It is still unclear why nobody notices what has happened to Danielle. Jeremy, Melody and Bryan can't be in or by the cabin, as the amputation makes a lot of noises. Why would Bryan wait outside the cabin instead of checking if Clem's alright? Besides, after the amputation Clem went outside, laying in the grass due to HSBLazerz - Bryan would've noticed that... That part of his story does not make any sense at all imo. Anyway: maybe you can make a final post without the need to expand on this part of the story? Just thinking
Yeah, the post doesn't make a whole lot of sense if you think about it. Maybe I can rewrite it in such a way that it doesn't contradict the previous post. I do kind of want Randomz permission, otherwise it just wouldn't feel right.
It is still unclear why nobody notices what has happened to Danielle. Jeremy, Melody and Bryan can't be in or by the cabin, as the amputation … moremakes a lot of noises. Why would Bryan wait outside the cabin instead of checking if Clem's alright? Besides, after the amputation Clem went outside, laying in the grass due to HSBLazerz - Bryan would've noticed that... That part of his story does not make any sense at all imo. Anyway: maybe you can make a final post without the need to expand on this part of the story? Just thinking
Yeah, the post doesn't make a whole lot of sense if you think about it. Maybe I can rewrite it in such a way that it doesn't contradict the previous post. I do kind of want Randomz permission, otherwise it just wouldn't feel right.
I'm confused How do they know? I edited it so they took the back door, because she doesn't want to frighten them because she was crying from the death of Gus.
Oh sorry guys about the wait, I had school. But I guess i didn't make this as clear as I should have in the post. So i will write out what i meant.
Jeremy, Bryan and Melody, were at the river when the incident happened. (In my imagination i have always thought that the river was 100 yards away. i could be wrong though.) And i thought that the amputation could be taking place while they were arguing about the incident. So They wouldn't necessarily hear the amputation happening. And they would go inside after Dani has passed out, not noticing her. And i also thought that Clementine would have gone out the front door while laying in the grass. (Again I may be wrong) And that is why Bryan did not notice her, because he was at the back door.
Sorry about the confusion, and like i said if you guys need me to change something because that didn't make sense I will.
Should i just leave? maybe i should. are you that inconsiderate that even though i fought to get my post up and (Kind of won) you act like nothing happend?
A) The episode is not finished
My post will start episode 5 and tie together ALL the plot points i have left hanging (The portables in the forest, Crawfords remains and so on)
C) Then i depart and you will never see me again (Cue everyone throwing a party)
I let the argument drop because it was derailing the thread. No one really won, we just kinda dropped it. I'm sorry I forgot you wanted to start episode 5. I still don't think pre writing (especially big things like the beginning or ending to an episode) should be allowed. But the group decided to leave it.
Should i just leave? maybe i should. are you that inconsiderate that even though i fought to get my post up and (Kind of won) you act like not… morehing happend?
A) The episode is not finished
My post will start episode 5 and tie together ALL the plot points i have left hanging (The portables in the forest, Crawfords remains and so on)
C) Then i depart and you will never see me again (Cue everyone throwing a party)
I let the argument drop because it was derailing the thread. No one really won, we just kinda dropped it. I'm sorry I forgot you wanted to sta… morert episode 5. I still don't think pre writing (especially big things like the beginning or ending to an episode) should be allowed. But the group decided to leave it.
Following the battle at Taiva's group,
The group rides on back roads, in a trailer and truck. A crash awakens those in the trailer, and hear and unfamiliar voice, "I'll fucking kill you"
"WAIT! We have kids please don't hurt us!" Says a scared Pascucci.
"Sorry about that, I must have given you quite the scare back there!" Says the stranger, "My name is Melody." Clementine now asks Kenny, "Can we live here?" Kenny and Melody share a look. "Of course it is"
"Just one more question, Jeremy. Do you like Melody?"... "Of course, why wouldn't I?
