Oh man, I forgot about the skype convo. I'm going to download it right now.
We should all reply to this post and write our skype names, so it's all in one location.
Oh man, I forgot about the skype convo. I'm going to download it right now.
We should all reply to this post and write our skype names, so it's all in one location.
Oh man, I forgot about the skype convo. I'm going to download it right now.
We should all reply to this post and write our skype names, so it's all in one location.
She climbs back down the wall, looking for Jack, in the large crowd of people. "Jack! Jack! Jack, where are you?!" She is frantically yelling. And all the while, the crowd of people is getting lower every minute. People she knew, people she considered her friends... dead. It wasn't until the crowd was down to around 30, that she found Jack.
"Jack, I have some big news, it's really important!" She says, barley catching her breath. "Hang on.. I need to mess around with this walkie-talkie." Sarah interrupts. "NO! This is way more damn important then some Walkie-"
Her voice is drown out by the sound of a tank explosion. The far side of the fence had come down. Then one man stands on the top of a tank, and begins to speak, drawing out all other noise.
"I'll kill all of you fuckers if we don't make an agreement." There is a long silence when everybody calms down. The man then continues. "Where the hell; is your leader?"
Jack walks forward, pushing other people out of his way, when he sees Elizabeth already making her way down to the tank. "Hey!" Jack yells.
Camper...
Clementine gasps, and shrills. "Kenny! Kenny, do you feel okay."
He looks up at Clementine and smiles. "Not really." Frank finally stands up, breathing heavily now, after the CPR. "So your the one they call Kenny?" Frank asks.
"Huh? Who are- Who are you?" Kenny says, very confused. "I was Pascucci's friend. He told me to find you..." Kenny's smile had completely vanished. "How did he- How did he die?" Kenny asks, nearly shedding a tear. "My leader.. he.. he shot him." Kenny stares speechless. "You got revenge on the bitch didn't you?" Frank looks away from Kenny, showing that he didn't. "I thought I would be just as bad as him if I did... I regret not killing him now... It's just... I'm really sorry for your loss..."
The whole camper stays silent. "Danielle, are you feeling better?" Clementine asks. Danielle begins to speak when an explosion is heard from the outside, and the whole camper flips over.
"Fuck." Sarah says.
She climbs back down the wall, looking for Jack, in the large crowd of people. "Jack! Jack! Jack, where are you?!" She … moreis frantically yelling. And all the while, the crowd of people is getting lower every minute. People she knew, people she considered her friends... dead. It wasn't until the crowd was down to around 30, that she found Jack.
"Jack, I have some big news, it's really important!" She says, barley catching her breath. "Hang on.. I need to mess around with this walkie-talkie." Sarah interrupts. "NO! This is way more damn important then some Walkie-"
Her voice is drown out by the sound of a tank explosion. The far side of the fence had come down. Then one man stands on the top of a tank, and begins to speak, drawing out all other noise.
"I'll kill all of you fuckers if we don't make an agreement." There is a long silence when everybody calms down. The man then continues. "Where the hell; is your leader?"
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"Fuck." Sarah says.
She climbs back down the wall, looking for Jack, in the large crowd of people. "Jack! Jack! Jack, where are you?!" She … moreis frantically yelling. And all the while, the crowd of people is getting lower every minute. People she knew, people she considered her friends... dead. It wasn't until the crowd was down to around 30, that she found Jack.
"Jack, I have some big news, it's really important!" She says, barley catching her breath. "Hang on.. I need to mess around with this walkie-talkie." Sarah interrupts. "NO! This is way more damn important then some Walkie-"
Her voice is drown out by the sound of a tank explosion. The far side of the fence had come down. Then one man stands on the top of a tank, and begins to speak, drawing out all other noise.
"I'll kill all of you fuckers if we don't make an agreement." There is a long silence when everybody calms down. The man then continues. "Where the hell; is your leader?"
