Appearance: Long Blonde hair that always covers his left eye, tall, about 6 feet, athletic and acrobatic but not thin. Left eye is red and right eye is Blue. People find him extremely handsome and always fall for his appearance.
Personality: Loves to explore new things, always looking forward for the next challenge. Although he is from the power district, he is both efficient at long range combat and creating strategies and tactics. He is never afraid from a fight, he isn't easily intimidated. He can rage if someone pushes him too far and can get aggressive.
Backstory: Volt as a kid always had the talent of being smart at puzzles, he is on par with the level of mind as district 3. He trains daily as a kid along with his older brothers and he still manages to ace all of his quizzes. His brother got picked for reaping for the Games and lost. Volt swore he will train hard until he is ready enough to win the games.
Family/Friends: 2 brothers ( Adam, he is still alive and he didn't get picked for the Games. And Jensen, picked for the Games at 16 and lost). Younger sister called Sofia A girlfriend called Ellisa who stood by him since childhood. His mother Maria and his Father Leroy.
Fears: To loose someone important to him, lose his girlfriend, having to kill his partner at the finale at the Games.
Volunteered Or Reaped?: Volunteered, to honor his brother's memory for the Games.
Strengths: Construct strategies around the battlefield quickly and efficiently. Very athletic in combat. Charismatic
Weakness: Hiding emotions, Heights, if his friend is kidnapped, he would immediately surrender
Appearance: Wolff is a Native American woman, with soft wrinkles appearing slightly around her mouth and eyes. She is 5'11, even taller when she was 18 and won her games. One of her eyes is artificial, as she lost it during her games, but isn't that noticeable. Her eyes are almond brown and her is a light brown, kept in a large bun. Her hair is scraped back by a burgundy bandanna. She is quite muscular, but has thinned out in recent years.
Personality: Wolff is spiritual and bohemian person. She is a kind, warm and gentle woman and will care for those she believes need it. However, back in her games, she was mean and hostile, even slightly ruthless, but after winning she changed. Wolff regularly drinks herbal tea.
Backstory and how did he/she won their games: Wolff was from a poor family, much poorer than Texa's. Her family were nearly starving every week, however most people are like that in District 10, so she sucked it up. She grew mean and tougher, often stealing things from younger people. When she was reaped at 18, she was just herself: cruel, horrid and sour. Her training score was an 8, incredibly high for someone from an outlying district. She ran to the Cornucopia and even killed the boy from 9 with a sword, something she learnt how to do from training. The girl from 1 was desperate to kill Wolff as she felt threatened.
Wolff and her district partner were allies and killed the girl from 7 and the boy from 11 together. However at the final 7, when they, the tributes from 1 and the girls from 2, 5 and 8 were the only ones left, Wolff's partner betrayed her and tried sneaking away with all their supplies. But Wolff caught up with him and killed him. She then killed the girls from 5 and 1. The Careers killed the girl from 8 and then they all met up at the Cornucopia for the finale. The girl from 2 was killed quickly by Wolff as she overpowered her. The boy from 1 started being melodramatic about his district partner and Wolff killed him savagely.
Apperance: Chubby but strong, and tall for his age. He has curly dark brown hair and green eyes.
Personality: Arrogant, and childish. Gives himself way too much credit and thinks he's superior to others (very spoiled). Likes to whine and complain about everything.
Backstory: He lived a really good life, and his parents allowed him to do whatever he wanted. He believes that he could easily win the games, and volunteered for the games without informing his parents when he came of age.
Family/Friends: Parents, and two older siblings. He never had much friends because he has a tendency to annoy people.
Fears: He believes that he fears nothing, but he is scared of bugs and wild animals.
Volunteered (if , why) Or Reaped?: Volunteered because he wants the honor of being the victor although he never went through career training.
Strengths: (name three) It's easy to overlook him, since he's so young and seems so harmless. He is deceitful, he might give you his word but he will break that promise and backstab you in a heartbeat. And he's brave, even when he is actually scared, he'll still carry on because he wants everyone to think he is brave.
Weakness: (name three) Arrogance. Not knowing how to talk to people, he's never had a friend in his life. Knows nothing about surviving in the wild.
Name: Troy Farvale
Gender: Male
Age: 12
District: 4
Apperance: Chubby but strong, and tall for his age. He has curly dark brown … morehair and green eyes.
Personality: Arrogant, and childish. Gives himself way too much credit and thinks he's superior to others (very spoiled). Likes to whine and complain about everything.
