I can't wait for chapter 2. I bet it would take place a week afterwards and there would be 3 groups. The farm, a city group, and boat. Boat will be the best though.
My only suggestion is using more descriptive verbs.
Like in one of the earlier stories you use "I said in pain" when "I screamed in agony" would've been better.
Other than that good job lee.
My only suggestion is using more descriptive verbs.
Like in one of the earlier stories you use "I said in pain" when "I screamed in agony" would've been better.
Other than that good job lee.
Lol, same here. I can eat a lot, but not gain a pound. Probably high metabolism, haha, or maybe because I work it off. But, oh well. I'm not complaining. B]
Heh, me too. I've been trying to gain some weight, but I'm giving up now. I guess there's no point of doing that if I'm not going to be healthy. :p I'm not complaining as well, but I have to say, everytime I look in the mirror my ribs freak me out. Lol
Lol, same here. I can eat a lot, but not gain a pound. Probably high metabolism, haha, or maybe because I work it off. But, oh well. I'm not complaining. B]
Puncake32
(!) Let's all go.
I was looking down and thinking about what we should do next. Suddenly Firedog spoke up. "Let's all go… more." He told us.
I turned to look at Jon and Clayton. "Yeah, I agree. I AGREE!" I told them with a huge smile. "We need to leave now! C'mon you, guys."
We all got up and checked the front. It seemed like the walkers were probably still distracted, but it looked like a few of them were roaming around the gas station pumps. Some of the pumps were knocked down and there was gasoline all over the ground.
"Now or never, then." Jon told us. "Let's go!"
Jon lead the way, and we followed. Clayton was surprisingly keeping up right behind him while smoking at the same time. I was behind Clayton and Firedog was behind me. We ran past the walkers and some of them noticed. They started following us to Jon's car. When suddenly...
"Ahh!" I looked back and saw Firedog on the ground, with the sup… [view original content]
Gobananas01
(!) We need to sneak out.
"We need to sneak out." I told cameroncr95. "Now's our chance, with that smoke blocking them… more from seeing us. At least, WE sorta know where they are, from memory."
"Alright. We could use another tear gas grenade, but they'll probably be expecting that." He told me with a concerned look.
"Four bullets in the Glock. You throw it and then I'll immediately start shooting at them. I don't think that gas mask guy will be stupid enough to stand there and wait to get shot. Especially since they can't see us through that smoke in the middle." I told him. "There are some desks we can use for cover, until we reach the parking lot door."
"Alright, I'll throw it first, and then you run out and shoot. Once that asshole moves, I'll dive over behind that desk." He pointed at the desk just outside my office.
"OK. I'll wait for you there." I said to Cameron.
"No. You head over to the pa… [view original content]
Heh, me too. I've been trying to gain some weight, but I'm giving up now. I guess there's no point of doing that if I'm not going to be heal… morethy. :p I'm not complaining as well, but I have to say, everytime I look in the mirror my ribs freak me out. Lol
Heh, me too. I've been trying to gain some weight, but I'm giving up now. I guess there's no point of doing that if I'm not going to be heal… morethy. :p I'm not complaining as well, but I have to say, everytime I look in the mirror my ribs freak me out. Lol
I can't wait for chapter 2. I bet it would take place a week afterwards and there would be 3 groups. The farm, a city group, and boat. Boat will be the best though.
(!) Rich, lets go down the road and see what we can find.
I was still arguing with Rich. Telling him that I wanted to make sure my family was okay.
Suddenly Belan spoke up. "Rich, lets go down the road and see what we can find."
I got angry and turned to him. "What?! First you leave Jewfreeus behind and now, your telling Rich to go down the road, to who knows where and I'm not even going to be able to make sure my family is okay?!"
eking backed Belan's choice. "Settle down, ATR. Belan thought there wasn't enough time to go back. We needed to leave. Besides, Jewf ditched us in the first place."
I gave him an evil glare."Whatever, you two." I looked down and sighed. "Oh, Jewf. Why did you run away?"
"This is bullshit!" Noncy yelled out in anger. "Only me and ATR want to leave to the city, it seems. What about about you, PaulKenneth?"
"I don't give a shit where we go. Let's just go down the road, I guess." He said while trying not to move his leg.
Rich put the car on drive and said."Alright, four on two. Were heading down the road, everyone."
Noncy crossed her arms, and turned her head to look out the car window. "Ugh! Whatever then. Let's just go."
"Looks like we have no choice." I said as I turned to look at Belan.
"I'm sorry. I'm worried about my family too, but. I think we'll be safer away from the city." Belan said with an unhappy look.
