Continuing upon the end of S1(fan-fic)

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  • Yeah, it's good. I actually forgot that he was a nurse before, so I'm glad you brought that up again.

    Can i have your opinions, on this post. I don't care if they are bad or good, I just need to know.

  • edited February 2014

    Jack wait's until everyone has left the dining hall. He begins messing with the walkie-talkie.

    Accidentally, Jack presses the call button. Jack knew that was a mistake. It will ring to every other Walkie-Talkie, and it will show who called. "Shit..." Jack says.

    He begins to hear other voices through the thing. "Hello, sir? Mr. Kirkmin, how is are you doing in there?"... "Kikmin? We're coming in there, we'll shoot all of them, this plan needs to succeed.".. "Sir? Shit! There's people out here! They're trying to kill us!"

    Jack had heard nearly 30 different voices. "Oh crap!" Jack decides he needs to hide. They should be in here any second.

  • Yeah, I know planning is baaaaad. No, honestly: killing Kenny is a hard thing to do.. :(((

    That_1_Guy posted: »

    We don't plan anymore ever since... * Dramatically turns head to the camera * What happened.

  • It's bound to happen eventually. Well, now I'm off to my bunker, Kenny-fans are going to be at my doorstep any second now...

    TheMissus posted: »

    Yeah, I know planning is baaaaad. No, honestly: killing Kenny is a hard thing to do.. ((

  • We've got a good flow of posts going, eagerly awaiting the next one!

  • I liked it :)

    Can i have your opinions, on this post. I don't care if they are bad or good, I just need to know.

  • edited February 2014

    Sorry, but you've made a mistake. Jack left the hall right after the squad of ten ran outside.

    Jack wait's until everyone has left the dining hall. He begins messing with the walkie-talkie. Accidentally, Jack presses the call button.

  • edited February 2014

    The camper
    Clementine first looks suspicious when she turns her head into Bryan's direction, seeking for approval, as Bryan eventually nods. Clementine's heart wrenches by the sight of a miserable and weak looking Bryan, naked and with little vital spirits left.
    Frank immediately begins to make his job. "What happened? How long have they been passed out? And what's up with her?" asks Frank, quickly and practiced. Before anyone answers he takes notice of Bryan and speaks: "Lord, you look awful, too, don't you...". Jeremy then answers his questions: "They all got poisoned. The empty drinking bottles which had caused it are over there. The girl's Danielle and seems to be stable, at least her pulse is. The other guy Bryan got poisoned by food. Despite that he got tortured and starved the last 4 days. And Kenny's life is in danger - please hurry!". While quickly turning to Kenny Frank speaks: "Alright, thanks. Now everybody listen carefully: You two" (he points at Clem and Jeremy) "have to deal with Danielle and Bryan. They seriously need to throw up. Whatever they got: it's nasty. If it doesn't work it means it's too late. Then there's nothing left but waiting and hoping. Please help them to get in lateral recumbent position." In an instant he checks Kenny's pulse and does CPR on him while Jeremy deals with Danielle, trying to make her conscious and Clem tends to Bryan. His weakness frightens her, but she tries to get rid of these thoughts. When she was little she always strived against vomiting. Her mom told her a trick which she applies on Bryan. "Think of something absolutely disgusting, like ice cream with walker blood topping instead of cream, covered in vomit... and then someone forces you to eat it...". A minute later Bryan begins to choke, vomiting simultaneaously with Danielle when all of the sudden the sound of a person gasping shrills. "Kenny!".


    Sarah
    "Who's that? She has some nice pair of titties... she's in this village, too, isn't she... do you mind acquainting her with me?". Sarah stays silent when the creepy man named Ralph goes on: "You're not that keen of this idea, are you? Noone likes to share Ralphie with other ladies, I know, I know...". He puts the photograph aside and giggles in a very disgusting way. Please... don't notice the key..., thinks Sarah, trying to not get impressed by his attempts to frighten her when suddenly the noises of a tumult appear. Ralph relaxes his grip from her exposed shoulders and steps to the window peaking outside. "What the... what's going on, I thought they have everthing under control...", he whispers. A few of the passed out bodies apparently died and recovered as walkers so they stray through the settlement. Then he gets a call through the talkie. "Ralph speaking - what's going on!?". A voice follows with a cracking noise: "Goddammit, Ralph, fucking trouble's going on!! Petey said the boss is dead!! Can you believe it?! We NEED you right now!". "But the woman...", he mumbles. "NOW!". "Alright - Got it!". Before Ralph leaves he dismisses her with a very brutal punch in her face. "Fuck you, bitch! You and your FUCKING community will pay for that, I'll deal with you later and then you'll be so dead!" As soon as he's gone she fights her tears then slowly starts to realize that Kirkmin is most likely dead. Then she breaks out in laughter as she eventually speaks to herself: "You'll pay for that, Ralphie." Pulling herself together she then she jumps with her chair to a corner where she has a secret stash under a plank. She tries kicking the plank until the stash is revealed. There's a gun, ammo, a knife and a box with a keylock. "Hang on, Jack."