Backstory: He lived a really good life, and his parents allowed him to do whatever he wanted. He believes that he could easily win the games, and volunteered for the games without informing his parents when he came of age.
Family/Friends: Parents, and two older siblings. He never had much friends because he has a tendency to annoy people.
Fears: He believes that he fears nothing, but he is scared of bugs and wild animals.
Volunteered (if , why) Or Reaped?: Volunteered because he wants the honor of being the victor although he never went through career training.
Strengths: (name three) It's easy to over… [view original content]
Appearance: skinny, has short brown hair, 5'8ft tall, brown eyes.
Personality: adventurous, intelligent, strong, open minded, humourus, sociable.
Backstory: Ever since he was a kid he always loved venturing out and doing anything possible. His mom died from cancer when he was 9 months old. He is an only child and loves his dad a lot. Barry and his father always used to go on small hunts for fun. His father taught him how to make traps and how to properly hunt.
Family/Friends: His father and a group of friends that consist of 6 people from school.
Fears: Not being able to do anything in his life, he wants his life to mean something. To make a difference somehow.
Volunteered or reaped: Reaped.
Strengths: Knows how to entertain people and make them laugh, he uses his surroundings to help him, he knows how to set up traps for animals and even people trying to hurt him, he knows how to hunt and climb. Good with axes and throwing axes. Also can be manipulative.
Weakness: Fist fighting and having to deal with his emotions.
Name: Volt Leroy
Gender: Male
Age: 15
District: 5
Appearance: Long Blonde hair that always covers his left eye, tall, about 6 fe… moreet, athletic and acrobatic but not thin. Left eye is red and right eye is Blue. People find him extremely handsome and always fall for his appearance.
Personality: Loves to explore new things, always looking forward for the next challenge. Although he is from the power district, he is both efficient at long range combat and creating strategies and tactics. He is never afraid from a fight, he isn't easily intimidated. He can rage if someone pushes him too far and can get aggressive.
Backstory: Volt as a kid always had the talent of being smart at puzzles, he is on par with the level of mind as district 3. He trains daily as a kid along with his older brothers and he still manages to ace all of his quizzes. His brother got picked for reaping for the Games and lost. Volt swore he will train hard until … [view original content]
Name: Troy Farvale
Gender: Male
Age: 12
District: 4
Apperance: Chubby but strong, and tall for his age. He has curly dark brown … morehair and green eyes.
Personality: Arrogant, and childish. Gives himself way too much credit and thinks he's superior to others (very spoiled). Likes to whine and complain about everything.
Backstory: He lived a really good life, and his parents allowed him to do whatever he wanted. He believes that he could easily win the games, and volunteered for the games without informing his parents when he came of age.
Family/Friends: Parents, and two older siblings. He never had much friends because he has a tendency to annoy people.
Fears: He believes that he fears nothing, but he is scared of bugs and wild animals.
Volunteered (if , why) Or Reaped?: Volunteered because he wants the honor of being the victor although he never went through career training.
Strengths: (name three) It's easy to over… [view original content]
Name: Barry Eledeen
Gender: Male
Age: 15
District: 7
Appearance: skinny, has short brown hair, 5'8ft tall, brown eyes.
Person… moreality: adventurous, intelligent, strong, open minded, humourus, sociable.
Backstory: Ever since he was a kid he always loved venturing out and doing anything possible. His mom died from cancer when he was 9 months old. He is an only child and loves his dad a lot. Barry and his father always used to go on small hunts for fun. His father taught him how to make traps and how to properly hunt.
Family/Friends: His father and a group of friends that consist of 6 people from school.
Fears: Not being able to do anything in his life, he wants his life to mean something. To make a difference somehow.
Volunteered or reaped: Reaped.
Strengths: Knows how to entertain people and make them laugh, he uses his surroundings to help him, he knows how to set up traps for animals and even people trying to hurt … [view original content]
Mentor Form
Name: Wolff Bullheart
Gender: Female
Age: 42 (won when she was 18)
District: 10
Appearance: Wolff is a Native Ame… morerican woman, with soft wrinkles appearing slightly around her mouth and eyes. She is 5'11, even taller when she was 18 and won her games. One of her eyes is artificial, as she lost it during her games, but isn't that noticeable. Her eyes are almond brown and her is a light brown, kept in a large bun. Her hair is scraped back by a burgundy bandanna. She is quite muscular, but has thinned out in recent years.
Personality: Wolff is spiritual and bohemian person. She is a kind, warm and gentle woman and will care for those she believes need it. However, back in her games, she was mean and hostile, even slightly ruthless, but after winning she changed. Wolff regularly drinks herbal tea.