… [view original content]
I found it a but difficult to follow, in my opinion. People here, people there. You speak of people all the time without mentioning to which group they belong - Kirkmins Folks or the community. And the part with the camper was sorta short and rushed. Yeah.
"Fuck." Sarah says.
She climbs back down the wall, looking for Jack, in the large crowd of people. "Jack! Jack! Jack, where are you?!" She … moreis frantically yelling. And all the while, the crowd of people is getting lower every minute. People she knew, people she considered her friends... dead. It wasn't until the crowd was down to around 30, that she found Jack.
"Jack, I have some big news, it's really important!" She says, barley catching her breath. "Hang on.. I need to mess around with this walkie-talkie." Sarah interrupts. "NO! This is way more damn important then some Walkie-"
Her voice is drown out by the sound of a tank explosion. The far side of the fence had come down. Then one man stands on the top of a tank, and begins to speak, drawing out all other noise.
"I'll kill all of you fuckers if we don't make an agreement." There is a long silence when everybody calms down. The man then continues. "Where the hell; is your leader?"
… [view original content]
Oh man, I forgot about the skype convo. I'm going to download it right now.
We should all reply to this post and write our skype names, so it's all in one location.
I found it a but difficult to follow, in my opinion. People here, people there. You speak of people all the time without mentioning to which g… moreroup they belong - Kirkmins Folks or the community. And the part with the camper was sorta short and rushed. Yeah.
"Fuck." Sarah says.
She climbs back down the wall, looking for Jack, in the large crowd of people. "Jack! Jack! Jack, where are you?!" She … moreis frantically yelling. And all the while, the crowd of people is getting lower every minute. People she knew, people she considered her friends... dead. It wasn't until the crowd was down to around 30, that she found Jack.
"Jack, I have some big news, it's really important!" She says, barley catching her breath. "Hang on.. I need to mess around with this walkie-talkie." Sarah interrupts. "NO! This is way more damn important then some Walkie-"
Her voice is drown out by the sound of a tank explosion. The far side of the fence had come down. Then one man stands on the top of a tank, and begins to speak, drawing out all other noise.
"I'll kill all of you fuckers if we don't make an agreement." There is a long silence when everybody calms down. The man then continues. "Where the hell; is your leader?"
… [view original content]
Well, somebody don't seem to happy with our Skype conversation. Please, if you have an issue with anything, tell us rather than just disliking the comments, seriously, come on...
Oh man, I forgot about the skype convo. I'm going to download it right now.
We should all reply to this post and write our skype names, so it's all in one location.
Well, somebody don't seem to happy with our Skype conversation. Please, if you have an issue with anything, tell us rather than just disliking the comments, seriously, come on...
Okay, gonna write now, once again, might just trash it as i'm not sure were to go currently, and it might not be good. It's 3 AM here in Sweden, so expect somethings that might be wrong one way or another.
He looked up and gave a slight nod and tried to smile, but failed.
"Everyone else?"
They all regrouped outside in a circle.
"Okay, there ain't much more of a plan here other then to get the fuck out of this place, we don't have any time to get equipment and all that, so we just gotta simply make a run for it."
Kenny looked at his leg, and then Bryan, and instantly got a very worried face.
"Don't worry about it, we're a group, we got each other's back if anything would happen, alright?"
"What about this Frank guy?" Danielle said.
"We don't have anytime, okay? Besides, Pascucci trusted him, so do i." Clementine said.
Jeremy picked up Bryan, and they started running, aiming for the woods.
"Okay, all we do is run for th- the woods, and once we're there, we better expect som- some company with all the noise that's going on here, they got a tank for chr- christ sake." Clementine says, whilst running and gasping for air.
As only Frank had a pistol with a mag left, there wasn't much they could do, they couldn't attract attention with the shots nor waste the only mag on some walkers. All they could do is run or kick the walkers away.
There was a small house with only two rooms in it to the left, whilst what looked like a storage room or an armory of sorts, to the right.
