I thought Jack was shot by Pascucci and that this part was missing in your story, though it was Pascucci who got shot by Jack - got it all wrong :-S My bad!
Have we noticed how similar this is to the actual season 1 of the game?
In the first episode (ours) Kenny saves Clem from certain death from Nate and or walkers. (in the real game) Lee saves Clem. Then later on, they are saved by, (I forgot their names) Also later on in ours they are saved by Charlie. Also later on they are saved by eddies group. (in real game, it was lily's group) One member has a worsening condition. Christa who was bit. (IRG Larry's heart problems) Then they had to get medicine for Christa. (IRG: same with Larry.)
EPISODE 2: 3 months after episode 1. (IRG: same thing) The group loses there original base after the death of one member. (Christa and Omid in ours and Carley/doug IRG) They gain one member, (Jacob in ours and Ben IRG)after that not much else...
EPISODE 3: 3 more months have passed (Not sure how long it was IRG but I think sometime passed.) Also they end up leaving the place where they lived. (the farm in ours and IRG the motor inn) members died in both also. (Charlie,and Dave... IRG and Carley/Dolug and Katja and Duck.) But who killed them? (Taiva in ours and IRG lily.) 2 Members were also added (Jeremy and Gus, IRG Omid and Christa.) Both of them did some helping in the end of the episode to.
EPISODE 4:The group finds a place to stay. (Melody's cabin, the house in Savanah) There is an injured group member, (Kenny IRG Omid) One member left for unexplainable reasons (Kenny in ours IRG Clem) One death,(Chuck and Gus)Then in the end of the episode one member was bit. (Lee, and Kenny)
EPISODE 5: Pascucci has a near death expierence???? Kenny dies from zombie bite???? Clem is left alone??? Only to be found by Melody and Jeremy??? Find out in the next episode of TWD fan fic!
Well thank you very much! It means a lot that you like my writing style, considering how great yours is! I might join in again later, but I think I'll watch for now. Thanks
Well what else can I say then I am really sorry that you feel secluded. But I am afraid you misunderstand: I actually said it was a good story… more with an interesting arc, I liked your writing style. It's just that you have brought 3 new characters at a point where we had to deal with other newbies.
Character developement is a very important rule - whenever we introduce somebody new we first have to make sure to set the individual character, the behaviour, talking style, appereance and so on. It needs time, actually plenty of posts until everybody gets who we are dealing with. Back then we just introduced 4 fresh new characters which we didn't know at all. Developing 4 new characters as well as the current group (makes 7 people) is plenty of work that needs time. If everybody in this thread brought a new character into the game we would never get forward. Does that sound this absurd? We love newcomers very much - but we all make mistakes. All of u… [view original content]
Well thank you very much! It means a lot that you like my writing style, considering how great yours is! I might join in again later, but I think I'll watch for now. Thanks
Guys, i just thought of something very crazy.
Have we noticed how similar this is to the actual season 1 of the game?
In the first episo… morede (ours) Kenny saves Clem from certain death from Nate and or walkers. (in the real game) Lee saves Clem. Then later on, they are saved by, (I forgot their names) Also later on in ours they are saved by Charlie. Also later on they are saved by eddies group. (in real game, it was lily's group) One member has a worsening condition. Christa who was bit. (IRG Larry's heart problems) Then they had to get medicine for Christa. (IRG: same with Larry.)
EPISODE 2: 3 months after episode 1. (IRG: same thing) The group loses there original base after the death of one member. (Christa and Omid in ours and Carley/doug IRG) They gain one member, (Jacob in ours and Ben IRG)after that not much else...
EPISODE 3: 3 more months have passed (Not sure how long it was IRG but I think sometime passed.) Also they end up l… [view original content]
Guys, i just thought of something very crazy.
Have we noticed how similar this is to the actual season 1 of the game?
In the first episo… morede (ours) Kenny saves Clem from certain death from Nate and or walkers. (in the real game) Lee saves Clem. Then later on, they are saved by, (I forgot their names) Also later on in ours they are saved by Charlie. Also later on they are saved by eddies group. (in real game, it was lily's group) One member has a worsening condition. Christa who was bit. (IRG Larry's heart problems) Then they had to get medicine for Christa. (IRG: same with Larry.)
EPISODE 2: 3 months after episode 1. (IRG: same thing) The group loses there original base after the death of one member. (Christa and Omid in ours and Carley/doug IRG) They gain one member, (Jacob in ours and Ben IRG)after that not much else...
EPISODE 3: 3 more months have passed (Not sure how long it was IRG but I think sometime passed.) Also they end up l… [view original content]
I would just like to say guys, In episode 5, don't be afraid to kill people off, or atleast write them off screen in a Kenny like fashion.