Backstory and how did he/she won their games: Wolff was from a poor family, much poorer than Texa's. Her family were ne… [view original content]
Apperance: He has short hair that was originally black but was dyed red, has sideburns that are partially shaved to create a pattern.
Personality: He is kind to the tributes, and feels sorry for them, he tries to assist them and lighten their mood whenever possible. He has been an escort for long enough to understand the game isn't what the capitol makes it out to be.
Appearance: light brown hair usually tied into two small buns, pale skin, skinny figure, 5'4ft tall, brown eyes.
Personality: funny, cool, intelligent, flirty.
Backstory: Sophie grew up in the poorer side of District 5. Being from the poorer side she learnt a lot on how to defend herself, especially with swords. Her parents are open minded and support Sophie no matter what.
Family/Friends: her parents, and pollis her best friend.
Fears: She doesn't have a lot of fears but spiders freak her out.
Volunteered or reaped: Reaped
Strengths: Sophie is a fast runner, she was known for being the quickest in her school. She's good with swords, she was taught by many people how to properly use one and was graded one of the best. She's intelligent about where to strike first an opponent first, again, she was taught this at her time in the poorer side of the District.
Weaknesses: Sophie doesn't trust too easily and that can be a problem at times. She might be a little hostile towards a few people in the Capitol like her escort since she's practically being sent to her death. Sometimes can be a bit arrogant.
Appearance: Sea green eyes, long light brown hair pulled back in a ponytail, average height
Back story: Riley grew up working for everything she got, she never had much time to be a kid so she doesn't fully understand the concept of 'down time'
Personality: restless, careful, out going, will talk but not much.
Family/friends: parents Simon and Christina
Fears: fears needles and doesn't like long conversation
Strengths: fast, strong, doesn't mind killing someone if they threaten her
Weaknesses: gets nervous in social situations, not a team player (although a good faker), won't go out of her way for someone
Name: Sophie
Gender: Female
Age: 17
District: 5
Appearance: light brown hair usually tied into two small buns, pale skin, skinny… more figure, 5'4ft tall, brown eyes.
Personality: funny, cool, intelligent, flirty.
Backstory: Sophie grew up in the poorer side of District 5. Being from the poorer side she learnt a lot on how to defend herself, especially with swords. Her parents are open minded and support Sophie no matter what.
Family/Friends: her parents, and pollis her best friend.
Fears: She doesn't have a lot of fears but spiders freak her out.
Volunteered or reaped: Reaped
Strengths: Sophie is a fast runner, she was known for being the quickest in her school. She's good with swords, she was taught by many people how to properly use one and was graded one of the best. She's intelligent about where to strike first an opponent first, again, she was taught this at her time in the poorer side of the District.
Weaknes… [view original content]
Today is the big day. I will volunteer for the hunger games and i will win them. I bet it will be so easy. And obviously I won´t let that bitch Amelia Cato volunteer instead since is what she wanted all her life and she stole Cob from me. Cob was a dumbass, but an attractive and sexy dumbass.
“Sweaty are you ready to head out?” My father Titus asks me. Oh god I hate when she calls me sweaty, what does he thinks that I am a 5- year old little girl?. I really hate my dad. He always finds the way to embarrass me somehow. One time, he brought my old toy Kiki from when I was a little girl to the training center because aparentally he thought i forgot about it. That eventually caused Cob to hook up with Amelia by believing I still play with toys and I am like a little dumb girl or the inverse, I don´t really care who started. I just know I want them both dead or separated from each other. I will love to see that.
“Sweaty?” Dad calls me again. Please why he can´t shut the fuck up. Apparently he is an excellent major and a terrible father. All the people in District two loves him likes he is some kind of god. Even the poor people who are not many but very dirty and ugly like him. Ugh, if they know how dumb he really is they will probably beat his ass. That would be something great
“Wait. I am not done yet” I as the nicely I can. What I said it´s true anyways. I still didn´t put my clothes on and I am just landing on the bed. I get up and I walk to my closet. I open it and look around my dresses. I finally chose a black long dress that was from my mother in her youth. She is the only other real family I like. She is like want to be when I am older, without counting being a Hunger Games winner. She thinks it´s too dangerous for me, but I think she is just being overprotective.
Alex it´s more like father, something really bad. She acts like a toddler most of the time and she has 13 years! That little bitch destroyed Kiki, when it was mine just because she thought that mom and dad loved me more than her in my birthday. At least mom punished with not getting out of her room for 2 months. You should have seen the look on her face.
