Continuing upon the end of S1(fan-fic)

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  • Sorry to bother you, but I was smart enough to make a user account, but apparently not smart enough to create a character. I have no clue how to do it. Heeeelp

    That_1_Guy posted: »

    I actually joined myself already, I'm the character named Charles Mallory. There's a lot of information in the ''Forum News, Information &a

  • Yeah, this whole story is absolutely amazing, and so are everyone that has worked, and are working on it :D.

    I'm sorry to anyone who got sad because of Charlie's death, but that was what i was trying to do, i'm an evil person x3.

    That_1_Guy posted: »

    You know, Charlie's death made me realize one thing. This story is really good. I felt genuinely sad about Charlie's death, almost as much

  • I think it's good, because we shouldn't be afraid to kill people off, and Charlie's death caught me so off-guard.

    HSPLazerz posted: »

    Yeah, this whole story is absolutely amazing, and so are everyone that has worked, and are working on it . I'm sorry to anyone who got sad because of Charlie's death, but that was what i was trying to do, i'm an evil person x3.

  • Yea we need a bit more dramatic death scenes. Like Kenny's sacrifice(since we don't know if he's dead or alive in the actual game) was really dramatic.

    That_1_Guy posted: »

    Yeah me too. Although I do feel the next death scenes should be a little more dramatic. But that's just my opinion. ; )

  • Yeah me too. Although I do feel the next death scenes should be a little more dramatic. But that's just my opinion. ; )

    I think it's good, because we shouldn't be afraid to kill people off, and Charlie's death caught me so off-guard.

  • That's the kind of scene I'm referring to, those scenes make for an awesome narrative. Any way, I hope someone picks up the story, Jeremy has a choice to make!

    Yea we need a bit more dramatic death scenes. Like Kenny's sacrifice(since we don't know if he's dead or alive in the actual game) was really dramatic.

  • You have to go to the character creation section and create a thread there. You'll need to use the character template which I believe is found in that same section.

    TheMissus posted: »

    Sorry to bother you, but I was smart enough to make a user account, but apparently not smart enough to create a character. I have no clue how to do it. Heeeelp

  • I felt like the death scene with Charlie couldn't really be all that more dramatic without being cheesy, it was more or less a part of Clem growing up, and that shouldn't be cries everywhere, but more brutal.

    That_1_Guy posted: »

    Yeah me too. Although I do feel the next death scenes should be a little more dramatic. But that's just my opinion. ; )

  • Nice work with Charlie's death, that was real sad man.

    I noticed how other people got mad sometimes when someone died, but this is The Walking Dead, people die, end of story.

    I think it's good, because we shouldn't be afraid to kill people off, and Charlie's death caught me so off-guard.

  • Yeah, I guess. He'd better have a dramatic funeral though! T_T

    HSPLazerz posted: »

    I felt like the death scene with Charlie couldn't really be all that more dramatic without being cheesy, it was more or less a part of Clem growing up, and that shouldn't be cries everywhere, but more brutal.

  • edited January 2014

    Alright - thank you so much! I created Megan Borowski, a 15yo girl from Macon

    That_1_Guy posted: »

    You have to go to the character creation section and create a thread there. You'll need to use the character template which I believe is found in that same section.

  • I have an idea for a dramatic thing, but the characters aren't in place yet.

    That_1_Guy posted: »

    Yeah me too. Although I do feel the next death scenes should be a little more dramatic. But that's just my opinion. ; )

  • edited January 2014

    Yes it is. and for me i Hate dramatic death scenes. When i saw lee had a tiny bite i was pissed. i much prefer a bullet going through someones brain. makes it feel real and in reality its probably what would happen

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    Nice work with Charlie's death, that was real sad man. I noticed how other people got mad sometimes when someone died, but this is The Walking Dead, people die, end of story.

  • Well, things just got quiet.