Don't be afraid to kill. It's the walking dead.
Anyway if we're going to do something with Kenny's bite, we'll need to finish now. Cause if anything happens, it would be good for that to happen in Episode 5.
Right when the closing door bangs Danielle raises up from her favorite place in front of the fireplace. While trying to put the gun into the back of her jeans, like she has seen on Bryan, she teases Clem: "What was that? You taking care of me? That must've been a joke. I am older than you...". Clementine knows that if there is one thing in the world that attracts danger most it is silly quarreling. This is why she doesn't react. Danielle is still dealing with her gun - it looks very clumsy and awkward. "Is it secured?". asks Clem as she is worried that Danielle could actually shoot herself unintentionally, but Danielle doesn't respond, still messing with the dangerous weapon. I am responsible for her goes through her mind. Bryan said I have to protect her. "Give me the gun, please..." she eventually speaks when in the same moment Danielle grabs Clementines hand that was reaching after the gun and Danielle sets her arm, yelling "NO!! Get off me!". Screaming in pain Clem falls to the ground and kneads her aching wrist when she shouts at Danielle: "Are you stupid?! What was that for?! For helping you? You could've hurt yourself!". Danielle looks shocked, but then she continues hassling: "Helping me? You weren't trying to help me, you just wanted to show-off! I don't want your help and I don't need it at all".
Clem bites her tongue to not make Danielle angry but she just can't resist: "Have you forgotten who the person was that helped you when Lilly was trying to kill you? Who let you into the car?! Just stop it, we don't need this •who's-better*-shit.". Right when she has finished the sentence Clem blushes as she realizes that she was actually swearing – it was self-controlled. For the first time she does somehow understand why the grown-ups do it: they do it not on purpose - it is the anger from deep inside of you, which raises to the surface. The anger about the loss of the beloved ones as well as the loss of your humanity.
Danielle brings her back into reality: „I am sorry that I've hurt you. But opening a cardoor doesn't make you a hero. Give me your hand...“. She reaches out her arm and helps Clementine getting on her feet. Danielle then heads to the fireplace to continue carving the figurines for their self invented board game when she wrap her arms around her, freezing: „It's cold... the fire needs some wood. I'll be right back...“. „I'll go with you, you... -“. Clem says as Dani cuts her off: „I think I've made myself clear: Leave – me – alone.“.
After a minute Clementine gets nervous, then worried. Her eyes fall over Danielle's gun, laying on the carpet by the fire. She must've lost it. I need to check if she's alright. Clementine sneaks outside. It's dawn and the land is full of shadows thrown by the trees. When she peaks around the corner she can see the door to the workshop being open and a wheelbarrow for the wood right next to it. The noises inside tell her she's busy. Suddenly she sees two lights glowing, like animal eyes when a fox comes out of the bushes. First she aims her gun at it, then she marvels at the beautiful color of its fur. In the end she lowers the weapon for it is too small and fragile to be a proper meal for everyone.
All at once Danielle's shriek comes from inside the workshop. Clem runs in there, seeing her on the floor with a she walker who is dragging her feet. She gets 3 shots into her head and falls to the floor. Danielle stands up and runs into Clementine's arms, crying. „Oh my goood! It almost got me, it almost bit me! Oh my god!“. Clem holds her tight, though doesn't feel well doing it for she and Danielle have had their differences. „Let's go inside.“ Clem eventually says as she drags the body into a nearby bush.
„That was close.“. Both of them sit on the floor wondering were the grown ups are. Danielle is very quiet and Clementine isn't suspicious since Danielle has had her near-dead experience. But then... when ever Clem speaks to her she turns her torso a bit to the left. When Clementine focuses on her arm she can see why and Danielle panicks: „No! It's not a bite!! You have to believe me!!“. Clementine checks on the wounds. „It doesn't look like bites..“. „I TOLD you!“. The scratches go deep into the flesh and there is muck all over it. „She must've scratched you. Might be infected...“. „Only bites can get infected! Are you going to tell them? Please don't!“. Clem starts to cry: "I failed in protecting you."
Please continue:
Is Clem going to tell them? Is she infected?
Note:
I know I said I am going to pop in in episode 5, but I got an idea during a train drive and I couldn't resist...
Sorry
I'm personally not planning on letting Kenny die due to the bite. He is being treated by professionals with experience within a short amount of time since the bite. SPOILERS Lee probably didn't make it because of the blood loss, or so they say.
I would just like to say guys, In episode 5, don't be afraid to kill people off, or atleast write them off screen in a Kenny like fashion.
… moreDon't be afraid to kill. It's the walking dead.
Anyway if we're going to do something with Kenny's bite, we'll need to finish now. Cause if anything happens, it would be good for that to happen in Episode 5.