    I hope I didn't went too psycho

  • Randomz I'm sorry but this is what we mean, you have to read more carefully.
    1 guy put "as they rush out the doors, Jack hurrying to catch up with them after telling the rest to say within the safety of the hall"

    That means Jack went with the squad.

    Jack wait's until everyone has left the dining hall. He begins messing with the walkie-talkie. Accidentally, Jack presses the call button.

  • While this gets sorted I am going to continue with the camper group

    That_1_Guy posted: »

    Sorry, but you've made a mistake. Jack left the hall right after the squad of ten ran outside.

  • I was going to write next but Jack's positioning has confused me. Like you said 1 guy I'm pretty sure Jack went with the squad of 10, but now Randomz put that Jack is back in the hall. So Confused...

  • He's supposed to be with the squad, Randomz simply misread, I guess.

    I was going to write next but Jack's positioning has confused me. Like you said 1 guy I'm pretty sure Jack went with the squad of 10, but now Randomz put that Jack is back in the hall. So Confused...

  • Taking your time, I see. Hope you're done soon! : p

    TheMissus posted: »

    The camper Clementine first looks suspicious when she turns her head into Bryan's direction, seeking for approval, as Bryan eventually nods.

  • Sorry! I hope it hasn't gotten too late for you to read

    That_1_Guy posted: »

    Taking your time, I see. Hope you're done soon! : p

  • im guessing that all the skype sessions are over? or in progress? IDK i would just like a draft of whats going to happen.

    On the topic of the E-book there is tons of e book apps on the app store one i have used myself. i cant find a link to it right now but uploading it to itunes might be a good way to let everyone read it (Except pascucci who not only fell into a deppression after being killed but he has an android!!) of course there should be a PDF copy for Computer readers but that would also be really cool!

  • The Skype-session is going to happen this sunday.

    im guessing that all the skype sessions are over? or in progress? IDK i would just like a draft of whats going to happen. On the topic of t

  • I can't believe i did it again. I'm actually very disappointed in myself. I told myself, PAY ATTENTION. But nope.

    Once again dismiss my previous post, from now on, i'm rereading the previous post at least 5 times before I write.

    Sorry guys.

  • Just a simple Did You Know Fact of the day.

    Did you know, that when I named Kirkmin, it was an error, it was meant to be Kirkman. AKA: Robert Kirkman.

  • I actually thought so. But I dismissed it as Kenny slurring his words due to the drink. ; )

    Just a simple Did You Know Fact of the day. Did you know, that when I named Kirkmin, it was an error, it was meant to be Kirkman. AKA: Robert Kirkman.

  • He is by far the longest surviving character, negating Clem of course.

    That_1_Guy posted: »

    It's bound to happen eventually. Well, now I'm off to my bunker, Kenny-fans are going to be at my doorstep any second now...

  • Come ooooon, I wantz the story to go on? ;)

  • I'd love to, but I'm not sure how and with who to continue.

    TheMissus posted: »

    Come ooooon, I wantz the story to go on?

  • Edited my latest post

    Maybe this helped a little?

    That_1_Guy posted: »

    I'd love to, but I'm not sure how and with who to continue.

  • Interesting... I think I might be able to work with this. I'll start writing in five minutes.

    TheMissus posted: »

    Edited my latest post Maybe this helped a little?

  • I like Kirkmin more, to be honest :) and yes, I got the reference

    Just a simple Did You Know Fact of the day. Did you know, that when I named Kirkmin, it was an error, it was meant to be Kirkman. AKA: Robert Kirkman.

  • edited March 2014

    Gasping for breath she breaks her bindings and proceeds to stand up from the chair. Bits of wood lay around the small hole she kicked into the floor. Sarah stretches her arms and lets out content sigh of relief. Crouching down, she starts picking up the items from the small compartment. Making sure to load it, she sticks the gun she stole from the armory into her back-pocket while she grabs the sharp hunting-knife. What's left is a small decorated box, which reflects the soft glow of the candles standing around the room. She picks it up and puts it down next to the photo on her desk. As she picks up the picture-frame a teardrop falls from her weary eyes. ''I'm so sorry...'' she mutters while turning the frame around, revealing a small key taped to the back of it. She tears it off and sticks it into the tiny lock of the box. It turns, emitting a satisfying click. As she pulls the lid open a sigh escapes from her mouth. It's been months since she had last seen it. The necklace within the box is made of pure gold. A small pendant hangs from the chain. It was once a symbol of love between Sarah and her sister. But now, it's just a sad memory reminding her of her awful deed. Enthralled by the sad feeling that has entered her mind, she stares at the golden pendant idly laying in her hand. It depicts one half of a heart, Erin used to have the other.