"Hey Danielle I was just wondering, the other night i heard you crying. Wait what was that?! That noise let's go check it out." Says Clementine. "Give me one reason why I shouldn't kill you right on the spot" Says a group of bandits. "Well... um.. you see..-" When arrows go piercing right through the bandits skulls. Clementine notices, they come from above in the treetops.
"hey Melody i just wanted to admit my feelings for you" says Jeremy. "Oh, um well this is awkward, me and Gus sort of have a thing going on... "Oh well.. uh.. see you later then...
"Food is starting to become more scarce eh?" Says a worried Pascucci. Right at that moment the same one who saved Clem's life brought a basket of food near the trees of the cabin.
"Holy shit do you see that buck? That's a trophy, 10 point. Biggest one i've seen in a long time. And it's all mine." Whispers Kenny. BAM! "Now time to claim what's mine, can't wait til Clem gets a loud of this troph-" A bandit interrupts Kenny and Pascucci. "Now i'm going to take this deer and nobody gets hurt." Kenny who doesn't like this idea says, "Yeah over my dead body bitc-" BAM! "Oh man Kenny we gotta get you back to the cabin." Says Pascucci. What they didn't know was that after they had left, the mystery man had avenged Kenny and used the arrow on the bandit.
"You got real lucky Kenny, didn't hit any vital organs, you'll be fine in a matter of weeks!
Days latter.... Later that night a real storm had hit up in the area. "Holy shit i gotta get back, I ain't gonna survive out here much longer." Mutters the stranger. When all of a sudden a pack of wolves come and attacks him. He manages to kill all but one which manages to tear open his leg. He was in deep trouble if no one helped him asap. When he hears the cabin door slam, and Clementine rescues the man.
Kenny who was still in his room, healing, noticed the new man come in, "So what's your name? Clementine's been telling me bout you."... "The name is Brian."... "Well, okay Brian I need you to keep a secret for me, I'm leaving.".... "Wait! i thought your supposed to be healing up."'.... "I've been fine for a week, Listen kid I have things to do, just let me go.
"Alright what the hell guys. It's storming outside and Kenny decided to leave the group for his own selfish reasons. Now I have to go after him.
Later that night there were plenty of arguments, and one "Moment."one argument was between the two lovers Melody and Gus. So Jeremy and Melody have a special "Moment" over by the river. Melody leaves shortly before Jeremy. When all of a sudden Jeremy is attacked from behind. It was Gus! "So you think your gonna steal my lady because of one argument?! I'm gonna kill you." Jeremy who was practally knocked unconscious , sneaks on Gus and knocks him off his feet and bashes his head with a rock. That's when Melody arrives. "What the hell did you do to him?! While that argument was heated...
How long has it been a day? two days? I don't think i'll ever know, this storm won't stop. Thinks Pascucci on his search for Kenny. When all of a sudden he is knocked unconscious.
Another group "Saves" Pascucci and explains to him, that they need Pascucci. Pascucci lies and says he will join there group. Hus first task is to help another member catch two terrorists who broke into the base.
"Our whole plan went to shit we gotta run!" Says Kenny. "That ax man really tore into my leg, DAMN!" Kenny who had found a new (Friendly) group for the time being, was trying to help his new friend Jack steal food from another groups base. "Hey Jack, i'm not feeling that well, I think I might- Kenny now passes out.
Do you think we'll catch em? Says Pascucci's new friend, Frank. "I'm sure we will. Hey look here they are, lets hide in the bushes til we have a good shot. Pascucci now notices that, a passed out Kenny is on the shoulders of an unfamiliar man, for he would not shoot his friend. Frank now says on the count of 3 shoot em. "3!" Pascucci shoots and misses on purpose. Then the unfamiliar man nails a shot into Pascucci's
shoulder.
"Kenny, hey Kenny wake up! We're back to the base, but you might wanna take a look at your leg." Kenny looks down and notices a bite mark, it sends a shiver down the back of Kenny. "But hey, don't worry we've amputated before, you should be fine.