"You guys, stay in her for a second whilst i search for some weapons, trust me, it's just a peek." Clementine says, and instantly runs over to the armory, knowing the group wouldn't agree upon it.
Bryan was ready to take Frank's gun, as he was right behind him.
Clementine jumped up the window, and saw what looked like the half of a machete, which was gonna have to do for this current moment. She climbed in, picked it up, and instantly jumped out.
"Alright, let's g-" Clementine said before getting interrupted by a walker.
She quickly evaded it, making it fall, and slung her machete right into it's throat, decapitating it's head.
Bryan, not being fully conscious, threw himself towards Frank's pistol, and fired 3 shots towards the walker, thinking it's still alive, and feeling his need to protect Clem.
"What the fuck Bryan?" Jeremy screamed.
"Shit, the sound of the shots might've been suppressed by that tank, but someone still may have heard it, come on, we gotta move." Frank said, surprisingly calm.
Jeremy picked up Bryan, who was very heavy.
"I ca-, I can walk..." Bryan said.
"Ah fuck that, you couldn't even see that the walker had his head cut off, and still fired. You're coming with me." Jeremy said.
Jeremy and Bryan were far behind, but he saw Clementine looking at them, and she starting to run slower and slower. Eventually waiting.
The tank's noise all of a sudden stopped.
Clementine looked at the rest of the group, "Hold up!" She said, before being cut off by a shot at Jeremy's arm.
"Well, here we are Bryan, tell me your part of the story, why don't you?" Sarah said whilst laughing.
"You're not getting out of here, uh uh, that ain't happening."
"Why the fuck not? We did nothing, absolutely NOTHING to you! And now you shot my frickin' arm, seriously... shit it hurts..." Jeremy said.
Bryan looked at Jeremy, telling him to stop.
He took Jeremy's gun, and slowly got up.
"We can just leave, and you'll never have to deal with us again. Believe me, we've had enough of you. Especially I, knowing that I could any second be dropped from a tree..." Bryan said, in a very threatening manner.
Sarah instantly put off the safety from her weapon.
"It wasn't my fault, okay? IT WASN'T! She fucking, she... GOD, I'M SORRY, OKAY? I REGRET IT! But she, SHE fucked him... SHE, OH SHE DESERV- She, she didn't deserve it..." Sarah said.
Bryan coughed, Sarah was now aiming her weapon at him.
"So, you killed your own sister, for you to just simply lock me in, risk my group's life with them trying to save me, and the-" Bryan was suddenly cut off.
"-n just for you to call in Kirkmin over here, killing god knows how many, people like my dad, or Elizabeth's husband." Someone behind Sarah said.
Sarah looked back.
"I didn't mean to do it..." Sarah said.
"I'm sure you didn't, oh no totally" Bryan said.
"He's right, i have an issue trusting you here Sarah." The person who was behind Sarah, said.
"I simply called for help, alright? I was scared, okay?" Sarah said.
"Why? WHY SARAH?" The person behind Sarah screamed.
"Because of you're fucking dad." Sarah said.
Nothing was said, it went quiet.
A safety from a gun being turned off could be heard.
"I-, I'm sor-" Sarah said before being cut off by the shot.
She took One Last Breath, just to fall down.
Jack reloaded his weapon.
So, i know a lot of people have issues understanding what i sometimes mean as i write "mysteriously".
I might as well say right here what happened. Jack killed Sarah, for lying, and being the cause of many peoples death, including John's death.
Yes, they killed most of the current forces, including the driver of the tank, so it was safe for both Sarah and Jack to move on for a second. They didn't just randomly abandon their group to death, especially Elizabeth.
There are more of Kirkmin coming, more from the other settlements he took over, so it ain't over at all yet. If anyone has trouble continuing Clem n' Co., i'd say follow the task at hand, getting the fuck outta there.
This was written 4 AM, so it might have a few mistakes here and there, sorry about that.
Alright guys, ready for the next, Fun fact of the day...
