I second this - also consider you as my friends and it's really heartwarming to see that you feel the same! I really enjoy to write with you as a group and as you may have noticed I've been very proud to be very devoted member of our wonderful team. It never ceases to amaze me what amazing storylines you guys come up with! Alle the people who skip this thread miss a lot since writing with you is like a neverending TWD-game experience. Thank you!
Note:
Our fanfic is 170 pages long (10pt Arial word doc.)!
On an unrelated note, I found this image. It immediately reminded me of this thread, and the friends I have made on here.
Ever since I'… moreve started writing on this thread, I've been getting more and more interested in the practice of writing, drawing and generally, creating a story. I can proudly say that I have been here since page 1. I have seen so many people come and go, but in the end, we have formed an amazing group of even-minded creative individuals. I love this thread and everyone on it, and I wish it could carry on forever.
So, Thank you, for everyone's contributions, support, love and even arguments so far.
(Sorry for the sudden burst of melo-dramaticness but I just wanted to get this off my chest.)
I just finished with the summary of page 30-35 and updated the comment for newbies on page 1 as follows:
For newbies: there are SUMMARIES of the story: * EPISODE 1-3 (contains pages 1-26): Page 26. Completed. * EPISODE 4 (contains pages 26-35): Page 49. Not fully completed. * EPISODE 5 (contains pages 41- latest page): Not started, yet. It is highly recommended to read through the comments since the story is full of dialogues as well as detailed descriptions of the environment.
You can go see it on page 1 for a better layout.
As you can see: Lots of pages are still missing. People are starting new fanfic-threads as they wanted to join us but couldn't since they find it frustrating that the last summary is like 20 pages aback and so it's gotten to difficult getting in. This is not cool and we really, really need to catch up on it before it's too late. Snufkin and I spend some time doing it and we'd really appreciate your support.
I second this - also consider you as my friends and it's really heartwarming to see that you feel the same! I really enjoy to write with you a… mores a group and as you may have noticed I've been very proud to be very devoted member of our wonderful team. It never ceases to amaze me what amazing storylines you guys come up with! Alle the people who skip this thread miss a lot since writing with you is like a neverending TWD-game experience. Thank you!
Note:
Our fanfic is 170 pages long (10pt Arial word doc.)!
On an unrelated note, I found this image. It immediately reminded me of this thread, and the friends I have made on here.
Ever since I'… moreve started writing on this thread, I've been getting more and more interested in the practice of writing, drawing and generally, creating a story. I can proudly say that I have been here since page 1. I have seen so many people come and go, but in the end, we have formed an amazing group of even-minded creative individuals. I love this thread and everyone on it, and I wish it could carry on forever.
So, Thank you, for everyone's contributions, support, love and even arguments so far.
(Sorry for the sudden burst of melo-dramaticness but I just wanted to get this off my chest.)
Frank lunges out at the bushes expecting anything. But nothing happened, there was nothing in the bushes. "Am i okay?" Frank says to himself. "I hope you kittens aren't hallucinations." He picks Oreo, and Cleo up, and puts them back into his front pocket. He begins to run again.
He had been running for over 3 hours, when he ran up a hill, and found a settlement. "Remember what Pascucci said. Find Kenny." He says to himself as he climbs a fence into the settlement. He notices nearly 15 passed out bodies in front of a house. "Huh?" He says when an announcement is heard over a loud speaker.
"Hello everybody, i don't want to alarm you, but we have been experiencing a food poisoning problem, so if you happen to see anybody passed out, or acting strange do not be alarmed. I repeat to not be alarmed. We are having a mandatory meeting at the dining hall. That is mandatory, if you do not attend the consequences are dire."
Frank stay's silent and approaches the house with the passed out bodies. "SHIT!" He says, when he hears somebody from the inside of the house. Frank quickly falls on to his back, pretending to be one of the passed out bodies, he does so when the door opens. When two men step out, he hears a familiar voice. "Now come with me Jack, I've got a lot of explaining to do.." Frank hears the voice, and a shiver goes down his back.
As Steve and the other man pass by him, Cleo gets out of his shirt pocket. "Get back here!" He whispers. The cat approaches Kirmin silently and bites his leg. "YOUCH!" He yells as he looks down at the kitten. Kirkmin laughs and proceeds to do the worst thing Frank has ever witnessed. Steve pressed his foot over the cat and stomped it's head in.
"No..." Frank whispers, as he make's sure Oreo stays in his shirt pocket. "I'll get revenge for your brother. I'll-" His silently begins to cry. "I'll kill that man..." Frank says. As a little girl and a young man walks out.
Once they walk by, Frank gets up from hiding. He then tries to remember the direction the man went.
Hey again, I am definitely going to join this fanfic, but I still have quite a few pages to read, so a summary would really help me and some others get into it. I don't think i'll write in episode 5, but i'll definitely start in Season 3.
Hey again, I am definitely going to join this fanfic, but I still have quite a few pages to read, so a summary would really help me and some others get into it. I don't think i'll write in episode 5, but i'll definitely start in Season 3.
How about someone helping us finish it? It's unfair always the same people do it.
No seriously: Now I am really mad. I've been asking you for help and get ignored, though your comment shows me you read what I've written. If nobody agrees to help us with it this was the very last time that I've made a summary. You don't have to do it right now though your agreement in supporting me would be highly appreciated.
How about someone helping us finish it? It's unfair always the same people do it.
No seriously: Now I am really mad. I've been asking you f… moreor help and get ignored, though your comment shows me you read what I've written. If nobody agrees to help us with it this was the very last time that I've made a summary. You don't have to do it right now though your agreement in supporting me would be highly appreciated.
Edit: I wanted to write though I don't understand Randomz latest post. I thought the guy threatening the camp was "Kirkmin", not "Steve". They can't be the same person, can they.