"Danielle don't go outside alone says Clementine. "I'm older then you i know what I can and can't do." Clementine sends her a bad look.And Danielle goes out side anyways. She comes back in a few minutes later crying. "What's wrong Danielle?" Danielle stands silent for a minute. "Nothing it's just cold outside." Clementine looks over and see's a bite. "No danielle no!! I told you not to go outside! Why did you do it!?" Danielle who is now practically sobbing, "I'm sorry, just don't tell the adults." Clementine now yelling says, "Are you crazy don't tell the adult-" The realization of an amputation now goes into Clems mind. "Oh no." Clem grabs the knife from the kitchen and says "I'm sorry" And starts to begin cutting off Danielles arm. "What the fuck are you AHHH!!! Stop it hurts it Freaking hurts STOP!!! Once the arm is off, Danielle passes out and Clementine finally notices what she had done. "Oh my god, what have I done.
Okay sorry about the longness of this post.
And i purposlly made it, so the real conversations weren't put in. (it's just a summary of what happened.
If your wondering why I did this it was because I wanted to sum up the episode,
THIS TOOK ME LIKE 2.5 HOURS TO DO I am now suddenly very tired.. Uhh
Last Time On The Walking Dead....
Following the battle at Taiva's group,
The group rides on back roads, in a trailer and truck. A crash… more awakens those in the trailer, and hear and unfamiliar voice, "I'll fucking kill you"
"WAIT! We have kids please don't hurt us!" Says a scared Pascucci.
"Sorry about that, I must have given you quite the scare back there!" Says the stranger, "My name is Melody." Clementine now asks Kenny, "Can we live here?" Kenny and Melody share a look. "Of course it is"
"Just one more question, Jeremy. Do you like Melody?"... "Of course, why wouldn't I?
"Hey Danielle I was just wondering, the other night i heard you crying. Wait what was that?! That noise let's go check it out." Says Clementine. "Give me one reason why I shouldn't kill you right on the spot" Says a group of bandits. "Well... um.. you see..-" When arrows go piercing right through the bandits skulls. Clementine notices, they come from above in … [view original content]
Last Time On The Walking Dead....
Following the battle at Taiva's group,
The group rides on back roads, in a trailer and truck. A crash… more awakens those in the trailer, and hear and unfamiliar voice, "I'll fucking kill you"
"WAIT! We have kids please don't hurt us!" Says a scared Pascucci.
"Sorry about that, I must have given you quite the scare back there!" Says the stranger, "My name is Melody." Clementine now asks Kenny, "Can we live here?" Kenny and Melody share a look. "Of course it is"
"Just one more question, Jeremy. Do you like Melody?"... "Of course, why wouldn't I?
"Hey Danielle I was just wondering, the other night i heard you crying. Wait what was that?! That noise let's go check it out." Says Clementine. "Give me one reason why I shouldn't kill you right on the spot" Says a group of bandits. "Well... um.. you see..-" When arrows go piercing right through the bandits skulls. Clementine notices, they come from above in … [view original content]
Alright, now I get it. I was wondering why Bryan wouldn't check on the kids well-being. It makes sense they don't want to scare them by delivering the death message. Thanks
I'm confused How do they know? I edited it so they took the back door, because she doesn't want to frighten them because she was crying from the death of Gus.
I like this one. Has three words and can be interpreted in many ways, e.g. last breath before dieing, before doing something meaningful or the last breath of the life it was before... it delivers that something will change. Great
''Clementine! Clem?'', Bryan walks into the living room, ''There's some--'' Paralyzed by fear, Bryan gasps for air. Danielle lays right in front of him. Her face is pale and blood is gushing out of the place her hand is supposed to be. His eyes move around the room, he is looking for who, or what might have done this to her. He finally notices a bloody knife with bits of flesh and muscle hanging of off it. The chair Danielle sat in before has fallen to the ground. Still confused by the situation Bryan rushes over to her seemingly lifeless body. He puts his fingers on her intact wrist and feels a faint beat.