In the cabin
Right when the closing door bangs Danielle raises up from her favorite place in front of the fireplace. While trying to put th… moree gun into the back of her jeans, like she has seen on Bryan, she teases Clem: "What was that? You taking care of me? That must've been a joke. I am older than you...". Clementine knows that if there is one thing in the world that attracts danger most it is silly quarreling. This is why she doesn't react. Danielle is still dealing with her gun - it looks very clumsy and awkward. "Is it secured?". asks Clem as she is worried that Danielle could actually shoot herself unintentionally, but Danielle doesn't respond, still messing with the dangerous weapon. I am responsible for her goes through her mind. Bryan said I have to protect her. "Give me the gun, please..." she eventually speaks when in the same moment Danielle grabs Clementines hand that was reaching after the gun and Danielle sets her arm, yelling "NO… [view original content]
I am asking this because your name is also the name of an episode, just like the previously mentioned one. Another reason is that AHouseDivided started out as a nice guy, but he suddenly started to post those pictures... I could of course be mistaken, and AHouseDivided could have been a troll all along, but something just didn't seem right to me.
Errm... Was your previous account AHouseDivided?
I am asking this because your name is also the name of an episode, just like the previousl… morey mentioned one. Another reason is that AHouseDivided started out as a nice guy, but he suddenly started to post those pictures... I could of course be mistaken, and AHouseDivided could have been a troll all along, but something just didn't seem right to me.
IMO lee died due to the bite. think about it. the only amputation that worked!! was Dale in the comics and he was treated immedently. lee had a nice stroll down into the sewers (Witch he said himself "like a goddamn maze) then after the walkers attacked and he looked for a way out he collapsed. how long would it take for omid kenny and christa to lift up a grown man and carry him to the bench?
I'm personally not planning on letting Kenny die due to the bite. He is being treated by professionals with experience within a short amount of time since the bite. SPOILERS Lee probably didn't make it because of the blood loss, or so they say.
Well, from what I've heard if you cut Lee's arm he doesn't nearly pass out as much as he does when you don't cut it. It doesn't really matter though, he dies anyway.
IMO lee died due to the bite. think about it. the only amputation that worked!! was Dale in the comics and he was treated immedently. lee had … morea nice stroll down into the sewers (Witch he said himself "like a goddamn maze) then after the walkers attacked and he looked for a way out he collapsed. how long would it take for omid kenny and christa to lift up a grown man and carry him to the bench?
Lee died of infection
Guys, i just thought of something very crazy.
Have we noticed how similar this is to the actual season 1 of the game?
In the first episo… morede (ours) Kenny saves Clem from certain death from Nate and or walkers. (in the real game) Lee saves Clem. Then later on, they are saved by, (I forgot their names) Also later on in ours they are saved by Charlie. Also later on they are saved by eddies group. (in real game, it was lily's group) One member has a worsening condition. Christa who was bit. (IRG Larry's heart problems) Then they had to get medicine for Christa. (IRG: same with Larry.)
EPISODE 2: 3 months after episode 1. (IRG: same thing) The group loses there original base after the death of one member. (Christa and Omid in ours and Carley/doug IRG) They gain one member, (Jacob in ours and Ben IRG)after that not much else...
EPISODE 3: 3 more months have passed (Not sure how long it was IRG but I think sometime passed.) Also they end up l… [view original content]
"I failed... i just... FUCK" Clementine screams in sadness and anger.
It went silent for a while.
"Please don-" Danielle says before getting cut off by Clementine.
"Don't tell them? Are you insane? So what, you're just gonna let yourself die?" Clementine says.
"But what if they kill me?" Danielle says, crying.
"But what if it IS infect-, well, with everything happening lately... maybe your right. We have no idea what they'll do." Clementine says.
"Well, if we're not gonna tell THEM, we are gonna have to deal with this ourselve-"
"NO! Please don't do it..." Danielle cuts off Clem with.
This is not happening, no no no... I can't do it, besides, it probably won't work, it didn't work for Le-
"I wish Lee was here..." Clem says.
Danielle is to frightened to say anything, all she does is look around, very fast.
Clementine walks away to the kitchen, she looks around for a little while, and comes back.
"I'm, sorry." Clem says, stressed and scared.
"What if it isn't infected!" Danielle says.
"Come on, Dani-" Clem says and gets cut off by Danielle.
"What if it isn't! Even if it is, what if i die from the loss, or something else! Besides, how do you know it will work? Can YOU even do it?" Danielle stutters.
Clementine slowly walks closer.
"You said Lee, he died? Did he die from a bite? Did he try to cut it off? Did. It. Work?" Danielle says, frustrating Clementine in her intentions.
Clementine pushes her to a wall.