Besides, it's written that Steve laughs and kills the kitten. So Frank yells and Steve just passes by him? I thought Frank and Steve know each other... and how wouldn't he notice Frank being conscious - he yelled and spoke to the cat after all.
Hey again, I am definitely going to join this fanfic, but I still have quite a few pages to read, so a summary would really help me and some others get into it. I don't think i'll write in episode 5, but i'll definitely start in Season 3.
EPISODE 4: ''Before the Storm'' (page 30-35)
Flashback (strangers point of view)
* The stranger, who wanted to catch a rabbit comes ac… moreross Clem and Danielle. He witnesses them being threatened by three persons from his hidden point in the treetops.
* He helps the girls by killing the three attackers with his bow and arrows.
* Danielle flees but Clementine looks straight at him, which impresses him. He flees and accidently looses a piece of cloth.
In the cabin
* Kenny notices Clem holding a piece of green cloth, though he refrains from asking her about it
* Then he accidently stumbles, revealing a hidden stash under a plank, filled with comic books and a diary
Another day, in the cabin
* Melody's provisions are nearly gone and Kenny and Pascucci wanna go hunting. They want Gus to join them but he looks for excuses, saying he's the intellectual type rather than a hunter, but he's being forced by them and the t… [view original content]
Kirkmin, was probably not using his real name, or his last name. Because he knew anyone of his old members could be there. (Russel or Frank) And I may be wrong, but I thought I put that Frank whispered when he said no. He didn't notice Frank, because by the time the cat had approached Steve, Steve was way in front of the house. I'm really sorry for the confusion.
Edit: I wanted to write though I don't understand Randomz latest post. I thought the guy threatening the camp was "Kirkmin", not "Steve". They… more can't be the same person, can they.
Besides, it's written that Steve laughs and kills the kitten. So Frank yells and Steve just passes by him? I thought Frank and Steve know each other... and how wouldn't he notice Frank being conscious - he yelled and spoke to the cat after all.
Edit: I wanted to write though I don't understand Randomz latest post. I thought the guy threatening the camp was "Kirkmin", not "Steve". They… more can't be the same person, can they.
Besides, it's written that Steve laughs and kills the kitten. So Frank yells and Steve just passes by him? I thought Frank and Steve know each other... and how wouldn't he notice Frank being conscious - he yelled and spoke to the cat after all.
How about someone helping us finish it? It's unfair always the same people do it.
No seriously: Now I am really mad. I've been asking you f… moreor help and get ignored, though your comment shows me you read what I've written. If nobody agrees to help us with it this was the very last time that I've made a summary. You don't have to do it right now though your agreement in supporting me would be highly appreciated.
Before the storm page 35-38
Jeremy
* Gus is nearly killing Jeremy with the large branch
* Jeremy stabbed Gus in the calf, causing him… more to drop the branch
* Jeremy proceeds to smash Gus with the branch
* Melody comes on to the scene, watching Jeremy kill Gus
* Bryan makes sure Gus won't turn, shooting him in the head
Pascucci
* Pascucci decides to walk to find Kenny.
* He had been walking the whole night when he was knocked unconscious.
* When he woke up, he found himself locked prisoner in a room.
* A man named Steve told Pascucci he needs to join his group, since they need 7 members in their group.
* Pascucci, and a man name Frank had to go look and hunt down two men.
* They had found the two men, and noticed Kenny was one of them.
* In an effort to protect Kenny, Pascucci missed his shot on purpose.
* But then the other man shot Pascucci.
Kenny
* Kenny awakes to find himself inside a settlement, and decides t… [view original content]
Kenny slowly gains consciousness. He sees the light coming through his closed eyelids, though he isn't able to open them just yet as they feel as heavy as bricks. What the hell was that nasty kool-aid rip-off?, goes through his mind. It's been months since he tasted something sweet like that delicious drink. But how can a juice cause this kinda sickness? His stomach aches and a sweat pearl drops of his cheek. Then he finally speaks: "Pal, that was real nasty stuff... you should probably think about improving your invention...". Nobody replies. Kenny gets nervous when he remembers Danielle drank the same gross drink. "Danielle, how are you feeling...?" he mumbles, trying to finally open his eyes. The lights hurt a lot and after a moment his eyes get used to it. He then recognizes the silhouette of a person with a stump and his pulse rises. "Danielle? Answer me!" yells Kenny, trying to move. She doesn't reply. Oh lord, what have I done! There's no sign of the man who did this to them and the scales fell from Kenny's eyes: He poisoned us! Being in a state of shock Kenny lays there looking at Danielle silent body when he finally manages to get a clear head and crawls to her. "Danielle! Oh lord, answer me.. Danielle!". All he can hear are yells outside the camper. There's a tumult. Kenny desperately slaps her face in attempt to awake her. Her chest doesn't move and her skin is all pale. Giving her CPR he prays to his lord: Oh, Lord have mercy! Please, Danielle, wake up! Don't die! Wake up! This isn't over, yet! You've still got all your life in front of you! Jesus, please! That was my fault!
Kirkmin, was probably not using his real name, or his last name. Because he knew anyone of his old members could be there. (Russel or Frank) A… morend I may be wrong, but I thought I put that Frank whispered when he said no. He didn't notice Frank, because by the time the cat had approached Steve, Steve was way in front of the house. I'm really sorry for the confusion.
Before the storm page 35-38
Jeremy
* Gus is nearly killing Jeremy with the large branch
* Jeremy stabbed Gus in the calf, causing him… more to drop the branch
* Jeremy proceeds to smash Gus with the branch
* Melody comes on to the scene, watching Jeremy kill Gus
* Bryan makes sure Gus won't turn, shooting him in the head
Pascucci
* Pascucci decides to walk to find Kenny.