''MELODY! JEREMY!'', Bryan shouts, ''GET OVER HERE, RIGHT NOW!'' He rips a piece of cloth from his already teared up shirt and uses it to bind her arm off. Loud footsteps are heard coming down the stairs when Bryan checks her heartbeat once again. ''Damn it...'', he mumbles to himself. The couple finally opens the door and rushes in with their weapons pulled out. They quickly drop them when they see what has happened. Melody supports herself against the wall, she gags a few times before eventually throwing up. Bryan tells Jeremy to get a medical kit from the kitchen, and he obliges.
''We're losing her!'', Bryan pushes the girl on her back and starts to perform CPR on her. Every push requires his full power. He takes a deep breath when her heart beat has finally regained its normal strength and Jeremy finally shows up with the medical kit. Bryan gets out of the way while his friend puts a sturdy binding around Danielle's new stump. Melody has finally got herself together when she asks: ''Where is Clementine?'' Bryan swiftly stands up and grabs his bow from his back. ''Check her pulse every 30 seconds, make sure you stop the bleeding, and do not let it get infected!''
He pushes the front door open with his hand before readying his bow. About three meters ahead of him, a little girl lays in the grass. She appears to be crying. Her hat lays next to her, drenched in blood. Bryan slowly approaches her, carefully considering his every step. He releases the tension from his bow and slowly starts to speak, ''Clementine? Are you alright?'' She doesn't respond. Bryan kneels down and reaches out to her, but she remains unmoved. ''What happened?''
Clementine slowly turns her head around, tears are still rolling over her blood-covered face. She stares at Bryan with a heartbreaking look in her eyes. Her face has turned into that of a soldier. Her innocent smile has been replaced by a grim frown. The spark of hope he used to see in her eyes has been replaced by a bitter stare. She breaths heavily. When she starts to speak, Bryan is amazed by the calm and mature tone coming from this little girl.
''It's all my fault.''
-Screen suddenly turns to black while the music suddenly stops-
''Clementine! Clem?'', Bryan walks into the living room, ''There's some--'' Paralyzed by fear, Bryan gasps for air. Danielle lays right in fro… morent of him. Her face is pale and blood is gushing out of the place her hand is supposed to be. His eyes move around the room, he is looking for who, or what might have done this to her. He finally notices a bloody knife with bits of flesh and muscle hanging of off it. The chair Danielle sat in before has fallen to the ground. Still confused by the situation Bryan rushes over to her seemingly lifeless body. He puts his fingers on her intact wrist and feels a faint beat.
''MELODY! JEREMY!'', Bryan shouts, ''GET OVER HERE, RIGHT NOW!'' He rips a piece of cloth from his already teared up shirt and uses it to bind her arm off. Loud footsteps are heard coming down the stairs when Bryan checks her heartbeat once again. ''Damn it...'', he mumbles to himself. The couple finally opens the door and rushes in with th… [view original content]
''Clementine! Clem?'', Bryan walks into the living room, ''There's some--'' Paralyzed by fear, Bryan gasps for air. Danielle lays right in fro… morent of him. Her face is pale and blood is gushing out of the place her hand is supposed to be. His eyes move around the room, he is looking for who, or what might have done this to her. He finally notices a bloody knife with bits of flesh and muscle hanging of off it. The chair Danielle sat in before has fallen to the ground. Still confused by the situation Bryan rushes over to her seemingly lifeless body. He puts his fingers on her intact wrist and feels a faint beat.
''MELODY! JEREMY!'', Bryan shouts, ''GET OVER HERE, RIGHT NOW!'' He rips a piece of cloth from his already teared up shirt and uses it to bind her arm off. Loud footsteps are heard coming down the stairs when Bryan checks her heartbeat once again. ''Damn it...'', he mumbles to himself. The couple finally opens the door and rushes in with th… [view original content]
Wait? Is this the finale? I don't personally think it's enough. Not that it isn't good enough or anything, just that i want something big to happen rather than, well, nothing.
