It was never my intention to make him a smaller character. I just wanted him to have a grand entrance and a mysterious vibe around him. Sadly the grand entrance thing didn't really take place, but he is still very mysterious.
I think I have enough to add to @TheMissus comment about planning to make a new one. When Bryan was introduced I had so many plans, I was gonn… morea do so many things with him. I did almost none of them. I was gonna have him been lost in the woods so long he forgot his name and he would be nameless. I was gonna make him a huge bad-ass (which kinda happened anyway), and many more. None of it happened though (except bad-ass a bit). So I decided then and there to not make plans it was pointless, and the story was more fun that way anyway. I don't know about you but that's what I'm thinking.
On a side note, my inspiration to make Bryan a bigger character then he seemed when @That_1_Guy introduced him was because I wanted to make a super cool blond guy, because there are tons of super cool blond guys in anime.
It was never my intention to make him a smaller character. I just wanted him to have a grand entrance and a mysterious vibe around him. Sadly the grand entrance thing didn't really take place, but he is still very mysterious.
Ok guys, as I said I have made a few enhancements on my Bryan / Clem pic (look at the original post). I felt like his eyes looked a bit weird and the bows were missing, too. I really didn't know how to draw the bow itself so let's just keep it by the arrow holder. Also I felt like Clem was too far away from him, so I made her stand right behind him - now he's her badass protector
Ok guys, as I said I have made a few enhancements on my Bryan / Clem pic (look at the original post). I felt like his eyes looked a bit weird … moreand the bows were missing, too. I really didn't know how to draw the bow itself so let's just keep it by the arrow holder. Also I felt like Clem was too far away from him, so I made her stand right behind him - now he's her badass protector
To put it nicely, things hadn't really gone as they had planned. To put it bluntly, their whole plan had gone to shit.
Kenny is laying on his back on the rock-hard floor of a long hallway trying to fight away the horrible pain in his right leg. The axe-wielding maniac that caused all this was shot in the head by his new friend Jack. The bandits, as Kenny used to call them, turned out to be a group of good-willing survivors just like Kenny's. His sneaking skills were poor so he was found by the bunch within minutes. They reacted agitated at first but when Kenny told them about his group and the children in it they soon warmed up to him.
The camp was stuck in a conflict between the groups of Jack's father and that of a hard-headed woman named Sarah. The fact that Sarah was against letting him stay in their settlement was one reason for Kenny to hate her. But the fact that she reminded him of Lily definitely didn't help either. Kenny's leg is bleeding heavily when Jack finally reaches him. He pulls him up and supports him while they run away from the increasing amount of walkers coming from the other rooms. The two are being surrounded, leaving only one way out.
(Start the music: )
''Are you sure about this?'', Kenny hesitantly looks out the window. ''We don't have a choice, just go!'', Jack screams before Kenny climbs out of the window, onto a thin ledge. Jack follows shortly thereafter. Kenny's leg is still bleeding heavily and he is starting to feel light-headed. ''I don't feel so good...'', Kenny mumbles. '' Jack looks at him worriedly, ''Come on. You've just got to hold on. We'll be back at the camp before you know it.'' They slowly shuffle along the small ledge until they finally reach the fire-escape. Kenny climbs on it and lets out a sigh of relief.
''It's not over yet.'', Jack says while climbing onto the stairs. ''Let's go down and hope they don't follow us.'' The pain in his leg increases with every step, but Kenny ignores it as he limps along the damp streets of the small town. He follows Jack, who used to live in this town, back to their pick-up truck. They sit down in the seats and both let out another sigh of relief. Kenny finds a small medical kit and uses it to stop the bleeding. Jack looks at him with a terrified expression, ''Kenny... Don't freak out. But you look a little... pale.''
His dizzy mind only catches the last word of his sentence. Kenny looks at his reflection in the mirror making him gasp in fear. ''Holy shi--'', his sentence is left unfinished when he passes out. Seemingly seconds later he wakes up. His head hurts and his leg feels like it's about to explode. ''Where are we...'', he whispers while rubbing the sleep out of his eyes. ''We're back, buddy.'', Jack says with an awkward smile. ''But you might want to take a look at your leg.''
Kenny slowly turns his head around. His heart is racing and every breath feels like an eternity. He carefully pulls up the leg of his jeans and examines the wound. It's dark red and ragged around the edges. The bleeding has stopped but it still stings like a bee. ''What's the matter? It's not like I've been--'' the realization sends a chill down his spine. He holds his leg in the dim light of the setting sun and notices the contours of a set of bite-marks.