"You don't say a word about him, we clear?" Clementine threatens Danielle.
"Ye- No, was he your daddy or what? You probably got him killed in the first place." Danielle says, hesitating whether she should beg for Clem not to do it, or if she should continue frustrating her.
Clementine forces her arm into the table.
Danielle looks at the sharp object.
"Should we see if it works? You seem so interested, after all." Clementine says, looking almost insane.
"Please, stop it Cle- AAAAAHHH!!!" Danielle screams.
"OH GOD, STOP IT PLEASE"
"IT HURTS, IT FUCKING HURTS"
Clementine has blood all over her face when she releases the knife, only halfway through. She immediatly changes her expression to chocked, realizing what she has done.
"I- We-" Clem stutters.
"We have to, finish it."
"NO PLEASE, I'M BEGGING YOU." Danielle screams.
Clementine slowly grasps the knife, and continues.
"AAAAAAAHHHH- JUST KILL ME, I CAN'T TAKE THIS" Danielle screams, in the worst pain she's ever had.
It went quiet.
Danielle passed out right when the arm fell off. Clementine slowly backs away, but she quickly remembers the bandages. She picks them up, shaking just as much as when Lee died. She puts them on Danielle's arm, and then runs outside.
Clementine falls down in the wet grass, right where Gus's blood is, and stays there, still in her shocked state.
I know i went full on brutal here, but this is close to the end, and Clementine is changing etc.
Oh, and i know i write sometimes a little confusing with what is going on, but it is basically my way of writing things, like things are a bit of a mystery, even obvious things xP. So just comment below if you want me to explain.
Again, just like always, if it was bad, just tell me and i might edit/delete.
I like it! Believe it or not,I really liked the brutality of this post. Like you said it shows how Clem is changing. You can't be that innocent little girl forever. (But Danielle way crossed the line when she said that about Lee. lol)
But, man! Two amputations in one episode?
This is just adding to the list of similarities to S1. (Determent) In our game Danielle gets her arm cut off painfully. And then in the real game Lee also did.
"I failed... i just... FUCK" Clementine screams in sadness and anger.
It went silent for a while.
"Please don-" Danielle says before get… moreting cut off by Clementine.
"Don't tell them? Are you insane? So what, you're just gonna let yourself die?" Clementine says.
"But what if they kill me?" Danielle says, crying.
"But what if it IS infect-, well, with everything happening lately... maybe your right. We have no idea what they'll do." Clementine says.
"Well, if we're not gonna tell THEM, we are gonna have to deal with this ourselve-"
"NO! Please don't do it..." Danielle cuts off Clem with.
This is not happening, no no no... I can't do it, besides, it probably won't work, it didn't work for Le-
"I wish Lee was here..." Clem says.
Danielle is to frightened to say anything, all she does is look around, very fast.
Clementine walks away to the kitchen, she looks around for a little while, and comes back.
"I'm, sorry." Cl… [view original content]
The horrifying words are being played over and over in Clem's mind. "No! It's not a bite!! You have to believe me!!“..... "What if it isn't infected!" Then the worst part, "OH GOD, STOP IT PLEASE IT HURTS, IT FUCKING HURTS" The weird thing was, Clementine didn't feel as bad as she should..... *"Ye- No, was he your daddy or what? You probably got him killed in the first place." * Clementine now mutters to herself, "Why didn't she just let me do it?.....Oh god what have I done?... I wish Lee were here."
"Oh god! Newbie you alright?! "Ahh!! Holy shit it fucking hurts man, really freaking bad.. We need to stop the bleeding. But we're not going to have time to to get back to the..." Pascucci nearly passes out but catches himself. "We won't have enough time to get back to the base, we need to use the materials out here to.. to...-" Pascucci now fully passes out. "Oh man! oh man! oh fucking man, man! Steve is going to kill me if I let him die, we'll be down to 5 members. Oh man what the fuck do i do? That gunshot along with his blood is going to attract the Zocks for miles!" That's when he looks around him and notices a few bushes, a few trees and a few walkers. "How the fuck can I use this to stop the bleeding. I have 10 minutes at the most before the walkers arrive... What can I do?"
"Okay, now just because we gave you this calming drug, doesn't mean it's not going to hurt like a mother fu.ker." Says the nurse who is about to amputate Kenny's leg. "Listen i have been through 4 gunshots, how bad can it- AHH! Holy SH1T!!! How the hell did Lee do thi-" Kenny now also passes out.