Did you know, that all 3 of the cats I introduced were my real life cats?
I res… morecued all 3 of them, from starvation and many other things that nature could do to them. I named them Tiger, Cleo, and Oreo.
We had to bring Tiger to the shelter after a couple weeks. (Same thing as dieing in our fan-fic)
Then, we had to do the same with Cleo, a couple weeks after that.
We had kept Oreo for a couple of years, he learned to hunt, and was awesome. But one day, when he went outside, he never returned...
That was your, Did you know, fact of the day!
"Bryan? Are you okay?" Clementine said.
He looked up and gave a slight nod and tried to smile, but failed.
"Everyone else?"
They all … moreregrouped outside in a circle.
"Okay, there ain't much more of a plan here other then to get the fuck out of this place, we don't have any time to get equipment and all that, so we just gotta simply make a run for it."
Kenny looked at his leg, and then Bryan, and instantly got a very worried face.
"Don't worry about it, we're a group, we got each other's back if anything would happen, alright?"
"What about this Frank guy?" Danielle said.
"We don't have anytime, okay? Besides, Pascucci trusted him, so do i." Clementine said.
Jeremy picked up Bryan, and they started running, aiming for the woods.
"Okay, all we do is run for th- the woods, and once we're there, we better expect som- some company with all the noise that's going on here, they got a tank for chr- christ sake." Clementine says… [view original content]
Sarah didn't have much to do with the plot though, are you talking about the attack? WIth Kirkmin and all? I didn't mean it was over, just like, the first "wave" (lol).
"Bryan? Are you okay?" Clementine said.
He looked up and gave a slight nod and tried to smile, but failed.
"Everyone else?"
They all … moreregrouped outside in a circle.
"Okay, there ain't much more of a plan here other then to get the fuck out of this place, we don't have any time to get equipment and all that, so we just gotta simply make a run for it."
Kenny looked at his leg, and then Bryan, and instantly got a very worried face.
"Don't worry about it, we're a group, we got each other's back if anything would happen, alright?"
"What about this Frank guy?" Danielle said.
"We don't have anytime, okay? Besides, Pascucci trusted him, so do i." Clementine said.
Jeremy picked up Bryan, and they started running, aiming for the woods.
"Okay, all we do is run for th- the woods, and once we're there, we better expect som- some company with all the noise that's going on here, they got a tank for chr- christ sake." Clementine says… [view original content]
"Bryan? Are you okay?" Clementine said.
He looked up and gave a slight nod and tried to smile, but failed.
"Everyone else?"
They all … moreregrouped outside in a circle.
"Okay, there ain't much more of a plan here other then to get the fuck out of this place, we don't have any time to get equipment and all that, so we just gotta simply make a run for it."
Kenny looked at his leg, and then Bryan, and instantly got a very worried face.
"Don't worry about it, we're a group, we got each other's back if anything would happen, alright?"
"What about this Frank guy?" Danielle said.
"We don't have anytime, okay? Besides, Pascucci trusted him, so do i." Clementine said.
Jeremy picked up Bryan, and they started running, aiming for the woods.
"Okay, all we do is run for th- the woods, and once we're there, we better expect som- some company with all the noise that's going on here, they got a tank for chr- christ sake." Clementine says… [view original content]
"Bryan? Are you okay?" Clementine said.
He looked up and gave a slight nod and tried to smile, but failed.
"Everyone else?"
They all … moreregrouped outside in a circle.
"Okay, there ain't much more of a plan here other then to get the fuck out of this place, we don't have any time to get equipment and all that, so we just gotta simply make a run for it."
Kenny looked at his leg, and then Bryan, and instantly got a very worried face.
"Don't worry about it, we're a group, we got each other's back if anything would happen, alright?"
"What about this Frank guy?" Danielle said.
"We don't have anytime, okay? Besides, Pascucci trusted him, so do i." Clementine said.
Jeremy picked up Bryan, and they started running, aiming for the woods.