To put it nicely, things hadn't really gone as they had planned. To put it bluntly, their whole plan had gone to shit.
Kenny is laying on h… moreis back on the rock-hard floor of a long hallway trying to fight away the horrible pain in his right leg. The axe-wielding maniac that caused all this was shot in the head by his new friend Jack. The bandits, as Kenny used to call them, turned out to be a group of good-willing survivors just like Kenny's. His sneaking skills were poor so he was found by the bunch within minutes. They reacted agitated at first but when Kenny told them about his group and the children in it they soon warmed up to him.
The camp was stuck in a conflict between the groups of Jack's father and that of a hard-headed woman named Sarah. The fact that Sarah was against letting him stay in their settlement was one reason for Kenny to hate her. But the fact that she reminded him of Lily definitely didn't help either. Kenny's leg is … [view original content]
To put it nicely, things hadn't really gone as they had planned. To put it bluntly, their whole plan had gone to shit.
Kenny is laying on h… moreis back on the rock-hard floor of a long hallway trying to fight away the horrible pain in his right leg. The axe-wielding maniac that caused all this was shot in the head by his new friend Jack. The bandits, as Kenny used to call them, turned out to be a group of good-willing survivors just like Kenny's. His sneaking skills were poor so he was found by the bunch within minutes. They reacted agitated at first but when Kenny told them about his group and the children in it they soon warmed up to him.
The camp was stuck in a conflict between the groups of Jack's father and that of a hard-headed woman named Sarah. The fact that Sarah was against letting him stay in their settlement was one reason for Kenny to hate her. But the fact that she reminded him of Lily definitely didn't help either. Kenny's leg is … [view original content]
"... Holy shit! You really made it?!". Jeremy is laughing as he holds his stomach with his left hand and trying not to lose his fishing rod. Melody and him have been sitting at his favorite place at the river, talking and giggling a lot. "Of course I did, I mean: hello? I got 100 bucks for it. You really should have seen their faces, staring at my bare naked butt. One of them nearly got a heart attack! Haha! College was crazy yet awesome.". They both crook themselves from laughter. "Yeah, wish I had been there...". Melody smiles: "Yeah, right: to see my butt!". "Right!" replies Jeremy, grinning and regretting his words almost immediately. The two remain silent, listening to the flowing river when Melody starts to speak: "I wish we would have talked like this before. I am so glad we can finally open up. It's getting late... We should go home now. But let me tell you I am looking forward to get to know you better - really enjoyed the time with you...". She then puts her hand on his, looking at it. Jeremy blushes and gulps nervously as he finally speaks: "Melody, don't... I still like you...". Melody replies: "I like you, too.", still staring at her hand laying on his. Then she looks at him, when her facial expression changes abruptly into excitement: "What.. is this...". Jeremy follows her eyes and looks into the river: it's flooded with blood. He reacts immediately: "Melody: run home as fast as you can and tell everybody to stay in the cabin! I'll be right behind you, I just grab all our stuff and follow you. We'll meet at the house. Go!". She runs away and Jeremy is packing the bags. Then he sees a body floating on the water: it's a walker, most likely dead. What the fuck is going on here? he speaks to himself when all of the sudden something bangs his back of the head....
"Where is Pascucci?!" Melody yells, hardly breathing. Bryan remains silent and Danielle answers: "Don't get mad but... He went after Kenny.". "Great. And let me guess: Gus isn't here neither.". Danielle sighs: "Nope.". Melody then walks up and down nervously. "Where is Jeremy? He should be back by now.". Then Bryan stands up from his favorite armchair and begins to speak: "Tell me eversthing that happened from the beginning. Have you sensed something odd? Is it possible someone was following you?". "No. Nobody...". Melody tells him what they have seen.
30 minutes later
"Enough! We have to go find him! Something happened to Jeremy, I swear! I'll go!". Bryan suddenly grabs her at her shoulders, holding them a bit too tightly: "Calm down.". "No I won't! I gotta go look after him!". Melody replies angrily as Bryan walks to Danielle and gives her one of his guns. "I'll come with you. I know every corner of the forest, might be useful." He then steps to Clementine and kneels infront of her: "You're a good shot - the best one I know. Protect her." Danielle gives him an insulted look when Clementine asks him: "How do you know that I am a good shot?". Bryan stands up. "I just know."