Wait? Is this the finale? I don't personally think it's enough. Not that it isn't good enough or anything, just that i want something big to happen rather than, well, nothing.
Nice finale. While waiting for @Lord_zasca's prewritten opening of episode 5 let's discuss a bit:
Was the amputation really necessary? Is it possible a deep scratch can get infected by walker muck? Has Clementine done it to her to really safe her or was it more kind of teaching Dani a lesson for the awful behaviour before - what fits Clementine's character best? Has Danielle deserved it and is she going to survive?
Got some time, that's why I'm just working on the BACKUP. Some people said they have one but whenever the question fell where it is nobody replied, so...
I personally thought it was over too, but HSPLazerz does bring up a good point saying nothing really happened. It was nice and dramatic though. And I think we could really start out in a very interesting situation at the beginning of episode 5. The group is basically falling apart with all the tension in the relationships and Clementine has matured. We also still have the matter of finding Kenny and Pascucci.
If we want, this can very well be the last post of ep.4
Well, Lee's arm was also barely scratched if you look at it, and he still managed to die because of the infection. Although part of it was Clementine wanting to protect Danielle, she was also acting in a fit of rage. Clementine is turning into a hardened survivor.
Nice finale. While waiting for @Lord_zasca's prewritten opening of episode 5 let's discuss a bit:
Was the amputation really necessary? Is i… moret possible a deep scratch can get infected by walker muck? Has Clementine done it to her to really safe her or was it more kind of teaching Dani a lesson for the awful behaviour before - what fits Clementine's character best? Has Danielle deserved it and is she going to survive?
What do you think?
I personally thought it was over too, but HSPLazerz does bring up a good point saying nothing really happened. It was nice and dramatic though… more. And I think we could really start out in a very interesting situation at the beginning of episode 5. The group is basically falling apart with all the tension in the relationships and Clementine has matured. We also still have the matter of finding Kenny and Pascucci.
If we want, this can very well be the last post of ep.4
Got some time, that's why I'm just working on the BACKUP. Some people said they have one but whenever the question fell where it is nobody replied, so...
Comments
Everyone, put down all your ideas for Episode 5's Title.
I got one.
Alone.
Like I said in my last post,
Blood on our Hands
Can I write yet? I plan on making it a big post, but I don't want to do something wrong by not waiting for Randomz to finish his post up.
I think you could write now. I think Randomz is finished anyway.
Falling apart
It is still unclear why nobody notices what has happened to Danielle. Jeremy, Melody and Bryan can't be in or by the cabin, as the amputation makes a lot of noises. Why would Bryan wait outside the cabin instead of checking if Clem's alright? Besides, after the amputation Clem went outside, laying in the grass due to HSBLazerz - Bryan would've noticed that... That part of his story does not make any sense at all imo. Anyway: maybe you can make a final post without the need to expand on this part of the story? Just thinking
Yeah, the post doesn't make a whole lot of sense if you think about it. Maybe I can rewrite it in such a way that it doesn't contradict the previous post. I do kind of want Randomz permission, otherwise it just wouldn't feel right.
Right. Might take a while, though it's best we just wait what he'll say
I'm confused How do they know? I edited it so they took the back door, because she doesn't want to frighten them because she was crying from the death of Gus.
Oh sorry guys about the wait, I had school. But I guess i didn't make this as clear as I should have in the post. So i will write out what i meant.
Jeremy, Bryan and Melody, were at the river when the incident happened. (In my imagination i have always thought that the river was 100 yards away. i could be wrong though.) And i thought that the amputation could be taking place while they were arguing about the incident. So They wouldn't necessarily hear the amputation happening. And they would go inside after Dani has passed out, not noticing her. And i also thought that Clementine would have gone out the front door while laying in the grass. (Again I may be wrong) And that is why Bryan did not notice her, because he was at the back door.