Melody can't stand the face of Jeremy so goes back to the cabin, going through the backdoor. (she doesn't want to frighten Dani, and Clem with her crying) Jeremy slowly follows her back, while Brian decides to stay outside."Melody talk to me" Says Jeremy outside of her door in the upstairs of the cabin. "I'm sorry okay? I liked Gus just as much as you did, maybe even more NO-HOMO" Melody unlocks the door and Jeremy walks in. "Why, Why did you do it?" Replies Melody. "I- well, you see, he saw how good we were getting along and he didn't like that." Melody cuts him off, "So you killed him so I couldn't have him? Wow you are fucking selfish get out." "No let me explain" Melody gives the expression as if saying "Fine." So Jeremy goes on. "He tried to- he tried to kill me!... Melody looks nearly emotionless now, as if she had seen a ghost, as if she stopped listening altogether. Melody now says, "Is Clem and Dani okay down there? We haven't checked on them in a while." Jeremy interrupts "It's alright, there fine, nothings happened to them before, nothing will now, and besides, Bryan's sitting outside the back door, if he heard anything he can handle it..-".. Now Jeremy gets a sudden, weird feeling and grabs Melody and kisses her right on the lips. Melody doesn't resist. They both stand there speechless for a few minutes when Melody says, "What the fuck is wrong with me?"
Please continue....
Sorry about making it so long.
And if you think i overstepped it in the last scene i can change it.
"I failed... i just... FUCK" Clementine screams in sadness and anger.
It went silent for a while.
"Please don-" Danielle says before get… moreting cut off by Clementine.
"Don't tell them? Are you insane? So what, you're just gonna let yourself die?" Clementine says.
"But what if they kill me?" Danielle says, crying.
"But what if it IS infect-, well, with everything happening lately... maybe your right. We have no idea what they'll do." Clementine says.
"Well, if we're not gonna tell THEM, we are gonna have to deal with this ourselve-"
"NO! Please don't do it..." Danielle cuts off Clem with.
This is not happening, no no no... I can't do it, besides, it probably won't work, it didn't work for Le-
"I wish Lee was here..." Clem says.
Danielle is to frightened to say anything, all she does is look around, very fast.
Clementine walks away to the kitchen, she looks around for a little while, and comes back.
"I'm, sorry." Cl… [view original content]
I like it. One note: Clem and Dani were all alone when the amputation took place - Melody and Bryan were at the river to look after Jeremy where they witnessed Jeremy killing Gus. You might edit it, e.g. adding a paragraph about their arrival in the cabin.
The horrifying words are being played over and over in Clem's mind. "No! It's not a bite!! You have to believe me!!“..... "What if it isn't i… morenfected!" Then the worst part, "OH GOD, STOP IT PLEASE IT HURTS, IT FUCKING HURTS" The weird thing was, Clementine didn't feel as bad as she should..... *"Ye- No, was he your daddy or what? You probably got him killed in the first place." * Clementine now mutters to herself, "Why didn't she just let me do it?.....Oh god what have I done?... I wish Lee were here."
"Oh god! Newbie you alright?! "Ahh!! Holy shit it fucking hurts man, really freaking bad.. We need to stop the bleeding. But we're not going to have time to to get back to the..." Pascucci nearly passes out but catches himself. "We won't have enough time to get back to the base, we need to use the materials out here to.. to...-" Pascucci now fully passes out. "Oh man! oh man! oh fucking man, man! Steve is going to kill me if I let him die, we'll… [view original content]
I like it. One note: Clem and Dani were all alone when the amputation took place - Melody and Bryan were at the river to look after Jeremy whe… morere they witnessed Jeremy killing Gus. You might edit it, e.g. adding a paragraph about their arrival in the cabin.
Well... The name I have in mind is something along the lines of ''Blood on our hands'' I know it has four words instead of the usual three but I think this would really fit what we've been building up to in this episode.
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I thought Jack was shot by Pascucci and that this part was missing in your story, though it was Pascucci who got shot by Jack - got it all wrong :-S My bad!
Guys, i just thought of something very crazy.
Have we noticed how similar this is to the actual season 1 of the game?
In the first episode (ours) Kenny saves Clem from certain death from Nate and or walkers. (in the real game) Lee saves Clem. Then later on, they are saved by, (I forgot their names) Also later on in ours they are saved by Charlie. Also later on they are saved by eddies group. (in real game, it was lily's group) One member has a worsening condition. Christa who was bit. (IRG Larry's heart problems) Then they had to get medicine for Christa. (IRG: same with Larry.)
EPISODE 2: 3 months after episode 1. (IRG: same thing) The group loses there original base after the death of one member. (Christa and Omid in ours and Carley/doug IRG) They gain one member, (Jacob in ours and Ben IRG)after that not much else...