I sighed again. "Okay. Let's just go then."
I heard Noncy whisper something next to me. "Where did you go, Tobi-Is-A-Good-Boy?..." She said to herself.
Rich made a right turn out of the parking lot and onto the road. I turned to look back at the school which was slowly being overrun by these zombies, and more of them coming out of the woods. I kept wondering if Jewf was still alive.
Belan turned to look at eking."You think I made the right choice?"
"Yeah, man. Don't worry about it." eking responded.
We were on the road for a while. It was pretty empty, everything was dark and quiet around us. It seemed like nothing crazy was going on.
Rich spoke up. "Shit, you guys. Were almost on "E." I need to stop the car somewhere."
"Oh, great!" Noncy said sarcastically.
Rich made a turn into a dirt road leading to the river. I remembered how I use to come down here to go fishing with my dad on Sunday's. I really hoped my family was safe. Rich parked the car next to the river, and all of us got out. Rich, eking, and Belan helped get Paul out of the back of the pickup, and sat him next to a tree.
"thanks, guys." He said to them with a half smile.
"No problem, Paul. I'm going to go take a look around." eking told us.
"I'll stay with the group and keep a look out. Belan, follow eking just to be safe." Rich said to him.
I stayed next to Paul with Noncy. Rich was walking around with his gun, making sure nothing got close to us. Belan and eking went out to take a look around the river.
"Holy shit! You guys come quickly!" We heard Belan yell out to us.
Rich turned to look at me. "ATR, go check it out. I'll stay here with Noncy and Paul."
I nodded and ran over to see what Belan was yelling about. When I reached their location. I was shocked at what he and eking had found.
I needed to get Cameron to the hospital. I put the sirens on and tried to avoid hitting anyone in the streets. People seemed too busy looting the stores. I turned to look at Cameron.
"Hey, man. We're almost there. You'll be fine."
Cameron was just laying there. He didn't give me any response.
"C'mon, Cameron! Don't give up now. I need you, partner. Don't fuckin' die on me." I turned to look up in front of us."Oh shit!" I said as I saw a bloodied man in the middle of the street.
I turned the steering wheel, trying to avoid hitting him and we ran off the road, into the woods. The car flipped and was rolling over down the hill, until we hit the ground and we stopped. I felt a bit of pain, on my right arm, but It seemed like I was okay. I looked over to Cameron and he still wasn't moving. I unbuckled my seat belt an opened the door. I got out of the wrecked squad car and took a breather. I heard moaning coming from inside the car.
I quickly focused my attention inside the car. "Cameron, you're still alive?!" I asked my partner.
He turned to look at me, and I got chills going down my spine when I saw him. "Holy shit..." I said as I saw Cameron growling at me with his hands trying to reach me. His skin was greyish and his pupils were completely white."What the fuck happened?!" I yelled out to myself.
Cameron was trying to reach me, but the seat belt was holding him back. Everything was going wrong. The people in the city were going crazy and Cameron... I didn't even know what the hell was going on anymore. I heard gunshots coming from above the hill and onto the streets. I needed to get out of here fast. I opened the back door and got the riot shield and shotgun out. Cameron still had a tear gas grenade and a knife on him, that could be useful. I went around the car to the passenger side and opened it. I placed the riot shield down. I had my shotgun ready, Cameron had his attention on me and was still trying to get his hands on me, while growling ferociously. I didn't know what to do...
1) I'm sorry, Cameron. I don't know what happened. But I have to leave you here.
2) Cameron... what the fuck?... I have to shoot you... I need to get that tear gas grenade and knife.
3) I can't shoot you, man. I have to try to get that tear gas grenade and knife off of him somehow.
AllThatRemains
(!) Rich, lets go down the road and see what we can find.
I was still arguing with Rich. Telling him that I wanted … moreto make sure my family was okay.
Suddenly Belan spoke up. "Rich, lets go down the road and see what we can find."
I got angry and turned to him. "What?! First you leave Jewfreeus behind and now, your telling Rich to go down the road, to who knows where and I'm not even going to be able to make sure my family is okay?!"
eking backed Belan's choice. "Settle down, ATR. Belan thought there wasn't enough time to go back. We needed to leave. Besides, Jewf ditched us in the first place."
I gave him an evil glare."Whatever, you two." I looked down and sighed. "Oh, Jewf. Why did you run away?"
"This is bullshit!" Noncy yelled out in anger. "Only me and ATR want to leave to the city, it seems. What about about you, PaulKenneth?"
