Dark Angels

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  • Thank You! I wonder what @Markd4547 will think of it.

    supersagig posted: »

    Awesome chapter!!!!!

  • Vicente

    At the sametime i want to get Jake since he kill Hopeless... But, he's also a character that i submitted. So now i'm a bad guy. >:P

    Saltlick123 posted: »

    Dear Guys, I can't thank you enough for everything you have done for me, you're all like a 2nd family to me, sometimes we run into some bump

  • :)

    NoHopeLeft posted: »

    Vicente At the sametime i want to get Jake since he kill Hopeless... But, he's also a character that i submitted. So now i'm a bad guy. >:P

  • name: John Lottmann

    Age: 20

    appearance: Dark hair, blue eyes, Muscular but not entirely buff,

    personality: Clever, funny, mean occasionally,

    Alliance/group: Main group

    Other info: good with gun, but uses a blunt object to avoid too much noise unless the gun is completely necessary

  • Thanks!

    Zachiscool posted: »

    name: John Lottmann Age: 20 appearance: Dark hair, blue eyes, Muscular but not entirely buff, personality: Clever, funny, mean occa

  • Alt text

    XDDD I never laughed so much all the cursing, puns, cursing, joking references, violence, NEESON and insanity the best so far just awesome :'D

    Saltlick123 posted: »

    Dear Guys, I can't thank you enough for everything you have done for me, you're all like a 2nd family to me, sometimes we run into some bump

  • Thanks! :) You said Cursing twice Damn, I didn't realize I put that much in xD, Also Jack or Vicente?

    Markd4547 posted: »

    XDDD I never laughed so much all the cursing, puns, cursing, joking references, violence, NEESON and insanity the best so far just awesome :'D

  • Can I still be a main character? I was a little late with administration.

    Saltlick123 posted: »

    Thanks!

  • yay!

    Saltlick123 posted: »

    Yeah, I actually think I might be able to introduce you next part

  • Yeah, I actually think I might be able to introduce you next part :)

    Zachiscool posted: »

    Can I still be a main character? I was a little late with administration.

  • Just to clarify by Main Group do you mean Team Member?

    Zachiscool posted: »

    name: John Lottmann Age: 20 appearance: Dark hair, blue eyes, Muscular but not entirely buff, personality: Clever, funny, mean occa

  • Yeah

    and also you can take out the part with the blunt object I thought this was a zombie thing

    Saltlick123 posted: »

    Just to clarify by Main Group do you mean Team Member?

  • Well, I can fit that in, But thanks for the character!

    Zachiscool posted: »

    Yeah and also you can take out the part with the blunt object I thought this was a zombie thing

  • thanks! Excited to see myself next part. Also, can I get a release date?

    Saltlick123 posted: »

    Well, I can fit that in, But thanks for the character!

  • By next part I meant chapter so probably tomorrow :)

    Zachiscool posted: »

    thanks! Excited to see myself next part. Also, can I get a release date?

  • I'll check it out

    Saltlick123 posted: »

    By next part I meant chapter so probably tomorrow

  • Though choice. Vicente is probably the more dangerous out of the two. But Jack made it personal, so Vic has to wait a little longer.

    Target Jack

    Saltlick123 posted: »

    Dear Guys, I can't thank you enough for everything you have done for me, you're all like a 2nd family to me, sometimes we run into some bump

  • Target Vincente

    Though choice. Vicente is probably the more dangerous out of the two. But Jack made it personal, so Vic has to wait a little longer. Target Jack

  • YES SO MUCH CURSING CURSING >:D and jack

    Saltlick123 posted: »

    Thanks! You said Cursing twice Damn, I didn't realize I put that much in xD, Also Jack or Vicente?

  • I have an Idea that's almost a complete duplicate of this fanfic. Can I do it, and credit you in it?

  • Long as it isn't too similar to this one :)

    Zachiscool posted: »

    I have an Idea that's almost a complete duplicate of this fanfic. Can I do it, and credit you in it?

  • ok. The plot's similar, but different characters and other things go wrong

    Saltlick123 posted: »

    Long as it isn't too similar to this one

  • I am excited for part 2

  • edited November 2014

    Dark Angels Part 2: The Hunt Chapter 3

    Jordan Wilkerson

    Well we're getting ready for the mission to get Jack,We captured Sparker already and this time we don't have to capture our target, we can fucking end him

    Agent 123: Well you and your team are rested up now so you're going on the mission now, But before you leave take one more guy.

    Jordan: Who?

    Agent 123: He's new to the business but he'll do fine considering his experience, His name is John LottMann, You'll meet up with him at the plane.

    Jordan: Okay. Agent 123 walks off and starts talking to someone else

    Arin: Hey Man, How ya doing?

