from this catastrophe, if we put our faith into it. We live in the church down yonder. We see you are staying in this......bar. We believe it is sin-ridden, vile place. We are here to invite you to stay with us." Father Dominique smiled. Vince huddled up with the group. "What about this. We eat some food, make some excuse, and leave. They're men of god, they won't hold it against us." Vince suggested. Everyone agreed, and they went. They all gathered in the massive church. They could barely see the roof, and it took 45 seconds to run from end to end of it! There was a massive table in the middle, where everyone sat down to eat. They ate tomatoes, and talked. Everyone had a good time, until Russel passed out. "Wait was he injured?!" Patricia asked. "Yeah why?" Wyatt answered. "Sleeping pills take effect faster on injured people." Father Dominique answered, as Wyatt passed out, then Vince, and Lola tried to run, as she fainted too. Tavia was out too. Everyone awoke, tied to beds. "Ok, you woke up. good. I guess you deserve an explaination. We make ritual sacrifices to our lord. We find dying survivors, and we kill them. We believe that walkers exist to kill the sinners, so we speed up the process, by sacrificing to show our devotion." Dominique said, as Patricia handed him an axe. "Alright guys, time to die. Hope you go to heaven." They said, as Wyatt wriggled a hand free, without anyone noticing.
" Okay guys lets go, we catch them by suprise. " Vincent whispered as the group was coming out of their hideouts. " We don't wanna hurt you people, just tell us what you want and you can walk off in peace. Nobody needs to get hurt here. " Vincent said to the foreign group while they were holding their guns and rifles up, rdy to shot if it was needed. Vincent was taking a closer look at the other group. The one of them who seemed to be the leader, was a tall muscular man wearing a black leather jacket. There was a old women and she didn't look healthy in Vincent's eyes. There also was a slighty older man, who also seemed to have a disease. " Well well...would you look at this. Come out behind their Kenny, show yourself. We where searching for you for weeks now. " The younger man said. " What? Kenny man you know this people? Who are they? " Wyatt confuselly asked. " Yes i know them, it's the group i was talking about when we first met Wyatt. " Kenny sighted. " I want you to answer my question...what the hell do you want from us? " Vincent loudly asked the other group. " What we want is what you got...send Kenny outa here and we won't hurt anyone. " The mysterious man respondet. " We can't do that, he is part of our group. Look i don't know what happened between the two of you, but i think now might be a good time for an explanation. " Vincent answered. " Alright, let's talk this though then first. This motherfucker up there stole our boat, he's the reason one of our friend's got biten and died. And after he did that he couldn't just leave us in piece, no he returned to steal our food and supplies. " The man said in a tone of anger. " What is he talking about? Is that true Ken? " a astonished Russel asked. " Look guys, it's not what you are thinking. Yes i stole that goddamn boat, but they stole it from us first! I just toke back what belonged to me. And yes i did steal their food and supplies, but i didn't have any other choice. It was freezing cold and i was starving, i tryed to convince them to forgive me and help me out, but they said they would be happyer to see my corpse rote and getting eaten by Walkers. " Kenny respondet with a ducked head. " Bullshit, this fucker screwed us up one time and that wasn't enough for him. He had to come back to screw us up another time. " The man screamed with a tone of hate in his words. " Are you telling the truth Kenny? Look me in the eyes and say that you are telling the truth. " Lola said as she was looking at Kenny. " Yes Lola, ofcourse i am. " Kenny said and Vincent was sure he could see tears coming down from his eyes. " That's enough proof for me. Don't worry Kenny, we won't just get rid of you and ditch you out of the group. " Vincent respondet with a smile on his face. " Damn right we aren't. " Wyat said and he was very convinced. " Hell yea. " Russel said and the 3 were sharing looks with each other. " So that's how it's gonna be haa? I tryed my best to be friendly with you people and i wish it wouldn't have to be going down this way. But in that case we will just have to force you to hand out Kenny to us. " The man said and grabbed his weapon.
Ooops, it lookes like we both Posted our parts of the story at the same time...sorry i didn't see you were already writting. I suggest we do a vote now and decide with what Post we wanna cointinue the story.
I've been carefully planning this villain for sooo long. I really want to go with my part, but if you think it's it's dumb, I'll survive......
No man i like your part! This religious culture is even more fucked up then the ST Jons:D...but i put alot work into my part aswell so i would be dissapointed if it just dissapears.