* He had been walking the whole night when he was knocked unconscious.
* When he woke up, he found himself locked prisoner in a room.
* A man named Steve told Pascucci he needs to join his group, since they need 7 members in their group.
* Pascucci, and a man name Frank had to go look and hunt down two men.
* They had found the two men, and noticed Kenny was one of them.
* In an effort to protect Kenny, Pascucci missed his shot on purpose.
* But then the other man shot Pascucci.
Kenny
* Kenny awakes to find himself inside a settlement, and decides t… [view original content]
Kenny slowly gains consciousness. He sees the light coming through his closed eyelids, though he isn't able to open them just yet as they feel… more as heavy as bricks. What the hell was that nasty kool-aid rip-off?, goes through his mind. It's been months since he tasted something sweet like that delicious drink. But how can a juice cause this kinda sickness? His stomach aches and a sweat pearl drops of his cheek. Then he finally speaks: "Pal, that was real nasty stuff... you should probably think about improving your invention...". Nobody replies. Kenny gets nervous when he remembers Danielle drank the same gross drink. "Danielle, how are you feeling...?" he mumbles, trying to finally open his eyes. The lights hurt a lot and after a moment his eyes get used to it. He then recognizes the silhouette of a person with a stump and his pulse rises. "Danielle? Answer me!" yells Kenny, trying to move. She doesn't reply. Oh lord, what have I done! There's no … [view original content]
He leans over the pale-skinned girl. His hands folded over the left side of her chest. With every push his own breathing gets heavier. His chest is aching, his vision blurry. All of this man's strength is being put into saving the young girl's life. Kenny's muscles tense up as his consciousness slowly fades away. Determined to rescue Danielle from impending doom he keeps praying silently, wishing for a miracle. Drops of sweat run down his already tear-stained face. When his efforts seem futile, and his hope is lost, the muscles lose their tenseness and his body gives in, quickly collapsing under its own weight. His head hits the floor right before the girl's silhouette seems to be moving. ''Danielle... Are you...'', Kenny mutters. Her response is short, yet hopeful. ''Kenny... I'm... I'm fine...'' He lets out a sigh of relief before passing out once again due to what seems to be the effect of Kirkmin's ''Kool-aid.''
(Stop music.)
- Prison Cell -
After they've managed to successfully carry Bryan out of the small prison cell, the three carefully sneak out of the community prison. The entire building has been abandoned, as all personnel has moved out to the dining hall as ordered. Bryan has been alternating from a state of slight awareness down to a point where Clementine starts to worry if he's even alive. They need to find some food for him, but the recent ''poisoning'' will make it nearly impossible to find anything safe to eat within the settlement. When the group finally reaches the last door they prepare themselves, unknowing of what might be found behind it. ''Jeremy... Give me the gun.'', Clementine determinedly says. He doesn't hesitate, and immediately tosses her the small pistol. ''Let's go.'', he whispers as he pushes the worn-out-wooden door open.
She flinches when the chilly spring air touches her exposed face. Her hat nearly flies off when a strong gust of wind pulls it, but she holds onto it tightly. Clementine looks up at the dark night sky. Dark clouds have packed together, forming a blanket covering the earth below it. A slight rainfall is beginning to soak her clothes. When the the three move on, they notice a large amount of bodies laying around the settlement, some more lifeless than the others. They go as fast as they can, reaching the camper within less than a minute. ''Open the door for me Clem.'', Jeremy whispers to his female companion. She obeys, ever so slowly pushing the creaking door. Her heart is pounding in her chest, as she is worried about the fate of her friends. ''Kenny?'', Clementine whispers, ''Kenny, are you there?''
(You know the drill: )
He leans over the pale-skinned girl. His hands folded over the left side of her chest. With every push his own brea… morething gets heavier. His chest is aching, his vision blurry. All of this man's strength is being put into saving the young girl's life. Kenny's muscles tense up as his consciousness slowly fades away. Determined to rescue Danielle from impending doom he keeps praying silently, wishing for a miracle. Drops of sweat run down his already tear-stained face. When his efforts seem futile, and his hope is lost, the muscles lose their tenseness and his body gives in, quickly collapsing under its own weight. His head hits the floor right before the girl's silhouette seems to be moving. ''Danielle... Are you...'', Kenny mutters. Her response is short, yet hopeful. ''Kenny... I'm... I'm fine...'' He lets out a sigh of relief before passing out once again due to what seems to be the effect of Kirkmin's ''Kool-aid.''
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Request: Although the story is hotting up, great job everyone who's contributed, can we have a small break to get the summary completed and discuss a few things? Earlier in the thread someone wrote the end of the episode should be collaborative and we're nearing the end of the episode so we should talk about it.
I'm not suggesting we do any pre-planning but some ground rules for the end of the episode could be discussed as we need to get this right.
"He lets out a sigh of relief before passing out once again due to what seems to be the effect of Kirkmin's ''Kool-aid.''
I'd just like to ask, is this saying that Kenny didn't pass out because of the kool-aid? I can't think of a reason why Kenny would be bitten.
So what's your intention? For Kenny passing out to not be because of the Kool-Aid or some other reason? I'd like to write but I'm a little unsure.
It doesn't really follow that Steve would be this new person I talked about in my previous post. I feel like the narrator not mentioning that it was Steve and then it suddenly being Steve doesn't make sense.
If possible could the new person not be Steve as his group of 5 or 6 (since he's already lost a few) could not do what the new person (Kirkmin?) is attempting to do.
Edit: I wanted to write though I don't understand Randomz latest post. I thought the guy threatening the camp was "Kirkmin", not "Steve". They… more can't be the same person, can they.
