Of course you can, feedback is very important to the artistic process I hear.
Fiona drifted across the room, falling weakly onto a couch, feeling totally helpless for only the second time in her life. But this time was somehow worse than the first. The man she loved was literally falling to pieces right in front of her and so far, she hadn’t been able to do anything to stop it, despite being here, with him, capable and willing. Lilith had said he hadn’t eaten since that day out in the Badlands. That had been three days ago
That's right where I started tearing up. I then lost it right at the ending.
Here it is. It's not fluffy. I'm not totally happy with the way it turned out, I think the pacing is a little off, but I'll keep working wit… moreh it. Just wanted to put it up here for you all to see first.
The Sound of Silence
There was absolutely no sound from beyond the door. Even the air in the hallway seemed motionless. She reached for the doorknob, turning it slowly. “Rhys...?” The hinges creaked as she pushed the door open, loud amidst the silence. The room on the other side was dark, and she could barely make out a shape slumped against the far wall. A waft of stale air hit her, dusty and sour. She grimaced.
“Rhys? Hey...” She focused on the familiar silhouette, trying not to stare at the faintly-glowing patterns pulsing across his skin. “Lilith and Maya said...” She trailed off, choked by the sudden lump rising in her throat, and wished her eyes hadn’t adjusted to the dim light.
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Of course you can, feedback is very important to the artistic process I hear.
Fiona drifted across the room, falling weakly onto a cou… morech, feeling totally helpless for only the second time in her life. But this time was somehow worse than the first. The man she loved was literally falling to pieces right in front of her and so far, she hadn’t been able to do anything to stop it, despite being here, with him, capable and willing. Lilith had said he hadn’t eaten since that day out in the Badlands. That had been three days ago
That's right where I started tearing up. I then lost it right at the ending.
It's what Jack says no matter how Rhys responds to Jack telling him that he murdered people by bringing Helios down.
(Weirdly-worded sentence is worded weirdly.)
Wow, that's actually the paragraph I had the hardest time getting right...
I'm...kind of happy that I actually made you cry? Like, it's...it's a compliment, in a way, you know?
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Yea, Ive never really written stories/fanfics.Ive written a poem once and the teacher said it was good but i dont really trust her judgment.
craving rhyiona
That's good, that's good. ^^
You should try! The feedback would be great.
this made me laugh so hard
okay, thank you, why?
Ohuhoh..........no. Mine would be terrible. It would be worse than Helios crashing from the sky.
the accuracy
I doubt that
Helios crashing was pretty awesome, actually...
You certainly know how to pop up out of nowhere. XD
I know about that. Im not very confident in my ability to do so.![:\](https://community.telltale.com/resources/emoji/confused.png ":\")
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I'm bored at work, so...
Besides, it's one of my talents. Popping up out of nowhere. ...it scares people sometimes...
Dodging a pure Rhysha ending, be like
Oh well i would have never guessed that. Well welcome to the convo. XD
i was gonna say that you sneaky peanut
Touché, I'll call this a draw
Of course you can, feedback is very important to the artistic process I hear.
That's right where I started tearing up. I then lost it right at the ending.
Damn,Peanut. Phew i teared up a little......That was aww the feels. Good job.
You got this bro we got your back. signed the Bros
@xtheunseenteenx Thinks so but idk...........
Beat you to it, ha!
But it's true. An entire space station falling onto the planet? Pretty epic. ...except for all the people who died.
Well a some of them were heartless people. You win some you lose some.
Wow, that's actually the paragraph I had the hardest time getting right...
I'm...kind of happy that I actually made you cry? Like, it's...it's a compliment, in a way, you know?
Thanks bro!
I'll spare you the amount of times I've told myself the exact same thing...
No problemo. You did great!
This only destroyed about half my heart. XD
Okay this is either a reference or your threatening to kill me. 5 sec headstart?
It is up to you, but if you do I know I got your back dude.
I'll consider it, but no promises.
It's what Jack says no matter how Rhys responds to Jack telling him that he murdered people by bringing Helios down.
(Weirdly-worded sentence is worded weirdly.)
Oh now i feel ignorant. I cri evrytiem. Part of me wanted to just kill Jack and get it over with but at the same time deep down i felt for the guy.
Well, apparently I made Kenny cry...
...so, mission accomplished? I guess?
Hopefully all the upcoming fluff will heal your heart again.
I could sense Kenny crying through the Bronesis. Yea i guess mission accomplished. I'm sure it will it always does.
LOL Well your hard work showed, quite nicely if I do say so myself.
Yeah it is, since depressing was what you were going for.
Ill support ya either way dude.
It kind of sucks, being a writer. I mean, you can read your own work, but it doesn't have the same emotional effect that it does on other people.
Which...is why I read other people's writing, too, lol.
But thank you, again. I've never been told that I evoked this kind of a response from someone, so this is nice to know.