Anyways, I realize I lost like 10 minutes thinking while doing nothing. It happens to me since a long time ago. I look in the closet again for shoes and I chose some red studs from my old grandma Otera. She was boring but at least her clothes are useful and pretty. I quickly put on the dress and the studs and I get out of my room. Downstairs I find dad, mom and Alex in the hall. Alex is playing is with her new toy which I think she called Tommen. It is some kind of dog that walks went you pull a rope it walks Father quickly rush onto me and says “You are beautiful sweaty!” Ughhhhh, relax Liennia, just breath. I give the angriest stare I can do without looking like a maniac. He understands why i am mad.
“Shall we get going?” asks my mom Polly. Titus my dad responds “Of course, I think we are late anyways.” What? We are late and he didn´t tell us? I fucking hate him. If only I did something to him, he may change
[Slap your father][Give him a cold glare][Just walk away]["Fuck You!"]
I just want to know what do you think of my writing. It´s terrible or horrible?
I am very, very, very bad at grammar, worse of the worse so if you ask me you write pretty damn good, still I don't care about Alex new toy... next time try to describe that toy, I don't know...
Liennia Mason (17) District Two
Pre-Reaping 1/2
Today is the big day. I will volunteer for the hunger games and i will win them. I bet… more it will be so easy. And obviously I won´t let that bitch Amelia Cato volunteer instead since is what she wanted all her life and she stole Cob from me. Cob was a dumbass, but an attractive and sexy dumbass.
“Sweaty are you ready to head out?” My father Titus asks me. Oh god I hate when she calls me sweaty, what does he thinks that I am a 5- year old little girl?. I really hate my dad. He always finds the way to embarrass me somehow. One time, he brought my old toy Kiki from when I was a little girl to the training center because aparentally he thought i forgot about it. That eventually caused Cob to hook up with Amelia by believing I still play with toys and I am like a little dumb girl or the inverse, I don´t really care who started. I just know I want them both dead or separated from each other.… [view original content]
[Slap your father]
I am very, very, very bad at grammar, worse of the worse so if you ask me you write pretty damn good, still I don't care about Alex new toy... next time try to describe that toy, I don't know...
"don't get too cocky" I compare myself to you also suggest you to start to describe appearance of characters before they are death... I only know she is sweaty, ironically I can't taste she (this sound like I am an sexual perverted)
"don't get too cocky" I compare myself to you also suggest you to start to describe appearance of characters before they are death... I only know she is sweaty, ironically I can't taste she (this sound like I am an sexual perverted)
Liennia Mason (17) District Two
Pre-Reaping 1/2
Today is the big day. I will volunteer for the hunger games and i will win them. I bet… more it will be so easy. And obviously I won´t let that bitch Amelia Cato volunteer instead since is what she wanted all her life and she stole Cob from me. Cob was a dumbass, but an attractive and sexy dumbass.
“Sweaty are you ready to head out?” My father Titus asks me. Oh god I hate when she calls me sweaty, what does he thinks that I am a 5- year old little girl?. I really hate my dad. He always finds the way to embarrass me somehow. One time, he brought my old toy Kiki from when I was a little girl to the training center because aparentally he thought i forgot about it. That eventually caused Cob to hook up with Amelia by believing I still play with toys and I am like a little dumb girl or the inverse, I don´t really care who started. I just know I want them both dead or separated from each other.… [view original content]
Liennia Mason (17) District Two
Pre-Reaping 1/2
Today is the big day. I will volunteer for the hunger games and i will win them. I bet… more it will be so easy. And obviously I won´t let that bitch Amelia Cato volunteer instead since is what she wanted all her life and she stole Cob from me. Cob was a dumbass, but an attractive and sexy dumbass.
“Sweaty are you ready to head out?” My father Titus asks me. Oh god I hate when she calls me sweaty, what does he thinks that I am a 5- year old little girl?. I really hate my dad. He always finds the way to embarrass me somehow. One time, he brought my old toy Kiki from when I was a little girl to the training center because aparentally he thought i forgot about it. That eventually caused Cob to hook up with Amelia by believing I still play with toys and I am like a little dumb girl or the inverse, I don´t really care who started. I just know I want them both dead or separated from each other.… [view original content]
I just want to know what do you think of my writing. It´s terrible or horrible?
Your English is not terrible, this is how it should be: simple, without giving much boredom in reading. I'm not good at English reviews, I have to use google translator to look like my English is good, and yet is not.