But i think i found a sollution that will make both of us satisfied...
Edit to my Post: As the dangerous man grabbed his gun, arrows and spears flew though the air and The man and his group were falling dead to the ground. Suddenly another group approuched, slowly coming out of the woods.
This also explains why the group just trusted them and went with them. After what Carver did to them i think they wouldn't just react like this... i hope you are happy now because i am!
Good! This is great! Thanks!
Yes I didn't say who the group was so you could show us this new "antagonist". No offense but we copied episode 2 WAY too much. So your group is starving and you have to choose who to feed (the feeding sequence). One group comes along and threatens them then they get owned real quick and some priests who pretend that they saved you invite you to come to church to eat (St Johns offering food). In five sentences they're already strapped into beds waiting to be sacrificed(hello new meatlocker). I'm not saying its bad but that went by a little fast
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It sure did...but atleast now that we combined our 2 Posts (the way i Edited my Post), makes it more believable that the group would have went with them. After everything they have been thoug lately (Carver), they wouldn't go with a group of strangers just like that.
Still. The priests were strangers... Wouldn't you think they would avoid strangers? Who cares if their hungry? After Carver they shouldn't be trusting much people. But then again that's just my opinion. "When it comes to leaving I bet your in the stay put camp" Kenny said. Yes I am there and I guess that makes me a Lilly
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Yes i agree, they would definitely try to avoid strangers. It was different in Season1 when we met the St Jons, we haven't been though the experiences this group had yet. I honestly doubt Kenny would go with a couple of strangers just to get some food after what happened at the dairy. (excspecially with a bunch of crazy priests:)
So ahh what do you suggest we do? I mean I'm okay with continuing but it feels so wrong
. Sorry if I'm being mean.
You are not beeing mean. I wasn't the one who wrote it:D
Well how about a flashback or something? Wyatt remembed when the group packed their stuff and got ready to go with the other group. They couldn't have known that something like this was gonna happen.
And go on like this, that's the only way i can think of to get rid of the Plotholes:D
I wanted to get to know the old people and we didn't even know the name of the leather jacket dude (It's Roman isn't it? XD) Anyway lets just go with yours and then after is maxbear's.
Yes i tryed to describe Roman's apperance as good as i can:D
So how we gonna do this now? You just go on with my Post (the not Edited one)?
Wyatt found the knife in his pocket and started cutting quietly at his bonds. Dominique raised the axe getting ready to strike Vince with an evil smirk on his face. Wyatt threw his knife to Lola first and he slowly picked up his pistol off a nearby table and shot Dominique straight through the head. His body crumpled to the floor and Patricia screamed and the next bullet hit her straight into the heart. In that time Lola had freed all the others and they walked downstairs finding at least 100 of the priests in the grand hall. All the tables were pushed to the side and their was no light except some candles and all the priests were praying all faced towards the opposite direction of the door except two guards watching the door... the only way out. "One of us has to distract them.... So the rest of us can escape" Vince said a frown on his face. In that moment everyone looked at each other wondering who it was going to be. "I'll do it. I don't deserve to live after betraying you guys" said Tavia. Russel said something similar but everyone else was quiet. "Russel you saved my life and if Tavia wants to do it then nobody's stopping her." Wyatt said hoping one of his best friends wouldn't die. They all had to agree because they wanted to survive. "When you get back to the bar get everything that you can for the journey. When you walk outside turn left and keep following the road. There will be a guard and tell him Tavia sent you and he'll ask you what the password is. The password is SAFE. Trust me you NEED to get to Wellington" Tavia said. "How will we find it?" Vince asked. "You'll know it when you see it." Tavia said and she traded pistols with Wyatt and walked to the front of the room. The group watched sadly as she fired a bullet into the ceiling. All the priests stood and used the tables for cover. The two guards with the guns made way to a table and started firing. Tavia fired off the last 2 bullets into 2 priests and hid behind a pillar. The group slipped past the door Vince going last. He had a tear running down his face as he exited but he never looked back.
The group got into one of the cars that the priests had and drove away. "We need to get to Wellington" Kenny said. "For once I agree with you" Lola replied. "Guys which way is the bar?" Vince said.
I did mine so that it included yours. So the edited one that attached yours to maxbears. So the story so far is the group is hiding on the bar roof and roman's group approaches threatening them. A bunch of priests come out of the forest and kill them. The group agree to take dinner and leave but end up being imprisoned.