"I don't give a shit where we go. Let's just go down t… [view original content]
AllThatRemains
(!) Rich, lets go down the road and see what we can find.
I was still arguing with Rich. Telling him that I wanted … moreto make sure my family was okay.
Suddenly Belan spoke up. "Rich, lets go down the road and see what we can find."
I got angry and turned to him. "What?! First you leave Jewfreeus behind and now, your telling Rich to go down the road, to who knows where and I'm not even going to be able to make sure my family is okay?!"
eking backed Belan's choice. "Settle down, ATR. Belan thought there wasn't enough time to go back. We needed to leave. Besides, Jewf ditched us in the first place."
I gave him an evil glare."Whatever, you two." I looked down and sighed. "Oh, Jewf. Why did you run away?"
"This is bullshit!" Noncy yelled out in anger. "Only me and ATR want to leave to the city, it seems. What about about you, PaulKenneth?"
"I don't give a shit where we go. Let's just go down t… [view original content]
AllThatRemains
(!) Rich, lets go down the road and see what we can find.
I was still arguing with Rich. Telling him that I wanted … moreto make sure my family was okay.
Suddenly Belan spoke up. "Rich, lets go down the road and see what we can find."
I got angry and turned to him. "What?! First you leave Jewfreeus behind and now, your telling Rich to go down the road, to who knows where and I'm not even going to be able to make sure my family is okay?!"
eking backed Belan's choice. "Settle down, ATR. Belan thought there wasn't enough time to go back. We needed to leave. Besides, Jewf ditched us in the first place."
I gave him an evil glare."Whatever, you two." I looked down and sighed. "Oh, Jewf. Why did you run away?"
"This is bullshit!" Noncy yelled out in anger. "Only me and ATR want to leave to the city, it seems. What about about you, PaulKenneth?"
"I don't give a shit where we go. Let's just go down t… [view original content]
AllThatRemains
(!) Rich, lets go down the road and see what we can find.
I was still arguing with Rich. Telling him that I wanted … moreto make sure my family was okay.
Suddenly Belan spoke up. "Rich, lets go down the road and see what we can find."
I got angry and turned to him. "What?! First you leave Jewfreeus behind and now, your telling Rich to go down the road, to who knows where and I'm not even going to be able to make sure my family is okay?!"
eking backed Belan's choice. "Settle down, ATR. Belan thought there wasn't enough time to go back. We needed to leave. Besides, Jewf ditched us in the first place."
I gave him an evil glare."Whatever, you two." I looked down and sighed. "Oh, Jewf. Why did you run away?"
"This is bullshit!" Noncy yelled out in anger. "Only me and ATR want to leave to the city, it seems. What about about you, PaulKenneth?"
"I don't give a shit where we go. Let's just go down t… [view original content]
I did vote in my comment, but it cut it off at RIP Cameron for some reason. I'll just copy/paste:
3) I can't shoot you, man. I have to try to get that tear gas grenade and knife off of him somehow.
I know shooting him is what needs to be done, but I doubt many people in the beginning of the apocalypse will see it that way, especially if it is someone they know. This seems the most realistic option. Gobananas01 doesn't even see him as a monster, he still sees him and refers to him as Cameron.
I did vote in my comment, but it cut it off at RIP Cameron for some reason. I'll just copy/paste:
3) I can't shoot you, man. I have to … moretry to get that tear gas grenade and knife off of him somehow.
I know shooting him is what needs to be done, but I doubt many people in the beginning of the apocalypse will see it that way, especially if it is someone they know. This seems the most realistic option. Gobananas01 doesn't even see him as a monster, he still sees him and refers to him as Cameron.
AllThatRemains
(!) Rich, lets go down the road and see what we can find.
I was still arguing with Rich. Telling him that I wanted … moreto make sure my family was okay.
Suddenly Belan spoke up. "Rich, lets go down the road and see what we can find."
I got angry and turned to him. "What?! First you leave Jewfreeus behind and now, your telling Rich to go down the road, to who knows where and I'm not even going to be able to make sure my family is okay?!"
eking backed Belan's choice. "Settle down, ATR. Belan thought there wasn't enough time to go back. We needed to leave. Besides, Jewf ditched us in the first place."
I gave him an evil glare."Whatever, you two." I looked down and sighed. "Oh, Jewf. Why did you run away?"
"This is bullshit!" Noncy yelled out in anger. "Only me and ATR want to leave to the city, it seems. What about about you, PaulKenneth?"
"I don't give a shit where we go. Let's just go down t… [view original content]
AllThatRemains
(!) Rich, lets go down the road and see what we can find.