[Give him a cold glare] No need to swear or hit your own father, a look like this already gives signal that you are not enjoying his attitude.
Hopefully this will not take long for the next part out.
Liennia Mason (17) District Two
Pre-Reaping 1/2
Today is the big day. I will volunteer for the hunger games and i will win them. I bet… more it will be so easy. And obviously I won´t let that bitch Amelia Cato volunteer instead since is what she wanted all her life and she stole Cob from me. Cob was a dumbass, but an attractive and sexy dumbass.
“Sweaty are you ready to head out?” My father Titus asks me. Oh god I hate when she calls me sweaty, what does he thinks that I am a 5- year old little girl?. I really hate my dad. He always finds the way to embarrass me somehow. One time, he brought my old toy Kiki from when I was a little girl to the training center because aparentally he thought i forgot about it. That eventually caused Cob to hook up with Amelia by believing I still play with toys and I am like a little dumb girl or the inverse, I don´t really care who started. I just know I want them both dead or separated from each other.… [view original content]
Liennia Mason (17) District Two
Pre-Reaping 1/2
Today is the big day. I will volunteer for the hunger games and i will win them. I bet… more it will be so easy. And obviously I won´t let that bitch Amelia Cato volunteer instead since is what she wanted all her life and she stole Cob from me. Cob was a dumbass, but an attractive and sexy dumbass.
“Sweaty are you ready to head out?” My father Titus asks me. Oh god I hate when she calls me sweaty, what does he thinks that I am a 5- year old little girl?. I really hate my dad. He always finds the way to embarrass me somehow. One time, he brought my old toy Kiki from when I was a little girl to the training center because aparentally he thought i forgot about it. That eventually caused Cob to hook up with Amelia by believing I still play with toys and I am like a little dumb girl or the inverse, I don´t really care who started. I just know I want them both dead or separated from each other.… [view original content]
Liennia Mason (17) District Two
Pre-Reaping 1/2
Today is the big day. I will volunteer for the hunger games and i will win them. I bet… more it will be so easy. And obviously I won´t let that bitch Amelia Cato volunteer instead since is what she wanted all her life and she stole Cob from me. Cob was a dumbass, but an attractive and sexy dumbass.
“Sweaty are you ready to head out?” My father Titus asks me. Oh god I hate when she calls me sweaty, what does he thinks that I am a 5- year old little girl?. I really hate my dad. He always finds the way to embarrass me somehow. One time, he brought my old toy Kiki from when I was a little girl to the training center because aparentally he thought i forgot about it. That eventually caused Cob to hook up with Amelia by believing I still play with toys and I am like a little dumb girl or the inverse, I don´t really care who started. I just know I want them both dead or separated from each other.… [view original content]
This is just a start in my opinion. It truly counts as boring when all the characters are introduced and then supersagig can't describe them well or tell the story the way he wants to. But from just this part, I have a pretty good idea about the type of person Liennia is.
That is the point, he didn't describe Liennia well, I only know she may dislike his father and have good family also she may be just rude, for this particularity part is a weak start to great plot, don't you think?
This is just a start in my opinion. It truly counts as boring when all the characters are introduced and then supersagig can't describe them… more well or tell the story the way he wants to. But from just this part, I have a pretty good idea about the type of person Liennia is.
[Give him a cold glare] Her dad may be kind of a jerk at times, but that is what we call an over reaction XD
As for your writing, it's not bad, pretty good, actually. There's a good amount of typos and all, but it's to be expected when writing. I'd suggest you give the piece of writing a read through before posting it if you want to try to get rid of typos. But I'm able to follow the story pretty well so far, so it's nowhere near a problem.
Edit: I'll be submitting a character as soon as I can, I've been pretty busy as of late.
Liennia Mason (17) District Two
Pre-Reaping 1/2
Today is the big day. I will volunteer for the hunger games and i will win them. I bet… more it will be so easy. And obviously I won´t let that bitch Amelia Cato volunteer instead since is what she wanted all her life and she stole Cob from me. Cob was a dumbass, but an attractive and sexy dumbass.
“Sweaty are you ready to head out?” My father Titus asks me. Oh god I hate when she calls me sweaty, what does he thinks that I am a 5- year old little girl?. I really hate my dad. He always finds the way to embarrass me somehow. One time, he brought my old toy Kiki from when I was a little girl to the training center because aparentally he thought i forgot about it. That eventually caused Cob to hook up with Amelia by believing I still play with toys and I am like a little dumb girl or the inverse, I don´t really care who started. I just know I want them both dead or separated from each other.… [view original content]
That is the point, he didn't describe Liennia well, I only know she may dislike his father and have good family also she may be just rude, for this particularity part is a weak start to great plot, don't you think?