Jeremy opens his eyes and sees the body of the walker still floating on the water being stuck inbetween rocks. "You asshole! She told me you had a thing for her but I am really surprised that you would actually try to take her away from me!". Jeremy turns around and his bones are aching: "Gus, don't...". he mumbles. Gus stands above him with a large branch the size of a baseball bat in his hand. "Shut up! Give me one reason why I shouldn't kill you! It would look like an accident... Or the work of a bandit...". Jeremy can't trust his senses: "Gus... Is this really you? I don't recognize you..."
Please continue
Note: With this post I am trying to prepare a showdown for the near end of thid episode, bringing some dynamics into the group.
To put it nicely, things hadn't really gone as they had planned. To put it bluntly, their whole plan had gone to shit.
Kenny is laying on h… moreis back on the rock-hard floor of a long hallway trying to fight away the horrible pain in his right leg. The axe-wielding maniac that caused all this was shot in the head by his new friend Jack. The bandits, as Kenny used to call them, turned out to be a group of good-willing survivors just like Kenny's. His sneaking skills were poor so he was found by the bunch within minutes. They reacted agitated at first but when Kenny told them about his group and the children in it they soon warmed up to him.
The camp was stuck in a conflict between the groups of Jack's father and that of a hard-headed woman named Sarah. The fact that Sarah was against letting him stay in their settlement was one reason for Kenny to hate her. But the fact that she reminded him of Lily definitely didn't help either. Kenny's leg is … [view original content]
Back at the cabin group
"... Holy shit! You really made it?!". Jeremy is laughing as he holds his stomach with his left hand and trying not… more to lose his fishing rod. Melody and him have been sitting at his favorite place at the river, talking and giggling a lot. "Of course I did, I mean: hello? I got 100 bucks for it. You really should have seen their faces, staring at my bare naked butt. One of them nearly got a heart attack! Haha! College was crazy yet awesome.". They both crook themselves from laughter. "Yeah, wish I had been there...". Melody smiles: "Yeah, right: to see my butt!". "Right!" replies Jeremy, grinning and regretting his words almost immediately. The two remain silent, listening to the flowing river when Melody starts to speak: "I wish we would have talked like this before. I am so glad we can finally open up. It's getting late... We should go home now. But let me tell you I am looking forward to get to know you better - really… [view original content]
Jeremy is gasping for air. Gus' foot is pushing his body to the ground. The giant log he is carrying could crush Jeremy's head in an instant. He has got to think fast. He looks around him in a desperate attempt to find something to subdue his attacker with. His hand sporadically moves around, until he eventually grips onto a sharp rock. He raises his hand and stabs Gus right into his calve, rupturing the flesh. His leg starts squirting out blood. Gus loses his footing and falls to the ground while screaming in agony. Jeremy stands up, raising the sharp rock high above his head.
''It didn't have to end like this!'', Jeremy's eyes open widely, ''We could have all lived happily ever after!'' In a surge of rage, Jeremy starts slashing away at his former friend. Blood starts to cover his hands and clothes. He is just about to take a final slash at the near lifeless body of Gus, when a familiar voice is heard in the distance. ''Oh my god...'', It's Melody, accompanied by a battle-ready Bryan drawing his bow. She runs up to Jeremy and pushes him away from Gus. She kneels down and lets his head rest on her thighs.
(Start at 00:26 : )
Tears flow from her eyes as she starts weeping over the loss of her former boyfriend. ''Gus... It's gonna be okay... We're all going to be fine.'', She looks at the bloody rock, then at a blood-stained Jeremy. Her face twists into a disgusted expression. ''Why... Why d- did you do this?'' Jeremy's guilt overwhelms him. He just killed a man who had done nothing wrong. His primal instincts took over, and love had deemed him blind. ''I'm so, so sorry...'', Jeremy starts speaking, ''He was threatening me, holding a log right above my face...''
The words don't come through, Melody's mind is blank. All she can think about now is Gus. She stares into his lifeless eyes. She moves her face closer and closer until she finally kisses him. The feeling of his faint breath quickly fades away. She closes his eyes, and stands up to walk away. Jeremy tries to grab her hand, but she forcefully rejects him. ''Just... Just make sure he doesn't turn.'', she says, before walking back towards the cabin. Jeremy stares off into the distance, but is awoken from his trance when Bryan releases an arrow on Gus' head.