I was still arguing with Rich. Telling him that I wanted … moreto make sure my family was okay.
Suddenly Belan spoke up. "Rich, lets go down the road and see what we can find."
I got angry and turned to him. "What?! First you leave Jewfreeus behind and now, your telling Rich to go down the road, to who knows where and I'm not even going to be able to make sure my family is okay?!"
eking backed Belan's choice. "Settle down, ATR. Belan thought there wasn't enough time to go back. We needed to leave. Besides, Jewf ditched us in the first place."
I gave him an evil glare."Whatever, you two." I looked down and sighed. "Oh, Jewf. Why did you run away?"
"This is bullshit!" Noncy yelled out in anger. "Only me and ATR want to leave to the city, it seems. What about about you, PaulKenneth?"
"I don't give a shit where we go. Let's just go down t… [view original content]
There is no way bananas knows it's a zombie apocalypse yet so he wouldn't shoot Cameron. He would just think that he needs to get to hospital.
Using logic the best answer is 3).
AllThatRemains
(!) Rich, lets go down the road and see what we can find.
I was still arguing with Rich. Telling him that I wanted … moreto make sure my family was okay.
Suddenly Belan spoke up. "Rich, lets go down the road and see what we can find."
I got angry and turned to him. "What?! First you leave Jewfreeus behind and now, your telling Rich to go down the road, to who knows where and I'm not even going to be able to make sure my family is okay?!"
eking backed Belan's choice. "Settle down, ATR. Belan thought there wasn't enough time to go back. We needed to leave. Besides, Jewf ditched us in the first place."
I gave him an evil glare."Whatever, you two." I looked down and sighed. "Oh, Jewf. Why did you run away?"
"This is bullshit!" Noncy yelled out in anger. "Only me and ATR want to leave to the city, it seems. What about about you, PaulKenneth?"
"I don't give a shit where we go. Let's just go down t… [view original content]
Yes, but they don't really know what's going on. We all know what to do in these situations because of TWD/other zombie media, but most people don't come to the same conclusions in real life. Someone doesn't look okay? Most people who have no idea of what's going on or the extent of how serious it is don't automatically think about killing a person they know just because they aren't acting normal.
I'm not saying it is the best option, or the smartest. I am just thinking through the perspective of someone at the beginning of the zombie apocalypse who has no idea what the hell is going on. Similar to how people chose not to leave Cameron behind after he first got bitten- it is much more realistic to think that Gobananas01 just wouldn't know.
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Like in one of the earlier stories you use "I said in pain" when "I screamed in agony" would've been better.
Other than that good job lee.
You wanna get high?!?
Don't forget to bring a towel!
I've slept with all the finest whores in the land.
(im not cereal about these)
BELAN WILL TELL RICH TO DRIVE DOWN THE ROAD.
TNTLEE WILL ASK GUILTY TO JOIN HIM, AND LOOK FOR HIS GIRL.
(!) Rich, lets go down the road and see what we can find.
I was still arguing with Rich. Telling him that I wanted to make sure my family was okay.
Suddenly Belan spoke up. "Rich, lets go down the road and see what we can find."
I got angry and turned to him. "What?! First you leave Jewfreeus behind and now, your telling Rich to go down the road, to who knows where and I'm not even going to be able to make sure my family is okay?!"
eking backed Belan's choice. "Settle down, ATR. Belan thought there wasn't enough time to go back. We needed to leave. Besides, Jewf ditched us in the first place."
I gave him an evil glare."Whatever, you two." I looked down and sighed. "Oh, Jewf. Why did you run away?"
"This is bullshit!" Noncy yelled out in anger. "Only me and ATR want to leave to the city, it seems. What about about you, PaulKenneth?"
"I don't give a shit where we go. Let's just go down the road, I guess." He said while trying not to move his leg.
Rich put the car on drive and said."Alright, four on two. Were heading down the road, everyone."
Noncy crossed her arms, and turned her head to look out the car window. "Ugh! Whatever then. Let's just go."
"Looks like we have no choice." I said as I turned to look at Belan.
"I'm sorry. I'm worried about my family too, but. I think we'll be safer away from the city." Belan said with an unhappy look.
I sighed again. "Okay. Let's just go then."
I heard Noncy whisper something next to me. "Where did you go, Tobi-Is-A-Good-Boy?..." She said to herself.
Rich made a right turn out of the parking lot and onto the road. I turned to look back at the school which was slowly being overrun by these zombies, and more of them coming out of the woods. I kept wondering if Jewf was still alive.