EPISODE 3: 3 more months have passed (Not sure how long it was IRG but I think sometime passed.) Also they end up leaving the place where they lived. (the farm in ours and IRG the motor inn) members died in both also. (Charlie,and Dave... IRG and Carley/Dolug and Katja and Duck.) But who killed them? (Taiva in ours and IRG lily.) 2 Members were also added (Jeremy and Gus, IRG Omid and Christa.) Both of them did some helping in the end of the episode to.
EPISODE 4:The group finds a place to stay. (Melody's cabin, the house in Savanah) There is an injured group member, (Kenny IRG Omid) One member left for unexplainable reasons (Kenny in ours IRG Clem) One death,(Chuck and Gus)Then in the end of the episode one member was bit. (Lee, and Kenny)
EPISODE 5: Pascucci has a near death expierence???? Kenny dies from zombie bite???? Clem is left alone??? Only to be found by Melody and Jeremy??? Find out in the next episode of TWD fan fic!
Well thank you very much! It means a lot that you like my writing style, considering how great yours is! I might join in again later, but I think I'll watch for now. Thanks
Thank you so much - I am so glad that you're considering to join. Hope to see your posts here soon
This is great! I've never seen it from this perspective. Thank you, this is helpful
The connections are almost... creepy.
I would just like to say guys, In episode 5, don't be afraid to kill people off, or atleast write them off screen in a Kenny like fashion.
Don't be afraid to kill. It's the walking dead.
Anyway if we're going to do something with Kenny's bite, we'll need to finish now. Cause if anything happens, it would be good for that to happen in Episode 5.
In the cabin
Right when the closing door bangs Danielle raises up from her favorite place in front of the fireplace. While trying to put the gun into the back of her jeans, like she has seen on Bryan, she teases Clem: "What was that? You taking care of me? That must've been a joke. I am older than you...". Clementine knows that if there is one thing in the world that attracts danger most it is silly quarreling. This is why she doesn't react. Danielle is still dealing with her gun - it looks very clumsy and awkward. "Is it secured?". asks Clem as she is worried that Danielle could actually shoot herself unintentionally, but Danielle doesn't respond, still messing with the dangerous weapon. I am responsible for her goes through her mind. Bryan said I have to protect her. "Give me the gun, please..." she eventually speaks when in the same moment Danielle grabs Clementines hand that was reaching after the gun and Danielle sets her arm, yelling "NO!! Get off me!". Screaming in pain Clem falls to the ground and kneads her aching wrist when she shouts at Danielle: "Are you stupid?! What was that for?! For helping you? You could've hurt yourself!". Danielle looks shocked, but then she continues hassling: "Helping me? You weren't trying to help me, you just wanted to show-off! I don't want your help and I don't need it at all".
Clem bites her tongue to not make Danielle angry but she just can't resist: "Have you forgotten who the person was that helped you when Lilly was trying to kill you? Who let you into the car?! Just stop it, we don't need this •who's-better*-shit.". Right when she has finished the sentence Clem blushes as she realizes that she was actually swearing – it was self-controlled. For the first time she does somehow understand why the grown-ups do it: they do it not on purpose - it is the anger from deep inside of you, which raises to the surface. The anger about the loss of the beloved ones as well as the loss of your humanity.
Danielle brings her back into reality: „I am sorry that I've hurt you. But opening a cardoor doesn't make you a hero. Give me your hand...“. She reaches out her arm and helps Clementine getting on her feet. Danielle then heads to the fireplace to continue carving the figurines for their self invented board game when she wrap her arms around her, freezing: „It's cold... the fire needs some wood. I'll be right back...“. „I'll go with you, you... -“. Clem says as Dani cuts her off: „I think I've made myself clear: Leave – me – alone.“.
After a minute Clementine gets nervous, then worried. Her eyes fall over Danielle's gun, laying on the carpet by the fire. She must've lost it. I need to check if she's alright. Clementine sneaks outside. It's dawn and the land is full of shadows thrown by the trees. When she peaks around the corner she can see the door to the workshop being open and a wheelbarrow for the wood right next to it. The noises inside tell her she's busy. Suddenly she sees two lights glowing, like animal eyes when a fox comes out of the bushes. First she aims her gun at it, then she marvels at the beautiful color of its fur. In the end she lowers the weapon for it is too small and fragile to be a proper meal for everyone.
All at once Danielle's shriek comes from inside the workshop. Clem runs in there, seeing her on the floor with a she walker who is dragging her feet. She gets 3 shots into her head and falls to the floor. Danielle stands up and runs into Clementine's arms, crying. „Oh my goood! It almost got me, it almost bit me! Oh my god!“. Clem holds her tight, though doesn't feel well doing it for she and Danielle have had their differences. „Let's go inside.“ Clem eventually says as she drags the body into a nearby bush.