He pulls it out, and drags his body into the calmly flowing river. Jeremy is still kneeling on the ground when Bryan offers to help him stand up. ''We need to go.'', he says in a cold tone. He accepts his offer and slowly stands up. He takes a look at Gus' body one more time before turning his head, and walking back to the cabin.
Jeremy is gasping for air. Gus' foot is pushing his body to the ground. The giant log he is carrying could crush Jeremy's head in an instant. … moreHe has got to think fast. He looks around him in a desperate attempt to find something to subdue his attacker with. His hand sporadically moves around, until he eventually grips onto a sharp rock. He raises his hand and stabs Gus right into his calve, rupturing the flesh. His leg starts squirting out blood. Gus loses his footing and falls to the ground while screaming in agony. Jeremy stands up, raising the sharp rock high above his head.
''It didn't have to end like this!'', Jeremy's eyes open widely, ''We could have all lived happily ever after!'' In a surge of rage, Jeremy starts slashing away at his former friend. Blood starts to cover his hands and clothes. He is just about to take a final slash at the near lifeless body of Gus, when a familiar voice is heard in the distance. ''Oh my god...'', It's … [view original content]
Jeremy is gasping for air. Gus' foot is pushing his body to the ground. The giant log he is carrying could crush Jeremy's head in an instant. … moreHe has got to think fast. He looks around him in a desperate attempt to find something to subdue his attacker with. His hand sporadically moves around, until he eventually grips onto a sharp rock. He raises his hand and stabs Gus right into his calve, rupturing the flesh. His leg starts squirting out blood. Gus loses his footing and falls to the ground while screaming in agony. Jeremy stands up, raising the sharp rock high above his head.
''It didn't have to end like this!'', Jeremy's eyes open widely, ''We could have all lived happily ever after!'' In a surge of rage, Jeremy starts slashing away at his former friend. Blood starts to cover his hands and clothes. He is just about to take a final slash at the near lifeless body of Gus, when a familiar voice is heard in the distance. ''Oh my god...'', It's … [view original content]
In my case i use luck. i have made many adjustments to my original post because other things have happened. i know what the game is about and i know how it works. my post is desinged to fix some problems we have been having (Too many characters and the fact that theres....not much......really.....going.....on (Except for kennys story)
I think you're absolutely right.
I have the feeling that all this planning is getting out of hand. This thread used to be about continuing … moreupon the last post, which gave it a very interesting concept. While it's logical for people to have certain ideas about where they want the story to go, it is better not to plan too far ahead as that goes against the luck-based concept of this game.
oh.....what i mean by my plan will say the same is that.......it actually will....... i mean i will use others posts and it will make sense but unless everyone dies there is no way my post is being canned.
In my case i use luck. i have made many adjustments to my original post because other things have happened. i know what the game is about and … morei know how it works. my post is desinged to fix some problems we have been having (Too many characters and the fact that theres....not much......really.....going.....on (Except for kennys story)
Back at the cabin group
"... Holy shit! You really made it?!". Jeremy is laughing as he holds his stomach with his left hand and trying not… more to lose his fishing rod. Melody and him have been sitting at his favorite place at the river, talking and giggling a lot. "Of course I did, I mean: hello? I got 100 bucks for it. You really should have seen their faces, staring at my bare naked butt. One of them nearly got a heart attack! Haha! College was crazy yet awesome.". They both crook themselves from laughter. "Yeah, wish I had been there...". Melody smiles: "Yeah, right: to see my butt!". "Right!" replies Jeremy, grinning and regretting his words almost immediately. The two remain silent, listening to the flowing river when Melody starts to speak: "I wish we would have talked like this before. I am so glad we can finally open up. It's getting late... We should go home now. But let me tell you I am looking forward to get to know you better - really… [view original content]
OK. Seems like we have a completely different Impression of this episode, because I don't think at all that "nothing is going on", quite the opposite. Not being as action filled as the other episodes doesn't mean that it is plain boring at all. Don't see any problems at this time except of the typical continuation errors (which really bug me).
In my case i use luck. i have made many adjustments to my original post because other things have happened. i know what the game is about and … morei know how it works. my post is desinged to fix some problems we have been having (Too many characters and the fact that theres....not much......really.....going.....on (Except for kennys story)
I am going to back off from this game for an undefinite time. I love this game very much as I've been a devoted contributor, but I feel like I've been investing too much time and heart for this and like the story is predetermined, as if my posts don't matter in the end - that really worries me, actually. Besides I want to see what others are going to come up with. Hope I'll be back, soon. Keep up the good work.