That is the point, he didn't describe Liennia well, I only know she may dislike his father and have good family also she may be just rude, for this particularity part is a weak start to great plot, don't you think?
well in my option I think it was a start (not good or bad, just a start). You have right, the story in particular must be judge when is finished, so why are you telling me like I say "this story is bad"? I just say it could have a more detailed content.
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Me too xd
It's okay! I'm excited for this
ok ill have to create a character or something if allowed i guess
yes :P
Name: Volt Leroy
Gender: Male
Age: 15
District: 5
Appearance: Long Blonde hair that always covers his left eye, tall, about 6 feet, athletic and acrobatic but not thin. Left eye is red and right eye is Blue. People find him extremely handsome and always fall for his appearance.
Personality: Loves to explore new things, always looking forward for the next challenge. Although he is from the power district, he is both efficient at long range combat and creating strategies and tactics. He is never afraid from a fight, he isn't easily intimidated. He can rage if someone pushes him too far and can get aggressive.
Backstory: Volt as a kid always had the talent of being smart at puzzles, he is on par with the level of mind as district 3. He trains daily as a kid along with his older brothers and he still manages to ace all of his quizzes. His brother got picked for reaping for the Games and lost. Volt swore he will train hard until he is ready enough to win the games.
Family/Friends: 2 brothers ( Adam, he is still alive and he didn't get picked for the Games. And Jensen, picked for the Games at 16 and lost). Younger sister called Sofia A girlfriend called Ellisa who stood by him since childhood. His mother Maria and his Father Leroy.
Fears: To loose someone important to him, lose his girlfriend, having to kill his partner at the finale at the Games.
Volunteered Or Reaped?: Volunteered, to honor his brother's memory for the Games.
Strengths: Construct strategies around the battlefield quickly and efficiently. Very athletic in combat. Charismatic
Weakness: Hiding emotions, Heights, if his friend is kidnapped, he would immediately surrender
:P
Mentor Form
Name: Wolff Bullheart
Gender: Female
Age: 42 (won when she was 18)
District: 10
Appearance: Wolff is a Native American woman, with soft wrinkles appearing slightly around her mouth and eyes. She is 5'11, even taller when she was 18 and won her games. One of her eyes is artificial, as she lost it during her games, but isn't that noticeable. Her eyes are almond brown and her is a light brown, kept in a large bun. Her hair is scraped back by a burgundy bandanna. She is quite muscular, but has thinned out in recent years.
Personality: Wolff is spiritual and bohemian person. She is a kind, warm and gentle woman and will care for those she believes need it. However, back in her games, she was mean and hostile, even slightly ruthless, but after winning she changed. Wolff regularly drinks herbal tea.
Backstory and how did he/she won their games: Wolff was from a poor family, much poorer than Texa's. Her family were nearly starving every week, however most people are like that in District 10, so she sucked it up. She grew mean and tougher, often stealing things from younger people. When she was reaped at 18, she was just herself: cruel, horrid and sour. Her training score was an 8, incredibly high for someone from an outlying district. She ran to the Cornucopia and even killed the boy from 9 with a sword, something she learnt how to do from training. The girl from 1 was desperate to kill Wolff as she felt threatened.
Wolff and her district partner were allies and killed the girl from 7 and the boy from 11 together. However at the final 7, when they, the tributes from 1 and the girls from 2, 5 and 8 were the only ones left, Wolff's partner betrayed her and tried sneaking away with all their supplies. But Wolff caught up with him and killed him. She then killed the girls from 5 and 1. The Careers killed the girl from 8 and then they all met up at the Cornucopia for the finale. The girl from 2 was killed quickly by Wolff as she overpowered her. The boy from 1 started being melodramatic about his district partner and Wolff killed him savagely.
Name: Troy Farvale
Gender: Male
Age: 12
District: 4
Apperance: Chubby but strong, and tall for his age. He has curly dark brown hair and green eyes.
Personality: Arrogant, and childish. Gives himself way too much credit and thinks he's superior to others (very spoiled). Likes to whine and complain about everything.
Backstory: He lived a really good life, and his parents allowed him to do whatever he wanted. He believes that he could easily win the games, and volunteered for the games without informing his parents when he came of age.
Family/Friends: Parents, and two older siblings. He never had much friends because he has a tendency to annoy people.
Fears: He believes that he fears nothing, but he is scared of bugs and wild animals.