"Okay, all we do is run for th- the woods, and once we're there, we better expect som- some company with all the noise that's going on here, they got a tank for chr- christ sake." Clementine says… [view original content]
Very well. One thing, though: I wish you would have implemented Sarah's necklace into the story somehow, as that part earlier in her room is kinda irrelevant now.
"Bryan? Are you okay?" Clementine said.
He looked up and gave a slight nod and tried to smile, but failed.
"Everyone else?"
They all … moreregrouped outside in a circle.
"Okay, there ain't much more of a plan here other then to get the fuck out of this place, we don't have any time to get equipment and all that, so we just gotta simply make a run for it."
Kenny looked at his leg, and then Bryan, and instantly got a very worried face.
"Don't worry about it, we're a group, we got each other's back if anything would happen, alright?"
"What about this Frank guy?" Danielle said.
"We don't have anytime, okay? Besides, Pascucci trusted him, so do i." Clementine said.
Jeremy picked up Bryan, and they started running, aiming for the woods.
"Okay, all we do is run for th- the woods, and once we're there, we better expect som- some company with all the noise that's going on here, they got a tank for chr- christ sake." Clementine says… [view original content]
Very well. One thing, though: I wish you would have implemented Sarah's necklace into the story somehow, as that part earlier in her room is kinda irrelevant now.
I am going to write in a few minutes, but I don't have the inspiration just yet. One thing I want to say is that it makes zero sense for the army to have been wiped out already. They actually have two tanks and over fifty people attacking a relatively small community.
EDIT: I have a few ideas for the next scene, but I don't really know how to put my words ''on paper.'' I might try later, maybe I'll get a good idea.
Very well. One thing, though: I wish you would have implemented Sarah's necklace into the story somehow, as that part earlier in her room is kinda irrelevant now.
I am going to write in a few minutes, but I don't have the inspiration just yet. One thing I want to say is that it makes zero sense for the a… morermy to have been wiped out already. They actually have two tanks and over fifty people attacking a relatively small community.
EDIT: I have a few ideas for the next scene, but I don't really know how to put my words ''on paper.'' I might try later, maybe I'll get a good idea.
Turns out, The Killerhas feelings, regret it every time, considering how i know you guys can do something awesome with all these characters, you're all such great writers .
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"Fuck." Sarah says.
She climbs back down the wall, looking for Jack, in the large crowd of people. "Jack! Jack! Jack, where are you?!" She is frantically yelling. And all the while, the crowd of people is getting lower every minute. People she knew, people she considered her friends... dead. It wasn't until the crowd was down to around 30, that she found Jack.
"Jack, I have some big news, it's really important!" She says, barley catching her breath. "Hang on.. I need to mess around with this walkie-talkie." Sarah interrupts. "NO! This is way more damn important then some Walkie-"
Her voice is drown out by the sound of a tank explosion. The far side of the fence had come down. Then one man stands on the top of a tank, and begins to speak, drawing out all other noise.
"I'll kill all of you fuckers if we don't make an agreement." There is a long silence when everybody calms down. The man then continues. "Where the hell; is your leader?"
Jack walks forward, pushing other people out of his way, when he sees Elizabeth already making her way down to the tank. "Hey!" Jack yells.
Camper...
Clementine gasps, and shrills. "Kenny! Kenny, do you feel okay."
He looks up at Clementine and smiles. "Not really." Frank finally stands up, breathing heavily now, after the CPR. "So your the one they call Kenny?" Frank asks.
"Huh? Who are- Who are you?" Kenny says, very confused. "I was Pascucci's friend. He told me to find you..." Kenny's smile had completely vanished. "How did he- How did he die?" Kenny asks, nearly shedding a tear. "My leader.. he.. he shot him." Kenny stares speechless. "You got revenge on the bitch didn't you?" Frank looks away from Kenny, showing that he didn't. "I thought I would be just as bad as him if I did... I regret not killing him now... It's just... I'm really sorry for your loss..."