Please don't leave, you're one of the best writers here, as well as drawers. I know how you feel with this plan thing, but things wouldn't be the same without you.
I am going to back off from this game for an undefinite time. I love this game very much as I've been a devoted contributor, but I feel like I… more've been investing too much time and heart for this and like the story is predetermined, as if my posts don't matter in the end - that really worries me, actually. Besides I want to see what others are going to come up with. Hope I'll be back, soon. Keep up the good work.
I was thinking, maybe we should upload this to fanfiction.net. I have an account we could use, or we could make one specifically for this. I know people have back ups of the story.
This is so nice of you, but you know this isn't right: I am as good as ALL of you, guys, not better in any way, not to mention my poor english skills. I really want to see what you are going to come up with
Please don't leave, you're one of the best writers here, as well as drawers. I know how you feel with this plan thing, but things wouldn't be the same without you.
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It was never my intention to make him a smaller character. I just wanted him to have a grand entrance and a mysterious vibe around him. Sadly the grand entrance thing didn't really take place, but he is still very mysterious.
My point on plans remain. In fact that reinforces the argument.
I have the same opinion on this matter as you, and I hope others do as well.
Ok guys, as I said I have made a few enhancements on my Bryan / Clem pic (look at the original post). I felt like his eyes looked a bit weird and the bows were missing, too. I really didn't know how to draw the bow itself so let's just keep it by the arrow holder. Also I felt like Clem was too far away from him, so I made her stand right behind him - now he's her badass protector
Yep, I've noticed myself that drawing a bow is near impossible! I think it will work out in the end though.
So, anybody? Hope my latest post wasn't to difficult to continue for you guys
It wasn't difficult to continue at all, I've just been busy. I will write later.
I've been super busy the last two weeks with exams. So I've only been able to add whenever I have free time. I got a big one tomorrow.
Sorry guys, I am having my lazy day
Good luck with the exams
To put it nicely, things hadn't really gone as they had planned. To put it bluntly, their whole plan had gone to shit.
Kenny is laying on his back on the rock-hard floor of a long hallway trying to fight away the horrible pain in his right leg. The axe-wielding maniac that caused all this was shot in the head by his new friend Jack. The bandits, as Kenny used to call them, turned out to be a group of good-willing survivors just like Kenny's. His sneaking skills were poor so he was found by the bunch within minutes. They reacted agitated at first but when Kenny told them about his group and the children in it they soon warmed up to him.
The camp was stuck in a conflict between the groups of Jack's father and that of a hard-headed woman named Sarah. The fact that Sarah was against letting him stay in their settlement was one reason for Kenny to hate her. But the fact that she reminded him of Lily definitely didn't help either. Kenny's leg is bleeding heavily when Jack finally reaches him. He pulls him up and supports him while they run away from the increasing amount of walkers coming from the other rooms. The two are being surrounded, leaving only one way out.
(Start the music:
)
''Are you sure about this?'', Kenny hesitantly looks out the window. ''We don't have a choice, just go!'', Jack screams before Kenny climbs out of the window, onto a thin ledge. Jack follows shortly thereafter. Kenny's leg is still bleeding heavily and he is starting to feel light-headed. ''I don't feel so good...'', Kenny mumbles. '' Jack looks at him worriedly, ''Come on. You've just got to hold on. We'll be back at the camp before you know it.'' They slowly shuffle along the small ledge until they finally reach the fire-escape. Kenny climbs on it and lets out a sigh of relief.
''It's not over yet.'', Jack says while climbing onto the stairs. ''Let's go down and hope they don't follow us.'' The pain in his leg increases with every step, but Kenny ignores it as he limps along the damp streets of the small town. He follows Jack, who used to live in this town, back to their pick-up truck. They sit down in the seats and both let out another sigh of relief. Kenny finds a small medical kit and uses it to stop the bleeding. Jack looks at him with a terrified expression, ''Kenny... Don't freak out. But you look a little... pale.''
His dizzy mind only catches the last word of his sentence. Kenny looks at his reflection in the mirror making him gasp in fear. ''Holy shi--'', his sentence is left unfinished when he passes out. Seemingly seconds later he wakes up. His head hurts and his leg feels like it's about to explode. ''Where are we...'', he whispers while rubbing the sleep out of his eyes. ''We're back, buddy.'', Jack says with an awkward smile. ''But you might want to take a look at your leg.''