Sorry about the confusion, and like i said if you guys need me to change something because that didn't make sense I will.
Vote on it. dislikes means no likes means yes.
I've been a little busy the past few day's. Now I'm getting caught up.
I like this one with all the blood being spilled lately.
Sorry I've been gone the past few days, really busy. I'm back and all caught up now. Waiting for the next post, maybe I'll start episode 5, or not.
I have one!
The Other Side
Should i just leave? maybe i should. are you that inconsiderate that even though i fought to get my post up and (Kind of won) you act like nothing happend?
A) The episode is not finished
C) Then i depart and you will never see me again (Cue everyone throwing a party)
I let the argument drop because it was derailing the thread. No one really won, we just kinda dropped it. I'm sorry I forgot you wanted to start episode 5. I still don't think pre writing (especially big things like the beginning or ending to an episode) should be allowed. But the group decided to leave it.
I did not. i lost the vote 2 3. i post. i leave.
Last Time On The Walking Dead....
Following the battle at Taiva's group,
The group rides on back roads, in a trailer and truck. A crash awakens those in the trailer, and hear and unfamiliar voice, "I'll fucking kill you"
"WAIT! We have kids please don't hurt us!" Says a scared Pascucci.
"Sorry about that, I must have given you quite the scare back there!" Says the stranger, "My name is Melody." Clementine now asks Kenny, "Can we live here?" Kenny and Melody share a look. "Of course it is"
"Just one more question, Jeremy. Do you like Melody?"... "Of course, why wouldn't I?
"Hey Danielle I was just wondering, the other night i heard you crying. Wait what was that?! That noise let's go check it out." Says Clementine. "Give me one reason why I shouldn't kill you right on the spot" Says a group of bandits. "Well... um.. you see..-" When arrows go piercing right through the bandits skulls. Clementine notices, they come from above in the treetops.
"hey Melody i just wanted to admit my feelings for you" says Jeremy. "Oh, um well this is awkward, me and Gus sort of have a thing going on... "Oh well.. uh.. see you later then...
"Food is starting to become more scarce eh?" Says a worried Pascucci. Right at that moment the same one who saved Clem's life brought a basket of food near the trees of the cabin.
"Holy shit do you see that buck? That's a trophy, 10 point. Biggest one i've seen in a long time. And it's all mine." Whispers Kenny. BAM! "Now time to claim what's mine, can't wait til Clem gets a loud of this troph-" A bandit interrupts Kenny and Pascucci. "Now i'm going to take this deer and nobody gets hurt." Kenny who doesn't like this idea says, "Yeah over my dead body bitc-" BAM! "Oh man Kenny we gotta get you back to the cabin." Says Pascucci. What they didn't know was that after they had left, the mystery man had avenged Kenny and used the arrow on the bandit.
"You got real lucky Kenny, didn't hit any vital organs, you'll be fine in a matter of weeks!
Days latter.... Later that night a real storm had hit up in the area. "Holy shit i gotta get back, I ain't gonna survive out here much longer." Mutters the stranger. When all of a sudden a pack of wolves come and attacks him. He manages to kill all but one which manages to tear open his leg. He was in deep trouble if no one helped him asap. When he hears the cabin door slam, and Clementine rescues the man.
Kenny who was still in his room, healing, noticed the new man come in, "So what's your name? Clementine's been telling me bout you."... "The name is Brian."... "Well, okay Brian I need you to keep a secret for me, I'm leaving.".... "Wait! i thought your supposed to be healing up."'.... "I've been fine for a week, Listen kid I have things to do, just let me go.
"Alright what the hell guys. It's storming outside and Kenny decided to leave the group for his own selfish reasons. Now I have to go after him.