The whole camper stays silent. "Danielle, are you feeling better?" Clementine asks. Danielle begins to speak when an explosion is heard from the outside, and the whole camper flips over.
"Fuck."
Many fucks were given that day. ; p
I request feedback, as soon as possible. I need to know if mistakes were made!
There don't seem to be any mistakes as far as I can tell. Good job. : )
I found it a but difficult to follow, in my opinion. People here, people there. You speak of people all the time without mentioning to which group they belong - Kirkmins Folks or the community. And the part with the camper was sorta short and rushed. Yeah.
Kieranforthewin
I guess i'll try to edit, thanks for pointing out my mistakes though.
I made some edits.
Thank you!
Very well, it's just... I said Bryan and Danielle were throwing up simultaneously, which means she was conscious.
Luckily, that's the only inconsistency. So, good job! ; )
Darn... I remember that to.. MORE EDITING!
Well, somebody don't seem to happy with our Skype conversation. Please, if you have an issue with anything, tell us rather than just disliking the comments, seriously, come on...
Thanks!
Like I care
Exact copy? wow
Awwww poor doggie
Think i might try to write, though i might just trash it, because i'm not 100% sure were to currently go :P.
Okay, gonna write now, once again, might just trash it as i'm not sure were to go currently, and it might not be good. It's 3 AM here in Sweden, so expect somethings that might be wrong one way or another.
Alright guys, ready for the next, Fun fact of the day...
Did you know, that all 3 of the cats I introduced were my real life cats?
I rescued all 3 of them, from starvation and many other things that nature could do to them. I named them Tiger, Cleo, and Oreo.
We had to bring Tiger to the shelter after a couple weeks. (Same thing as dieing in our fan-fic)
Then, we had to do the same with Cleo, a couple weeks after that.
We had kept Oreo for a couple of years, he learned to hunt, and was awesome. But one day, when he went outside, he never returned...
That was your, Did you know, fact of the day!
"Bryan? Are you okay?" Clementine said.
He looked up and gave a slight nod and tried to smile, but failed.
"Everyone else?"
They all regrouped outside in a circle.
"Okay, there ain't much more of a plan here other then to get the fuck out of this place, we don't have any time to get equipment and all that, so we just gotta simply make a run for it."
Kenny looked at his leg, and then Bryan, and instantly got a very worried face.
"Don't worry about it, we're a group, we got each other's back if anything would happen, alright?"
"What about this Frank guy?" Danielle said.
"We don't have anytime, okay? Besides, Pascucci trusted him, so do i." Clementine said.
Jeremy picked up Bryan, and they started running, aiming for the woods.
"Okay, all we do is run for th- the woods, and once we're there, we better expect som- some company with all the noise that's going on here, they got a tank for chr- christ sake." Clementine says, whilst running and gasping for air.
As only Frank had a pistol with a mag left, there wasn't much they could do, they couldn't attract attention with the shots nor waste the only mag on some walkers. All they could do is run or kick the walkers away.
There was a small house with only two rooms in it to the left, whilst what looked like a storage room or an armory of sorts, to the right.
"You guys, stay in her for a second whilst i search for some weapons, trust me, it's just a peek." Clementine says, and instantly runs over to the armory, knowing the group wouldn't agree upon it.
Bryan was ready to take Frank's gun, as he was right behind him.
Clementine jumped up the window, and saw what looked like the half of a machete, which was gonna have to do for this current moment. She climbed in, picked it up, and instantly jumped out.
"Alright, let's g-" Clementine said before getting interrupted by a walker.
She quickly evaded it, making it fall, and slung her machete right into it's throat, decapitating it's head.
Bryan, not being fully conscious, threw himself towards Frank's pistol, and fired 3 shots towards the walker, thinking it's still alive, and feeling his need to protect Clem.
"What the fuck Bryan?" Jeremy screamed.