Kenny slowly turns his head around. His heart is racing and every breath feels like an eternity. He carefully pulls up the leg of his jeans and examines the wound. It's dark red and ragged around the edges. The bleeding has stopped but it still stings like a bee. ''What's the matter? It's not like I've been--'' the realization sends a chill down his spine. He holds his leg in the dim light of the setting sun and notices the contours of a set of bite-marks.
aweeeesome!
Back at the cabin group
"... Holy shit! You really made it?!". Jeremy is laughing as he holds his stomach with his left hand and trying not to lose his fishing rod. Melody and him have been sitting at his favorite place at the river, talking and giggling a lot. "Of course I did, I mean: hello? I got 100 bucks for it. You really should have seen their faces, staring at my bare naked butt. One of them nearly got a heart attack! Haha! College was crazy yet awesome.". They both crook themselves from laughter. "Yeah, wish I had been there...". Melody smiles: "Yeah, right: to see my butt!". "Right!" replies Jeremy, grinning and regretting his words almost immediately. The two remain silent, listening to the flowing river when Melody starts to speak: "I wish we would have talked like this before. I am so glad we can finally open up. It's getting late... We should go home now. But let me tell you I am looking forward to get to know you better - really enjoyed the time with you...". She then puts her hand on his, looking at it. Jeremy blushes and gulps nervously as he finally speaks: "Melody, don't... I still like you...". Melody replies: "I like you, too.", still staring at her hand laying on his. Then she looks at him, when her facial expression changes abruptly into excitement: "What.. is this...". Jeremy follows her eyes and looks into the river: it's flooded with blood. He reacts immediately: "Melody: run home as fast as you can and tell everybody to stay in the cabin! I'll be right behind you, I just grab all our stuff and follow you. We'll meet at the house. Go!". She runs away and Jeremy is packing the bags. Then he sees a body floating on the water: it's a walker, most likely dead. What the fuck is going on here? he speaks to himself when all of the sudden something bangs his back of the head....
"Where is Pascucci?!" Melody yells, hardly breathing. Bryan remains silent and Danielle answers: "Don't get mad but... He went after Kenny.". "Great. And let me guess: Gus isn't here neither.". Danielle sighs: "Nope.". Melody then walks up and down nervously. "Where is Jeremy? He should be back by now.". Then Bryan stands up from his favorite armchair and begins to speak: "Tell me eversthing that happened from the beginning. Have you sensed something odd? Is it possible someone was following you?". "No. Nobody...". Melody tells him what they have seen.
30 minutes later
"Enough! We have to go find him! Something happened to Jeremy, I swear! I'll go!". Bryan suddenly grabs her at her shoulders, holding them a bit too tightly: "Calm down.". "No I won't! I gotta go look after him!". Melody replies angrily as Bryan walks to Danielle and gives her one of his guns. "I'll come with you. I know every corner of the forest, might be useful." He then steps to Clementine and kneels infront of her: "You're a good shot - the best one I know. Protect her." Danielle gives him an insulted look when Clementine asks him: "How do you know that I am a good shot?". Bryan stands up. "I just know."
Jeremy opens his eyes and sees the body of the walker still floating on the water being stuck inbetween rocks. "You asshole! She told me you had a thing for her but I am really surprised that you would actually try to take her away from me!". Jeremy turns around and his bones are aching: "Gus, don't...". he mumbles. Gus stands above him with a large branch the size of a baseball bat in his hand. "Shut up! Give me one reason why I shouldn't kill you! It would look like an accident... Or the work of a bandit...". Jeremy can't trust his senses: "Gus... Is this really you? I don't recognize you..."
Please continue
Note: With this post I am trying to prepare a showdown for the near end of thid episode, bringing some dynamics into the group.
thanks!
Kenny needs to cut what he will.
Yeah, if the next person continuing his story doesn't cut off the leg, he's a dead man.
Nice!
I really feel like writing right now... Ah screw it! My turn!
Jeremy is gasping for air. Gus' foot is pushing his body to the ground. The giant log he is carrying could crush Jeremy's head in an instant. He has got to think fast. He looks around him in a desperate attempt to find something to subdue his attacker with. His hand sporadically moves around, until he eventually grips onto a sharp rock. He raises his hand and stabs Gus right into his calve, rupturing the flesh. His leg starts squirting out blood. Gus loses his footing and falls to the ground while screaming in agony. Jeremy stands up, raising the sharp rock high above his head.