Later that night there were plenty of arguments, and one "Moment."one argument was between the two lovers Melody and Gus. So Jeremy and Melody have a special "Moment" over by the river. Melody leaves shortly before Jeremy. When all of a sudden Jeremy is attacked from behind. It was Gus! "So you think your gonna steal my lady because of one argument?! I'm gonna kill you." Jeremy who was practally knocked unconscious , sneaks on Gus and knocks him off his feet and bashes his head with a rock. That's when Melody arrives. "What the hell did you do to him?! While that argument was heated...
How long has it been a day? two days? I don't think i'll ever know, this storm won't stop. Thinks Pascucci on his search for Kenny. When all of a sudden he is knocked unconscious.
Another group "Saves" Pascucci and explains to him, that they need Pascucci. Pascucci lies and says he will join there group. Hus first task is to help another member catch two terrorists who broke into the base.
"Our whole plan went to shit we gotta run!" Says Kenny. "That ax man really tore into my leg, DAMN!" Kenny who had found a new (Friendly) group for the time being, was trying to help his new friend Jack steal food from another groups base. "Hey Jack, i'm not feeling that well, I think I might- Kenny now passes out.
Do you think we'll catch em? Says Pascucci's new friend, Frank. "I'm sure we will. Hey look here they are, lets hide in the bushes til we have a good shot. Pascucci now notices that, a passed out Kenny is on the shoulders of an unfamiliar man, for he would not shoot his friend. Frank now says on the count of 3 shoot em. "3!" Pascucci shoots and misses on purpose. Then the unfamiliar man nails a shot into Pascucci's
shoulder.
"Kenny, hey Kenny wake up! We're back to the base, but you might wanna take a look at your leg." Kenny looks down and notices a bite mark, it sends a shiver down the back of Kenny. "But hey, don't worry we've amputated before, you should be fine.
"Danielle don't go outside alone says Clementine. "I'm older then you i know what I can and can't do." Clementine sends her a bad look.And Danielle goes out side anyways. She comes back in a few minutes later crying. "What's wrong Danielle?" Danielle stands silent for a minute. "Nothing it's just cold outside." Clementine looks over and see's a bite. "No danielle no!! I told you not to go outside! Why did you do it!?" Danielle who is now practically sobbing, "I'm sorry, just don't tell the adults." Clementine now yelling says, "Are you crazy don't tell the adult-" The realization of an amputation now goes into Clems mind. "Oh no." Clem grabs the knife from the kitchen and says "I'm sorry" And starts to begin cutting off Danielles arm. "What the fuck are you AHHH!!! Stop it hurts it Freaking hurts STOP!!! Once the arm is off, Danielle passes out and Clementine finally notices what she had done. "Oh my god, what have I done.
THIS TOOK ME LIKE 2.5 HOURS TO DO I am now suddenly very tired.. Uhh
That was real good, though i wish you would've used exact quotes :P.
One Last Breath
Thanks for that, brought some flashbacks
Alright, now I get it. I was wondering why Bryan wouldn't check on the kids well-being. It makes sense they don't want to scare them by delivering the death message. Thanks
I like this one. Has three words and can be interpreted in many ways, e.g. last breath before dieing, before doing something meaningful or the last breath of the life it was before... it delivers that something will change. Great
Me, too. At last it's kind of a summary, but I don't mind if we just keep it that way since it was a lot of work.
''Clementine! Clem?'', Bryan walks into the living room, ''There's some--'' Paralyzed by fear, Bryan gasps for air. Danielle lays right in front of him. Her face is pale and blood is gushing out of the place her hand is supposed to be. His eyes move around the room, he is looking for who, or what might have done this to her. He finally notices a bloody knife with bits of flesh and muscle hanging of off it. The chair Danielle sat in before has fallen to the ground. Still confused by the situation Bryan rushes over to her seemingly lifeless body. He puts his fingers on her intact wrist and feels a faint beat.