Besides, it's written that Steve laughs and kills the kitten. So Frank yells and Steve just passes by him? I thought Frank and Steve know each other... and how wouldn't he notice Frank being conscious - he yelled and spoke to the cat after all.
I don't think we should take a break to be honest. I think we should wrap up this season and then take a break to finish up summaries and update back-ups etc.
Frank wonders what he is going to do before spotting a hunting blind in a nearby tree.
He leaves Pascucci to see of the hunting blind is safe. After he crushes a ‘zork’, he notices that a huge herd is on the way.
Back at Jack’s settlement a few days after Kenny’s amputation
Jack is in his room and hears a commotion outside his house.
He hears a shot and rushes out to find Sarah has shot a member of their community. She is taken to the community jail.
Melody’s cabin
Clementine asks Melody how she can reach out to Danielle. Melody suggests reading the comic Kenny gave her to Danielle.
Danielle rejects the peace offering.
Melody and Jeremy go to town to search for medical supplies leaving Bryan to look after the girls. He takes a quick nap.
An hour and a half later
Clementine wakes Bryan up and explains the cabin is on fire.
Bryan rushes to the girls’ bedroom, which is engulfed in flames, and finds Danielle sheltering in a closet.
They rush outside and find Clementine is out there, as well as Jeremy and Melody who have returned from town.
The next morning
The group’s jeep has run out of gas. Melody asks Bryan how much further it will be to wherever they are going. He tells her it should just be a short walk away.
Clementine says they should go back to the farm.
Jeremy explains they have to find Kenny and Pascucci. Clementine says she believes they are dead, showing how much hope she has lost.
Clementine tells everyone to stop and questions what they are doing heading towards this unknown place, saying they can’t trust anyone.
The group continue on to the new place. Danielle tells Clementine to leave if she wants. They argue for a while before Melody screams for them to stop.
Melody has had enough and says she needs some rest.
Clementine is still unsure about going after Kenny and Pascucci but the rest of the group thinks this is the best course of action.
Clementine feels she is a failure and says she has had suicidal thoughts as it is such a tough life.
Clementine falls asleep and has a happy dream about reuniting with many of those she has lost.
Upon waking up, Clementine sees that Melody has committed suicide.
Jeremy is devastated and thinks about doing the same but Bryan stops him. Bryan tells the group they can’t give up.
Clementine realises she has to have hope as that is what Lee worked so hard to give her.
The group continue before spotting a blue station-wagon. It has supplies and the group decide to take them.
Danielle tries to convince them not to take the supplies but Clementine reflects on her previous refusal to take supplies when she was with Lee and what Chuck had said about survival of the fittest.
Jeremy, Bryan, Clementine and Danielle are about to drive away in the car when they spot a young boy and an elderly lady.
Jeremy leaves the car to talk to them and reveals that the car belongs to the two strangers when he returns.
They split the supplies and return the car before heading for the place Bryan is taking them.
Clementine decides not to tell Jeremy and Bryan about the part Danielle played in the cabin burning down.
Bryan reveals his previous hideout to the group: a cave.
In the hunting blind
Frank rescues Pascucci by taking him up to the hunting blind in the tree.
He searches the bag of the ‘zork’ that he crushed previously. He finds a bandage and puts it on Pascucci.
Frank spots a large number of ‘zorks’ below.
In the cave
Bryan shows the group round the cave. He reveals he became a lone scavenger because he was fed up of fighting over resources with other groups.
As Clementine is going to bed she spots a photo of Bryan with a young woman outside The Marsh House, the hotel her parents were staying at when on holiday at the beginning of the outbreak. He tells the group the woman is Hannah, the love of his life.
In the hunting blind
Pascucci wakes up and asks if Frank has stitched him up. Frank tells him that he hasn’t.
Pascucci says they need to get to a place where he can get stitches. He finds a watch in the walker’s bag.
In the cave
Bryan tells his story. He talks about his early life and his evolving relationship with Hannah as they grew up.
They moved to Savannah and he had two jobs, one of which was as a security guard at The Marsh House. The photo was from when she visited him one day.
Bryan met Clementine’s mother and father, Diana and Ed, the day that Ed got bitten. He heard them talking to their daughter, Clementine, on the phone.
Bryan and Hannah let Ed and Diana stay with them but Ed turned into a walker and bit Diana. They locked them in their bedroom and escaped.
They picked up a hitchhiker on the way to Bryan’s parent’s house. He died and reanimated but they managed to get him out of the car and reached the house.
Bryan’s parents had turned, he called them ‘ghosts’, so he shot them in the head with his bow.
Bryan and Hannah headed for a safe zone in Atlanta. A few days after arriving the place became overrun with walkers. Bryan was in the bathroom when he heard screaming. He tells the group he has been searching for Hannah since then.
Danielle asks Bryan about the story he told her about meeting Hannah. He explains that he lied since he was new to the group.
Jeremy tells Bryan they understand why he lied.
The next day
Walking with Clementine, Bryan feels renewed strength to carry on living.
Clementine asks him if he thinks Hannah is still alive.
Bryan reveals that she is in fact dead as she was bit when he was in the bathroom. They survived for a while before Hannah died and turned into a walker.
Bryan tells Clementine that he left Hannah’s ‘ghost’ tied to a pole and that his search for Hannah is in actuality a need to kill her ‘ghost’.
Danielle attempts to talk to Clementine and Bryan but they ignore her so she walks with Jeremy instead.
Clementine asks about Hannah and Bryan explains that she was gone from the pole when he went back.
Clementine talks about how difficult it was to see Lee handcuffed to the radiator and becoming ‘ghost’-like, using Bryan’s term for walkers.
As Clementine asks about Ed and Diana, Bryan realises that they were Clementine’s parents.