    Jordan: Okay, Lynne Left, And we're gonna have one more guy on the team.

    Arin: So when she wanted to talk, you didn't get laid?

    Jordan: Just Shut Up.

    Arin: Whatever you say, I see how you look at her.

    Jordan: I said Shut Up.

    Arin: Fine, Fine Walks to Plane

    John Lottmann: Hey there, I'm John , I've been told I'm joining your team.

    Arin: Yep.

    Constance: Hey Kid.

    When I looked at John, he reminded me so much of Hopeless, I didn't know what to say but I'm not gonna let anything happen to him

    Elsa Houten: Hey Guys, What's that you got there John?

    Jordan: You've met already?

    Elsa Houten: Yeah, He already ran into Me, Javier and Jacob.

    John: It's a machete, Sometimes I don't like using guns because of the noise, and it's always good to have a backup.

    Javier: A machete? No No, That's a Bigass Machete

    Jacob: Hell Yeah, What are gonna hunt Rambo? Some water buffalo?

    John: Nah, Probably just some guy who's good with computers and is standing right in front of me talking about GodDamn Water Buffalo.

    Constance: I think we should call the kid "Rambo" he does have a bigass knife and his first name is John.

    Arin: good Idea Constance bu Shots Fired by "Rambo"

    Javier: He can just Let it Go.

    Jordan: Let's just leave.

    Elsa Houten: I swear to God Javier one more and i'll.......

    2 Hours Later

    Jordan and Arin are in the Pilot and Co-Pilot seats with the rest of the team in the back of the plane

    Arin: What do you think happened to Jack?

    Jordan: What do you mean? What made him go Irish Potato Thief on us?

    Arin: If you wanna call it that.

    Jordan: I don't know and I really don't think I care, He killed a friend and crossed the line, It's gonna be Game Over for him.

    Arin: We're not taking him in?

    Jordan: Oh we're taking him in, In a body bag.

    Arin: Okay, Be that way.

    John: Hey Guys, Jordan can I talk to you for a sec?

    Jordan: Sure, What do you wanna talk about?

    John: About this team, I haven't been around long but I can tell you want this Jack guy bad, I'm just wondering, Why?

    Jordan: I don't want to talk about it but if you want to know, Read this file Jordan hands over Mission File

    6 hours later

    Javier: Where are we now Amigos? Las Vegas?

    Jordan: Actually the Cape Horn, Africa, Jack's gonna be making a deal here and this is where we are going to take him out

    Javier: YES! No More capture Bullshit.

    Elsa Houten: Keep your pants on Javier, We don't want anything bad to happen.

    John: Let's do this.

    Jordan: Jacob you in place and have the communications in line?

    Jacob Voice: Hell Yeah, Let's Terminate this bastard.

    Arin: Fuck

    Jordan: What's Wrong?

    Arin: Looks like he's here early.

    Jordan: Damn, Everyone get in place, Elsa Arin, and Constance you to set up on the left of those storage containers, Javier you go up on that ridge, should be a good sniper angle if anything goes south like last time, And John you're gonna be with me and hit from the right.

    Jacob Voice: And i'm that guy no one mentions that hears everything you guys say if you have those earpieces in.

    Constance: On it, Ready to learn a lesson kids?

    John: Watch it grandpa

    Constance: Cool your Jets Rambo.

    Jordan: Positions Now!

    Jack comes and gets out of car

    Jack: Gary you better have gotten that shipment to Vicente or else i'll fuckin shoot your balls right now.

    Gary: Yes Sir, I got the shipment to him. But you wouldn't shoot my balls.

    Jack: If you fuck up enough, Maybe.

    Other Dealer Arrives

    Jack: Rick! Nice to see you man, Now let's talk about our arrangement.

    Rick: I have 500 pounds of crack for you now, And another 250 later.

    Jack: Nice, And I have those M-4s you wanted plus a shipment of grenade launchers as a bonus for our cooperation.

    Jordan: Javier take him out

    Javier: My pleasure.... Shot Fires

    Jack: Get Down!! Squats behind car

    Javier: Motherfuck Reloads

    Jack: Anyone hit?

    Rick: Nope, Any ideas on who these guys are?

    Gary: Fuck if I know

    Jack: It's Jordan and his Mutts....

    Rick: Who's Jordan? and How would you know it's him?

    Jack: I just killed one of his pathetic shits, And I know because I was one of them a long time ago....Another Sniper Rifle Shot Fires

    Jack: YOU SUCK ASS JAVIER!!!!

    Jacob Voice: Attention guys, They have reinforcements coming in watch out.

    Jordan: Okay, Arin, Elsa and Constance you guys go in now.

    Elsa Houten: Copy.

    • 2 Black Vans with Reinforcements in them arrive*

    Constance: Let me show you how we did it back in the day kids.... Takes out Grenade Launcher

    Arin: Holy Shit....