''MELODY! JEREMY!'', Bryan shouts, ''GET OVER HERE, RIGHT NOW!'' He rips a piece of cloth from his already teared up shirt and uses it to bind her arm off. Loud footsteps are heard coming down the stairs when Bryan checks her heartbeat once again. ''Damn it...'', he mumbles to himself. The couple finally opens the door and rushes in with their weapons pulled out. They quickly drop them when they see what has happened. Melody supports herself against the wall, she gags a few times before eventually throwing up. Bryan tells Jeremy to get a medical kit from the kitchen, and he obliges.
''We're losing her!'', Bryan pushes the girl on her back and starts to perform CPR on her. Every push requires his full power. He takes a deep breath when her heart beat has finally regained its normal strength and Jeremy finally shows up with the medical kit. Bryan gets out of the way while his friend puts a sturdy binding around Danielle's new stump. Melody has finally got herself together when she asks: ''Where is Clementine?'' Bryan swiftly stands up and grabs his bow from his back. ''Check her pulse every 30 seconds, make sure you stop the bleeding, and do not let it get infected!''
(Start music from 00:26 : http://www.youtube.com/watch?feature=player_embedded&v=TvKYSJGwsXs )
He pushes the front door open with his hand before readying his bow. About three meters ahead of him, a little girl lays in the grass. She appears to be crying. Her hat lays next to her, drenched in blood. Bryan slowly approaches her, carefully considering his every step. He releases the tension from his bow and slowly starts to speak, ''Clementine? Are you alright?'' She doesn't respond. Bryan kneels down and reaches out to her, but she remains unmoved. ''What happened?''
Clementine slowly turns her head around, tears are still rolling over her blood-covered face. She stares at Bryan with a heartbreaking look in her eyes. Her face has turned into that of a soldier. Her innocent smile has been replaced by a grim frown. The spark of hope he used to see in her eyes has been replaced by a bitter stare. She breaths heavily. When she starts to speak, Bryan is amazed by the calm and mature tone coming from this little girl.
''It's all my fault.''
-Screen suddenly turns to black while the music suddenly stops-
Yay - I can't wait
))
There you go, hope it's good enough to be the finale of episode 4.
Nice
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Wait? Is this the finale? I don't personally think it's enough. Not that it isn't good enough or anything, just that i want something big to happen rather than, well, nothing.
I get it ;P
Nice finale. While waiting for @Lord_zasca's prewritten opening of episode 5 let's discuss a bit:
Was the amputation really necessary? Is it possible a deep scratch can get infected by walker muck? Has Clementine done it to her to really safe her or was it more kind of teaching Dani a lesson for the awful behaviour before - what fits Clementine's character best? Has Danielle deserved it and is she going to survive?
What do you think?
Oh sorry, was I too hasty? Is it not over yet?
Got some time, that's why I'm just working on the BACKUP. Some people said they have one but whenever the question fell where it is nobody replied, so...
I personally thought it was over too, but HSPLazerz does bring up a good point saying nothing really happened. It was nice and dramatic though. And I think we could really start out in a very interesting situation at the beginning of episode 5. The group is basically falling apart with all the tension in the relationships and Clementine has matured. We also still have the matter of finding Kenny and Pascucci.
If we want, this can very well be the last post of ep.4
Well, Lee's arm was also barely scratched if you look at it, and he still managed to die because of the infection. Although part of it was Clementine wanting to protect Danielle, she was also acting in a fit of rage. Clementine is turning into a hardened survivor.
I'm ok with yours being the finale post. Suggestion: If someone is having objections, please share them or write a proper ending asap
Oh dear... I've been working on the backup for hours and I am still stuck on page 15...
Guys, I think that's the perfect finale. It's dramatic. Imagine this is the actual game.
People would be thinking
WHAT HAPPENED TO KENNY??
WILL DANIELLE SURVIVE?
POOR CLEM BLAMING HERSELF!
i just think it's the perfect ending for Episode 4
The name for the final episode is kinda unsolved yet, am I right?