"Shit, the sound of the shots might've been suppressed by that tank, but someone still may have heard it, come on, we gotta move." Frank said, surprisingly calm.
Jeremy picked up Bryan, who was very heavy.
"I ca-, I can walk..." Bryan said.
"Ah fuck that, you couldn't even see that the walker had his head cut off, and still fired. You're coming with me." Jeremy said.
Jeremy and Bryan were far behind, but he saw Clementine looking at them, and she starting to run slower and slower. Eventually waiting.
The tank's noise all of a sudden stopped.
Clementine looked at the rest of the group, "Hold up!" She said, before being cut off by a shot at Jeremy's arm.
Tension. Choices. The Walking Dead.
He fell down, dropping Bryan in the process.
"Well, here we are Bryan, tell me your part of the story, why don't you?" Sarah said whilst laughing.
"You're not getting out of here, uh uh, that ain't happening."
"Why the fuck not? We did nothing, absolutely NOTHING to you! And now you shot my frickin' arm, seriously... shit it hurts..." Jeremy said.
Bryan looked at Jeremy, telling him to stop.
He took Jeremy's gun, and slowly got up.
"We can just leave, and you'll never have to deal with us again. Believe me, we've had enough of you. Especially I, knowing that I could any second be dropped from a tree..." Bryan said, in a very threatening manner.
Sarah instantly put off the safety from her weapon.
"It wasn't my fault, okay? IT WASN'T! She fucking, she... GOD, I'M SORRY, OKAY? I REGRET IT! But she, SHE fucked him... SHE, OH SHE DESERV- She, she didn't deserve it..." Sarah said.
Bryan coughed, Sarah was now aiming her weapon at him.
"So, you killed your own sister, for you to just simply lock me in, risk my group's life with them trying to save me, and the-" Bryan was suddenly cut off.
"-n just for you to call in Kirkmin over here, killing god knows how many, people like my dad, or Elizabeth's husband." Someone behind Sarah said.
Sarah looked back.
"I didn't mean to do it..." Sarah said.
"I'm sure you didn't, oh no totally" Bryan said.
"He's right, i have an issue trusting you here Sarah." The person who was behind Sarah, said.
"I simply called for help, alright? I was scared, okay?" Sarah said.
"Why? WHY SARAH?" The person behind Sarah screamed.
"Because of you're fucking dad." Sarah said.
Nothing was said, it went quiet.
A safety from a gun being turned off could be heard.
"I-, I'm sor-" Sarah said before being cut off by the shot.
She took One Last Breath, just to fall down.
Jack reloaded his weapon.
Man, sorry about your cats :c. Still cool how it was based on them!
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This seems a lot like the end of the episode.
Rather then that it's good.
Sarah didn't have much to do with the plot though, are you talking about the attack? WIth Kirkmin and all? I didn't mean it was over, just like, the first "wave" (lol).
Loved it.
Thanks
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I liked it. This would be a perfect ending to the episode, but we're only halfway to that point.
Thanks
. But yeah, never intended it to be an ending .3.
Darnit. She could have been so interesting! Good job though.
Very well. One thing, though: I wish you would have implemented Sarah's necklace into the story somehow, as that part earlier in her room is kinda irrelevant now.
Everytime HSP says he's going to continue I know that someone has to die, unfortunately
The Killer has no mercy.
I might actually be able to incorporate this into a post...
I am going to write in a few minutes, but I don't have the inspiration just yet. One thing I want to say is that it makes zero sense for the army to have been wiped out already. They actually have two tanks and over fifty people attacking a relatively small community.
EDIT: I have a few ideas for the next scene, but I don't really know how to put my words ''on paper.'' I might try later, maybe I'll get a good idea.
Well it can still be implemented, even after her death.
That's the thing, it ain't over, they've sort of token out what you may call the first "wave". More are coming.
I know, what a shit excuse i got.
Turns out, The Killer has feelings, regret it every time, considering how i know you guys can do something awesome with all these characters, you're all such great writers
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