„That was close.“. Both of them sit on the floor wondering were the grown ups are. Danielle is very quiet and Clementine isn't suspicious since Danielle has had her near-dead experience. But then... when ever Clem speaks to her she turns her torso a bit to the left. When Clementine focuses on her arm she can see why and Danielle panicks: „No! It's not a bite!! You have to believe me!!“. Clementine checks on the wounds. „It doesn't look like bites..“. „I TOLD you!“. The scratches go deep into the flesh and there is muck all over it. „She must've scratched you. Might be infected...“. „Only bites can get infected! Are you going to tell them? Please don't!“. Clem starts to cry: "I failed in protecting you."
Please continue:
Is Clem going to tell them? Is she infected?
Note:
I know I said I am going to pop in in episode 5, but I got an idea during a train drive and I couldn't resist...
Sorry
I'm personally not planning on letting Kenny die due to the bite. He is being treated by professionals with experience within a short amount of time since the bite. SPOILERS Lee probably didn't make it because of the blood loss, or so they say.
You don't have to apologize for joining in, I'm glad you're back!
Hey guys. I am kind of new to the forum but had another account hacked. I will be reading this story and joining in
Sure, go ahead!
Errm... Was your previous account AHouseDivided?
I am asking this because your name is also the name of an episode, just like the previously mentioned one. Another reason is that AHouseDivided started out as a nice guy, but he suddenly started to post those pictures... I could of course be mistaken, and AHouseDivided could have been a troll all along, but something just didn't seem right to me.
Well... I hope you're wrong... :-S
Well, if he was hacked, we can't really blame him for it.
Yes. Yes it was.
Wait: "Yes, I was the one posting disgusting pics" or "Yes, someone hacked my account"
"Yes, some sad fool who has nothing to do in his life hacked my account for no good reason and started posting them "disgusting pictures" on it"
Alright. Anyway: Feel free to join.
IMO lee died due to the bite. think about it. the only amputation that worked!! was Dale in the comics and he was treated immedently. lee had a nice stroll down into the sewers (Witch he said himself "like a goddamn maze) then after the walkers attacked and he looked for a way out he collapsed. how long would it take for omid kenny and christa to lift up a grown man and carry him to the bench?
Lee died of infection
Well, from what I've heard if you cut Lee's arm he doesn't nearly pass out as much as he does when you don't cut it. It doesn't really matter though, he dies anyway.
Still gotta study, @HSPLazerz and @MegaMoto ?
Anyone gonna go? I'm getting anxious for the episode finale.
That was good! Except that in Episode 3, no time has passed in the real game, and Charlie is killed by Lilly :P.
I think i might find some time
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Glad that you wrote by the way
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Okay, i think i'm gonna go on ahead and write some
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"I failed... i just... FUCK" Clementine screams in sadness and anger.
It went silent for a while.
"Please don-" Danielle says before getting cut off by Clementine.
"Don't tell them? Are you insane? So what, you're just gonna let yourself die?" Clementine says.
"But what if they kill me?" Danielle says, crying.
"But what if it IS infect-, well, with everything happening lately... maybe your right. We have no idea what they'll do." Clementine says.
"Well, if we're not gonna tell THEM, we are gonna have to deal with this ourselve-"
"NO! Please don't do it..." Danielle cuts off Clem with.
This is not happening, no no no... I can't do it, besides, it probably won't work, it didn't work for Le-
"I wish Lee was here..." Clem says.
Danielle is to frightened to say anything, all she does is look around, very fast.
Clementine walks away to the kitchen, she looks around for a little while, and comes back.
"I'm, sorry." Clem says, stressed and scared.
"What if it isn't infected!" Danielle says.
"Come on, Dani-" Clem says and gets cut off by Danielle.
"What if it isn't! Even if it is, what if i die from the loss, or something else! Besides, how do you know it will work? Can YOU even do it?" Danielle stutters.
Clementine slowly walks closer.
"You said Lee, he died? Did he die from a bite? Did he try to cut it off? Did. It. Work?" Danielle says, frustrating Clementine in her intentions.
Clementine pushes her to a wall.
"You don't say a word about him, we clear?" Clementine threatens Danielle.
"Ye- No, was he your daddy or what? You probably got him killed in the first place." Danielle says, hesitating whether she should beg for Clem not to do it, or if she should continue frustrating her.
Clementine forces her arm into the table.
Danielle looks at the sharp object.
"Should we see if it works? You seem so interested, after all." Clementine says, looking almost insane.
"Please, stop it Cle- AAAAAHHH!!!" Danielle screams.
"OH GOD, STOP IT PLEASE"
"IT HURTS, IT FUCKING HURTS"
Clementine has blood all over her face when she releases the knife, only halfway through. She immediatly changes her expression to chocked, realizing what she has done.
"I- We-" Clem stutters.