Bryan tells Clementine they didn’t make it, as indicated by the story he told the night before. Clementine tells Bryan she knows they hadn’t made it since she had seen them as walkers but that she was thankful they were with Bryan and Hannah during the outbreak.
Clementine thanked Bryan for helping her parents.
Clementine wonders if Pascucci and Kenny are alive; Bryan tells her to hold on to the hope they are still alive.
Two hours later
The group come across Pascucci, who is now a walker.
Flashback one hour
Pascucci and Frank sneak back to Steve’s group, avoiding the remaining walkers from the large group that had passed by.
Steve asks where are the two men (who we know are Kenny and Jack) he asked them to hunt down.
Frank loses his temper and explains his new friend Pascucci got shot so they need Steve to get some stitches.
Enraged by Frank’s demands and assertion that Pascucci is his friend, Steve shoots Pascucci in the chest.
Before Pascucci dies, he asks Frank to find Kenny.
Frank flees Steve’s base, deciding not to shoot Steve even though he had the opportunity to do so.
Back to the present time
Bryan shoots ‘ghost’ Pascucci in the head with an arrow.
Danielle blames Kenny for Pascucci’s death as well as for the deaths of Melody and Gus.
Clementine defends Kenny and tells Danielle if she hadn’t been stupid enough to go outside, she may still have her arm.
Danielle becomes more upset and lashes out at Clementine blaming her for everything going wrong.
Danielle punches Clementine and knocks her out.
A short time later
Clementine regains consciousness as Bryan and Danielle are arguing. It sounds like Danielle has blamed Clementine for the fire at the cabin.
Bryan tells the group the settlement is nearby and picks up Clementine and carries her to the top of a hill overlooking the camp.
The group head for the settlement.
Jack’s settlement
Jack lets Sarah out of community jail warning her that this is her last chance.
They hear yelling outside and go to investigate.
In the forest with Frank
Frank is tired and hungry. He spots three kittens and rescues them. He names them: Oreo, Tiger and Cleo.
Frank finds a tree house and takes shelter for the night in it.
He wakes up the next morning to find the tree house surrounded by 15 ‘zorks’. Tiger falls down and is eaten by the ‘zorks’.
Frank shoots the ‘zorks’ despite wanting to be quiet because he is upset they killed Tiger. He heads off on his own again.
Jack’s settlement
Jack and Sarah join Jack’s father at the gate where our group of 4 are asking to be let in.
Sarah and Jack’s father are wary of letting strangers in but Jack lets the group in and agrees to let Clementine be treated.
Clementine spots Kenny as he comes to see what the commotion is all about.
Outside the doctor’s camper
Elizabeth, the doctor, has treated Clementine and is tending to Danielle who has a broken hand.
Clementine and Kenny are waiting outside the camper and begin to talk. Kenny explains what happened to him and how he came to lose his leg.
Kenny comforts Clementine and falls asleep in his lap.
Ten minutes later
The rest of the group emerge from the camper and head to another large camper where the 5 of them will be staying.
Clementine pretends to still be asleep as she is taken to the other camper and put in bed but hears Kenny tell the others she is like a daughter to him.
The next morning
As a woman wakes the group up by banging on the door, Kenny explains that it is Selma telling them to get ready for physical training.
Kenny notices Danielle is very quiet. She says she used to be good at sports and laments losing her arm.
Danielle blames Clementine, at which point Bryan tries to intercede. Kenny stops him and tries to reason with Danielle, explaining how he came to terms with losing his leg.
Danielle does not listen to Kenny and says she will not join the exercises. Kenny hardens his tone and tells her she has to do it.
Two minutes later
The group leave the camper and Jeremy, Bryan and Clementine go to their training with Selma, while Danielle and Kenny join Jack for the training for people who have lost a limb.
After training Danielle confronts Kenny, arguing that he abandoned his ‘daughter’, Clementine, and the rest of the group.
Danielle shouts at Kenny for not asking what happened to the rest of the group. In anger, she reveals that Melody, Gus and Pascucci are dead.
Danielle storms off, leaving Kenny feeling guilty and devastated.
Jack helps Kenny up from the ground.
In camp
Sarah attempts to apologise to John, Jack’s father, but they end up arguing again when John does not trust Sarah’s motives for apologising.
Sarah angrily shouts that she will be leaving the settlement.
Back with Kenny and Jack
Jack is comforting Kenny when he hears yelling.
He tells Kenny to get some rest and goes to find out what the yelling was about.
Jack finds Sarah upset and tries to find out what’s wrong with her. She pushes him away and goes back to her camper.
Sarah’s trailer
Sarah writes in her diary. She writes that she has feelings for Jack.
Sarah plans to leave the settlement.
In the forest with Frank
Frank worries that he is losing his mind as he is talking to the two kittens.
He hears something in the nearby bushes.
At camp, a few hours later
Sarah is leaving the settlement but needs a gun so plans on stealing a gun from the building where weapons are held.
Bryan stops her.
Flashback with Sarah
Sarah and her big sister, Erin, are sheltering from a group of walkers up a tree.
Sarah and Erin argue over a man. Erin accuses Sarah of sleeping with Erin’s boyfriend. Sarah all but confirms it.
Erin admits she slept with Eric, Sarah’s boyfriend, and says they are even.
Acting in anger Sarah throws her sister out of the tree.
Bryan tries to save Erin from the walkers but fails. He spares Sarah’s life.
Back in the present
Jack and Clementine spot Bryan and call to him. Jack spots a woman on the ground and calls to her to see if it is Sarah.
Sarah begs Bryan not to tell the settlement about Erin.
Sarah pushes Bryan away and rushes to Jack.
Jack has read the diary entry where Sarah tells of her feelings for Jack. They share an intimate moment.
Bryan attacks Sarah for her role in Erin’s death.