    (Please listen to this for a better experience: )

    A loud bolt of thunder effectively brings her back into reality. When she looks outside her heart skips a beat. Several gunshots overlap the loud noise of thunder and rain. Dozens of people are caught up in a massive gunfight, shooting at anything that moves, friend or foe. The confusion increases when the sound of even more gunfire approaches from behind the make-shift walls of the settlement. Inaudible speech comes from a cracking megaphone. Then, for just a few seconds, everything is quiet. Sarah holds her breath while readying her gun. She puts the necklace around her neck and rips the picture from the frame before putting it in her pocket. Every beat of her heart increases the tension and panic within her mind. The silence is broken when a deafening creak is followed by an explosion and the collapse of the walls around her. Sarah struggles to move to the door, but when she finally reaches it, a supportive beam collapses, causing rubble to block her only way out. Another creak comes from outside the walls. This time, without hesitation she jumps over her desk and dashes out the window. Not a second later a second explosion completely destroys the room she was just in. Breathing heavily, a hypnotizing beep rings through her ears. In a disoriented manner, she starts running away from a large crowd of people approaching her, and to the wall. She desperately clenches onto it, struggling to stay conscious. Her sight sharpens, her mind becomes clear. When the terrified woman has eventually caught her breath, the large group has reached her. A flash of lightning reveals every contour of their messed-up faces and torn-up clothing. Walkers. Sarah's instincts take over when she turns around and starts climbing the damaged wall.

    As she finally reaches the top a haunting silhouette has doomed up in the distant woodlands. Two large tanks are followed by over fifty men and women, all armed to the teeth. Sarah flinches, nearly falling off the edge. She looks back at the small horde contained within the settlement, recognizing some faces. A smaller group is still firing their guns in the center of the battlefield.

    ''Fuck.''

  • Man, I wish I could write faster. Anyway, here it is.

    That_1_Guy posted: »

    Gasping for breath she breaks her bindings and proceeds to stand up from the chair. Bits of wood lay around the small hole she kicked into the

  • I also added some music, not sure if it fits exactly though.

    That_1_Guy posted: »

    Man, I wish I could write faster. Anyway, here it is.

  • Wow! That was intense! And I like the music - very well done!

    That_1_Guy posted: »

    I also added some music, not sure if it fits exactly though.

  • edited February 2014

    Thanks, I just read it again with the music on and it corresponded exactly! Guess I made the right choice after all.

    TheMissus posted: »

    Wow! That was intense! And I like the music - very well done!

  • That was really good. The music fit perfectly! :)

    That_1_Guy posted: »

    Gasping for breath she breaks her bindings and proceeds to stand up from the chair. Bits of wood lay around the small hole she kicked into the

  • I just noticed that I've made a mistake:

    Earlier I made her break into the armory. Now it's revealed she had a gun hidden in her private rooms. Any ideas how to solve this? Maybe we just keep the box and remove the gun?

    That_1_Guy posted: »

    Gasping for breath she breaks her bindings and proceeds to stand up from the chair. Bits of wood lay around the small hole she kicked into the

  • edited February 2014

    I can make an edit to my post making it fit seamlessly, just wait a sec.

    EDIT: I made a minor change stating that she had stolen the gun from the armory.

    TheMissus posted: »

    I just noticed that I've made a mistake: Earlier I made her break into the armory. Now it's revealed she had a gun hidden in her private rooms. Any ideas how to solve this? Maybe we just keep the box and remove the gun?

  • Awesome - now it makes sense :)

    That_1_Guy posted: »

    I can make an edit to my post making it fit seamlessly, just wait a sec. EDIT: I made a minor change stating that she had stolen the gun from the armory.

  • Just want to say that I'm looking forward to sharing my ideas with you all tomorrow during the Skype-session. I've been thinking about it for a while and I feel like I have come up with quite a few interesting ideas.

  • Me too!

    That_1_Guy posted: »

    Just want to say that I'm looking forward to sharing my ideas with you all tomorrow during the Skype-session. I've been thinking about it for a while and I feel like I have come up with quite a few interesting ideas.

  • It'll be fun to have a big group chat. I still haven't gotten any of you on my contacts. I'll get to it eventually.

    That_1_Guy posted: »

    Just want to say that I'm looking forward to sharing my ideas with you all tomorrow during the Skype-session. I've been thinking about it for a while and I feel like I have come up with quite a few interesting ideas.

  • Oh man, I forgot about the skype convo. I'm going to download it right now.

    We should all reply to this post and write our skype names, so it's all in one location.

  • askthemissus

    Oh man, I forgot about the skype convo. I'm going to download it right now. We should all reply to this post and write our skype names, so it's all in one location.

  • edited February 2014

    megamoto_

    Oh man, I forgot about the skype convo. I'm going to download it right now. We should all reply to this post and write our skype names, so it's all in one location.

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