    1 Black Van blows up

    Gary: Holy Shit!!!!!!!!!!! We are fucked, we're so fucked!

    Jack: God Dammit Gary, Shut The Fuck Up....

    Rick: Don't worry I have a copter coming in, It'll be at least 10 minutes though

    Gary: We might not have 10 minutes, HOLY SHIT, HOLY FUCKING SHIT

    Jack: GARY SHUT UP! We still have a few reinforcements..........

    Javier Snipes one in the head

    Rick: How many of those guys left?

    Jack: Looks like 5....

    Elsa Snipes another

    Gary: 4....

    John Snipes one more of them

    Gary: 3.....

    Constance: Fuck this shit Pulls out Double Barred Shotgun and shoots 2 more of them

    Gary: 1....

    Jack: We can't just sit here, Screw this, I'm going out........

    Jack Runs Starts Running Away

    Jordan: JACK!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    Jacob Voice: Get Jack, Everyone aim and shoot at Jack!

    Rick: Gary, you fucking idiot follow me and Cover Jack

    Rick pops up and starts returning fire with a pistol where Elsa, Arin and Constance are, then Gary does the same with an AK-47

    John: Go, Get the Runner!

    Jordan starts chasing Jack

    Jack: Fuck a dead end.

    Jordan: Hello you son of a bitch Pulls out pistol

    Jack: I'm out....

    Jordan: Not my problem

    Jack: It actually kinda is.......

    Jordan: How's that?

    Jack: You kill me now, You prove that you're a coward, you fail to avenge Hopeless and he will have died in Vain. The only true way to prove that you're not a coward is to fight me like a man..... So what do you say Jordan? Want to be a man or do you want to be a disney princess?

    Jordan will fight Jack

  • Fight Him

    He killed me, but he's me now, so... Yeah.

    Saltlick123 posted: »

    Dark Angels Part 2: The Hunt Chapter 3 Jordan Wilkerson Well we're getting ready for the mission to get Jack,We captured Sparker alrea

  • Well Rick and Gary were introduced :)

    NoHopeLeft posted: »

    Fight Him He killed me, but he's me now, so... Yeah.

  • I know... But i have a bad feeling that someone's going to get a triple kill...

    Saltlick123 posted: »

    Well Rick and Gary were introduced

  • Just out of curiosity, Who would that someone be? (I wasn't thinking of doing a triple kill, nice idea, jk)

    NoHopeLeft posted: »

    I know... But i have a bad feeling that someone's going to get a triple kill...

  • No idea :P

    Saltlick123 posted: »

    Just out of curiosity, Who would that someone be? (I wasn't thinking of doing a triple kill, nice idea, jk)

  • edited November 2014

    Name: Zack

    Age: 20

    Appearance:

    Alt text

    Personality: Calm, Quiet, Psychotic, Impulsive, Short tempered

    Group/Alliance Evil Role

  • Thank You for the character! :)

    Name: Zack Age: 20 Appearance: Personality: Calm, Quiet, Psychotic, Impulsive, Short tempered Group/Alliance Evil Role

  • edited November 2014

    Yay! I'm not dead yet!

    Also fight Jack

    Saltlick123 posted: »

    Dark Angels Part 2: The Hunt Chapter 3 Jordan Wilkerson Well we're getting ready for the mission to get Jack,We captured Sparker alrea

  • edited November 2014

    I have an idea for an evil character:

    Name: Diana Wilshire

    Age: 20

    Appearance: She is beautiful, and wears black clothes.

    Personality: Seductive, manipulative, Strong, witty, hates the whole group

    Evil role

    Other info: Good shot with gun,

  • XDDD that is awesome bro

    Name: Zack Age: 20 Appearance: Personality: Calm, Quiet, Psychotic, Impulsive, Short tempered Group/Alliance Evil Role

  • Shoot Jack

    FINISH HIM >:D

    Saltlick123 posted: »

    Dark Angels Part 2: The Hunt Chapter 3 Jordan Wilkerson Well we're getting ready for the mission to get Jack,We captured Sparker alrea

  • Shoot Jack

    If they do it his way he might win. Good reason not to do it his way.

    Saltlick123 posted: »

    Dark Angels Part 2: The Hunt Chapter 3 Jordan Wilkerson Well we're getting ready for the mission to get Jack,We captured Sparker alrea

  • Fight Him

    Saltlick123 posted: »

    Dark Angels Part 2: The Hunt Chapter 3 Jordan Wilkerson Well we're getting ready for the mission to get Jack,We captured Sparker alrea

  • excited to see how the fight will turn out

  • When's the next part?

  • Later tonight.

    Zachiscool posted: »

    When's the next part?

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