Clementine urges Bryan to stop. He realises that killing Sarah won’t bring back the girl she attacked or Hannah and walks towards the camper.
Jack tends to Sarah. He is angry at Bryan and says that Clementine’s group can’t be trusted.
Clementine tells him that they are good people.
Jack helps Sarah up and takes her to the doctor.
At the ambulance camper
Sarah wakes up in some pain.
Jack and John tell Sarah they need to question her about what happened with Bryan. John says that he and Sarah can put their differences aside for the safety of their community.
On the way back to the group camper
Clementine tells Bryan that Jack wants to make the group leave. Bryan tells her not to worry.
Clementine and Bryan return to the group camper. Bryan warns Jeremy, Kenny and Danielle there may be trouble.
An hour later
Jack comes to their camper and informs the group that they are required to come with him.
The group is escorted to an interrogation room by Jack and some guards.
Interrogation room
Jack, John and Sarah are on one side of a large desk and the group is on the other side. There are three guards in the room.
John explains that his community is not sure they made the right decision in letting the group join them.
Kenny interrupts and says his group are good people and that Bryan must have had a reason for attacking Sarah.
John tells them that Sarah says Bryan must have confused her with someone else.
Sarah decides that she can manipulate the situation as she notices that Clementine is Bryan’s weakness.
John asks Bryan why he attacked Sarah.
Sarah interrupts and claims that she does not want the group to suffer for Bryan’s actions.
Bryan reacts angrily and shouts that Sarah killed a woman.
Sarah asks Kenny if Bryan is a suitable guardian of Clementine.
Enraged by this, Bryan stands up and begins to shout at Sarah. John orders the guards to subdue Bryan since he has become aggressive. Bryan is knocked out.
John orders Bryan to be thrown in the community jail.
Four days later
Bryan is in a bad way. Despite being naked and hungry, he hasn’t attempted to escape the community jail because he doesn’t want to leave the group, especially Clementine.
Bryan wonders if the group are thinking about him.
Bryan sees someone outside, through a hole in his cell, and whispers to them. It’s Clementine.
Bryan tells her the way he is being treated. Clementine is upset by this.
John’s office
Jeremy tells John that the group won’t stand for Bryan being kicked out.
John makes it clear that they don’t have a choice and won’t be allowed to leave even if Bryan is kicked out.
Jeremy angrily complains, leading to John and Jeremy squaring off. John orders Jeremy to get out of his office.
Kenny, who had been waiting outside the office, asks Jeremy what happened.
Kenny and Jeremy have a disagreement about whether they should stay in the community. Jeremy thinks they should leave while Kenny thinks they should stay.
Kenny’s little shack area
Kenny is surprised Danielle is in his shack. She says it’s one of the best places in the whole camp.
Danielle tells him she understands why the community do things like the exercise regime.
Kenny tells Danielle she is acting very maturely.
Heading towards the camper
Clementine is determined to get Bryan out of the cell. She wonders what would be the best way of getting him out.
She stops outside the camper.
Inside the camper
Kenny and Danielle discuss Bryan’s situation. They wonder whether Clementine is going to be able to deal with what they perceive to be Bryan’s betrayal of the group.
Outside the camper
Overhearing Kenny and Danielle’s conversation, Clementine is about to confront them when Jeremy turns up.
Jeremy explains to Clementine that John has told them they can’t leave. Jeremy says they need to talk the situation over as a group.
Clementine tells Jeremy about the conversation she overheard.
They decide to rescue Bryan and deal with whether Kenny and Danielle will be coming with them another time.
Clementine and Jeremy agree to meet later.
Clementine’s room
Clementine goes back to her room and thinks about the community they are with.
Community dining room
Clementine isn’t really hungry so just picks at her food.
She decides to take some to Bryan in his cell.
Community jail
Clementine delivers Bryan her food.
She finds that he has been beaten up.
Bryan urges Clementine to leave the settlement. She tells Bryan that she and Jeremy have a plan to free him.
Inside the camper
A man Kenny knows knocks at the door and offers Kenny and Danielle a drink.
Kenny says the man is new but that the man gave him some of the drink the day before.
Kenny and Danielle take the drink.
Jack sees the man leave as he approaches the camper.
Jack finds Kenny and Danielle have been drugged. Kenny tells Jack the man’s name is Kirkmin.
Jack makes his way to John’s cabin, ignoring the people asking for his help.
Jack and John’s cabin
Jack goes to his father’s office. Jack finds his father has been killed. There is a meat cleaver piercing John’s skull.
Community jail
Bryan is in a very bad way and desperately needs help.
He tells himself that he has to hold on just a bit longer until Clementine rescues him.
Bryan falls asleep.
Jack and John’s cabin
Jack mourns his father.
A mysterious man reveals himself and tells Jack he knows all about Jack and the community.
Jack asks why his father was killed. The man explains that when they find a community, leaders are killed and a new chain of command installed.
The man tells Jack that Jack will help him or the man will have every member of the community killed.
Jack asks how the man found his community.
The man reveals that Sarah told them; Sarah is brought in the room.
Sarah breaks down and tearfully admits that on the night she was attacked by Bryan she had radioed for help and the mysterious man’s group had responded.
Sarah also tells Jack about her sister, admitting that was why Bryan had attacked her.
Jack is devastated: his father is dead, the community is under threat, he’d put an innocent man in jail and his girlfriend had lied to him.
With his spirit broken and for the sake of the community, Jack agrees to help the man.
At the fence near the group’s camper
Clementine waits for Jeremy who is late.
Jeremy turns up and tells Clementine that something is going on as he’d seen people passed out. Jeremy says they need to get out of this place as soon as possible.
Jeremy gives Clementine a gun and says they should head to Jack and John’s cabin first for the keys to Bryan’s cell.