Volunteered (if , why) Or Reaped?: Volunteered because he wants the honor of being the victor although he never went through career training.
Strengths: (name three) It's easy to overlook him, since he's so young and seems so harmless. He is deceitful, he might give you his word but he will break that promise and backstab you in a heartbeat. And he's brave, even when he is actually scared, he'll still carry on because he wants everyone to think he is brave.
Weakness: (name three) Arrogance. Not knowing how to talk to people, he's never had a friend in his life. Knows nothing about surviving in the wild.
oops didn't mean to reply!
Name: Barry Eledeen
Gender: Male
Age: 15
District: 7
Appearance: skinny, has short brown hair, 5'8ft tall, brown eyes.
Personality: adventurous, intelligent, strong, open minded, humourus, sociable.
Backstory: Ever since he was a kid he always loved venturing out and doing anything possible. His mom died from cancer when he was 9 months old. He is an only child and loves his dad a lot. Barry and his father always used to go on small hunts for fun. His father taught him how to make traps and how to properly hunt.
Family/Friends: His father and a group of friends that consist of 6 people from school.
Fears: Not being able to do anything in his life, he wants his life to mean something. To make a difference somehow.
Volunteered or reaped: Reaped.
Strengths: Knows how to entertain people and make them laugh, he uses his surroundings to help him, he knows how to set up traps for animals and even people trying to hurt him, he knows how to hunt and climb. Good with axes and throwing axes. Also can be manipulative.
Weakness: Fist fighting and having to deal with his emotions.
Sorry guys. My lights went off and i couldn´t write part. But i will be starting it now!
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Escort
Name: Roman Peacewood
Gender: Male
Age: 39
Apperance: He has short hair that was originally black but was dyed red, has sideburns that are partially shaved to create a pattern.
Personality: He is kind to the tributes, and feels sorry for them, he tries to assist them and lighten their mood whenever possible. He has been an escort for long enough to understand the game isn't what the capitol makes it out to be.
Name: Sophie
Gender: Female
Age: 17
District: 5
Appearance: light brown hair usually tied into two small buns, pale skin, skinny figure, 5'4ft tall, brown eyes.
Personality: funny, cool, intelligent, flirty.
Backstory: Sophie grew up in the poorer side of District 5. Being from the poorer side she learnt a lot on how to defend herself, especially with swords. Her parents are open minded and support Sophie no matter what.
Family/Friends: her parents, and pollis her best friend.
Fears: She doesn't have a lot of fears but spiders freak her out.
Volunteered or reaped: Reaped
Strengths: Sophie is a fast runner, she was known for being the quickest in her school. She's good with swords, she was taught by many people how to properly use one and was graded one of the best. She's intelligent about where to strike first an opponent first, again, she was taught this at her time in the poorer side of the District.
Weaknesses: Sophie doesn't trust too easily and that can be a problem at times. She might be a little hostile towards a few people in the Capitol like her escort since she's practically being sent to her death. Sometimes can be a bit arrogant.
Name: Riley McClean
Age: 16
Gender: female
District: 8
Appearance: Sea green eyes, long light brown hair pulled back in a ponytail, average height
Back story: Riley grew up working for everything she got, she never had much time to be a kid so she doesn't fully understand the concept of 'down time'
Personality: restless, careful, out going, will talk but not much.
Family/friends: parents Simon and Christina
Fears: fears needles and doesn't like long conversation
Strengths: fast, strong, doesn't mind killing someone if they threaten her
Weaknesses: gets nervous in social situations, not a team player (although a good faker), won't go out of her way for someone
She was reaped.
I will not accept her being expert in swords cause districr 5 has nothing to do with weapons
I made up District 5 having a secret ghetto group sort of thing in the poorer sides, she would practice just like a career tribute for fun.
Liennia Mason (17) District Two
Pre-Reaping 1/2
Today is the big day. I will volunteer for the hunger games and i will win them. I bet it will be so easy. And obviously I won´t let that bitch Amelia Cato volunteer instead since is what she wanted all her life and she stole Cob from me. Cob was a dumbass, but an attractive and sexy dumbass.
“Sweaty are you ready to head out?” My father Titus asks me. Oh god I hate when she calls me sweaty, what does he thinks that I am a 5- year old little girl?. I really hate my dad. He always finds the way to embarrass me somehow. One time, he brought my old toy Kiki from when I was a little girl to the training center because aparentally he thought i forgot about it. That eventually caused Cob to hook up with Amelia by believing I still play with toys and I am like a little dumb girl or the inverse, I don´t really care who started. I just know I want them both dead or separated from each other. I will love to see that.