  • I guess it's because peope are puzzled by the latest entry by That1guy which has a an error:

    "Note: Due to an earlier post - whoever is going to be the next: Make sure that in the end Kenny's going to be in the butchers chamber with Jeremy and Pascucci outisde the building peeking through a small window into that chamber." This somehow contradicts with the story so far because Kenny should be in this room with Pascucci outside

    HSPLazerz posted: »

    Well, things just got quiet.

  • In the latest post Jeremy is not with Kenny in this room but alone with the butcher, and he manages to
    fight even though he's drugged. What are we going to do?

    TheMissus posted: »

    I guess it's because peope are puzzled by the latest entry by That1guy which has a an error: "Note: Due to an earlier post - whoever is

  • The only thing I can think of is that Jeremy doesn't kill the butcher, somebody else does, but i dunno if that makes sense.

    TheMissus posted: »

    In the latest post Jeremy is not with Kenny in this room but alone with the butcher, and he manages to fight even though he's drugged. What are we going to do?

  • edited January 2014

    Clementine went psycho , killed everybody and then killed herself , the end..

  • edited January 2014

    I have changed the post, I don't know if this helps the story to progress, but at least it changes Jeremy's illogical behavior. (Also, if you don't know how to open the door, check the Butcher for some keys. Kenny might have missed that. ; ) )

  • All of a sudden Kenny walked up to a window and noticed a small razor sittin on the window sill, he picked up the razor.
    " goodbye Bethany" Kenny whisped to his muchtache while stoking it gently.
    Kenny began to shave the muchtache with each motion of the razor a soft sob would excape Kenny's mouth. Kenny than left his face stained with tears, and Bethany in his back pocket, he would Have the funeral later. ( lol please ignore this I was bored)

  • One of the best joke comments so far

    darnitben posted: »

    All of a sudden Kenny walked up to a window and noticed a small razor sittin on the window sill, he picked up the razor. " goodbye Bethany" K

  • I really apreciate that you've edited it - makes more sense now (Kenny was in the room hiding behind a bunch of barrels instead of jumping through the window but nevermind :) )

    That_1_Guy posted: »

    I have changed the post, I don't know if this helps the story to progress, but at least it changes Jeremy's illogical behavior. (Also, if you don't know how to open the door, check the Butcher for some keys. Kenny might have missed that. ; ) )

  • Really? Well, I guess we will just have to blame Jeremy's hallucinations for that. ; )

    TheMissus posted: »

    I really apreciate that you've edited it - makes more sense now (Kenny was in the room hiding behind a bunch of barrels instead of jumping through the window but nevermind )

  • I... I cried reading this... T_T Most dramatic scene so far! (I didn't know Kenny's mustache had a name!?)

    TheMissus posted: »

    One of the best joke comments so far

  • Awesome idea

    That_1_Guy posted: »

    Really? Well, I guess we will just have to blame Jeremy's hallucinations for that. ; )

  • edited January 2014

    Clementine is still heartbroken and feels emptiness inside of her. After a while Kenny asks: "So? Tell me Clem - do you want to leave this place or save a bunch of strangers?".
    "I know I can't be much help. All I can do is to hold a gun and fire it when a situation asks for it. But I am so glad that you ask for my opinion finally, Kenny - I'm not a baby, you know. Here's my vote: We help them and after this we'll become a group." she answers, still wiping her tears shed for Charlie. "Clem Honey, we will do what you just said. But we cannot take all of them with us... look: we don't have so many seats left, ya know... you also invited that kid Danielle to join us, and then there is that other guy and... " Kenny is interrupted by her: "You can do everything if you just WANT." Clem replies. These words remind her of the brave young boy who had the strongest sense of jutice she has ever seen. "By the way" she goes on "There is a trailer over there. We can attach it to the jeep, right?". Kenny turns to Pascucci and both of them look very impressed. "Right Clem. Alright - let's do it!".

    Clem climbs a looted truck. From this position she can see the main entrance to the building, the window to the butcher chamber, where Kenny and Pascucci went and the car with Danielle and Jeremy in it - Clem gave them water and instructed Danielle to take care of Jeremy, who fell asleep. From the top of the truck she can stay guard and be able to shoot anyone from that perfect little hideout. While waiting for anything to happen she strokes the rifle she took from her friend. I'll miss you, Lee and Charlie.