''It didn't have to end like this!'', Jeremy's eyes open widely, ''We could have all lived happily ever after!'' In a surge of rage, Jeremy starts slashing away at his former friend. Blood starts to cover his hands and clothes. He is just about to take a final slash at the near lifeless body of Gus, when a familiar voice is heard in the distance. ''Oh my god...'', It's Melody, accompanied by a battle-ready Bryan drawing his bow. She runs up to Jeremy and pushes him away from Gus. She kneels down and lets his head rest on her thighs.
(Start at 00:26 :
)
Tears flow from her eyes as she starts weeping over the loss of her former boyfriend. ''Gus... It's gonna be okay... We're all going to be fine.'', She looks at the bloody rock, then at a blood-stained Jeremy. Her face twists into a disgusted expression. ''Why... Why d- did you do this?'' Jeremy's guilt overwhelms him. He just killed a man who had done nothing wrong. His primal instincts took over, and love had deemed him blind. ''I'm so, so sorry...'', Jeremy starts speaking, ''He was threatening me, holding a log right above my face...''
The words don't come through, Melody's mind is blank. All she can think about now is Gus. She stares into his lifeless eyes. She moves her face closer and closer until she finally kisses him. The feeling of his faint breath quickly fades away. She closes his eyes, and stands up to walk away. Jeremy tries to grab her hand, but she forcefully rejects him. ''Just... Just make sure he doesn't turn.'', she says, before walking back towards the cabin. Jeremy stares off into the distance, but is awoken from his trance when Bryan releases an arrow on Gus' head.
He pulls it out, and drags his body into the calmly flowing river. Jeremy is still kneeling on the ground when Bryan offers to help him stand up. ''We need to go.'', he says in a cold tone. He accepts his offer and slowly stands up. He takes a look at Gus' body one more time before turning his head, and walking back to the cabin.
Yay! I wonder who's story you'll continue with. I personally want somebody to do Pascucci.
I guess we'll see.
I decided to continue this scene, as it really brought out some exciting ideas for me.
Guess I gotta remove one of my paragraphs as Bryan told her to stay in the cabin with the kids and now this is irrelevant
In my case i use luck. i have made many adjustments to my original post because other things have happened. i know what the game is about and i know how it works. my post is desinged to fix some problems we have been having (Too many characters and the fact that theres....not much......really.....going.....on (Except for kennys story)
oh.....what i mean by my plan will say the same is that.......it actually will....... i mean i will use others posts and it will make sense but unless everyone dies there is no way my post is being canned.
Tyler is very jealous
"I thought i was the super hot, muscular, doctor guy" tyler said gloomly "Damn...."
"Its okay man" said Eddie "At least we have miranda....."
He is dead. he suffered the bite before hand. he 80% dead? IMO
Anyone watch the Australian Open Final Mens last night? Boy that was an interesting match
hate to be nitpicky but this is the 4th episode (See bottom)
is that the end? seems fitting enough
EDIT Of episode 4
Sorry, should be "this" not "thid" or "third"
Oh, I'm sorry. Guess I missed that when reading your post.
No. I don't even know what sport that's for.
I just don't think he should end like that. Cutting the leg might work. It's all going to be seen in ep. 5
OK. Seems like we have a completely different Impression of this episode, because I don't think at all that "nothing is going on", quite the opposite. Not being as action filled as the other episodes doesn't mean that it is plain boring at all. Don't see any problems at this time except of the typical continuation errors (which really bug me).
im only not responding because me and my freinds could kill you if they saw that post.....No joke.....
I have no idea what sport its for either :P
I am going to back off from this game for an undefinite time. I love this game very much as I've been a devoted contributor, but I feel like I've been investing too much time and heart for this and like the story is predetermined, as if my posts don't matter in the end - that really worries me, actually. Besides I want to see what others are going to come up with. Hope I'll be back, soon. Keep up the good work.
Please don't leave, you're one of the best writers here, as well as drawers. I know how you feel with this plan thing, but things wouldn't be the same without you.
I was thinking, maybe we should upload this to fanfiction.net. I have an account we could use, or we could make one specifically for this. I know people have back ups of the story.
This is so nice of you, but you know this isn't right: I am as good as ALL of you, guys, not better in any way, not to mention my poor english skills. I really want to see what you are going to come up with