Belan turned to look at eking."You think I made the right choice?"
"Yeah, man. Don't worry about it." eking responded.
We were on the road for a while. It was pretty empty, everything was dark and quiet around us. It seemed like nothing crazy was going on.
Rich spoke up. "Shit, you guys. Were almost on "E." I need to stop the car somewhere."
"Oh, great!" Noncy said sarcastically.
Rich made a turn into a dirt road leading to the river. I remembered how I use to come down here to go fishing with my dad on Sunday's. I really hoped my family was safe. Rich parked the car next to the river, and all of us got out. Rich, eking, and Belan helped get Paul out of the back of the pickup, and sat him next to a tree.
"thanks, guys." He said to them with a half smile.
"No problem, Paul. I'm going to go take a look around." eking told us.
"I'll stay with the group and keep a look out. Belan, follow eking just to be safe." Rich said to him.
I stayed next to Paul with Noncy. Rich was walking around with his gun, making sure nothing got close to us. Belan and eking went out to take a look around the river.
"Holy shit! You guys come quickly!" We heard Belan yell out to us.
Rich turned to look at me. "ATR, go check it out. I'll stay here with Noncy and Paul."
I nodded and ran over to see what Belan was yelling about. When I reached their location. I was shocked at what he and eking had found.
"Oh my god..." I said as I witnessed it...
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Gobananas01
I needed to get Cameron to the hospital. I put the sirens on and tried to avoid hitting anyone in the streets. People seemed too busy looting the stores. I turned to look at Cameron.
"Hey, man. We're almost there. You'll be fine."
Cameron was just laying there. He didn't give me any response.
"C'mon, Cameron! Don't give up now. I need you, partner. Don't fuckin' die on me." I turned to look up in front of us."Oh shit!" I said as I saw a bloodied man in the middle of the street.
I turned the steering wheel, trying to avoid hitting him and we ran off the road, into the woods. The car flipped and was rolling over down the hill, until we hit the ground and we stopped. I felt a bit of pain, on my right arm, but It seemed like I was okay. I looked over to Cameron and he still wasn't moving. I unbuckled my seat belt an opened the door. I got out of the wrecked squad car and took a breather. I heard moaning coming from inside the car.
I quickly focused my attention inside the car. "Cameron, you're still alive?!" I asked my partner.
He turned to look at me, and I got chills going down my spine when I saw him. "Holy shit..." I said as I saw Cameron growling at me with his hands trying to reach me. His skin was greyish and his pupils were completely white."What the fuck happened?!" I yelled out to myself.
Cameron was trying to reach me, but the seat belt was holding him back. Everything was going wrong. The people in the city were going crazy and Cameron... I didn't even know what the hell was going on anymore. I heard gunshots coming from above the hill and onto the streets. I needed to get out of here fast. I opened the back door and got the riot shield and shotgun out. Cameron still had a tear gas grenade and a knife on him, that could be useful. I went around the car to the passenger side and opened it. I placed the riot shield down. I had my shotgun ready, Cameron had his attention on me and was still trying to get his hands on me, while growling ferociously. I didn't know what to do...
1) I'm sorry, Cameron. I don't know what happened. But I have to leave you here.
2) Cameron... what the fuck?... I have to shoot you... I need to get that tear gas grenade and knife.
3) I can't shoot you, man. I have to try to get that tear gas grenade and knife off of him somehow.
VOTING CLOSED FOR THIS PART!
Gobananas01: 2) Cameron... what the fuck?... I have to shoot you... I need to get that tear gas grenade and knife.
2) Cameron... what the fuck?... I have to shoot you... I need to get that tear gas grenade and knife.
hopefully we don't have to waste ammo.
Don't forget to vote.
3) I can't shoot you, man. I have to try to get that tear gas grenade and knife off of him somehow.
I know shooting him is what needs to be done, but I doubt many people in the beginning of the apocalypse will see it that way, especially if it is someone they know. This seems the most realistic option. Gobananas01 doesn't even see him as a monster, he still sees him and refers to him as Cameron.
2) Cameron... what the fuck?... I have to shoot you... I need to get that tear gas grenade and knife.
Sorry that I missed the voting on the last one, was kind of busy.
Using logic the best answer is 3).
I'm not saying it is the best option, or the smartest. I am just thinking through the perspective of someone at the beginning of the zombie apocalypse who has no idea what the hell is going on. Similar to how people chose not to leave Cameron behind after he first got bitten- it is much more realistic to think that Gobananas01 just wouldn't know.