    "That guy, Jeremy's his name.. He said there is a black haired slender lady coming from time to time. She has keys. And then there is also a fat lady who's being the leader of this sick settlement. She mentioned that she was intending to go out, scavenging for drugs outside this place. That's all I got out of him before he fell asleep.". "Alright, Pas - this is damn good. We can't open the metal door actally - but we can WAIT for the metal door to be opened - aaand for the keys, probably for that meat locker with the other guys in it. Just gotta be patient and wait for the lady to come around." says Kenny, proudly twirling his stache. "Alright, Ken. I'll take this." replies Pascucci, putting away his gun in his trousers and picking up the large knife that once belonged to the German butcher...

    Please continue

  • edited January 2014

    Nvm of course as soon as I finish I notice you put that lol. My fault I totally forgot to do the "I'm typing please wait" thing.

  • good to see you're all very eager to write! : P

    Nvm of course as soon as I finish I notice you put that lol. My fault I totally forgot to do the "I'm typing please wait" thing.

  • ''says Kenny, proudly twirling his stache.'', this made my day!

    Kenny'sMustache

    TheMissus posted: »

    Clementine is still heartbroken and feels emptiness inside of her. After a while Kenny asks: "So? Tell me Clem - do you want to leave this pla

  • Just made some enhancements in my last comment

    That_1_Guy posted: »

    good to see you're all very eager to write! : P

  • You know what they say about The powerful stache ;)

    That_1_Guy posted: »

    ''says Kenny, proudly twirling his stache.'', this made my day! Kenny'sMustache

  • It's godlike.

    TheMissus posted: »

    You know what they say about The powerful stache

  • Sorry, I didn't know you wsnted to write, too but you can write now

    Nvm of course as soon as I finish I notice you put that lol. My fault I totally forgot to do the "I'm typing please wait" thing.

  • This is actually really good, I feel like if Tavia shows up in the main game I'm going to g "OMG Cannibal bitch"

  • Typing. Please wait.

  • All they had to do was wait it out. Pascucci & Kenny agreed that Pascucci would knock the woman out, before helping the prisoners.

    Kenny & Pascucci were hiding behind a wall, hearing for any footsteps. Danielle was taking care of Jeremy, whilst Clementine wanted to help Kenny & Pascucci. Clementine was their back up, hiding with her trademark pistol.

    Suddenly, footsteps. Followed by a gasp.

    "Oh shit" Kenny thought.

    Kenny, Pascucci & Clementine hadn't totally screwed up. They had the common courtesy to hide the body, under a staircase. Just there was some blood left over. Kenny thought they might have been screwed.

    "Hmm...the Butcher must have forgot to clean up. I'll have to tell him about this" Ruth, the women said.

    Ruth inspected the area. "These tools look almost unused. Maybe he just cleaned them, then forgot to clean the floor up, probably had to butcher some of the meat" Ruth says.

    Ruth looked around, there was no other evidence Kenny, Clem & Co were here.

    "Where is he?" Ruth said in a somewhat frustrated tone.

    Ruth pulled some keys out of her pocket. "Okay then, we'll see who to test next" she said.

    Kenny nodded towards Pascucci, whispering "this is our chance".

    Kenny & Pascucci heard the sound of the door creak...

    Kenny & Pascucci got ready, and nodded at Clem. It was time to save Jeremy's friends....

  • Doesn't Clem have Charlies rifle now ?

    All they had to do was wait it out. Pascucci & Kenny agreed that Pascucci would knock the woman out, before helping the prisoners. Kenn

  • Guess, she has both as she doesn't know how to handle a rifle yet

    MegaMoto posted: »

    Doesn't Clem have Charlies rifle now ?

  • Oh okay yea that makes sense. Once this revenge/rescue thing is over we should train her. Or not...

    TheMissus posted: »

    Guess, she has both as she doesn't know how to handle a rifle yet

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