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I second this - also consider you as my friends and it's really heartwarming to see that you feel the same! I really enjoy to write with you as a group and as you may have noticed I've been very proud to be very devoted member of our wonderful team. It never ceases to amaze me what amazing storylines you guys come up with! Alle the people who skip this thread miss a lot since writing with you is like a neverending TWD-game experience. Thank you!
Note:
Our fanfic is 170 pages long (10pt Arial word doc.)!
Regarding the Summaries:
I just finished with the summary of page 30-35 and updated the comment for newbies on page 1 as follows:
You can go see it on page 1 for a better layout.
As you can see: Lots of pages are still missing. People are starting new fanfic-threads as they wanted to join us but couldn't since they find it frustrating that the last summary is like 20 pages aback and so it's gotten to difficult getting in. This is not cool and we really, really need to catch up on it before it's too late. Snufkin and I spend some time doing it and we'd really appreciate your support.
To see our latest summary look a few posts above.
We're... writing a book... 170 pages is incredible!
Dah, I love you guys.
Back in the woods...
Frank lunges out at the bushes expecting anything. But nothing happened, there was nothing in the bushes. "Am i okay?" Frank says to himself. "I hope you kittens aren't hallucinations." He picks Oreo, and Cleo up, and puts them back into his front pocket. He begins to run again.
He had been running for over 3 hours, when he ran up a hill, and found a settlement. "Remember what Pascucci said. Find Kenny." He says to himself as he climbs a fence into the settlement. He notices nearly 15 passed out bodies in front of a house. "Huh?" He says when an announcement is heard over a loud speaker.
"Hello everybody, i don't want to alarm you, but we have been experiencing a food poisoning problem, so if you happen to see anybody passed out, or acting strange do not be alarmed. I repeat to not be alarmed. We are having a mandatory meeting at the dining hall. That is mandatory, if you do not attend the consequences are dire."
Frank stay's silent and approaches the house with the passed out bodies. "SHIT!" He says, when he hears somebody from the inside of the house. Frank quickly falls on to his back, pretending to be one of the passed out bodies, he does so when the door opens. When two men step out, he hears a familiar voice. "Now come with me Jack, I've got a lot of explaining to do.." Frank hears the voice, and a shiver goes down his back.
As Steve and the other man pass by him, Cleo gets out of his shirt pocket. "Get back here!" He whispers. The cat approaches Kirmin silently and bites his leg. "YOUCH!" He yells as he looks down at the kitten. Kirkmin laughs and proceeds to do the worst thing Frank has ever witnessed. Steve pressed his foot over the cat and stomped it's head in.
"No..." Frank whispers, as he make's sure Oreo stays in his shirt pocket. "I'll get revenge for your brother. I'll-" His silently begins to cry. "I'll kill that man..." Frank says. As a little girl and a young man walks out.
Once they walk by, Frank gets up from hiding. He then tries to remember the direction the man went.
Hey again, I am definitely going to join this fanfic, but I still have quite a few pages to read, so a summary would really help me and some others get into it. I don't think i'll write in episode 5, but i'll definitely start in Season 3.
Well a summary was just made, it almost sums up episode 4. And do you mean season 2? Lol.
How about someone helping us finish it? It's unfair always the same people do it.
No seriously: Now I am really mad. I've been asking you for help and get ignored, though your comment shows me you read what I've written. If nobody agrees to help us with it this was the very last time that I've made a summary. You don't have to do it right now though your agreement in supporting me would be highly appreciated.
Sorry, i'll help. I'll start right now.
Sorry, if I snapped. Your help is highly appreciated!
Edit: I wanted to write though I don't understand Randomz latest post. I thought the guy threatening the camp was "Kirkmin", not "Steve". They can't be the same person, can they.
Besides, it's written that Steve laughs and kills the kitten. So Frank yells and Steve just passes by him? I thought Frank and Steve know each other... and how wouldn't he notice Frank being conscious - he yelled and spoke to the cat after all.
me too, I'm at page 9 right now... gonna take some time.
Just so you know: the story gets better and better every page and we highly improved our writing as well as the storyline, so keep reading
Before the storm page 35-38
Jeremy
Pascucci
Kenny
Cabin
Melody, Jeremy, and Bryan.
Pascucci and Frank
Kirkmin, was probably not using his real name, or his last name. Because he knew anyone of his old members could be there. (Russel or Frank) And I may be wrong, but I thought I put that Frank whispered when he said no. He didn't notice Frank, because by the time the cat had approached Steve, Steve was way in front of the house. I'm really sorry for the confusion.
I made it from page 35-38. I'll do some more later. Again i'm sorry.
Maybe his name is Steve Kirmin?
Uh... I would help with the summary but I haven't read that far.
No... season 3, since this is Season 2 now.
No, please, you don't have to.
If I catch up with reading in time I'll help out with the summary.
Just because i'm new to this fanfic stuff doesn't mean I shouldn't help out :P
Very well, though we need add that Kenny's leg got amputated, right?
Whoops, I thought I did include that. Fixed it. Sorry
Kenny slowly gains consciousness. He sees the light coming through his closed eyelids, though he isn't able to open them just yet as they feel as heavy as bricks. What the hell was that nasty kool-aid rip-off?, goes through his mind. It's been months since he tasted something sweet like that delicious drink. But how can a juice cause this kinda sickness? His stomach aches and a sweat pearl drops of his cheek. Then he finally speaks: "Pal, that was real nasty stuff... you should probably think about improving your invention...". Nobody replies. Kenny gets nervous when he remembers Danielle drank the same gross drink. "Danielle, how are you feeling...?" he mumbles, trying to finally open his eyes. The lights hurt a lot and after a moment his eyes get used to it. He then recognizes the silhouette of a person with a stump and his pulse rises. "Danielle? Answer me!" yells Kenny, trying to move. She doesn't reply. Oh lord, what have I done! There's no sign of the man who did this to them and the scales fell from Kenny's eyes: He poisoned us! Being in a state of shock Kenny lays there looking at Danielle silent body when he finally manages to get a clear head and crawls to her. "Danielle! Oh lord, answer me.. Danielle!". All he can hear are yells outside the camper. There's a tumult. Kenny desperately slaps her face in attempt to awake her. Her chest doesn't move and her skin is all pale. Giving her CPR he prays to his lord: Oh, Lord have mercy! Please, Danielle, wake up! Don't die! Wake up! This isn't over, yet! You've still got all your life in front of you! Jesus, please! That was my fault!