And then they escape and Tavia finally gets her Redemption. I liked that part, i also planed on doing that, but looks like you were faster.
I see Lola is already dissagreeing with Kenny? Seems like a new Kenny/Lilly situation to me:D
Okay lets go on with the story at where your last Post ended.
Yeah I made Tavia kinda dull so I decided she needed to go and that was the way to do it
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Kenny's too hot for the girls
the stache is WAY too intimidating.
On a more serious note I think that Kenny has some anger issues(here comes the down votes!) and that girls just can't put up with his attitude and how he looks at life in the apocalypse.
Well yes Kenny obviously has a temper. He knocked out Vince before he was geting tortured by the Governor. (oops i wanted to say Carver)
Please hold on...i'm working on the next Post. Like this we can avoid Posting things at the same time again!
Why don't we make a order? Like Mustache, then maxbear, then me. New people who join could inform us and we add them into the order? IDK just a suggestion since this may become a problem.
" Shit, i don't know man. I thought you were keeping track of it. " Wyatt answered Vince and they both seemed a bit confused and frustraded. " Screw the bar, lets just head towards to Wellington. " Kenny said " And it looks like i dissagree with you again, that did take even less time then i tought it would. " Lola nagged around. " Yes i agree guys, Lola is right. " Russel said. " It's to dangerous to go back to this place, this goddamn psychos in there know where it is and that's the first place where they will look for us. " " And also....we don't even know the goddamn way. " Kenny added to his words. " But we can't just drive of either. Our food and supplies are still at that place. We are returning to it and then he headout to Wellington. " Vince determinedly said. " And why do you think you are the one who got to make this goddamn decision? " Kenny angily asked Vince. " Because that's just how it is Ken. Someone has to make the decisions here and everyone was agreeing back then that that's gonna be me. " Vincent answered. " This might have counted for your old group Buddy, but things are different now. We are making our decisions together. " Kenny respondet. " When i said we are driving back to the bar i fucking ment it. Now get out of the car and let Wyatt take over the wheel. " Vincent furiously said. " No Vince i won't. If i drive back to this place now our group will get attacked again and i will never let this happen another time for Christ sake. I told you going with this crazy people to get something to eat was a bad idea. But you just didn't listen. You are not telling me what to do anymore. " Kenny said as he was firmly pressing his hands on the wheel. " Just stop guys, this is getting out of control. I don't wanna be a part in this. " Russel droped in. " Yes guys Russel is right, don't you remember what happened last time? " Wyatt asked the two of them, each of them still holding onto their views of thing. " There is already enough shit going on at the moment, you need to settle this right now. " Lola said as she was wondering about the things Wyatt just said. " I told you already how this is gonna get done. We ain't driving back to that bar. " Kenny said furiously determined. " And what's gonna happen if i don't agree with you Kenny? Will you beat the shit out of me again? " Vince said and Kenny couldn't take it anymore. He stoped the car toke the keys and steped out of the car. " You wanna settle things? So lets do this, right here right now. Everybody get out! " Kenny screamed in a tone of rage.
Yes you are right. That's a better idea then just writting that you are currently writting:D
Okay i did write the last Post and since you are already online i gues its best when you just take over now. Maxbear after that and then me again and so on...
Yeah but sometimes if one of us(you me max) may not come on in a while so then if only 2 people are online and one guy wants to continue then... its kinda messed up.
Poor poor Vince is going down. And looks like you followed up on my Kenny and his anger issues comment
thanks.
Well yea...that brings us back to my old idea:D
Whats your old idea? Ah well if you and someone else post something at same time I vote that we vote on which one we like better
. This is a democratie(democracy) after all. Haha see what I did there ? 
Speaking of democracy why is Vince suddenly the leader. I thought they voted but now Vince is making decisions.
You'r welcome!
I wanna point out though that Kenny has anger issues, but he always has understandable reasons for beeing that angry. ( even if he is overracting sometime)
The 400days group voted for Vince beeing the leader of their little group (atleast in our story). He isn't leading the group like a dictator does, he is just making the decisions for the group. Similar to Rick in the Walking Dead Comics/TV show.
My old idea was writting that we are writting when we are currently writting, so the others can see that we are writting. Or to say it easyer, we let the other people know when we are working on a Post (by writting some commend about it), and Edit the Post later when we did finish it.
Orrr you can put Writing on your post and then edit your writing in.
Thanks...but i already said that:D