“Sweaty?” Dad calls me again. Please why he can´t shut the fuck up. Apparently he is an excellent major and a terrible father. All the people in District two loves him likes he is some kind of god. Even the poor people who are not many but very dirty and ugly like him. Ugh, if they know how dumb he really is they will probably beat his ass. That would be something great
“Wait. I am not done yet” I as the nicely I can. What I said it´s true anyways. I still didn´t put my clothes on and I am just landing on the bed. I get up and I walk to my closet. I open it and look around my dresses. I finally chose a black long dress that was from my mother in her youth. She is the only other real family I like. She is like want to be when I am older, without counting being a Hunger Games winner. She thinks it´s too dangerous for me, but I think she is just being overprotective.
Alex it´s more like father, something really bad. She acts like a toddler most of the time and she has 13 years! That little bitch destroyed Kiki, when it was mine just because she thought that mom and dad loved me more than her in my birthday. At least mom punished with not getting out of her room for 2 months. You should have seen the look on her face.
Anyways, I realize I lost like 10 minutes thinking while doing nothing. It happens to me since a long time ago. I look in the closet again for shoes and I chose some red studs from my old grandma Otera. She was boring but at least her clothes are useful and pretty. I quickly put on the dress and the studs and I get out of my room. Downstairs I find dad, mom and Alex in the hall. Alex is playing is with her new toy which I think she called Tommen. It is some kind of dog that walks went you pull a rope it walks Father quickly rush onto me and says “You are beautiful sweaty!” Ughhhhh, relax Liennia, just breath. I give the angriest stare I can do without looking like a maniac. He understands why i am mad.
“Shall we get going?” asks my mom Polly. Titus my dad responds “Of course, I think we are late anyways.” What? We are late and he didn´t tell us? I fucking hate him. If only I did something to him, he may change
[Slap your father] [Give him a cold glare] [Just walk away] ["Fuck You!"]
I just want to know what do you think of my writing. It´s terrible or horrible?
[Slap your father]
I am very, very, very bad at grammar, worse of the worse so if you ask me you write pretty damn good, still I don't care about Alex new toy... next time try to describe that toy, I don't know...
Thanks for the support Alexen!
"don't get too cocky" I compare myself to you also suggest you to start to describe appearance of characters before they are death... I only know she is sweaty, ironically I can't taste she (this sound like I am an sexual perverted)
I will make sure the next time you know how sweaty she is :P
["Fuck You!"]
[Give him a cold glare]
[just walk away]
I like your writing, there are a few errors, but nothing to severe.
I can honestly tell you I already don't like Liennia....
anyways great part!
Your English is not terrible, this is how it should be: simple, without giving much boredom in reading. I'm not good at English reviews, I have to use google translator to look like my English is good, and yet is not.
[Give him a cold glare] No need to swear or hit your own father, a look like this already gives signal that you are not enjoying his attitude.
Hopefully this will not take long for the next part out.
[Give him a cold glare]
[Give him a cold glare] the writing is good actually, not boring but diverse. Good work.
that is a lie... IT IS BORING, for now at least.
This is just a start in my opinion. It truly counts as boring when all the characters are introduced and then supersagig can't describe them well or tell the story the way he wants to. But from just this part, I have a pretty good idea about the type of person Liennia is.
That is the point, he didn't describe Liennia well, I only know she may dislike his father and have good family also she may be just rude, for this particularity part is a weak start to great plot, don't you think?
[Give him a cold glare] Her dad may be kind of a jerk at times, but that is what we call an over reaction XD
As for your writing, it's not bad, pretty good, actually. There's a good amount of typos and all, but it's to be expected when writing. I'd suggest you give the piece of writing a read through before posting it if you want to try to get rid of typos. But I'm able to follow the story pretty well so far, so it's nowhere near a problem.
Edit: I'll be submitting a character as soon as I can, I've been pretty busy as of late.
That's kinda rude. @ualexn92
[Slap your father] because why not?
Keep on writing, you'll get better. Don't give up!
Do you refer to Liennia or me? I just express my option, he is more good at writing then me at least but he can do much more I know it...
PS: look he admit it
Relax mate, this has been a good start in my personal opinion. I'm still not going to fully judge the story until its completely finished
well in my option I think it was a start (not good or bad, just a start). You have right, the story in particular must be judge when is finished, so why are you telling me like I say "this story is bad"? I just say it could have a more detailed content.