"We have to, finish it."
"NO PLEASE, I'M BEGGING YOU." Danielle screams.
Clementine slowly grasps the knife, and continues.
"AAAAAAAHHHH- JUST KILL ME, I CAN'T TAKE THIS" Danielle screams, in the worst pain she's ever had.
It went quiet.
Danielle passed out right when the arm fell off. Clementine slowly backs away, but she quickly remembers the bandages. She picks them up, shaking just as much as when Lee died. She puts them on Danielle's arm, and then runs outside.
Clementine falls down in the wet grass, right where Gus's blood is, and stays there, still in her shocked state.
Several shots are heard in the background.
I like it! Believe it or not,I really liked the brutality of this post. Like you said it shows how Clem is changing. You can't be that innocent little girl forever. (But Danielle way crossed the line when she said that about Lee. lol)
But, man! Two amputations in one episode?
This is just adding to the list of similarities to S1. (Determent) In our game Danielle gets her arm cut off painfully. And then in the real game Lee also did.
The horrifying words are being played over and over in Clem's mind. "No! It's not a bite!! You have to believe me!!“..... "What if it isn't infected!" Then the worst part, "OH GOD, STOP IT PLEASE IT HURTS, IT FUCKING HURTS" The weird thing was, Clementine didn't feel as bad as she should..... *"Ye- No, was he your daddy or what? You probably got him killed in the first place." * Clementine now mutters to herself, "Why didn't she just let me do it?.....Oh god what have I done?... I wish Lee were here."
"Oh god! Newbie you alright?! "Ahh!! Holy shit it fucking hurts man, really freaking bad.. We need to stop the bleeding. But we're not going to have time to to get back to the..." Pascucci nearly passes out but catches himself. "We won't have enough time to get back to the base, we need to use the materials out here to.. to...-" Pascucci now fully passes out. "Oh man! oh man! oh fucking man, man! Steve is going to kill me if I let him die, we'll be down to 5 members. Oh man what the fuck do i do? That gunshot along with his blood is going to attract the Zocks for miles!" That's when he looks around him and notices a few bushes, a few trees and a few walkers. "How the fuck can I use this to stop the bleeding. I have 10 minutes at the most before the walkers arrive... What can I do?"
"Okay, now just because we gave you this calming drug, doesn't mean it's not going to hurt like a mother fu.ker." Says the nurse who is about to amputate Kenny's leg. "Listen i have been through 4 gunshots, how bad can it- AHH! Holy SH1T!!! How the hell did Lee do thi-" Kenny now also passes out.
Melody can't stand the face of Jeremy so goes back to the cabin, going through the backdoor. (she doesn't want to frighten Dani, and Clem with her crying) Jeremy slowly follows her back, while Brian decides to stay outside."Melody talk to me" Says Jeremy outside of her door in the upstairs of the cabin. "I'm sorry okay? I liked Gus just as much as you did, maybe even more NO-HOMO" Melody unlocks the door and Jeremy walks in. "Why, Why did you do it?" Replies Melody. "I- well, you see, he saw how good we were getting along and he didn't like that." Melody cuts him off, "So you killed him so I couldn't have him? Wow you are fucking selfish get out." "No let me explain" Melody gives the expression as if saying "Fine." So Jeremy goes on. "He tried to- he tried to kill me!... Melody looks nearly emotionless now, as if she had seen a ghost, as if she stopped listening altogether. Melody now says, "Is Clem and Dani okay down there? We haven't checked on them in a while." Jeremy interrupts "It's alright, there fine, nothings happened to them before, nothing will now, and besides, Bryan's sitting outside the back door, if he heard anything he can handle it..-".. Now Jeremy gets a sudden, weird feeling and grabs Melody and kisses her right on the lips. Melody doesn't resist. They both stand there speechless for a few minutes when Melody says, "What the fuck is wrong with me?"
Please continue....
That was GREAT! Love it
I like it. One note: Clem and Dani were all alone when the amputation took place - Melody and Bryan were at the river to look after Jeremy where they witnessed Jeremy killing Gus. You might edit it, e.g. adding a paragraph about their arrival in the cabin.
Oh yeah O.O i forgot about that... i'll do some editing.
I'm gonna write when Randomz is done editing.
Are you done, yet? If yes: I don't get if Melody, Bryan and Jeremy actually know about what Clem did to Danielle
Very well, guess the end of the episode is really coming closer
I would love for this to be the final post actually. I've already got a good name for the next episode.
Well, then... tell us, please
Btw: I guess he's done
Really? Thank you so much
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I guess so, yeah.
Well... The name I have in mind is something along the lines of ''Blood on our hands'' I know it has four words instead of the usual three but I think this would really fit what we've been building up to in this episode.