Is she dead or alive? It's up to you...
Yeah, that makes more sense. But: Steve has like 6 persons max. with him. How can 7 persons handle to overpower a whole settlement of like 30 people?
Actually, I can hardly wait to see you contribute to our story
alright, now I see
In the cabin
End of Episode 4: Before The Storm (page 26-40)
Summary now complete up to the end of page 40. Episode 5 starts on the first post of page 41.
I think he's trying to be more intimidating then anything.
I really love where the story is going!
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Ignore him. No dislike. PM @Vainamoinen or @Darth Marsden
Exactly.
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He leans over the pale-skinned girl. His hands folded over the left side of her chest. With every push his own breathing gets heavier. His chest is aching, his vision blurry. All of this man's strength is being put into saving the young girl's life. Kenny's muscles tense up as his consciousness slowly fades away. Determined to rescue Danielle from impending doom he keeps praying silently, wishing for a miracle. Drops of sweat run down his already tear-stained face. When his efforts seem futile, and his hope is lost, the muscles lose their tenseness and his body gives in, quickly collapsing under its own weight. His head hits the floor right before the girl's silhouette seems to be moving. ''Danielle... Are you...'', Kenny mutters. Her response is short, yet hopeful. ''Kenny... I'm... I'm fine...'' He lets out a sigh of relief before passing out once again due to what seems to be the effect of Kirkmin's ''Kool-aid.''
(Stop music.)
- Prison Cell -
After they've managed to successfully carry Bryan out of the small prison cell, the three carefully sneak out of the community prison. The entire building has been abandoned, as all personnel has moved out to the dining hall as ordered. Bryan has been alternating from a state of slight awareness down to a point where Clementine starts to worry if he's even alive. They need to find some food for him, but the recent ''poisoning'' will make it nearly impossible to find anything safe to eat within the settlement. When the group finally reaches the last door they prepare themselves, unknowing of what might be found behind it. ''Jeremy... Give me the gun.'', Clementine determinedly says. He doesn't hesitate, and immediately tosses her the small pistol. ''Let's go.'', he whispers as he pushes the worn-out-wooden door open.
She flinches when the chilly spring air touches her exposed face. Her hat nearly flies off when a strong gust of wind pulls it, but she holds onto it tightly. Clementine looks up at the dark night sky. Dark clouds have packed together, forming a blanket covering the earth below it. A slight rainfall is beginning to soak her clothes. When the the three move on, they notice a large amount of bodies laying around the settlement, some more lifeless than the others. They go as fast as they can, reaching the camper within less than a minute. ''Open the door for me Clem.'', Jeremy whispers to his female companion. She obeys, ever so slowly pushing the creaking door. Her heart is pounding in her chest, as she is worried about the fate of her friends. ''Kenny?'', Clementine whispers, ''Kenny, are you there?''
Just as a heads-up, storm in a story generally means something bad is going to happen later on. That's the main reason I decided to put that in.
Request: Although the story is hotting up, great job everyone who's contributed, can we have a small break to get the summary completed and discuss a few things? Earlier in the thread someone wrote the end of the episode should be collaborative and we're nearing the end of the episode so we should talk about it.
I'm not suggesting we do any pre-planning but some ground rules for the end of the episode could be discussed as we need to get this right.
"He lets out a sigh of relief before passing out once again due to what seems to be the effect of Kirkmin's ''Kool-aid.''
I'd just like to ask, is this saying that Kenny didn't pass out because of the kool-aid? I can't think of a reason why Kenny would be bitten.
So what's your intention? For Kenny passing out to not be because of the Kool-Aid or some other reason? I'd like to write but I'm a little unsure.
It doesn't really follow that Steve would be this new person I talked about in my previous post. I feel like the narrator not mentioning that it was Steve and then it suddenly being Steve doesn't make sense.
If possible could the new person not be Steve as his group of 5 or 6 (since he's already lost a few) could not do what the new person (Kirkmin?) is attempting to do.
Let me know your thoughts.
I don't think we should take a break to be honest. I think we should wrap up this season and then take a break to finish up summaries and update back-ups etc.
EPISODE 5: "One Last Breath" (page 41-49)
In the forest
Back at Jack’s settlement a few days after Kenny’s amputation
Melody’s cabin
An hour and a half later
The next morning
In the hunting blind
In the cave
In the hunting blind
In the cave
The next day
Two hours later
Flashback one hour
Back to the present time
A short time later
Jack’s settlement
In the forest with Frank
Jack’s settlement
Outside the doctor’s camper
Ten minutes later
The next morning
Two minutes later
In camp
Back with Kenny and Jack
Sarah’s trailer
In the forest with Frank
At camp, a few hours later
Flashback with Sarah
Back in the present
At the ambulance camper
On the way back to the group camper
An hour later
Interrogation room
Four days later
John’s office
Kenny’s little shack area
Heading towards the camper
Inside the camper
Outside the camper
Clementine’s room
Community dining room
Community jail
Inside the camper
Jack and John’s cabin
Community jail
Jack and John’s cabin
At the fence near the group’s camper